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ykhjy

我考的是GRE啦..其实我对语法真没啥概念  嘿嘿 那就换人把 保险起见

ykhjy

9.7 综合 TPO 12
The lecture mainly talks about reasons why the subject in a professional painting is not Jane Austen, which opposes the claim in the reading passage. According to the lecture, the clues provided in the reading passage is questionable to prove its claim and reasons are stated as follows.

First of all, the lecture indicates that it was 70 years after the Austen’s death that Austen’s family gave permission to use the portrait, so even Austen’s family themselves may not see what Austen looked like. Thus it is hard to identify that the girl in the portrait is certainly Jane Austen as the reading passage said.

When it comes to the fact that the face in the portrait resembles the one in Cassandra’s sketch which depicts Austen and the features are similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting, the lecture argues that Austen family was very large and Jane had many cousins who were also teenagers. Actually, there is one painting that just depicts one of Jane’s relatives.

Last but not the least, the lecture points out that just based on the style we cannot identify the subject in the painting as the reading passage mentioned. In fact, at the time when Humphrey started to sell portraits, Jane Austen was older than the girl in the portrait. Thus the third clue listed in the reading passage is disputed.

vivian873921

Nowadays a large number of important problems in today's world such as the environmental problems, starvation problems in developing countries, how to keep the peace in the world and so forth, are waiting（for）us to find solutions. Can we solve the most important problems in our lifetime? As far as I am concerned, the answer may be no and reasons are stated as follows.

First of all, the main reason that we may be not able to solve the most important problems in our life time is that we cannot even clarify what are these problems. Since these problems are too countless to define. Actually in my eyes, the most important problems are those which are the most related to people's lives. However, how can we identify the characteristics of these problems? There is no certain standard for us to define. For example, according to a study conducted by (the) National Investigation Organization, millions of people in China have been suffered by HIV. Is that the most important problem? Some (people) consider yes in that (because) it directly related to people's lives. Yet thinking about a larger number of people have been suffering from starvation, is the problem of HIV still the most important?(这个应该不是HIV的问题，而是好多人都患有HIV的问题~) It is hard to say. As a matter of fact, we even do not know whether we can take how many people are affected as one feature of the most important problems.


In addition, given that we have been aware of these the most important problems （这句木有看懂....是even that 嘛？）, because of our limited knowledge about this world and（and 可以去掉的吧~）, it is hard for us to find approaches to accomplish the task（还是说去解决问题比较好吧~因为前面木有说是神马任务呀~）. A case in(on) this point is the problem regarding where can we go once the earth is no longer suitable for us to live. Despite the fact that we have realized this import problem through some researches, we still have no idea about the solution. The reason is that compared to the complex(complexity) of this world, what we know is too simple and I believe this problem cannot be solved even centuries after I have died.


It is true that with the advent of advancing technology, Yuang Longping's discovery of hybrid rice has saved many starved（starving会不会好一点）people in some develop(ing) countries by increasing the production of rice for instance, we have reached some solutions to many key problems in modern world; however, seeing that the world today is changing everyday and so are the key problems. Thus once we find a solution to a key problem, another problem comes up and these problems won't disappear even we run out of our lifetime.


In conclusion, considering these most problems are vague to clarify and they are countless, we cannot be able to solve all of them in our lifetime.

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

The lecture mainly talks about reasons why the subject in a professional painting is not Jane Austen, which opposes the claim in the reading passage. According to the lecture, the clues provided in the reading passage is questionable to prove its claim and reasons are stated as follows.

First of all, the lecture indicates that it was 70 years after the Austen’s death that Austen’s family gave permission to use the portrait, so even Austen’s family （members）themselves may not see what Austen looked like. Thus it is hard to identify that the girl in the portrait is certainly Jane Austen as the reading passage said.

When it comes to the fact that the face in the portrait resembles the one in Cassandra’s sketch which depicts Austen and the features are similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting, the lecture argues that Austen family was very large and Jane had many cousins who were also teenagers. Actually, there is one painting that just depicts one of Jane’s relatives.

