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kchszy061ban

7月11日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that it is good for children to have similar jobs with you.

When it comes to the question of whether it is good for children to have similar jobs with their parents, different people hold various opinions. Some people want their children follow their step and choose the same job as them. While others believe that it is good for their children to have different jobs with them. Personally speaking, I prefer to have a job which is not the same as my parents, also I think I would recommend other youngests choose differetn jobs. My reasons are as follows.

To begin with, it is impossible for all the children to have the same jobs as their paretns becasue some jobs can not be inherited from parents to children. As we all know, some jobs need people have some special talent in ordern to fulfill the requirement. Such as people need to have beautiful voices in order to be tenors, they also be asked to have well spatial ability if they want to be pilots. Most of the time, people who have these special talents can not tranfer their ability to their children. In fact, this situation is not rare, all of the jobs available in this world all need people have some skills to fulfill their requirements. I would like to say that it is the job who choose people who are suitable for them, but not people choose jobs under their wills.

Moreover, choosing the same job as their parents did will do harm to cultivate children' independence, which is very important for children to live on their own when they grow-up. First, let us talk about what will happen if children choose the same job as their parents. Take a teacher in a primary school as my example. The teacher will teach his/her childern how to behave properly in the class, how to teach students, how to prepare for their materials used in offering a lectue. Then his/her children will learn these things from the teacher. When the children have some problems about teaching, they definitely will ask their parents for help because they already get used to listen to their parents and obey their words. Some day their parents will not available, then what they can do when they face difficulties? So, it is better to have a different job, try to experience new things, and solve problems independently.

Finally, new jobs which are never exsited in the past need people to have different careers. As the repaid development of science and technology, many new jobs are created nowadays such IT workers, astronaut, software developer and so forth. These new jobs are not available in the past, whild none of our parents had did the these jobs. Therefore, it is impossible for their children to do the same job as them.

Of course, some parents want their children to do the same job as them, a generals want his/her son/daughter to be a general. At the same time, childern can learn their parents' experiences of how to perform well when they have the same job as their parents. However, based what I have been discussed above, the disadvantages of doing this are obvious. Thus, I believe it is good to have different jobs with parents.

jasonliu119

When it comes to the question of whether should people spend some time to think before they take action, different people hold various opinions. Some people says that opportunities would go quickly if they do not grasp them, thus, they would like to take action as soon as possible. On the contrary, others believe patience is often a good straegy, they usually consoder all aspects of the situation, and the consequences of their decision.（注意断句，they前面应该用句号吧？） Personally speaking, I prefer the later choice, my reasons are as follows. （断句）

To begin with, people can make relatively less mistakes if they are petient before they take action. I will speak from my own experience. I am a university student majoring in mechanical engineering. In my daily life, I always take sufficient time to think about what I will do before I take action. For example, three months ago, I decided to take GRE, so I began to prepare for it. Before I took any action, I made a detail plan according to my ability and time I can spend on this test. I spent amost one week on making this plan, because I had to take classes about my major subjects and I read lots of other people' articles about how to prepare this test. Then I did everything based on my plan, I really got a high score on it. On the contrary, one of my classmate who also took this text, but he said it was a waste of time to make plan, he just did some practices after he signed up for the test. The result was not surprising, he failed on this test. According to this test, I realized that patience contribute greatly to one's sucess. Thanks to patience, I can get I high score on the GRE. If I took action as my classmate did, I would make mistakes as him.

Moreover, people really need patience to do some specific works. Patience means that one needs to spend sufficient time on the work they do, have the confidence do to it well, and to continue on whenever they confront with setbacks or they may feel depressed when they fail. As we all know, education is a kind of work which needs people be patient with（to be patient with）. It lasts for so long a time, from primary school,middle school, then fianlly into university, if one has no patience, s/he can hardly finish the learning process（又是断句）. Thus, patience is helpful for people on these specfic works.

Finally, patience is one factor to judge whether one person is grow-up or not. Adults are more tactful than young people, they are usually more patient before they do something. Years of experiences give them the wisdom to consider thoroughly before they make any decisions. In contrast, people who always take action immediately are thought to be not wisdom engough. For instance, a recent survey shows that, adults spend nearly more time before they take action. While, youngests usually do not consider patience as a good strategy, they often care-free and optimistic about what they do. But, according to the result of this survey, adults are more sucessuful than youngests in performing the tasks designed in the survey. So, we can see from this survey that, adults and youngests behave differently when they perform some tasks. Adults are more mature than youngests.

Of course, the opportunity will escape if you do not seize it. However, one thing that everyone needs to pay attention to is that, before you grasp it, you need to ensure you can succeed. Otherwise, the damage it brings to you would far outweith the advantage you get from it. Therefore, based on what I have been discussed above, we can safely drwa the conclusion that people need patience as a kind of good strategy.

