重开一个作文贴

Vance1991

The reading passage indicates that the communal online encyclopedias are less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias. However, the lecture refutes the statement in the reading passage thoroughly as following reasons.

First of all, the lecture points out that no matter which encyclopedia, the communal online or traditional one, both may contain some errors. Plus, compared to traditional encyclopedias, it is easier for the communal online encyclopedia to correct its faults. Thus it disputes the first point listed in the reading passage.

What’s more, what contradicts to reading passage, the communal online has its way to protect their articles from hackers. There are two ways: one is to use read-only format, and the other is using special editors to monitor all changes. Hence, the second point said in the reading passage is argued.

Last but not the least, according to reading passage, the communal encyclopedias will create a false impression of important things. However, the lecture argues that whether something is important or not should be judged by people’s interests. While the academics cannot accurately reflect what people are interested in, online encyclopedias offers(offer) a variety of topics that can represent different users’ interests. Therefore, it rebuts the third point mentioned in the reading passage.

楼主写的作文为什么一丢丢的错误都没有...
阅读中的例子和解释都不用写的么?

ykhjy

个人觉得重点在lecture， 阅读中提取point就好了

The reading passage indicates that the communal online encyclopedias are less valuable than traditional, printed encyclopedias. However, the lecture refutes the statement in the reading passage thoroughly as following reasons.

First of all, the lecture points out that no matter which encyclopedia, the communal online or traditional one, both may contain some errors. Plus, compared to traditional encyclopedias, it is easier for the communal online encyclopedia to correct its faults. Thus it disputes the first point listed in the reading passage.

What’s more, what contradicts to reading passage, the communal online has its way to protect their articles from hackers. There are two ways: one is to use read-only format, and the other is using special editors to monitor all changes. Hence, the second point said in the reading passage is argued.

Last but not the least, according to reading passage, the communal encyclopedias will create a false impression of important things. However, the lecture argues that whether something is important or not should be judged by people’s interests. While the academics cannot accurately reflect what people are interested in, online encyclopedias offers(offer) a variety of topics that can represent different users’ interests. Therefore, it rebuts the third point mentioned in the reading passage.

楼主写的作文为什么一丢丢的错误都没有...
阅读中的例子和解释都不用写的么?

-- by 会员 Vance1991 (2012/8/9 9:11:04)

ykhjy

8.9 独立
you can know a lot about a person through the types of friends this person has

There are many ways to know a person, such as investigating one’s family background, observing one’s habits and so forth. However, among these ways, the way that can help us to know most about a person, in my opinion, should be knowing the types of friends of this person.

Friends are always people who have something common in personality. They may have common interest, common belief, common experience and so on. Thus through knowing the types of friends of this person, we can know something about this person. For example, if one’s friends are mostly these people who are addicted to playing games online and resist going outside, we can know that this person may also be a game-obsessed guy, something of indoorsman. While if a person has many different kinds of friends, introvert and extrovert, easy-going and capricious... maybe he or she is a person who have a strong communicating skills and is inclined to make friends.  

In addition, as an old saying goes, “he that lies down with dogs must rise up with fleas.” It means that people will be mostly influenced by people around them. I think those people who have a tremendous impact should be friends. According to a survey conducted by National Investigation Organization, people’s habits always get changed because of friends. Since friends have such huge effect on each other, we can always know a lot of this person from knowing the types of friends. For example, one of my friends, Lily once introduced one of her friend, Tom, to me. As I know that Lily is an easy-going girl, I guessed Tom must also be a good-tempered guy. After a long period contact, time proves me right, and we finally be friends too.

I concede that the types of friends cannot totally reflect one person since friends only have something in common not completely the same. For instance, there exists a kind of people that are detached from friends, so they only have several friends. However, can we make a judgment that this kind of people are unconcerned one? May be no. Since it is possible that they devote themselves to their family. From this, we can see that sometimes just through the types of friends to judge a person may result in bias.

