kchszy061ban的作业贴

diyangyang

TPO 11
The author of the reading text talks about the negative effects of present people reading less literature. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture does not agree with the author. She admits that it is true that people nowadays read less then people in the past, but it does not mean that this trend has unfortunate effects for the reading public.

First, contrary to the argument in the reading text that other forms of reading materials can not offer intellectual stimulation, the professor says that other forms of literature is equally meaningful. For example, other books about science, history, and political analysis are of high qualities. These books also can stimulate people' imaginations. According to the professor, no only(没见过这种用法啊…) literature is good for people.

Second, the lecture refutes the idea that television or music is trivial and has lowered the standard of culture in general. The professor explain(explains) that musics(music不可数吧~) and movies are good and beneficial to people. Listening to a music or watching a good movie will not lowered(lower) the standard of culture. The world is changing. These new forms are more direct than reading books.

Third, the professor also offers a different view with the author of the passage that present readers are the reason of less good literature. The real reason is that modern writers make their work difficult to understand. Readers in the past would not like to read these books either.

kch的综合还是一如既往的好捏~~
而且错的单词少了很多~~~但是动词形式还是要注意~~
ps ：羊羊明天考试捏就不补作业了...懒一下....kch不用替羊羊改咯呢谢谢~~~
加油~~~

易雨水巷

20120720
绿色为总结 蓝色为建议或意见  红色为错误 黄色为精彩
Do you agree or disagree,if you need to discuss upsetting orcontroversial problems with others you will use email or text messaging or youwould like to use telephone or voice messaging?

When it comes to the question of how to discuss upsetting or controversialproblems with others, people' choices diversified (好像是及物动词 +are diversified).Some people prefer to use telephone or voice-messaging because of theirconvenience and instant.(这里应该用“，”就行，后面的while毕竟不能单独成句，只能做从句) While others would like to use e-mail or text messaging to revealtheir congitation (cogitation?) and preciseness.Generally speaking, upsetting or controversial problems often relate to serious topics.Therefore, from my point of view as a student, using e-mail or text messagingis a better choice to deal with this type of problems.

To begin with, comapred（compared）with speaking, writinggives people more time to do researches, to think deeply and thus can betterexplain their ideas. When confrontingwith upsetting or controversial problems, people need more time to copewith it. Writing e-mail or text massaging thus are the proper way to solve thistype of problems. On the contrary, using telephone or voice-messaging would causemore questions because of misunderstandings. For example, once our teachersgave us an assignment to talk about after class. The topic was whether moneyand power were the symbol of success. And we began immediately when the classwas over. However, none of us could presuade (persuade) othersto admit that they were right by only talking with each other. The reason wasthat the topic was so controversial. Also we did not have enough time to thinkabout it. Then, our teacher told us to write about the same topic, to arrangethe articles next week. Things became so much better next week when we broughtour writings to the classroom and read them. Thus, when confronting with someproblematic questions, it would be better to use writting (writing) toexpress you (your 其实我建议换成our)  ideas.
(感觉例子略长，可以简化一下，例如Andwe began immediately when the class was over.这句雨巷觉得不必要的)
Moreover, using e-mail or text messaging can avoid some disadvantages thatraised from telephone or voice messaging. People tend to behave more emotionalwhen they use telephone or voice messaging than writting (writing). Their daily communicatins （communication） with others are speaking, so they adapt tothis type of way to express their thinking and emotions. When using audiomethods to express themselves, they will inevitablely (inevitably) band theiremotions in their expression. （觉得这两句有待商酌/润色。。。。。）On the contrary (用过了，可以换成by contrast),when peope（people）write something, theytend to be more fair and cool-headed. So, (可以换成As a result/ consequence, consequently, therefore，hence, thus等等) when discussing upsetting or controversial problems, writting (writing) isa way to avoid personal prejudice in some degree.

Finally, writing is easy to arrange after the discussion ending.(我觉得略微别扭， 是不是去掉ending？) The process of discussion is important, as well as the conlusion (conclusion) ofit.  (我突然想可以不可以用So it is the same with the conclusion.) Ever from letter had been created, huamn (human)began to use them to rember(remember  其实 record会不会更好一点儿) things, to show theirthought, and to communicate wiht (with) others. Most of the materials used in modern classes relate to writing, so ((可以换成As a result/consequence, consequently, therefore等等)) , people arefamiliar with paperbased materials （没看懂） and have many ways to process the information of them.Furthermore, writting(writing, 可以换成typing, text等吧) is explicitand abstract. Therefore, it is easy to organize.

