作文求助~

婷婷connie

8.24改文
The most important investment of a company is to improve the work skill of its employees

Whether to improve the work skill of the employees or to elevate the condition in the company building? It is always a headache question for the companies to answer. From my perspective, the work skill of the employees in a company plays more crucial rule（role） rather than other aspects do.

On one hand, high level work skill is the impetus to higher productivity, which means the avenue of the company will be increased immediately. Think about a firm equipped with low efficiency workers, how can one say that the company will be promising? A latest study made by Fudan University, one of the(去掉) universities in China with glittery reputation, unveils that among the （top）500 listed companies in China, 85%(of respondents)regard the work skill as their priority when making investment plan. Meanwhile, the annual outcome increasing is also highly related to the workers' performance. It is high level work skill that makes a company outstanding.

On the other hand, high level of work skill also prevents the workers from damaging in the work, which causes devastation（devastative） consequence. I want to grant my sincere gratitude to my company, General Electricity. It arranges the training for all the workers from time to time and makes inspection constantly. All these efforts are the major contribution to the low accident rate in the plant. It is not uncommon to know the news that a job injury(on-the-job injury) leads to the collapse of a company because of the boss's（boss'） overlooking(blind eyes) to the work skill. Under this circumstance, there is nothing but work skill should be the first on the to-do list of a good(prosperous来个高级点的)company.

Nevertheless, hardly can all people reach to such a consensus. Some people argue that only when the workers in a comfortable condition can they perform well in their career, so the leaders should put more emphasis on the hardware in a company. But I will not walk away from my viewpoint. Spacious offices,（换成and,三个以上再用逗号） advanced equipments do good to(exert considerable impact on) employees. Work skill, however, is the core of a company and will create a harmonious climate in a company, which is more necessary.

For all the reasons listed, it is time to applaud investment in work skill instead of building condition(吹毛求疵一下，building condition换成the construction of company's hardware,跟前面的investment in work对应). High level work skill will benefit not only the employees themselves but also the company as a whole.



Conclusion:

今天婷婷也要去查字典了

This is the most excellent one among your articles~

1.基本上没有错误了

2.注意标点的使用

3.Good之类的词适当替换吧，从头到尾都是work skill,可以换成work competence, capacity, ability，展现语言多样性

4.加油，25已经不是你的目标啦~

lxc1989614

People can learn more from watching television than by reading books.

Watching television or reading books, it is a headache question for people in the modern society. Because of paying too much time on watching television, some expertise reclaim that the television programs are too superficial for us. From my perspective, I prefer television rather than books when I want to learn something.

On one hand, with the accelerating pace of the modern society, people have less time to spend on reading books. Under this circumstance, television begins to play a crucial role in our life. There is no need to spare time to go to the library to select the books we are interested in, just open the television, sit in the sofa and be relax. I want to grant sincere gratitude to the television programs such as BBC documents and discovery channel, which open a brand new world for me to absorb abundant knowledge in the fields of nature, astronomy and culture. It is television that saves us a lot time to learn knowledge

On the other hand, information in the television programs is always the most up-dated. A latest study made by China Daily, a prevalent newspaper in China, unveils that compare to the television programs, their counterparts--the traditional books are more incline to out of date because of the hardcopy form. Meanwhile, when finding information in the books , people will be misleaded if the information in the books has been challenged. That is the reason why some teachers in the universities are prefer to learn from mass media.

Nevertheless, hardly can all the people reach to such a consensus. Some people argue that the knowledge in the books is with the depth, while the television programs are superficial. But I will not walk away from my viewpoint, with the increasing number of excellent television programs, more and more deeply digged information will be found in the television.

For all the reasons listed, it is time to applaud watching television to gain knowledge instead of just reading books. Television not only saves our time but also brings us cutting-edge knowledge.

婷婷connie

25改文
People can learn more from watching television than by reading books.

