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sherryzhangh · 发表于 2012-7-7 17:19:45

it is more important to choose friends that 更能 have fun with than to choose friends that will help you when you need them..

Some people think choose fun friend it’s more important than the friend is needed, Because life is short and miserable, choose fun friend can help us bring more happiness than the needed. What I am thinking is needed friend is like every day meal. You cannot leave with out them. But fun friend is like after meal desert, if you have them in your life it become more colorful than ever. Those are the things you can’t live without it. Therefore I think fun friend and needed friend are equally important.

For example, When you want to solve an difficulty issue, you probably want a friend who can help than a friend who is funny and capable of make jokes about it, anyway, the priority of you at the moment is solve the issue not complaint or laugh about it. It only can make things worth when you bring a funny friend to a disaster.

But when you are ready to having fun after the issue was cleaned. You probably want to get a fun friend to have a drink; of course you should bring your needed helped friend with you to celebrate. Fun friend can help you to lose pressure, get ready for the new challenge. So in some level they also “helped” you when you needed to comfort yourself. Other than helping you in the issues, they help you tomake you a happier person.

In a summarize, what kind of friend is more important than other depends on the situation, But friends is not a thing, they are human being, and they made our life more meaningful and enjoyable, we should not label them or classified them who is important than other.

annyhelijun · 发表于 2012-7-8 09:09:22

it is more important to choose friends that 更能 have fun with than to choose friends that will help you when you need them..

Some people think choose choosing fun friend it’s more important than the friend is needed, Because life is short and miserable, choose fun friend choosing fun with friend can help us bring more happiness than the needed. What I am thinking is needed friend is like every day meal. You cannot leave with out without them. But fun friend is like after meal desert, if you have them in your life it become more colorful than ever. Those are the things you can’t live without it. Therefore I think fun friend and needed friend are equally important.

For example, When you want to solve an difficulty issue, you probably want a friend who can help than a friend who is funny and capable of make jokes about it, anyway, the priority of you at the moment is to solve the issue not complaint or laugh about it. It only can make things worth when you bring a funny friend to a disaster.

But when you are ready to having fun after the issue was cleaned. You probably want to get a fun friend to have a drink; of course you should bring your needed helped friend with you to celebrate. Fun friends can help you to lose pressure, get ready for the new challenge. So in some level they also “helped” you when you needed to comfort yourself. Other than helping you in the issues, they help you tomake you a happier person.

In a summarize, what kind of friend is more important than other depends on the situation, But friends is not a thing, they are human being, and they made our life more meaningful and enjoyable, we should not label them or classified them who is important than other.

总体来说写的还可以的，但是觉得字数有些不够，内容还没有展开，请以后多加注意！！

sherryzhangh · 发表于 2012-7-8 16:50:39

One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do to ask you for help or to find a professional tutor for help?

When it comes to some one should get help from me or a professional tutor with some schoolwork, It should also depends on the issue that he is facing whether or not I have the ability to solve. I always give them the help when they need with all my effort. Cause helping others can also make myself learn new things. But on the other hand, if I can’t help at all, he probably should find a professional tutor to deal it.

Take the recent schoolwork of one of my classmate as an example, He need to write a report about how the parentstakes whether or not the child should have an ipad, for organize this report he should do amount of interviews with young parents, and he only have 1 day to prepare all the interviews, So he come to me for help, in that case we worked separately can collect more interview sources in order to have a integrated report. For that kind of helping it’s not wise to ask a professional tutor to help, They might have thousands of other important things to do and it’s inappropriate to let a tutor to do a research job.

When should he or her come to a professional tutor for help instead of me, let' take another example, One time one of my classmates needs to do a schoolwork involved with lab experiment on one of the brand new field. if he came to me for help, I would only have the experience as much as he does. It would be impossible for me to give him any creative support, In that case he probably should find a professional tutor to guide, The tutor can help him with his experience and he can also get help from other related professor as long as any new incidents happened. Which for sure would be more helpful than me.

In Summary, it’s really depends on the issues that we facing. But it always welcome when classmates comes to me for helping.

sherryzhangh · 发表于 2012-7-8 16:53:37

多谢指教！共勉！：）

sherryzhangh · 发表于 2012-7-9 22:30:21

7月9日

Do you agree with the viewpoint that the most important investment of a company is to improve the skills of its employees?

When it comes to the most important investment of a company people tend to various. Some believes improve the skill of its employees is the priority of the company. While others asserted that invest in high tech equipment will fast the productivity of the company. Some claimed that advertising will made the company well known. In my point of view, those of the strategies are all essential to a company, what is the most important invest it’s really depends on the situation of the company.