In conclusion, although we cannot comprehensively know a person through the types of friends, no one can deny that friends can to some extent provide us some information about the person since friends always have something in common and friends can affect each other.

ykhjy

8.9 综合 TPO7
The reading passage indicates reasons why it is unlikely that wood companies in the United States will advertise their products as ecocertified to receive ecocertification. However, the lecture disputes the reasons listed in the reading passage and points out that those wood companies will finally try to receive ecocertification.

First of all, while the reading passage states that advertising is not valued by American consumers, the lecture points out that customers can distinguish the value of advertisement and Americans have a lot of confidence in independent agencies. So those ecologically certified wood products by will be supported by Americans. Thus the first reason listed in the reading passage is disputed.

What’s more, the lecture suggests that price is not the only factor that will affect consumers’ decision as the reading passage said. And in the case with certified wood, since the difference of price between two products is small, Americans are inclined to afford it. Therefore it goes against the second reasons mentioned in the reading passage.

Last but not the least, the lecture argues that although American wood businesses don’t want to market their products abroad as the reading passage said, they should pay attention to the foreign competition since foreign companies will start to capture consumers who are interested in ecocertified products through offering ecocertified wood to American markets. Hence, the third reason listed in the reading passage is refuted.

Vance1991

The reading passage indicates reasons why it is unlikely that wood companies in the United States will advertise their products as ecocertified to receive ecocertification. However, the lecture disputes the reasons listed in the reading passage and points out that those wood companies will finally try to receive ecocertification.

First of all, while the reading passage states that advertising is not valued by American consumers, the lecture points out that customers can distinguish the value of advertisement and Americans have a lot of confidence in independent agencies. So those ecologically certified wood products by will be supported by Americans. Thus the first reason listed in the reading passage is disputed.

What’s more, the lecture suggests that price is not the only factor that will affect consumers’ decision as the reading passage said. And in the case with certified wood, since the difference of price between two products is small(subtle会不会更好些...), Americans are inclined to afford it. Therefore it goes against the second reasons mentioned in the reading passage.

Last but not the least, the lecture argues that although American wood businesses don’t want to market their products abroad as the reading passage said, they should pay attention to the foreign competition since foreign companies will start to capture consumers who are interested in ecocertified products through offering ecocertified wood to American markets. Hence, the third reason listed in the reading passage is refuted.

楼主写的非常好,基本没有错误.结构清晰明朗.八错!

ykhjy

8.10 独立
Some people say we should never be impolite to another person. Do you agree or disagree?

What will you do when you meet a person at a first time? Of course, be polite, since no one will blame a person who is polite to others. However, if you get into a trouble that someone is yelling you even is rude to you, will you keep polite? In such a case, answers may be various. While someone may think that polite at this is a proof of cowardice and it is nothing useful to deal with the problems, others may think being polite is always a rule that we should obey and it may help us to solve the trouble. As for me, I agree with the latter.

There is no doubt that being polite to other people is always beneficial for both you and others since it is human nature that people are inclined to do good to others if others do good to them. As an old saying goes, “courtesy costs nothing.” It means that people are willing to get together with those people who are polite to them. We can also know this from some examples in our daily life. Tom, one of my friends, is often polite to others, whoever it is. Once he went for an interview to compete a fiercely competitive position. When he came to the washroom before the interview, he was polite to the man who was cleaning there. After the interview, he received the offer very soon. Afterwards he happened to know that day in washroom, the interviewer was also there and it was his politeness that make the interviewer decided to hire him so soon. From this we can know that being polite all the time may give you some surprises.

When it comes to the situation that someone is rude to you, being impolite is not a good response since it may lead to worse situation. Take one of my relatives, Aaron, as an example. When he firstly drove in a street, he hit the car in front and he originally wanted to apologize to the driver of the car in front. However, since the drive scolded him heavily, Aaron was impolite to the driver, saying it was not a big deal. Thus the driver was more angry and finally they were asked to police station to solve the problem. As a matter of fact, everything has a reason, if we think more about reasons of others’ behaviors and be polite to response, problems must be easier to solved. Such as the case above, if Aaron thought about reasons why the driver was so angry, and being polite to the driver, would the drive keep reproving him? They could have not solved the problem in the police station.      