Watching television or reading books, it is a headache question for people in the modern society. Because of paying too much time（heavy time spent） on watching television, some expertise reclaim that the television programs are too superficial for us. From my perspective, I prefer television rather than books when I want to learn something.
开头简洁，不错！
On one hand, with the accelerating pace of the modern society, people have less time to spend on reading books. Under this circumstance, television begins to play a crucial role in our life. There is no need to spare time to go to the library to select the books (which)we are interested in, (缺主语we need )just open the television, sit in the sofa and be relax. I want to grant sincere gratitude to the television programs such as BBC documents and discovery channel, which open a brand(这里是神马用法？) new world for me to absorb abundant knowledge in the fields of nature, astronomy and culture. It is television that saves us a lot time to learn knowledge强调句不错

On the other hand, information in the television programs is always the most up-dated. A latest study made by China Daily, a prevalent newspaper in China, unveils that compare to the television programs, their counterparts--the traditional books are more incline（inclined） to out of date(be obsolete) because of the hardcopy form. Meanwhile, when finding information in the books , people will be misleaded if the information in the books has been challenged. That is the reason why some teachers in the universities are prefer to learn from mass media.

Nevertheless, hardly can all the people reach to such a consensus. Some people argue that the knowledge in the books is with the depth, while the television programs are superficial. But I will not walk away from my viewpoint, with the increasing number of excellent television programs, more and more deeply digged information will be found in the television.这段说理太短了，可以举个例子，具体说明什么样的program出现了，对人们产生的作用

For all the(去掉) reasons listed, it is time to applaud watching television to gain knowledge instead of just reading books. Television not only saves our time but also brings us cutting-edge knowledge.



Conclusion：

1.观点很好，让步段还需加强

2.从句的引导词不要省~

3.加油

lxc1989614

Competition among friends will always have negative effects on friendship.
What is your attitude toward competition among friends? Collapse of friendship always dues to the competition among friends. Indeed, myriads of people are avoid to compete with their friends. From my perspective, competition also plays a crucial role in the strengthening of the friendship.

On one hand, competition is actually a win-win result for friends. It inspires us to make progress, assists us to find another "me" and digs out our potential ability. All these will lead to an excellent one. A latest study made by Fudan University, one of universities with glittery reputation in China, unveils that 80% of the preeminent entrepreneur prefer to make friends with those compete with them. That is the reason why the best friends always come from the same field. It is competition among friends that makes us outstanding.

On the other hand, competition is also an impetus for better relationship. When learning from each other and making progress together, friends are more incline to communicate with each other and exchange their opinions about a certain issue. I want to grant my sincere gratitude to my best friend, Mary, who constantly help me in my school work. As ranking very close in the tests, there never exists an obstacle between us. Every time after tests we analyze mistakes together. The severer the competition between us, the more we will communicate with each other.  Under this circumstance, how can one say the competition is negative?

Nevertheless, hardly can all the people reach to such a consensus. Some people argue that when surpassed by the other, one may feel stressed and unhappy, which will do harm to a friendship. But I will not walk away from my viewpoint. A real friend never cares about this tiny achievement. An unshakeable friendship never collapse with ease because of those minimize difference. One shall be happy with other's success.

For all reasons listed, it is time to applaud competition among friends instead of too much stability. Competition benefits not only ourselves but also the friendship as a whole.

婷婷connie

8.26改文
Competition among friends will always have negative effects on friendship.
What is your attitude toward competition among friends? Collapse of friendship always dues(is due) to the competition among friends. Indeed, myriads of people are avoiding to compete with their friends. From my perspective, competition also plays a crucial role in the strengthening of the friendship.

On one hand, competition is actually a win-win result(这个不好，直接激发潜能，要不就包含下一段的TS了)for friends. It inspires us to make progress, assists us to find another "me" and digs out our potential ability. All these will lead to an excellent one. A latest study made by Fudan University, one of universities with glittery reputation in China, unveils that 80% of the preeminent entrepreneur(s)prefer to make friends with those compete with them. That is the reason why the best friends always come from the same field. It is competition among friends that makes us outstanding.

