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包子不包子

What we have been debating here will affect the role of the young people in the decision-making of a society.Whether they should take such a crucial responsibility and burden with the future of our life?This debate is more than that.It  is also about the young people themselves.Contrary to the statement in the title,I claim that the youth have great impact on the future of a society.

To start with,young people always have countless new ideas,since they have received most sophisticated 换成up-to-date更恰当一些吧education nowadays.To give you an idea of how much benefit this kind of education caused produces?to the modern society,consider this: a recent survey reveals revealed？ that compare to the people of last generation ,their counterparts have more creations and devices,不能用这个噢噢such as smart phone and computer,which helps human being enjoy a better life in the future.It is the youth thatwho make our life more colourful.

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5. (Electronics & Computer Science / Computer Science) computer hardware that is designed for a specific function
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8.Archaic the act or process of planning or devising


Surely ,there has always been another advantage of young people--more energy and inspiration.I want to thank Jobs Steven 顺序 反了啊,who establishestablishedthe Apple in his young age.His legendary has been repeated again and again.He quitted the bachelor’s degree and devoted himself to the new-born company with whole spirit full energy 感觉更好一些.Also the movie of Facebook tells us a story about a young man's enthusiastic about the social network website.They create a brand new world for us and make our life more convenience than ever befor.Hardly can we imagine the old to do such creations.

Nevertheless, there are still someone who believe that the old should have more influence since they have more experience,out of fear that any decision made by young people may usher in a totally mass in the society.But I will not walk away from my viewpoint.Although lacking experience seems to be a weak point,the creativity cannot be found in the old.Young people are less likely to repeat the conventional routine.It is said by people from all walks of life,who send a message to the questionnaire conducted by Peking University,all these concluded the same result that young people have more effect on the decision-making process. 这段好哎～措辞连贯性都很好 学习学习

For all the reasons listed,it is time to end the out of fashion decision which rarely brings benefits and doubledoubts? down on the young decision makers that never has been more appealing.The youth who own more new ideas; the youth who are more energetic;the youth who are brave.Young people is part of what made our county superpower这是什么意思啊 没看懂哎.

总的来说 没什么大问题 语言和逻辑性越到后半部分表现得越好哦
可能刚开始还不大适应吧
首段可以在润色一下

sang824

The lecture completely rejects the concern presented in the passage about thedecling decline of the birds' population because of the human activities.In the professor's opinion, the arguments in the reading are unconvencing.

The professor contradicts the first point in the material that birds' natural habitats will shrinking due to the expanding human populations and  settelements.She contends that because of the development of the urban area,other kinds of birds is are increasing such as seaguls and hocks.Some residents in urban even complain about the disturbing of the birds.

The speaker goes on to opposite oppose the claim of the athor that the growth of agriculture will also deprive the  birds' habitats.On the contrary,she argues that nowadays people begin to use less and less lands for agriculture since the productivity of the crops have been improved ,which afford enough food for human beings and we no longer call for these areas.

Finally, the listening challenges the last viewpoint in the passage that the usage of chemical pesticides will do harm to the birds since they eat these poisoned insects.She reminds us that,the traditional pesticides will be abandoned because people start to realize the negetive consequence.So there are two changes now,first people now start to apply new and less toxic pesticides.Moreover there is a trend for pestside resident resistantcrops.All these reasons are good news for protecting birds.

没什么大问题，听得很准
敢问LZ是听为主还是一直记笔记呢？自己每次都听不准。。

lxc1989614

The lecture completely rejects the concern presented in the passage about thedecling decline of the birds' population because of the human activities.In the professor's opinion, the arguments in the reading are unconvencing.

The professor contradicts the first point in the material that birds' natural habitats will shrinking due to the expanding human populations and  settelements.She contends that because of the development of the urban area,other kinds of birds is are increasing such as seaguls and hocks.Some residents in urban even complain about the disturbing of the birds.

The speaker goes on to opposite oppose the claim of the athor that the growth of agriculture will also deprive the  birds' habitats.On the contrary,she argues that nowadays people begin to use less and less lands for agriculture since the productivity of the crops have been improved ,which afford enough food for human beings and we no longer call for these areas.

Finally, the listening challenges the last viewpoint in the passage that the usage of chemical pesticides will do harm to the birds since they eat these poisoned insects.She reminds us that,the traditional pesticides will be abandoned because people start to realize the negetive consequence.So there are two changes now,first people now start to apply new and less toxic pesticides.Moreover there is a trend for pestside resident resistantcrops.All these reasons are good news for protecting birds.