总体来说不错啊，语言形式丰富，结构也挺好的。优点就不多说了，我说说我的意见吧;
(1)我的一位大学英语老师告诫我们——英语的一个句子永远只有一个主语。也就是说，不可以用一个逗号，去断句。
发现你的一些句子是用一个逗号连接两个完整的句子的，这是错误的
（2）三个分论点的第一个你的举例过于详细了，觉得可以简洁点；然后把第二小点扩充下，这样结构更加好些吧？

加油！You are not alone！

kchszy061ban

TPO 3
The author of the reading text talks about several problems of one paingint by Rembrandt, and concludes that this painting would possiblly not been painted by Rembandt. While, the professor in the leactuer does not agree with the authore, she explains her reasons in the lecture in details.

First, the professor points out that x-ray exzamination shows that the fur collar was no one part of the original painting. Owner of this painting added the fur collar on it in order to make the womam looks like a normal lady. The purpose was to increse its value. In this case, the statement in the reading text is totally unsounded.

Second, the professor says that when the fur collar which is not the original part is removed, it could be found that the wome wears light color clothes which can reflect light onto the woman's face to make it looks bright. Therefore, the original painting is realistic, at the same time the light and shadow are well fitted. This is directly contradicted to its counterpart in the reading text.

Third, the professor explains that because of  the adding of the fur collar, its owner also added other wood glued to the original painting in order to make it look more grand and valuable. In fact, when the adding parts of wood are removed , people can see there is only one single wood in the original painting. Moreover, the professor says one recent discovery finds that another paint of Remandt's self-portrait with a hat is made from the same wood with the painting of the woman. Therefore, the painting discussed in the reading reading text and the lectue is indeed made by Remandt, according to the professor.

kchszy061ban

7月12日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that colleges or universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.
When it comes to the question of whether it is good for universities or colledges offering more courses to preprare students for the future, different people hold various opinions. Some people believe that doing this can help students well developed in order to fulfill the requirement of their future jobs. While others do not think it is good for students, becasue other factores such as working experiences, communication skills are as important as courses for students. From my perspective of view as an university students, I agree with the later opinion. My reasons are as follows.

To begin with, taking more courses will cost students extra time and money. University or college students always have so many courses to study. Take myself as an example. When I was a freshman in the university, I had to learn all the basic courses which were required by the university. Everyday I got up at seven o'clock, and then hurried up to the classroom because the classes started at eight o'clock. I did this from monday to friday every week during my first year in university. If more courses were added, I did not think I had enough time to deal with all of them. Another thing should be taken into consideration is that students need to pay more if they want to take more courses. While the fact is that some students whose economical conditioins are not good may can not afford these courses.

Moreover, universities or colleges lack the ability to judege which courses are beneficial for students' future work. The reason is that the repaid change of modern society makes it impossible to predict which course is important. Thus, these new courses may not be efficient to prepare students for their future work. One example of this situation is that, many students in chinese universities are required to learn advanced mathematics. One of my friends is mayored in medical, but he have to learn it as other students. Even this course is useless for him. In fact, learning something is not harmful. But what I want to mention is that it will take students extra time which they can spend on their major subjects. Thus, offering more courses is not always beneficial.

Finally, universities or colleges need to hire new teachres for teaching these new courses. Then, universities or colleges will charge more tuition fee from students. This point is so obvious. It is students who pay for the expense of the universities or colleges. Furthermore, increasing tuition fee may hamper some students enroll higher education, not to mention prepare for their future work.

Of course, a broad understanding of various subjects can help students expand their outlook. Also, students can contact with different professors who may have positive influences on them. However, offering more courses to students is one consideration of the school. Students may want to learn something else which are equal important to them. Meanwhile, based on what I have been discussed above, I do not agree with the point to provide more courses to students.

Joanna0225

拼写有误用词用句有误好句好例子

7月12日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that colleges or universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.
When it comes to the question of whether it is good for universities or colledges offering more courses to preprare students for the future, different people hold various opinions. Some people believe that doing this can help students well developed in order to fulfill the requirement of their future jobs. While others do not think it is good for students, becasue other factores such as working experiences, communication skills are as important as courses for students. From my perspective of view (From my perspective或者From my point of view) as an(a) university students, I agree with the later (latter) opinion. My reasons are as follows.

To begin with, taking more courses will cost students extra time and money. University or college students always have so many courses to study. Take myself as an example. When I was a freshman in the university, I had to learn all the basic courses which were required by the university. Everyday I got up at seven o'clock, and then hurried up to the classroom because the classes started at eight o'clock. I did this from monday to friday (首字母大写) every week during my first year in the university. If more courses were added, I did (do) not think I had(would have) enough time to deal with all of them. Another thing should be taken into consideration is that students need to pay more if they want to take more courses (这句话有两个谓语，所以应该拆成两句话，或者改成What should be taken into consideration additionally is that students need……). While (while放在句首表示“虽然”，放在这句感觉不太通) the fact is that some students whose economical (financial)conditioins are not good may can not (may not be able to) afford these courses.