On the other hand, competition is also an impetus for better relationship. When learning from each other and making progress together, friends are more incline（inclined,这个错误已经犯了三遍了，incline词性是：vi, vt ,n不能直接放在be动词后面）to communicate with each other and exchange their opinions about a certain issue. I want to grant my sincere gratitude to my best friend, Mary, who constantly helpsme in(with)my school work. As ranking very close in the tests, there never exists an obstacle between us. Every time after tests we analyze mistakes together. The severer the competition between us, the more we will communicate with each other. Under this circumstance, how can one say the competition is negative?

Nevertheless, hardly can all the people reach to such a consensus. Some people argue that when surpassed by the other, one may feel stressed and unhappy, which will do harm to a friendship. But I will not walk away from my viewpoint. A real friend never cares about this tiny achievement. An unshakeable friendship never collapses with ease because of those minimize differences. One shall be happy with other's success.

For all reasons listed, it is time to applaud competition among friends instead of too much stability. Competition benefits not only ourselves but also the friendship as a whole.



Conclusion:

1.注意三单加s

2.犯过的错误就不要再犯了~

3.挺好的，不过你的模范我都快背下来了~o~

lxc1989614

agree or disagree? If child want to do well in school, parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies

With the skyrocketing attractive television programs, children, especially those who are in the primary school, are tend to spend more time on watching television rather than doing assignment. From my perspective, itis better for parents to control the hours of watching television.

On one hand, various of television programs easily distract students from their classes, the result is that they cannot concentrate on absorbing knowledge, Imagining the desk mate triggers the topic of a prevalent animation-spiderman, the other one is also eager to express his feeling about this topic, the characters, the actions and the enemies in this cartoon will cause a lot of conversation between these two kids. Accordingly, what teacher said in the class is no longer their main focus. Under this circumstance, how can a parent say he is willing to allowed his kid to watch television without limitation?

On the other hand, the more time the students spend on television, the less time they will spend on their assignments. A latest survey made by Fudan University, a Chinese university with glittery reputation, unveils that compare to the children who are severely limited time of watching television, their counterparts gain less points in the tests, especially in the courses such as math, which needs myriads of practice. It is the television programs that deprive the students of excellent score.

Nevertheless, hardly can all the people reach to such a consensus. Some people argue that all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy, students still need some entertainment. But I will not walk away from my viewpoint. Reasonable relax time do good to kids, but just under the limitation. Joint efforts are required by teachers and parents to guide students.

For all the reasons listed, it is time to applaud limitation on television for children instead of no controlling time. It benefits not only the students but also the parents.

婷婷connie

8.27改文
agree or disagree? If child want to do well in school, parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies

With the skyrocketing(development of是不是少了这个？)attractive television programs, children, especially those who are in the primary school, are tend to spend more time on watching television rather than doing assignment（这两个动词感觉去掉更好）. From my perspective, itis better for parents to control the hours of watching television.

On one hand, various of television programs easily distract students from their classes, the result is that they cannot concentrate on absorbing knowledge,（这里是句号吧？）Imagining the desk mate triggers the topic of a prevalent animation-spiderman, the other one is also eager to express his feeling about this topic, the characters, the actions and the enemies in this cartoon will cause a lot of conversation between these two kids. 这句太长了，给人感觉很乱，直接写成，just imagine that a desk mate triggers...in this cartoon, which will cause ... Accordingly, what teacher said（talk/convey） in the class is no longer their main focus. Under this circumstance, how can a parent say he is willing to allowed(直接allow就可以) his kid to watch television without limitation?