没什么大问题，听得很准
敢问LZ是听为主还是一直记笔记呢？自己每次都听不准。。

-- by 会员 sang824 (2012/5/17 12:23:57)

记关键词，用各种符号表示关键词之间的关系，这个主要还是依靠听力的，你听力练好了，这个基本就没什么问题了

lxc1989614

The listening is completely rejects the idea presented in the passage about the controversy of the buzzing.On the other hand,the speaker,who is a cellphone buzzer, stands out to support the advantages of the buzzers.

To start with,the speaker casts doubt on the point in the material that buzzers are paid for what they are saying which makes them untrustful.The speaker contends that  in fact the buzzers praise a product just because he has used it and it is really good.This is quite different with ordinary advertisements or lying,since it is truth.

The cellphone buzzer goes on to contridicts the claim of the author that the buzzers' endorements makes the consumers less critically.He argues that  people often ask many questions about the products ,service and other matters concerned.It is good for the consumers to answer questions to those who have used a certain products.

Finally,the listening opposes the last point in the passage that buzzers have negetive impact on social relationships.He reminds us that manufactors always prefer to recruit people who have experience of the products to make sure their words trustful and open to consumers.

包子不包子

The listening is completely rejectsrejecting the idea presented in the passage about the controversy of the buzzing.On the other hand,the speaker,who is a cellphone buzzer, stands out to support the advantages也不能直接说是好处吧 还是反驳的好 of the buzzers.

To start with,the speaker casts doubt on the point in the material that buzzers are paid for what they are saying， which makes them untrustful.The speaker contends that in fact the buzzers praise a product just because he has they haveused it and it is really good.This is quite different with ordinary advertisements or lying,since it is the truth.

The cellphone buzzer goes on to contridicts the claim of the author that the buzzers' endorements makes the consumers less critically.He argues that people often ask many questions about the products ,service and other matters concerned.It is good for the consumers to answer questions to those who have used a certain products.加一句话总结吧

Finally,the listening opposes the last point in the passage that buzzers have negetive impact on social relationships.He reminds us that manufactors always prefer to recruit people who have experience of the products to make sure their words trustful and open to consumers. 这段的听力内容不够详细哎

没有总结段么？

to lxc
没有写总结段么？ 最后一点的听力注意一下哟 其他都蛮好 蛮好

lxc1989614

TPO21 综合

The listening completely rejects the idea presented in the passage about the benefits the genetically modified trees can bring.In the professor's opinion, these trees may trigger some serious problems.

The talk contradicts the first point in the reading that the genetic modified trees are more likely to survive than the unmodified trees.On the contrary,the speaker contends that since the genetically modified trees are uniform ,they have rare chance to survive when they face the challenge they are not designed to.However,the natural trees can deal with different conditions.

The lecture goes on to oppose the claim of the author that the genetically modified trees can bring  economical  profit to those who grow them.She suggests that ,in fact these kind of trees will cause more cost.Because the trees will charge the tree farmers more.Collecting tree seeds and plating trees all need fees for tree company.

Finally,the listening challeges the last viewpoint in the material that the genetically modified trees prevent overexploitation of wild trees.She reminds us that these trees grow aggressively.They  always planted among the natural trees and they compete the natrual trees for more energy like water and sun light.Consequently,the natural trees will be crowded out.All these may lead to more harmness.

包子不包子

The listening completely rejects the idea presented in the passage about the benefits of the genetically modified trees can bring.In the professor's opinion, these trees may trigger some serious problems.

The talk contradicts the first point in the reading that the genetically modified trees are more likely to survive than the unmodified trees.On the contrary,the speaker contends that since the genetically modified trees are uniform ,they have rare chance to survive when they face the challenge they are not designed to换个说法吧 这个感觉怪怪的.However,the natural trees can deal with different conditions.

The lecture goes on to oppose the claim of the author that the genetically modified trees can bring economical profit to those who grow them.She suggests that ,in fact,  thesethis? kind of trees will cause more cost.Because the trees will charge the tree farmers more.Collecting tree seeds and plating trees all need fees for tree company.换成被动吧 地道一些

Finally,the listening challeges the last viewpoint in the material that the genetically modified trees prevent overexploitation of wild trees.She reminds us that these trees grow aggressively.They are always planted among the natural trees and they compete the natrual trees for more energy resources like water and sun light.Consequently,the natural trees will be crowded out.All these may lead to more harmness.

to lxc
还是没有写总结段啊 尽量写吧
有些句式要注意呦~其他都蛮好

lxc1989614

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:Food in the past was much healtier than today?

Facing the advanced technology,the emerging different kinds of creativities and keep up with the accelerating pace of life,people nowadays are enabled with many options of food.However,do we really have more healthier food? I would like to say no, on the contrary, the quality of food now is decline.

