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The reading passage explores the issues of how critics casting doubts about the Chevalier De Seingalt's memoir's accuracy. The author lists three main doubts towards the memoir. However, the professor holds opposite opinions regarding to the accuracy of the memoir.

To start with, the reading reasons that Chevalier is very wealthy in Switzerland, and yet he borrowed money from merchant, which is a contradiction in the memoir. On the contrary, the professor claims that Chevalier indeed is as rich as he said in the book. Because he was into parties and gambling’s so that he needs loads of cash. What he possesses is asset which need to be sold and more time to be transferred into cash. While he was waiting for the cash it is highly possible he could borrow money from merchant.

Secondly, the reading also is skeptical about the accuracy of the conversation between Chevalier and Voltaire, whom is a famous writer. However, the professor states that Chevalier tried everything he can remember refer to Voltaire. Given that Voltaire was used to live with Chevalier for a while. Moreover, Chevalier consulted the relatively journals and diaries when he was writing the memoir. Therefore, it is highly accurate actually.

At last, the reading also disapproves the way that Chevalier escapes from the prison of Venice. And they assuming he bribed the jail workers instead of using a piece of metal to make a hole in the ceiling and escape from it. However, the professor argues back by citing the evidence that the document of the prison, after Chevalier escape, they have to repair their ceiling.

sherryzhangh

8月30日

It's moreimportant for government to spend money to build art museums and musicperformance center than to build recreational facilities (such as swimmingpool, playground).

When it comes to the questionof whether government should build art museums and music performance center orrecreational facilities such as swimming pool and playground. We need tounderstand what is the difference between them. Art museum and music center areculture leisure facilities; swimming pool and playground are sports leisurefacilities. Needless to both of them are very important for the development ofthe city. Therefore, the government should allocate the money wisely regardingto the building of such facilities.

On one hand, Art museum andmusic performance center plays a vital role for cultivating peoples’ aestheticalabilities, bring more cultural atmosphere to the city. Such as Louvre in Paris,Metropolitan Museum of Art in New York City, Golden Hall in Vienna etc. notonly benefiting the local people who could enjoy the fantastic art andmusicals, but also the entire world can appreciate the art works. Moreover, itwill stimulate the tourism industrial thus contributing to the local economy,producing more jobs for local labors. But we should be aware that art museumand music center are all costing a lot of financial budgets for the localgovernment. Admittedly, It is unlikely any modern museums can compare with theold historical ones. However, It is not a one day job, Government should investit gradually according to the practical city plan.

On the other hand,recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playground are so close tothe citizens. Every one could benefits from it. As the modern societiesdeveloped, Office work are dominated by computers and cubical, people have tosit in their position all day long, no chance to stretch out. If some goodswimming pools or playground near the office or home is built, people can doexercise more conveniently, Therefore, they could build a healthy body. Moreover,it will be good for the neighborhoods and social community centers to build aharmony society. Take my neighborhood as an example, I lived near a city park,everyday, it is full of people from the neighborhoods, people dancing, singing,playing Tai ji in the park in the morning. It is good for the older people whocan spare their retirement leisure time with their park friends. Moreimportantly, they could keep a healthy body by exercise in the park.  

In conclusion, culturefacilities and sports facilities are equally important for the citiesdevelopment. Therefore, the government should make practical city plan andspend the fiscal budget wisely.

sherryzhangh

The reading passage and the professor both explore the issue of how to control the overpopulation of cane toad in Australia. The reading passage proposes three possible solutions. However, the professor casts serious doubts about it.

To start with, the reading passage suggests to build a national fence in order to control the cane toad expands to other area. On the contrary, the professor argues back by citing the evidence that cane toad usually travel by river or stream. Therefore, it will not necessarily prevent the spreading.

Secondly, the reading passage claims that it could be captured and destroyed by volunteers. The professor thinks it's highly possible solution, but it has drawbacks. Because of the young cane toad looks very similar with the local frogs. Therefore, the untrained volunteers may impair a lot of local frogs.

At last, the reading passage suggests to using disease-causing virus to control it. However, the professor is strongly against it. Because of it may bring a terrible ecological disaster. The cane toad often traveled by researchers or as pet. If we use virus to control the population in Australia, which will indirectly influence the original Africa cane toad bring devastation for the ecological environment.

sherryzhangh

8月31日

Do you agree or disagree, people whom go out from their village will bemore successful and happier than people who stay in their village?

In modern society, people tend to move around topursue further education or better career, or even just simply want to have adifferent life in big city. But is it really making them more successful andhappier than people who stay in their village hometown? Different people holdvarious thoughts. As far as I am concerned, I think both have it’s advantagesand drawbacks. My reasons are as followed.