What makes a company successfully, perfect product? Indeed. But let's drink the water without forgets the well digger. It’s the employee who made the irresistible products. In another word. Employee is the basic of the cooperate. When a company wants to be strong and competitive. The human resources should be the key of the success. To cultivate a group of talented and loyalty employee should be the first priority of one company. Take the example of my current company, when the new hire onboard, company will provide a list of training program for them, it’s a big plus for some new-graduated, cause it does a great deal of advantage for them to grow and have a better career in the future. And moreover, because of this, the company attracts even more of the talents coming, it not only buildup a positive cycle and environment for the whole cooperate. It also established a solid foundation for the company to develop and grow bigger and stronger.

However it’s not wise to neglect other aspects of the company that needs to invest. Take one of the beer factories as an example, in my hometown, there is a beer factory covered a huge amount of acres, they have big production space. But their equipment it’s a little out of date, to become more competitive than other, the first thing they need to do it’s invest the money on the equipment to enhance their productivity ability. And moreover what if they could reach the expected productivity, and they have tons of beer in the storage house. Now their priority obviously it’s advertising it and sells it. So invest in advertising seems the right thing to do now.

To sum up, what is the most important invest for company should be depends on the varioussituations and certain period of time of the company’s development phase.

DanielleZ · 发表于 2012-7-10 18:11:12

Dear Sherry, 改完啦~文章的两个例子举得非常合适，很自然。
我觉得两边好处都写的文章挺考查功力的，所以我一般不敢轻易尝试。但是sherry这篇写的挺好的。
比较清楚。里面有点小问题，我标记出来了。加油哈~

When it comes to the mostimportant investment of a company,people tend to various opinions. Some believes improve the skill of its employeesis the priority of the company. While others asserted that invest in high techequipment will fast the productivity of the company. Some claimed thatadvertising will made the company wellknown. In my point of view, those of the strategies are all essential toa company, what is the mostimportant invest it’s really depends on the situation of the company.

Whatmakes a company successfully, perfect product? Indeed. But let's drink the waterwithout forgets the well digger. It’s theemployee who made the irresistible products. In another(other) word. Employee is the basic(basis) of the cooperate. When a company wantsto be strong and competitive. The(,the这两句话应该是从句吧？ ) human resourcesshould be the key of the success. To cultivate a group of talented and loyaltyemployee should be the first priority of one company. Take the example of my currentcompany, when the newhire(我查了一下，hire好像没有雇员的意思。如果确实能这样用，请忽略我这句话哈~) onboard, company willprovide a list of training programs for them, it’s a big plus for some new-graduated, cause(过于口语化，建议用because) it does a great deal of advantage for them togrow and have a better career in the future. And moreover, because of this, thecompany attracts even more of the talents coming, it not only buildup a positivecycle and environment for the whole cooperate. It(建议改成but) also established a solid foundation for the company to develop and growbigger and stronger.

Howeverit’s not wise to neglect other aspects of the company that needs to invest. Takeone of the beer factories as an example, in myhometown, there is a beer factory covered a huge amount of acres, they have big production space. But theirequipment it’s a little out of date(我觉得这两句话可以用定语从句写，会简洁一点),to become more competitive than other, the first thing they need to do it’s(is to) invest the money on the equipments toenhance their productivity ~~ability~~. ~~And~~ moreover what if they could reachthe expected productivity, and theyhave tons of beer in the storage house(仓库一般写的是warehouse). Now their priority obviously it’s advertisingit and sells it. So invest(investing)in advertising seems the right thing to do now.(我觉得这句话可以不加,或者写成to do the next step也行)

Tosum up, what is the most importantinvest(investment) for company should be depends on the varioussituations and certain period oftime of the company’s development phase.

sherryzhangh · 发表于 2012-7-11 10:18:04

多谢鼓励,我其实也很困惑,我到底是应该偏执的同意一种意见,还是两边都阐述一下, 我的思维方式倾向于两边都作阐述,可是很多人都说老美倾向于选择鲜明的立场, 然后举例论证, 两边都阐述给人一种没有立场的感觉. 困惑ING呀

sherryzhangh · 发表于 2012-7-11 10:34:59

7月10日自我感觉严重跑题,虎头蛇尾...
Do you agree with the following statement that patience is usually not a good strategy, we should take action now rather than later

When it comes to encounter a difficulty issue come people tend to take action immediately while some others prefer to wait a little bit, Be patience to figure out what is the core of the issue, then take actions, for me, I think what is the best strategy is really depend on the situations.

