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gre呀gre

4.10 独立写作Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? The advice from grandparents has no use for their grandchildrenbecause the world changed a lot during the past 5o years.


It has long been a phenomenon thatgrandchildren do not accept advice from their grandparents due to the rapid changeof the world during over 50 years. As it comes to me, I hold the view that, onthe contrary, grandchildren should better take the advice from theirgrandparents into consideration because the grandparents are experienced andkeeping step with the changing world and the laws of history of course neverchange too much. My view will be greatly substantiated by the followingdiscussions.

To begin with, experienced grandparents’advice can prevent  their grandchildrenfrom making mistakes and help them getting more and more closely to success.Only after the children tripped can some experience be valued a lot. Statisticsfrom Caring Youngster’s Growing up Organization shows that 78 percent teenagerschoose not to accept their grandparents’ advice and over 80 percent of whomregret to do so. Hence, since experience cannot be learned from books, treasurethe experienced grandparents and their valuable advice.

Furthermore, there is no denying thatgrandparent’ changing keeps steps with the world, even more quickly. Old asthey are, grandparents’ speed of chasing the newest things cannot be despised.To set my grandfather as an example, it was in 1995 that I had my first touchon computer on a computer class. I felt so excited that I telephoned mygrandfather right after school only to know that he was writing a book with thenew bought computer. What really shocked me was that he had already opened thecomputer and fixed it himself. From then on, I realised that the change ofworld made everyong changing with it.

Besides, changeable as the world are, lawsof it never change too much. It can be easily told that every dynasty had beendestroyed owing to poverty, starvation, wars and so on. So does the worldnowadays. It is human nature to fight for freedom, democracy and happiness. Andthat is just the advice grandparents suggest based on. Admittedly, someone mayquestion that grandparents are too old to change, that is the answer I state asabove.

It is conceivable to draw a conclusion fromthe reasons showing above that advice from grandparent plays an important rolein grandchildren’s lives desipte of the change of the world during over 50years.

gre呀gre

4.10 综合写作






The passage hold the view that communal online has many disadvatange such as inaccurate spelling, hacker's changes made to the original text, and making people pay attention on popular topic instead of important topics. The lecture's opinion is opposite to the passage based on the possible mistakes, relieable format and what is the real important topic.



To begin with, the passage states that communal online is easily to cause inaccurate information, especially in academic fields, while the lecture thinks that everyone has the ability to make mistakes but the computer can correct the errors itself which traditional ways cannot.



In addition, the passage's idea is that desipte of correct online encyclopedia, it is much likely for the original text to be changed by hackers and thus change the meaning. The lecture hold the view that ,on the contrary, users of online communal encyclopedias put the text into a format that is reliable. Besides, there is always a monitor to check if there is anyone has any change on the text.



Last but not least, the passage shows that communal encyclopedias makes people concentrate on popular topics and ignore the real important information. The lecture has an opposite note of it. The lecture thinks that what is the real important information can be desided by everyone himself. Popular topic means most people have interest on it. What is more, even when someone can want to know something that is not popular, it still shows on the page while the tradional ways do not.

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It has long been a phenomenon that grandchildren do not accept advice from their grandparents due to the rapid changeof the world during over 50 years. As it comes to me, I hold the view that, onthe contrary, grandchildren should better take the advice from theirgrandparents into consideration because the grandparents are experienced and keeping step with the changing world and the laws of history of course never change too much. My view will be greatly substantiated by the followingdiscussions.

To begin with, experienced grandparents’advice can prevent  their grandchildrenfrom making mistakes and helps(advice是不可数名词) them getting（get） more and more closely to success.Only after the children tripped can some experience be valued a lot. Statisticsfrom Caring Youngster’s Growing up Organization shows that 78 percent teenagerschoose not to accept their grandparents’ advice and over 80 percent of whomregret to do so. Hence, since experience cannot be learned from books, treasurethe experienced grandparents and their valuable advice.

Furthermore, there is no denying thatgrandparents’ changing keeps steps with the world, even more quickly. Old asthey are, grandparents’ speed of chasing the newest things cannot be despised.To set my grandfather as an example, it was in 1995 that I had my first touchon computer on a computer class. I felt so excited that I telephoned mygrandfather right after school only to know that he was writing a book with thenew bought computer. What really shocked me was that he had already opened thecomputer and fixed it himself. From then on, I realised that the change ofworld made everyong changing with it.