I concede that sometimes we cannot control ourselves especially when someone reaches our limits. For example, a wife abuses her husband’s mother when she argues with her husband who admires his mom very much just for something trifling of everyday life. Under such a circumstance, the husband may be hard to control himself to not be rude to his wife. However, can being impolite solve the problem? Of course not. What a better solution should be to tell his wife not to abuse his mom again and explain the reasons, namely, being polite.

In conclusion, whatever the situation is, compared to be impolite to another person, being polite can always be more beneficial for us.

ykhjy

8.10 综合 TPO8
The reading passage casts about the accuracy of the Chevalier’s memoir in three aspects. However, according to the lecture, none of the aspects stated in the reading passage are strong evidences to prove that the memoir was inaccurate as the following reasons.

First of all, the lecture points out that borrowing money from others doesn’t necessarily mean that the Chevalier was not rich. Actually, the property Chevalier had needed a few days to be converted into actually money, thus it is possible that sometimes Chevalier needed to borrow some cash. It goes against the first aspect listed in the reading passage.

What’s more, the reading passage states that it is impossible for him to capture conversations accurately just because it was written several years after the conversation occurred. However, the lecture argues that every time after a conversation, the Chevalier would record everything he remembered then composed them together after a few years. Thus the second aspect mentioned in the reading passage is argued.

Last but not the least, the lecture indicates that the question about the memoir’s account of the Chevalier’s escape from a notorious prison said in the reading passage is groundless. Based on the lecture, the prison was so powerful that the politically well-connected friends cannot offer a bribe to set the Chevalier free. And the fact that the ceiling needed to be repaired after the Chevalier’s escape can prove that the memoir’s account is convincing.

gre呀gre

8.9 独立我是错误桑 我是没错但是改了更好桑 我是写的赞！
You can know a lot about a person throughthe types of friends this person has


There are many ways toknow a person, such as investigating one’s family background, observing one’shabits and so forth. However, among these ways, the way that can help us toknow most about a person, in my opinion, should be knowing the types of friendsof this person.

(加上to begin with之类的词更好~) Friends are always （加上the） peoplewho have something common in personality. They may have common interest, commonbelief, common experience and so on（最好少用and so on，这是队长筒子给我说的，貌似用滥了）. Thus through knowingthe types of friends of this person, we can know something about this person.For example, if one’s friends are mostly these people who are addicted to playing games online（online game更地道哦） and resist going outside, we canknow that this person may also be a game-obsessed guy, something of indoorsman.While if a person has many different kinds of friends, introvert and extrovert,easy-going and capricious... maybe he or she is a person who have a strongcommunicating skills and is inclined to make friends.  

In addition, as an old saying goes, “hethat lies down with dogs must rise up with fleas.” It means that people will bemostly influenced by people（改成the ones会好一些，避免重复） around them. I think those people who have a tremendous impactshould be friends. According to a survey conducted by National InvestigationOrganization, people’s habits always get changed because of friends. Sincefriends have such huge effect on each other, we can always know a lot of thisperson from knowing the types of friends. For example, one of my friends, Lilyonce introduced one of her friend（friends）, Tom,to me. As I know that Lily is an easy-going girl, I guessed Tom must also（also must） be a good-tempered guy. After a longperiod contact, time proves me right, and we finally be（are）friends too.

I concede that the types of friends cannottotally reflect one person since friends only have something in common notcompletely the same. For instance, there exists a kind of people that aredetached from friends, so they only have several friends. However, can we makea judgment that this kind of people are（is，this kind of person核心词是kind） unconcerned one? May be no.（改成逗号，since只能引导原因从句，所以单独放在这是不合适的） Since it is possible that they devote themselves to their family.From this, we can see that sometimes just through the types of friends to judgea person may result in bias.