Moreover, universities or colleges lack the ability to judege which courses are beneficial for students' future work. The reason is that the repaid change of modern society makes it impossible to predict which course is important. Thus, these new courses may not be efficient to prepare students for their future work. One example of this situation is that, many students in chinese(首字母大写) universities are required to learn advanced mathematics. One of my friends is mayored in medical, but he have (has) to learn it as (like) other students. Even (Even though) this course is useless for him. In fact, learning something is not harmful. But what I want to mention is that it will take students extra time which they can spend on their major subjects. Thus, offering more courses is not always beneficial.

Finally, universities or colleges need to hire new teachres for teaching these new courses. Then, universities or colleges will charge more tuition fee from students. This point is so obvious. It is students who pay for the expense of the universities or colleges. Furthermore, increasing tuition fee may hamper some students enroll (from enrolling, 用法是hamper sb from doing sth) higher education, not to mention prepare (preparing) for their future work.

Of course, a broad understanding of various subjects can help students expand their outlook. Also, students can contact with (去掉with) different professors who may have positive influences on them. However, offering more courses to students is one consideration of the school. Students may want to learn something else which are equal important to them. Meanwhile, based on what I have been(去掉been) discussed above, I do not agree with the point to provide more courses to students.



1．首先我们两个在审题上似乎产生了歧义。我对题目的理解是学校是否应该增加对职业发展有用的课程，而你的理解是学校是否应该增加各种与专业无关课程。

2．文章结构好，观点阐述得很清楚，举例充分。

3．仅是个人意见，如果有误还望原谅！

sang824

The author of the reading text talks about several problems of one pinging painting by Rembrandt, and concludes that this painting would possiblly not been painted by Rembandt. While, the professor in the leactuer does not agree with the authore, she explains her reasons in the lecture in details.

First, the professor points out that x-ray exzamination shows that the fur collar was no not one part of the original painting. Owner of this painting added the fur collar on it in order to make the womam looks like a normal lady. The purpose was to increse its value. In this case, the statement in the reading text is totally unsounded.

Second, the professor says that when the fur collar which is not the original part(unoriginal part fur collar简洁一点) is removed, it could be found that the wome wears light color clothes which can reflect light onto the woman's face to make it looks bright. Therefore, the original painting is realistic, at the same time the light and shadow are well fitted. This is directly contradicted to its counterpart in the reading text. 建议多陈述一下reading呢，就一句话说reading认为光影不相配。

Third, the professor explains that because of  the adding of the fur collar, its owner also added other wood glued to the original painting in order to make it look more grand and valuable. In fact, when the adding parts of wood are removed , people can see there is only one single wood in the original painting. Moreover, the professor says one recent discovery finds that another paint of Remandt's self-portrait with a hat is made from the same wood with as the painting of the woman. Therefore, the painting discussed in the reading reading text and the lectue is indeed made by Remandt, according to the professor. 同样建议提一提reading部分。

听力没有问题，个别地方注意简洁就好。

kchszy061ban

TPO 4
The author of the reading text talks about evidence of dinosaurs were endotherms. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture says that many scientists have problems about the author's conclusion. They do not think these evidence can prove dinasaurs were endotherms.

First, the professor explains that the climate when dinasaurs lived was warmer that today. So, dinosaurs could live in the polar region. Also, they migrated to warmer places or hibrinated during cold seasons of the year. Thus, the polar dinosaurs evidence does not proves that dinosarus were endotherms.

Second, the professor says that dinosaurs had legs under their body in order to support their weight. By doing this, dinosaurs could grow into large size. And large size animals had lots of advantages at that time. Therefore, the running evidence in the reading text is not sufficient enough to prove that dinosaurs were endotherms.

Third, the professor admits it is true that dinosaurs had haversian canals. However, there were also thick growth rings on dinosaurs' bones. The growth rings indicated diansaurs growed slowly or even stoped growing during cool period of the year. In contrast, real endotherms growed quickly all around the year dispite the surrounding environment was warm or cool. In this case, dinosaurs were not endotherms as the author said in the reading text.

qianjun06

TPO 4
The author of the reading text talks about evidence of dinosaurs were endotherms. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture says that many scientists have problems about the author's conclusion. They do not think these evidence can prove dinasaurs were endotherms.

First, the professor explains that the climate when dinasaurs lived was warmer that today. So, dinosaurs could live in the polar region. Also, they migrated to warmer places or hibrinated during cold seasons of the year. Thus, the polar dinosaurs evidence does not proves that dinosarus were endotherms.