Of course, speaking is simultaneous and people can use oral presentationwhenever they have some good ideas about the problems. However, from what hasbeen discussed above, I can safely draw the conclusion that the benefits ofe-mail or text messaging are so many. So, using writting (writing) is athoughtful choice. （不知道用since的既然之意会不会好一点， I can safely draw the conclusion thatwriting is a thoughtful choice since it owns so many benefits。）
To kch,
总的来说不错的。就是雨巷的个人意见比较多，还望kch不要被雨巷吓到。
1.字数充足。我灰常佩服能在30分钟打出这么多字的人\(^o^)/~
2.注意一下拼写错误了，雨巷这个毛病也会常严重。一是平常练习的时候注意，另外就是要留出点儿时间来检查了。
3.我觉得例子的逻辑性上还要再润色一下吧。感觉第一个太详细了。第二个逻辑上有点儿问题。。。。。。
加油啊加油↖(^ω^)↗

kchszy061ban

7月21日 2010.2.13NA   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In a team, those who do not accept other’s criticism cannot succeed. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

When it comes to the question of whether people can succeed if they do not accept other's criticism in a team, different people hold different opinions. Some people think those who do not accept other's criticism can succeed because of their confidence and courage. While others do not believe people who do not accept other's criticism can succeed as these people can not realize their mistakes then they lose the opportunities to change their mistakes. Personally, from my point of view as a student, and based on what I have learnt from others, I agree with the later choice. My reasons are as follows.

To begin with, people who can not accept other's criticism will fail because they do not realize their questions in the team. If they continue to make the same mistakes again and again, other members of the team may not trust them next time. For example, when I was in high school five years ago, one day my science teacher told the students to finish one experiment in groups. There were five students in my group, and Mike was one of our group members. When it came to one step of the experiment, Mike made the same mistake one day after another. The reason was that he did not understand the knowledge of this step. All of other group members told him that he had make a mistake but he did not accept our advice. He believed that he was correct and continued to insist to do the experiment as what he thought about.
Then, other members of our team decided to divide our group to two part and Mike was in the other part alone. It is obvious that Mike failed in the end. As you can see, one need to accept others advices if they want to succeed.

Moreover, another disadvantage of reject other's criticism is that this person can not work well with other members in the same team. This point is easy to understand. Once a team member always think he/she is right and others are all wrong, then no one will want to cooperate with him/her. Such as when people playing football in the playground. All of the members need to cooperate with other members in order to succeed. Then if one member makes a mistake, other members will be impacted by the member who makes mistakes. If the football player continue to make the same mistake, then other members will not pass him/her the ball any more. In this situation, this player can not succeed without other teammates' help.

Finally, people who do not accept other's criticism will lose opportunities to success. If people do not accept other people' criticism, they will lose the chances to contact with others. Thus then other people have some information, they would not want to share these information with these people. People incline to do something with others who have similar background and want to change when others point out these mistakes for them.

Of course, sometimes other's criticism may not be correct. Also other's criticism may be based on prejudice. However, most of the time, other's criticism is beneficial to help us realize our mistakes. Therefore, from what I have discussed above, I firmly believe that people who can not accept other's criticism cannot succeed.

kchszy061ban

7月22日 2010.3.6NASome people believe that people should follow their ambitious dreams and goals even they are not realistic; others believe that people should focus on achieving realistic goals. What’s your opinion and why? Use specific reasons to support your answer.

When it comes to the question of which goal to choose-realistic goals or unrealistic goals, different people hold different opinons. Some people prefer to do something that others never imagined before and just follow their heart even they are not realistic in others views, while other people are more practical and they wouuld love to focus on achieving realistic goals. Personally, from my point of view as a student, also based on what I have leart from others, I agree with the first point. My reasons are as follows.

To begin with, following ambitous dreams and goals makes people feel fulfilled. People incline to do things which they interest in and they are more excite when they follow their dreams. For example, when I was in primary school, one of my classmates said that he wanted to be the chairman of China. All of other students laughed at him, they thought his dream would never come ture under corrent situation. However, he firmly believed that he could be able to accomplish his dream some day. He worked hard every day and learnt a lot from other people who were officiers before. This made him feel fulfilled in his daily life. Finally, he became a goverment officer after he greduated from university. He told me his life was meaningful as he became nearer and nearer to his dream.