To begin with when an issue came out, usually is not the superficial thing we see, the cause of it might hidden under the superficial phenomenon, what we need to do it’s look through it and find out what is the truth behind the vile, For doing that we need to be patience and thought it through. Take the business strategy as an example, One of the company want to merge and acquisition with another company, although the selling company claim themselves in a perfect asset and financial status quo, But as the buyer need to invest a huge amount of money and it might be put them into a dangerous situation, So they need to be patience and finish the all the relative Due diligent and valuation, then make the final decision, In a word, when it comes to business, patience and then take actions becomes a reasonable procedures.

However, sometimes take the actions right away according to the instinct can prevent the catastrophic happens; It’s like somebody punch you at the face and your basic instinct ion is to shy away. This action should be taken right away otherwise you will be ending up in the hospital. Take the against the terrorism as an example. If the security has one hesitant about their judge, The London subway exploded would be happened and thousands of victims will be buried in it. Under this circumstance efficient action will be the good strategy. Some opportunities are like a meteor flying, if you missed it, you never will get it again.

In sum up, speed and reasonable judgment and take action accordingly would be the best strategy for all.

sherryzhangh · 发表于 2012-7-11 23:00:11

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that it is good for children to have similar jobs with you.

Traditionally, people tend to assert it is sagacious if the children can inherit the business from their father, which means have similar job. Master’s son will still be master, iron crafts man’s son incline to be iron crafts man too. Because life environment does a great deal in forming people’s character and interests. They are easy to be attracted by the things that they are familiar with. However, I still think children may have different interest despite all the convenience the father provided.

To begin with, Children are individuals who capable of possess independent willingness. They have their own will to live their own life. They are tending to desire the things, which their father incapably to achieve or the things that they are lack of during their childhood. To have a similar job with their father isn’t satisfied with such desires. Take the French King Louis 16 as an example. His strong personal will is to became a lock man, he has significant interests in locks and so indulged himself into the lock world that he lost his country. What a tragedy. He could be a happen lock man instead of loser king.

Moreover, The children lives in a dynamic world, they encounter all kindsof things and events everyday, some willsow a seed in their heart and influence for the rest of their life. Take the famous movie director Woody Allen as an example, he grow up in a conservativeJewish family, his father is a worker, they live in Brooklyn, when he was a child he often go the movie theater watch movies, this could be the earliest inspiration for him to become a great movie director. And it’s really hasnothing to do with his father, what his father really did is give him life and raising him up.

Admittedly, genes also play a significant deal of role in this matters, like father, like sons, father can provideconveniences, experiences to their children which make the path easier for them to adventure, they might accomplish the goal their parents never be able to achieve. Nevertheless, it’s still depends on the children whether or not they are willing to take this path.

In conclusion, I tend to disagree the children should have the similar job with parents. It’s all about the willingness of the children.

sherryzhangh · 发表于 2012-7-13 10:27:37

7月12日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement that colleges or universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.

When it come to graduate season, youcould always see youngsters dress up properly to running in different companies for job hunting, for some who realized the manner of interview and understand the work filed better, It’s undoubting they will get the favorable of HR, However, Not everyone who just came into the work field understand that. It seems becomes relatively important for colleges and universities to offer such courses to prepare students for a better future.

To begin with, as more and more youngster have the access to apply universities education, which means a single job will have more than you could imaging’s qualified candidates apply for that. The low demanding and high providing make this competition severe. The university who offer the students better prepare courses will definitely improve their competition capability. Take the university I went for example. I was major in English Tourism, and it’s not even a very popular major compare with financial and media. But our department dean arranges a list of course that help to understand each industrial’s character and what kind of talent they really pursuing for now, which significantly help us to open our eyes and minds to understand better. In the end, a lot of my classmates find the job they really loved even they were competing with some experiences candidates.

In addition, even after the candidates get the job, it will benefits too if the universities offers more course of preparation. In some level, Universities or colleges graduates are more pensionable compare with the experienced candidates. This advantage makes the company willing to give them opportunities to develop themselves. And with the passionate and the experience they get from the university and company, they might be able to create a miracle.

Admittedly, colleges or universities prepare class will only help students in some level, it’s not like a mysteries pill after you took everything will be fine, the students have to really take this seriously and work hard on it.

In conclusion, It’s does great deal a help if the students can apply it properly. The opportunities always favor those who better prepared.

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