Second, the professor says that dinosaurs had legs under their body in order to support their weight. By doing this, dinosaurs could grow into large size. And large size animals had lots of advantages at that time. Therefore, the running evidence in the reading text is not sufficient enough to prove that dinosaurs were endotherms.

Third, the professor admits it is true that dinosaurs had haversian canals. However, there were also thick growth rings on dinosaurs' bones. The growth rings indicated diansaurs growed slowly or even stoped growing during cool period of the year. In contrast, real endotherms growed quickly all around the year dispite the surrounding environment was warm or cool. In this case, dinosaurs were not endotherms as the author said in the reading text.

差不多都齐了

kchszy061ban

7 13
As cities become densely populated, more and more people want to live in the countryside areas of the nation. The main reasons may be the less polutions and safer surroundings. However,being far away from the big cities also can lead several problems,such as inconveinent, live only with your family but not your relatives, and less available to different resources. Therefore, I believe that living in big cities can make people take care of their family members better.

The main problem to live in the countryside is that it will take you long time to your work places, because you are far away from the downtown areas of the cities. Countryside is always miles away from the cities. You can dirve or take public transportation to work, but all of these methods need more time than people who live in the cities. For example, if you lived in the countryside, you need to get up at six thirty, and then you prepare for the breakfast for your family, it will take you thirty minutes or more, then you eat your meal. After breakfast, you have to send you children to school, and then go to work. Things even go worse when there are heavy rain, snow, or on a windy day, drive to the cities become difficult, and it also take you longer time to go to work. If you are in traped in a traffic jam, you will be late for work.

Then, people tend to live with his/her relatives like grand parents or parents, not only with their children. living in countryside means you may live away with your relatives. Relatatives are always willing to help each other when one of them has some problems. Through this kind of help, relatives can improve their relationships and when they themselves have some difficulties, other relatives will help them. However, when people live in countryside alone without relativs, the chances to contact with their relatives decreased. And when they have some questions, like they want their parents to look after their children for one day. Things may be complex, the reason is that their parents need to drive a long way to get their children' home.

Also, countryside is far from the big cities, there are not so many supermarkers, shops, hospotals, schools and so forth. When people who live in countryside want to buy something which can not be found nearby, they need to go to the downtown areas to find what they want to buy. One of the serious situation is that if one of their family members have get some acute diseases, the amblances have to spend so much time one the way, which means that your family member suffers extra pain. If people live in the big cities, the amblances can arrive at their home quickly to treat the patient.

In conclusion, I think if people want to take care of their family member better, it is a more reasonable choice to live in the big cities than live in the countryside.

huluhulufei

The author of the reading text talks about evidence of（应为that， of后加名词形式） dinosaurs were endotherms. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture says that many scientists have problems about the author's conclusion（？？此处表意不明，have problems about 并不是LZ想说的文中的evidence有问题的意思，而是对evidence 有不理解的地方，或者困惑。LZ可将词换为：cast doubt on the author’s conclusion）. Theydo not think these evidence can prove（that） dinasaurs were endotherms(此句最好改为定语从句承接上句，语言应更简练些，可改为：who consider the evidence inconvincible. ).

First, the professor explains that the climate when dinasaurs lived was warmer that（笔误，考试时务必不要犯此错误，自己改）today. So, dinosaurs could live in the polar region（逻辑不对，不是因为更暖和所以恐龙能活在极地，而是因为更暖和所以体温可以不用恒定去维持生命特征）. Also, they migrated (lecture中是说即使在寒冷的月份里，恐龙也可以migrate 和hibernate，所以此处应加could) to warmer places or hibrinated （拼写错误）during cold seasons of the year. Thus, the polar dinosaurs evidence does not proves that dinosarus were endotherms.

Second, the professor says that dinosaurs had legs under their body in order to support their weight. By doing this, dinosaurs could grow into large size. And large size animals had lots of advantages at that time.（which is of great advantages,这句话直接用一个从句就解决了，简洁不拖沓）Therefore, the running evidence in the reading text is not sufficient enough to prove that dinosaurs were endotherms. 信息无缺失，语言贫瘠。可用从句连接各个句子，用词需更加精炼

Third, the professor admits it is true that dinosaurs had haversian canals. However, there were also thick growth rings on dinosaurs' bones. The growth rings indicated diansaurs growed slowly or even stoped （拼写错误）growing during cool period of the year. In contrast, real endotherms growed quickly all around the year dispite （用词有误，LZ想说无论吧，应为 no matter）the surrounding environmentwas warm or cool(直接为 it was cool or warm). In this case, dinosaurs were not endotherms as the author said in the reading text.



LZ 信息掌握很全面，不过表述不是很顺畅，用词和句式需要多多锤炼，加油！