On one hand, big city does offer magnificentadvantages. Metropolitans possess more opportunities and resources for capableindividuals to get succeed. Better universities and most advanced informationas well as bigger platform, those are the essential and strong advantages forsuccess. However, it is not necessarily make people happier. According to thepoll research, although big center seems to have all the superiorities, it’scompetition pressure as well as the growing environment health problem makehousehold an not so perfectly life. Actually, the bigger the city is, the lowerthe happiness index is. Take myself as an example, When I was leaving my smallhometown and went to University in the big city, I was exhilarated. I amplanning a big future for myself such as what kind of life I want to have andwhat kind of career I want to pursue. How ever after years goes, I could notsaying I am successfully and happier than if I still living in my hometown,it’s only different kind of experience, I am not regret that I left thehometown and went to big city. But I will definitely regretful if I haven’tdone anything to pursuing my dream.

On the other hand, as village development, it’s notnecessarily to be an obstacle for individual to become succeed. In the past,village due to it’s illiterate and conservative. It is really hard for peoplewho want to something different to be success and have better life. However, nowadays,as more educated students went back to their hometown and make it a betterplace, the village is quite different as before. Moreover, with the family andfamilies connects, actually, it will be a great advantages for individual toget succeed. Finally, less pressure and better environment makes the village anattractive place than the big city for some people. Take my brother as an example,instead of stay in the big city after graduation, he directly went back to ourhometown and started his own business. Now he is entrepreneur and has a happierfamily. Obviously, it is the right choice for him.  

In conclusion, both big city and small village havetheir own pro and cons, we should evaluate it according to individuals’ choice insteadof jump to the judgment rashly that big city life is more success and happierthan the small village life.

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8月31日 修改


Do you agree or disagree, people whom go out from their village will bemore successful and happier than people who stay in their village?

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In modern society, people tend to move around to pursue further education or better career, or even just simply want to have a different life in big city. But is it really making them more successful and happier than people who stay in their village hometown? Different people hold various thoughts. As far as I am concerned, I think both have it’s[its]advantages and drawbacks. My reasons are as followed.





On one hand,[a] big city 【这里应该不能单独用big city把，不过我不确定前面是加 the 还是a，或者直接用复数形式好？希望和lz讨论下】does offer magnificent advantages. Metropolitans possess more opportunities and resources for capable individuals to get succeed. Better universities and most advanced information as well as bigger platforms, those are the essential and strong advantages for success. However, it is[does] not necessarily make people happier. According to the poll research, although big center seems to have all the superiorities, it’s competition pressure as well as the growing environment health problem make household an not so perfectly life. Actually, the bigger the city is, the lower the happiness index is. Take myself as an example, When I was leaving my small hometown and went to University in the big city, I was exhilarated. I am planning a big[bright] future for myself such as what kind of life I want to have and what kind of career I want to pursue[这句话的时态应该用过去式]. However after years goes, I could not saying I am successfully and happier than [the situation 这里的比较对象应该是如果我还住在village的成功和快乐把。但我不确定这里怎么改] if I still living [live] in my hometown,it’s only [a] different kind of experience,[.] I am[do] not regret that I left thehometown and went to big city. But I will[would be虚拟语气，注意后面你用的是形容词，要加be] definitely regretful if I haven’t done anything to pursuing[pursue] my dream.【这段说的是在城市里面的有点缺点，最后是自己的观点】





On the other hand, as village development[develops], it’s not necessarily to be an obstacle for individual to become succeed[注意succeed的词性，是动词]. In the past,village due to it’s illiterate and conservative[这里这俩词，你是想形容人的把，如果是形容village，conservative或许还可以，illiterate就有点不适合了，而且这句话语法上也有问题，不如把这句话和下一句话，连起来 改成：village is conservative and/so it is really hard for people who...] It is really hard for peoplewho want to something different to be successful and have [a] better life. However, nowadays,as more educated students went[go] back to their hometown and make it a better place, the village is quite different as before. Moreover, with the family and families connects[不明白什么意思，而且with 是伴随，后面不能有谓语 connects，只能connecting] actually, it will be a great advantages for individuals to get succeed. Finally, less pressure and better environment makes the village an attractive place than the big city for some people. Take my brother as an example,instead of staying in the big city after graduation, he directly went back to our hometown and started his own business. Now he is [an] entrepreneur and has a happier[happy 这里没有比较对象]family. Obviously, it is the right choice for him.  








In conclusion, both big city and small village have their own pro and cons, we should evaluate it according to individuals’ choices instead of jumping to the judgment rashly that big city life is more successful and happier than the small village life.


【整篇文章结构还是挺清晰的，lz最大的问题就是语法与词性，听说语法是硬伤，错太多即使写得再好也不会有高分。建议lz写完文章之后检查一下，避免很多不必要的语法错误。
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