Moreover, the development of the world needs people who are courage enough to persue ambitious dreams and goal that are not realistic. This point is obvious. Just hundreds of years ago, people at that time might think fly in the air as a dream which would never come ture. While present people can use planes and also spacecrafts. These instruments help people both travel through the air and transport people to the outer space such as the moon. In this case, new ideas or dreams is needed by society and human development.

Finally, achieving dreams makes one's life colorful. Can you endure your daily life is full of realistic goals? When you come to your workplace, what you think about is only money and how to finish your work. When you come home, the only topic of your family is realistic goal. All of these are so boring. When we focus on achieving realistic goals, life is like a one way street. On the contrary, dreams bring us imagiantions and make our lives more colorful. I remember that when I was little, my grandfather told me about some mysterious stories about the sky. Such as the story about MilkyWay, it was created by some gods lived in the outer space. I wondered about the story and wanted to learn more about it when I grow up. This experience make my childhood colorful.

Of couse, people have to achieve realistic goals in order to survive. These goals are the foundation of people’ daily life such as houses and food. However, persuing our dreams and goals help us feel fulfilled and also contribute to the progress of our society. Thus, I prefer to follow my heart and concentrate my energy to make my dreams come true.

huluhulufei

7月21日 2010.2.13NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In a team, those who do not accept other’s criticism cannot succeed. Use specific reasons to support your answer.

When it comes to the question of whether people can succeed if they do not accept other's criticism in a team, different people hold different opinions. Some people think those who do not accept other's criticism can succeed because of their confidence and courage. While others do not believe people who do not accept other's criticism can succeed as these people can not realize their mistakes then they lose the opportunities to change(?? 换个词，correct) their mistakes（此句可精简：While others hold the opposite opinion because they believe that people will miss the opportunities to correct their mistakes if they turn a deaf ear to other’s opinions）. Personally, from my point of view as a student, and based on what I have learnt from others, I agree with the later(应为： latter ) choice（好吗？还是用one 即可？）. My reasons are as follows.开篇有些模版的感觉哩~

To begin with, people who can not accept other's criticism will fail because they do not realize their questions（歧义！questions 改为 problems） in the team. If they continue to make the same mistakes again and again(over and over agian), other members of the team may not trust them next time. For example, when I was in high school five years ago, one day my science teacher told the students to finish one(an) experiment in groups. There were five students in my group, and Mike was one of our group members. When it came to one step of the experiment, Mike made the same mistake one day after another(??? 是否应为： like what he did days before? Mike 又犯了以前的错误？？使这个意思么？？). The reason was that he did not understand the knowledge of this step. All of other group members told him that he had make a mistake（told him about his mistake）but he did not accept our advice. He believed that he was correct and continued to insist to do the experiment as what he thought about.
Then, other members of our team decided to divide our group to(into) two parts and Mike was in the other part alone. It is obvious that Mike failed in the end. As you can see, one need to accept others advices if they want to succeed.观点明确，举例恰当。不过 kch应该精炼句子，否则例子太冗长~feifei试着修改如下： For example, I used to finish an experiment with my group members in high school, and Mike was our team member. He made same mistakes over and over again on one step of the experiment, which was his responsibility. Though we had told him times about his problems, however, he turned a deaf ear to it. So finally, we decided to divide the group into two parts, one of which was Mike himself alone. As you can see, he failed in the end. In this way, it’s of importance to listen to other’s advice to improve one’s own ability.

Moreover, another disadvantage of reject (rejecting) other's criticism is that this person can not work well with other members in the same team. This point is easy to understand. Once a team member always think he/she is right and others are all wrong, then no one will want to cooperate with him/her. Such as when people playing football in the playground (Take the soccer team for example. 这样是不是更简练一些？). All of the members need to cooperate with other members in order to succeed. Then if one member（player） makes a mistake, other members(players) will be impacted by the member(him) who makes mistakes. If the football player (he) continues to make the same mistake, then other members will not pass him/her the ball any more (anymore). In this situation, this player can not succeed without other teammates' help.观点明确，距离恰当~ 楼主注意指代。