In conclusion, although we cannot comprehensively know aperson through the types of friends, no one can deny that friends can to some extent provide us（光标弄错了？can provide us some extent information） some information about the person since friends always have somethingin common and friends can affect each other.

菇凉，你写的挺好的，只有几个语法错误，标出来的基本都是不改没错改了更好的东西，下面是一些tips，希望可以帮助你：
1 结构上来说挺好的，就是只给了两个原因，虽然没有规定，但是三个原因确实更好，因为分析的更全面；
2 倒数第二段的让步段太长啦，上XDF的时候老师说，老外都喜欢一边倒的文章，所以可以让步，但是一定要短，尤其是不能举例证明啊亲！或者可以让步一下说有巴拉巴拉的好处，但是就我看来，这个好处是flawed，反驳一下；
3 最后的最后，我觉得用词有点低端了啊，毕竟托福就是要给老外显摆你的英语有多好多好，稍微提高一下呗？我记得CD上有资料说单词的替换的，比如说think换成consider或者illustrate什么的是不是稍微好一点呢？语法结构没有问题，出错非常少，既然是优点就一定要弘扬，试着写点长难句呗？所以加油吧妹纸！

Cynthia9192

蓝色为意见或建议绿色为总结红色为错误
The reading passage casts about the accuracy ofthe Chevalier’s memoir in three aspects. However, according to the lecture,none of the aspects stated in the reading passage are strong evidences to provethat the memoir was（应该是is吧） inaccurate as the following reasons.【个人觉得楼主在第一段只说了lecture反对reading，但是最好能够写下lecture里是怎么说的（这样有针对性，而不是泛泛的语言，哪个综合都一样），lecture里的第一句，观点句最好能够写下来哦~~~】

First of all, the lecture points out thatborrowing money from others doesn’t necessarily mean that the Chevalier was notrich. Actually, the property（property是名词，应该后面加个of吧） Chevalier had needed a few days to be converted intoactually money（然后还是脚的这句话有点小别扭）, thus it is possiblethat sometimes Chevalier needed to borrow some cash. It goes against the firstaspect listed in the reading passage.【不懂这里是不是要稍稍提下reading怎么说的呢】

What’s more, the reading passage states that it isimpossible for him to capture conversations accurately just because it waswritten several years after the conversation occurred. However, the lectureargues that every time after a conversation, the Chevalier would recordeverything he remembered then composed them together after a few years.（交谈当晚就记下啦，不是几天之后哦~） Thus the second aspect mentioned in the reading passage isargued.【楼主的第一个和第三个论点段，都是先讲的lecture的内容，个人觉得应该保持一致，这段也应先说lecture的内容，而且本身lecture的内容就比reading重要，最好放在前面吧~~~(*^__^*) 】

Last but not the least, the lecture indicates thatthe question about the memoir’s account of the Chevalier’s escape from anotorious prison said in the reading passage is groundless. Based on thelecture, the prison was so powerful that the politically well-connected friendscannot offer a bribe to set the Chevalier free.【这个地方我觉得有点表达不对哦，看了下原文，原文的意思是“监狱里其他人拥有比他有权有势的朋友，但是也没有以贿赂的方式获取自由”】 And the fact that the ceiling ofhis room（最好说下，听力细节越多越好）needed to be repairedafter the Chevalier’s escape can prove that the memoir’s account is convincing.

表示我是个很弱的选手，要不就是听不到，听到了写出来也不是很漂亮~

楼主的句式挺丰富的，但是丰富的同时，我觉得最好可以行文段与段之间保持一致性，这样看上去比较有条理，所以我觉得在说三个观点的时候应该先说lecture的内容

努力多听小细节，~~~~(>_<)~~~~ 一起努力之~~~

漂亮的词很多，就不一一高亮啦~~~祝楼主早日战胜托福！

Cynthia9192

还有，我表示今天粘贴上去的时候，不知道格式怎么了，好多空格都没了，如果楼主还没有改，看我新粘上去的吧~~~