Besides, changeable as the world are, lawsof it never change too much. It can be easily told that every dynasty had beendestroyed owing to poverty, starvation, wars and so on. So does the worldnowadays. It is human nature to fight for freedom, democracy and happiness. Andthat is just the advice grandparents suggest based on. Admittedly, someone mayquestion that grandparents are too old to change, that is the answer I state asabove.

It is conceivable to draw a conclusion fromthe reasons showing above that advice from grandparent plays an important rolein grandchildren’s lives desipte of the change of the world during over 50years.

感觉写的挺好的~~~
但是觉得第三段的论证稍微不足一点，还是一二段详细论证，第三段略写一点？
别的我改不出来啥了~~~
一起加油，喵~~~

gre呀gre

thx！！~~~那个黄句子的错要怎么改呢？？

晨依Jacqueline

TPO6综合修改
首先对GRE童鞋表示一下歉意，因为今天晨依一天的课，然后晚上先忙活了点别的事情，所以又做了TPO6综合的听写然后才修改的文章。不好意思啦~

The passage hold(s) the view that communal online (+encyclopedia)has many disadvatange(disadvantages) such as inaccurate spelling, hacker's changes made to the original text, and making people pay attention on popular topic instead of important topics(+and so on). The lecture's opinion is opposite to the passage based on the possible mistakes, relieable(reliable) format and what is the real important topic.(重点内容要放在listening上，感觉总结可以再精准一点~)

To begin with, the passage states that communal online (+encyclopedia) is easily to cause inaccurate information, especially in academic fields, while the lecture(r) thinks that everyone has the ability to make mistakes but the computer can correct the errors itself which traditional ways cannot.(GRE可以再听一下，可能理解的不对，听力主要是一个对比，说communal online encyclopedia上的错误可以容易及时改正，然而traditional printed encyclopedia上的错误可能会留着很长时间。)

In addition, the passage's(这个地方最好是写一个人，如the author's/writer's idea,而要是写passage的话可以写an idea in the passage)idea is that desipte(despite) of correct online encyclopedia, it is much likely for the original text to be changed by hackers and thus change the meaning. The lecture hold(s) the view that ,on the contrary, users of online communal encyclopedias put the text into a format that is reliable. Besides, there is always a monitor to check if there is anyone has any change on the text.(monitor那里写的很好！我当时都没有听出来，不过前面句子如果能说出是只读模式read-only format就更好了)

Last but not least, the passage shows that communal encyclopedias makes people concentrate on popular topics and ignore the real important information. The lecture has an opposite note(tone也很好)of it. The lecture(r) thinks that what is the real important information can be desided(decided) by everyone himself(by everyone for himself). (A) Popular topic means most people have interest on it. What is more, even when someone can want to know(?) something that is not popular, it still shows on the page while the tradional(traditional)ways do not. (个人认为这一段的point抓得不好，提供两点作为参考，一个是online encyclopedia有无限的space，另外是各类topics可以满足广大用户的兴趣偏好)

【conclusion】

GRE同学在对reading的把握上已经很充分了，要开始将重心偏一偏了突破listening的内容哦~说说我的想法，在综合作文中占主导地位的内容应该是listening的部分，所以建议你精简一下描写阅读部分的内容，将更多的精力和内容留给听力部分；听力部分首先要把观点听对，然后尽量多提供一些details来支持，不要加入自己的理解，感觉你这一部分还有点薄弱，多做一做听写吧！最后，提供一个网站的内容给GRE，上面有TPO综合的解析，我觉得写得还是不错的~http://blog.sina.com.cn/s/blog_624cee5f0100tudz.html我平时也是写完了从这上面看解析作为参考，希望能和GRE一起进步！

daisyの小夢想

4.8 综合
不好意思啊 来晚了!!

The passagestates that dinosaurs are endotherms because of the fossils discovered in polarregions, the same leg structures, and the both growing quickly made by bonestructure and blood, while the lecture holds the different views based on theevidence of warmer environment, dinosaurs' higher weight and growing slowly.(首段要把理由都列出来吗？个人认为首段把总论点摆出来就好。)

First of all, the passage shows that the fossilsfound in polar regions means that only animalscan live there (animals canlive there only if)because theycan maintain the body temperaure(temperature)under such a cold climate. Hence, polardinosaurs is the only reasonable explanaion(explanation). In the contrast, the lecture tells us that ,at that time, the polar regions were much warmer than nowadays and when itbecame cold, they could migrate (towarmer areas).