The excessive addiction of the processed food such as too much sugar and edible pigment tops the list of harmness.To give you an idea about how much damage these addictive caused to the kids,consider this :a recent survey reveals that 30% of the teenages in China have health problems like diabetes and obesity,which is two times as much as their counterparts in the last decade.The early-maturing issue becomes a major concern for parents.It is the food in modern time that undermine the health condition of children.

Unhealthy cook style also emerged as a remarkable weak point.Since people have too much work to handle every day,they own less and less time to prepare for food.As a result,they resort to fast food resturant.People should blame the fast food chain stores like KFC and Pizza hut for spreading the wrong notion of instant food.French fries contain too much calorie; hamburger lacks vegetables we needed in daily life;also the beverage do harm to our teeth.Hardly can we gain the nutrition we demand in normal life from these fast food.

Nevertheless there are still someone believe that we enjoy more healthier food now since the supervise system is more sophisticated than ever before .But I will not walk away from my viewpoint.To be honest,in order to make more profit and spend less cost, some of the food manufactures begin to use low level standard rather than high level one.They take more benefit as the prority.Only through cooperation of government and enterprises can we have a bright future.It is said by people from all walks of life,who sent a message to the questionnaire by Peking University,these concluded the same result that people worry about the food.

For all the reason listed,it is time to end the situation about the unhealthier food which brings rarely benefit to people and double down on the pursuit of more healthier food that never has been more promising.The quantity of food addictive should be slashed,the way of cooking should be improved and the supervision should be enhanced.Healthier food is one of the indispensible parts in our life.

包子不包子

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:Food in the past was much healtier than today?

Facing the advanced technology,the emerging of different kinds of creativities and keeping up with the accelerating pace of life,people nowadays are enabled with many options of food.However,do we really have more healthier food? I would like to say no, on the contrary, the quality of food now is decline declining.

The excessive addiction of the processed food such as too much sugar and edible pigment tops the list of harmness.To give you an idea about how much damage these addictive caused to 怪怪的 the kids,consider this :a recent survey reveals that 30% of the teenages in China have health problems like diabetes and obesity,which is two times as much as their counterparts in the last decade.The early-maturing issue becomes a major concern for parents.It is the food in modern time that undermine the health condition of children.

Unhealthy cook style also emerged as a remarkable weak point.Since people have too much work to handle every day,they own less and less time to prepare for food.As a result,they resort to fast food resturant.People should blame 改成被动吧 the fast food chain stores like KFC and Pizza hut for spreading the wrong notion of instant food.French fries contain too much calorie; hamburger lacks vegetables we needed in daily life;also the beverage do does harm to our teeth.Hardly can we gain the nutrition we the body demand in normal life from these fast food.

Nevertheless there are still someone believe that we enjoy more healthier food now since the supervise system is more sophisticated than ever before .But I will not walk away from my viewpoint.To be honest,in order to make more profit and spend less cost, some of the food manufactures begin to use low level standard rather than high level one.They take more benefit as the prority.Only through cooperation of government and enterprises can we have a bright future.It is said by people from all walks of life,who sent a message to the questionnaire by Peking University,these concluded the same result that people worry about the food.

For all the reasons listed,it is time to end the situation about the unhealthier food which brings rarely benefit to people and double down on the pursuit of more healthier food that never has been more promising.The quantity of food addictive should be slashed,the way of cooking should be improved and the supervision should be enhanced.Healthier food is one of the indispensible parts in our life. 不用提意见吧 只要说明是现在还是以前的食物健康就好了 最后一句话没有扣题呀 不可分离的部分？


To lxc
语言结构没有大问题
让步段写的有些多了 比例证的段落长
最够一段总结没有扣题呀

lxc1989614

The lecture completely rejects the idea shows in the passage about the explain of the decreasing of the yellow cedar.In the professor's opinion,the reasons are still unknown and none of the reasons mentioned in the passage is adequate.

The speaker contradicts the first point in the passage that the declining is caused by insect parasites.On the contrary,he contends that ,in fact,yellow cedar is more resistant to insects rather than other kind of trees.For example, the bark and leaf of the yellow cedar can produce some chemical material which is toxic to insects.

The lecture goes on to oppose the claim of the author that  the brown bears' aggressive feeding habits leads to the decreasing of this trees.He argues that in the areas without bears like some islands of North America,the population of yellow cedar is also diminishing.So the bears are not responsible for the issue.

Finally,the professor continues to challenges the last point in the material that the decreasing is the result of climate change.He reminds us that they forgot to take the real situation into consideration.In general,if the climate made the trees more sensitive,the number of them should decrease in some higher,freezing area since it is cold.However,the trees in the lower,warmer elevation are also decrease.