Finally, people who do not accept other's criticism will lose opportunities to success. If people do not accept other people' criticism, they will lose the chances to contact with others. Thus then other people have some information（Even if others have useful information）, they would not want to share these information with these people. People incline to do something with others who have similar background and want to change(何意？？？) when others point out these mistakes for them. 这段跟前两段在内容上没有什么特别的差别那？？？是不是楼主第三个论点没有彻底思考清楚？？？

Of course, sometimes other's criticism may not be correct. Also other's criticism may be based on prejudice. However, most of the time, other's criticism is beneficial to help us realize our mistakes. Therefore, from what I have discussed above, I firmly believe that people who can not accept other's criticism cannot succeed.结尾扣题，但略显冗余



竟然没有发现一个错别字！！Kch 长进了好多啊~~~ 不过其他的问题不能放过！归结如下：

1 冗余。之前并没有发现kch 有这个问题，这篇文章是怎么啦？其实开头就该精简一些，到了第二段，实在是太明显了！感觉有些口语化，不像是思考过能写出来的东西。

2 论点。这个是硬伤。第三个论点完全是补充的作用，其实就是前两个观点的重复。其实有很多其他的论断的，如果考试的时候来不及想，完全可以从反面入手：如，坚持自己的观点是很好的，但是，有可能偏离方向，导致离目标越来越远~~

3 指代。这个问题在第三段里。它可以和句子精简结合在一起。若句子精简了，指代也会更明晰一些。



总之，没有错别字很好很好！！撒花~~~不过kch 的其他问题更不容忽视啊！！！！这个比错别字更加严重！！！加油！！！！

kchszy061ban

TPO 12
The author of the reading text talks about several reasons that the subject of one painting is Jane Austen. In contrast, the professor in the lectue does not agree with the author, he says that none of the evidences in the reading are convincing.

First, Austen's family authoried the letter seventy years after Austen's death. As a result, no body of her family members had seen Austen. This directly contradict its counterpart in the reading text.

Second, unlike what has been said in the reading text that the portraint dipicted Austen, the professor argues that its subject might be one of Austen's distance female relatives. Austen's relatives resembled her fact to some extent. This casts doubt on the evidence in the reading text.

Third, in contrast to what the author states in the passage that the style of the portrait links to Ozias Humphrey, the professor points out that the girl in the painting was younger than Austen at that time. The reason of the professor is that one businessman in London began to sell convass to when Austen was twenty-seven years old. Also, the girl in this painting is unlikely to be Austen herself. Thus, this portrait could not be Austen, according to the professor.

TPO 13
The author of the reading text talks about several disadvantages of private collection of fossils. On the contrary, the professor does not agree with the author, she says that the advantages of private collection are outweigh the disadvantages.

First, the professor says that commercial hunting of fossils give public great exposure to the fossils, not less. Private collectors can sold their fossils to some low-income public institutions such as school and library. This will make the fossils display to public more frequently than before. This directly contradicts its counterpart in the passage.

Second, unlike what has said that scientists will lose chance to see some important fossils, the professor states that scientists may not miss anything important about these fossils. The reason is that it is scientists who examine and text those valuable fossils and identify them. Thus, those precious fossils must pass through scientists first before they are collected by private collectors.

Third, the professor points out one fact that there are not enough university operations and scientific institutions to discover the fossils which hiden underground. It is better to unearth these fossils with some slight damages than let them undiscovered in the ground.

hansxiao7

When it comes to the question of which goal to choose-realistic goals or unrealistic goals, different people hold different opinions. Some people prefer to do something that others never imagined before and just follow their heart even they are not realistic in others views, while other people are more practical and they would love to focus on achieving realistic goals. Personally, from my point of view as a student, also based on what I have leart from others, I agree with the first point. My reasons are as follows. (自我感觉如果只是陈述观点不要写这么长 如果要是想加长首段 可以在观点前加入背景介绍 这样更好）

To begin with, following ambitous dreams and goals makes people feel fulfilled. People incline to do things which they interest in and they are more excite(d)when they follow their dreams. For example, when I was in primary school, one of my classmates said that he wanted to be the chairman of China. All of other students laughed at him, they thought his dream would never come ture under current (感觉这个词不是很好 可是说 situation at that time)situation. However, he firmly believed that he could be able to accomplish his dream some day. He worked hard every day and learnt a lot from other people who were officiers before. This made him feel fulfilled in his daily life. Finally, he became a goverment officer after he greduated(graduated) from university. He told me his life was meaningful as he became nearer and nearer to his dream.(我还以为真是主席呢 哈哈）

Moreover, the development of the world needs people who are courage(courageous?) enough to persue ambitious dreams and goal that are not realistic. This point is obvious. Just hundreds of years ago, people at that time might think fly in the air as a dream which would never come ture(true). While present people can use planes and also spacecrafts. These instruments help people both travel through the air and transport people to the outer space such as the moon. In this case, new ideas or dreams is needed by society and human development.