On the other hand, the more time the students spend on television, the less time they will spend on(devote on) their assignments. A latest survey made by Fudan University, a Chinese university with glittery reputation, unveils that compare to the children who are severely limited time of watching television, their counterparts(没有错，但是读起来很奇怪)gain less points in the tests, especially in the courses such as math, which needs myriads of practice. It is the television programs that deprive the students of excellent score.

Nevertheless, hardly can （句式很好，看来用的很熟练了~）all the people reach to such a consensus. Some people argue that all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy, students still need some entertainment. But I will not walk away from my viewpoint. Reasonable relax time does good to kids, but just under the limitation. Joint efforts are required by teachers and parents to guide students.

For all the reasons listed, it is time to applaud limitation on television for children instead of no controlling time. It benefits not only the students but also the parents(最后可以加上，怎么benefit的，要不然显得有点空).



Conclusion：

这篇感觉不错，还是以前的问题，加油克服吧

lxc1989614

it is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.Do you agree?

Reading books or watching movies or participating in the physical exercise? That is a headache question for people when choosing the method to relax. From my perspective, I prefer to do some sports such as jogging or basketball rather than reading novels when I feel stressed.

On one hand, physical exercise is the best way to wipe out the physical tiredness. Breathing the fresh air outside the door, listening the bird singing and swearing under the sunshine, all these are enable you the comfortable and relax body condition. A latest study made by sport version of China Daily, a prevalent newspaper in China, unveils that compare to the quiet activities such as reading books and watching movies, sports can reduce more pressure as well as bring a sense of relaxation, which is helpful for people to recover from the tedious job or heavy school work.

On the other hand, physical exercises not only release physically pressure but also mentally stress. I want to grant sincere gratitude to the physical exercise courses offered by my high school during the time I prepared for the college entrance exam. Basket ball and football classes render a golden opportunity for interaction with my classmates and school mates. As a result, we were familiar with each other with ease. We communicated with each other, encountered difficulties and made progress together both in sports and study. It is the physical exercises that inspire me to step forward in such a high tense period.

Nevertheless, hardly can all the people reach to a consensus. Some people argue that reading books or watching movies in a quiet place may wipe out all the fuss in one's life, which is more effective to relax. But I will not walk away from my viewpoint. Relaxation and happiness have nothing to do with the environmental condition. Sports, utmost eliminate the depress feeling will be one's best choice to relax.

For all reasons listed, it is time to applaud doing more physical exercise instead of just reading books or watching movies alone. It benefits not only our health but also our mental situation.

lxc1989614

college or universities should offer students a better preparation before they start working.

Whether universities should spare time to offer the courses concerning the preparation for students' future career? It is a headache question for all the universities around the world to answer. From my perspective, these preparation classes offered by universities play an important role for students in near future.

On one hand, what the students learned in universities is highly related to their future career. The task of universities is to assist students to practice the theories into the job. Under this circumstance, universities should open more courses about practice, such as the summer internship and winter extra-curriculum activities. A latest study made by China Daily, the most prevalent newspaper in China, unveils that 80% of the junior and senior students in the universities are back up more practice assignment rather than paper essay. It is practice section that inspires students to have better understanding for their future career.

On the other hand, the classes about the personal relationship in the job are also should be putted on the to-do list. The atmosphere in the company is totally different with the climate in school. As a result, myriad of students are unable to handle the relationship between co-workers, which leads to a negative result. I grant sincere gratitude to my university, Peking University. It offers a wide range of lessons concerning the relationship in career. After taking these lessons, I enjoy a harmonious relationship with my new collogues nowadays. That is why the graduate students from my university always have the least confliction in their job.

Nevertheless, hardly can everyone reach to such a consensus. Some people argue that studying theory should be the priority of students. Since the preparation classes take too much time. But I will not walk away from my viewpoint. These courses benefit students not only in their future career but also in the daily life, which inspire students to better understand themselves.

For all reasons listed, it is time to applaud more preparation course instead of tedious theory teaching. What the university do will make students more outstanding.