Futhermore(Furthermore), the passage states that the same position and movement means dinosaurs and aresame. It allows them to dophysical activity only when the legs can positioned underneath its body(their bodies). On the contrary, the lecture hold the view that thedinosaurs did not need high energy and they had more weight. Hence, they didnot need the leg structure (that isuseless for them)means nothing to them.

Besides, the passage’s opinion is that theendotherms has a bonestructure include Haverian canals(??什么意思?) whichallows endotherms’ character is growing fast. And it can be found in dinosaurs’fossils. However, the lecture thinks that dinosaurs grew slowly and evenstopped growing in cooler climate.

可以整理一个自己的综合模板和表述的词语~~~

miss绿光

独立你要是忙的话也不着急写哈，只要你写完随时告诉我我就给你改哈~

bechasing

Hi~上次的作文写完可以随时message我改

gre呀gre

TPO 9 （不好意思刚到家）
The topic the passage and the lecture talked about is that whether hydrogen-based fuel is a wise choice for cars. The passage hold the view that hydrogen-based fuel is great owing to easier abtaining, no pollution, and energy efficient. The lecture, however, has an opposite tone that the way the passage talking is too optimistic since the fuel is not that good.

First of all, the passage thinks that he internal-combustion engine relies on petroleum while hydrogen fuel can be obtained from water and gas which is much easier to get. The lecture holds an opposite view that the hydrogen fuel is not easily avilable because it requires pure water and is difficult for nowadays technique to produce and store which requires significant cold environment.

Secondly, another evidence that the hydrogen fuel is great the passage shows is that the only byproduct of fuel-cell engines is water while that of it is carbon dioxide. Oppositely, the lecture states that the fuel-cell is not environmental friendly since large amount of cole and oil have been burnt when producing it owing to requiring pure water and cold environment.

Last but not the least, the passage's opinion is that the fuel-cell engines is twice effective as the internal-combustion engine. On the contrary, the lecture talks that it is not energy saving since it is not easy to produce and the cost of  it is too expensive.

晨依~ 我最后一段没有听懂- -所以也写不粗来了……
还有啊，你觉得第一段要不要把文章和听力里面的分观点或者原因都写出来呢？我写出来就会超字数，不知道是不是因为我写的太罗嗦了？求讨论

晨依Jacqueline

TPO 9 修改
The topic the passage and the lecture talked about is that whether hydrogen-based fuel is a wise choice for cars. The passage hold(s) the view that hydrogen-based fuel is great owing to easier abtaining(obtaining), no pollution, and energy efficient. The lecture, however, has an opposite tone that the way the passage talking is too optimistic since the fuel is not that good.

First of all, the passage thinks that he internal-combustion engine relies on petroleum while hydrogen fuel can be obtained from water and gas which is much easier to get. The lecture holds an opposite view that the hydrogen fuel is not easily avilable(available)/另外，我觉得easily available不大对头吧，easily access比较好呢because it requires pure water and is difficult for nowadays technique to produce and store which requires significant cold environment.

Secondly, another evidence that the hydrogen fuel is great the passage shows is that the only byproduct of fuel-cell engines is water while that of it is carbon dioxide.(这个句子写的好乱的说，光是is就有四个...晨依有点晕乎乎的了，GRE看一下可不可以拆成两句或者换一种清晰一点点的表达?) Oppositely, the lecture states that the fuel-cell is not environmental friendly since large amount of cole(coals) and oil have been burnt when producing it owing torequiring pure water and cold environment.(cold environment这个是第一个point吧，主要还是说pollution!)

Last but not the least, the passage's(speaker's/lecturer's更好哟~) opinion is that the fuel-cell engines is twice effective as the internal-combustion engine. On the contrary, the lecture talks that it is not energy saving since it is not easy to produce and the cost of  it is too expensive.(如果听不出来的话可以根据reading的内容和听到的关键词大体预测一下，先把观点蒙出来，细节能有最好。比如说reading说的cheap，那咱们就写expensive~)


首先回答一下问题，我觉得如果像GRE这个样子在开头把reading的三个原因都写出来的话也可以，但是下面的三段就尽量少提reading里面的内容，把更多或者绝大部分的笔墨花在listening部分的内容以及是怎么反驳的。但是这一篇来看的话还是reading的内容明显多于listening的内容，所以我们要赶快提高听力，把professor说的points和details都给ETS摆出来，让它找不出毛病来！革命尚未成功，晨依和GRE一起努力哈~！^_^