Last but not the least, the lecture points out that just based on the style we cannot identify the subject in the painting as the reading passage mentioned. In fact, at the time when Humphrey started to sell portraits, （in london） Jane Austen was older than the girl in the portrait. Thus the third clue listed in the reading passage is disputed.

听力的点很齐全额，再有就是加入点细节呗。这样可以增加字数。

ykhjy

Thanks for amending!~  有几个问题： in that= because 噢；given that 是考虑到...，或者说就算是...；那里面的and 不可以去掉，因为连接的是 given that 后面的那个句子和 it is hard 这个句子；a case in this point 是固定搭配；task有难题的意思

Nowadays a large number of important problems in today's world such as the environmental problems, starvation problems in developing countries, how to keep the peace in the world and so forth, are waiting（for）us to find solutions. Can we solve the most important problems in our lifetime? As far as I am concerned, the answer may be no and reasons are stated as follows.

First of all, the main reason that we may be not able to solve the most important problems in our life time is that we cannot even clarify what are these problems. Since these problems are too countless to define. Actually in my eyes, the most important problems are those which are the most related to people's lives. However, how can we identify the characteristics of these problems? There is no certain standard for us to define. For example, according to a study conducted by (the) National Investigation Organization, millions of people in China have been suffered by HIV. Is that the most important problem? Some (people) consider yes in that (because) it directly related to people's lives. Yet thinking about a larger number of people have been suffering from starvation, is the problem of HIV still the most important?(这个应该不是HIV的问题，而是好多人都患有HIV的问题~) It is hard to say. As a matter of fact, we even do not know whether we can take how many people are affected as one feature of the most important problems.


In addition, given that we have been aware of these the most important problems （这句木有看懂....是even that 嘛？）, because of our limited knowledge about this world and（and 可以去掉的吧~）, it is hard for us to find approaches to accomplish the task（还是说去解决问题比较好吧~因为前面木有说是神马任务呀~）. A case in(on) this point is the problem regarding where can we go once the earth is no longer suitable for us to live. Despite the fact that we have realized this import problem through some researches, we still have no idea about the solution. The reason is that compared to the complex(complexity) of this world, what we know is too simple and I believe this problem cannot be solved even centuries after I have died.


It is true that with the advent of advancing technology, Yuang Longping's discovery of hybrid rice has saved many starved（starving会不会好一点）people in some develop(ing) countries by increasing the production of rice for instance, we have reached some solutions to many key problems in modern world; however, seeing that the world today is changing everyday and so are the key problems. Thus once we find a solution to a key problem, another problem comes up and these problems won't disappear even we run out of our lifetime.


In conclusion, considering these most problems are vague to clarify and they are countless, we cannot be able to solve all of them in our lifetime.

-- by 会员 vivian873921 (2012/9/7 21:19:29)

fairyfinger

The lecture mainly talks about reasons why points claimed in the reading passage concerning the decline in book reading are not true. According to the lecture, reasons are stated as follows.

First of all, the lecture indicates that although scientists writing, history and political analysis are not literature, they are of high quality and can be as creative as a novel and a play（前面是they，后面这个应该也用复数：novels，plays这样） because they can provide imagination. Therefore, it does（is） not true that people do not read a book just because they don’t read literature as the reading passage said.

When it comes to the problem listed in the reading passage that people read many superficial poorly written（这个superficial用在这儿修饰得很奇怪） books and tend to waste time via trivial forms of entertainment, the lecture argues that people are not wasting time with music and movies for example, in that the culture has changed and there are many forms of literature other than novels and poems these days.

Last but not the least, the lecture suggests that despite the fact that there are fewer support for literature, the reason for it is not the poor standards of today’s readers as the reading passage mentioned. Based on the lecture, it is the authors’ fault since modern literature authors always make the literature difficult to understand. Thus the third point listed in the reading passaged is disputed.

有时间的话建议还是写个结尾吧 字数多点好呀