Finally, achieving dreams makes one's life colorful. Can you endure your daily life is full of realistic goals? When you come to your workplace, what you think about is only money and how to finish your work. When you come home, the only topic of your family is realistic goal. All of these are so boring. When we focus on achieving realistic goals, life is like a one way street. On the contrary, dreams bring us imagiantions and make our lives more colorful. I remember that when I was little, my grandfather told me about some mysterious stories about the sky. Such as the story about Milky Way, it was created by some gods lived in the outer space. I wondered about the story and wanted to learn more about it when I grow up. This experience make my childhood colorful. (建议把这一段和上一段进行调换 从个人到社会 这样更有层次感 另外感觉这个神话传说的例子不是很切题 文章是两种目标的比较 虽然是叫dream 但是这个神话传说。。。最好换一下吧亲）

Of course, people have to achieve realistic goals in order to survive. These goals are the foundation of people’ daily life such as houses and food. However, persuing our dreams and goals help us feel fulfilled and also contribute to the progress of our society. Thus, I prefer to follow my heart and concentrate my energy to make my dreams come true.这篇作文很难写啊 不过要加强两点 一个是例子的选择要慎重 第二个是继续加强打字争取不要错别字（虽然很难。。。我也做不到） KCH继续加油 哈哈

sherryzhangh

TPO 修改，请看附件。谢谢

huluhulufei

TPO 13
The author of the reading text talks about several disadvantages of private collection of fossils. On the contrary, the professor does not agree with the author, she says（又出现两个谓语句子并列而无关联词的状况了~ 此处用： saying 即可） that the advantages of private collection are（应去掉） outweigh the disadvantages.

First, the professor says that commercial hunting of fossils gives public great exposure to the fossils, not less. Private collectors can sold（应为：sell 错别字！) their fossils to some low-income public institutions such as school and library. This will make the fossils display to public more frequently than before. This directly contradicts its counterpart in the passage.

Second, unlike what has said that scientists will lose chance to see some important fossils, the professor states that scientists may not miss anything important about these fossils. The reason is that it is scientists who examine and text those valuable fossils and identify them. Thus, those precious fossils must pass through scientists first before they are collected by private collectors. 这段很好~~~

Third, the professor points out one fact that there are not enough university operations and scientific institutions to discover the fossils which hiden（错别字！）underground. It is better to unearth these fossils with some slight damages than let them undiscovered in the ground.这段意思是对，不过最好说得全一些。尤其是后面那个 slight damages，这里不知是从何而来的，kch需要给个铺垫。或者把原文的论点说下，或者是把 professor 的哪个outweigh 说下。





Kch 又有两个错别字了呦~全文并无大碍，观点明确信息全，就是最后一段再补充补充就更好了！！加油！！！

kchszy061ban

TPO 14
The author of the reading text talks about several advantages of salvage logging. In contrast, the professor in the lecture does not agree with the author's opinion, and she says that these benefits are questionable.

First, unlike to what has said in the text that the removing of dead trees will help forest to recover, the professor argues that this may cause damages to the development of the forest. She states that the decomposition of dead trees can enrich the soil, and provide nutrient to the trees in the forest. If the dead trees are all removed, new trees may lack necessary nutrient for growth.

Second, the author says that removing of dead trees helps to reduce insects infestation, while the professor points out that this is not the real situation. The spruce bark beetle have lived in the froest for hundreds of years and they did not cause big damage. Furthermore, decaying wood attracts birds and other insects which are beneficial to the healthy development of the forest. More importantly, removing rotting wood would do more harm than insects do. Therefore, the benefit of salvage logging is unsounded in this case.

Third, the professor explain that removing dead trees of some severely damaged forest needs helocopters and other expensive vehicles. So it is expensive to remove these dead trees. Also, the economic benefits of salvage logging is small and temporary. Meanwhile, the workers are most coming from other places,  but not the native communities, because these workers have more experiences and trainning. As a result, the benefits offered in the reading text is totally rejected by the professor.