新人报道，求指导！！！

aoyun6334358

4.12改见附件 加油啊 亲

lihaolan

4.13独立

Health, indisputably, is an indispensable part of the high quality life. As medical science makes extraordinary development, people tend to have longer life expectation compared with the old days. Some people assume that it is easier to keep health nowadays than in the past because of the advanced medicine and scientific medical care. However, they fail to take into account the fact that a longer life span does not equate with a healthy life. People, in present society, are confronted numerous threats, such as unhealthy life style, huge pressure, environmental degradation and so on, which make it more arduous to keep fits.
First and foremost, although people enjoy the high quality medical care, there still are myriad of incurable diseases such as cancers. Also, the medicine cannot ensure people to be health but can only make them live longer. It is not uncommon that people who receive the treatment in the hospital have to suffer a lot but cannot retrieve health again. The main driving force behind various diseases is the unhealthy life style. While enjoying the convenience brought by state-of-the-art technology such as internet, people have great tendency to lead a sedentary lifestyle. In other word, people are devoid of the sufficient exercise, which exerts detrimental effects on their health. After work, people always stay at home enjoy the TV shows or surf the internet, which is really unhealthy. What's more, people are addicted to fast food which lacks nutrient because of the high speed of life.
Further, there is no denying that people are under the huge pressure induced by the work and family. The competition has become more and more fierce. People have to spare no effort to keep their jobs especially during the economic recession. The expenditure on the life also puts a great strain on the people. A number of people have to work overtime in order to make a living. A recent survey conducted by Peking University indicates that the pressure in the city has soared up several times compared with ten years ago. Moreover, in the survey, the researchers point out that under the huge stress, citizens are more likely to suffer the psychological diseases which make it formidable to keep health.
Last but not least, it is widely acknowledged that the environment has been deteriorated severely. The clean water, fresh air and green tree no longer exist because of the development of society. A number of factory discharge numerous sewage into the river every day. The manufacturers chop of myriad of forest in order to make the profits. People living in the city have to wear the mask to prevent the air pollution. However, the adverse effects cannot be counteracted by wearing masks. More and more people suffer the respiratory diseases, which dramatically influences the living standard. Also, the climate change and the decline of ozone which exposes people in the excessive ultraviolet pose great threat to human's health.
Admittedly, the medical science has advanced significantly. However, people have to face a number of challenges nowadays which breed great negative impacts on people's health. Therefore, I cannot share the argument that it is easier to maintain health than ever.

viviyl

Health, indisputably, is anindispensable part of the high quality life. As medical science makesextraordinary development, people tend to have longer life expectation comparedwith the old days. Some people assume that it is easier to keep health nowadaysthan in the past because of the advanced medicine and scientific medical care.However, they fail to take into account the fact that a longer life span doesnot equate with a healthy life. People, in present society, are confronted (with)numerous threats,such as unhealthy life style, huge pressure, environmental degradation and soon, which make it more arduous to keep fits.

First and foremost, although people enjoy the high quality medical care, therestill are myriad of incurable diseases such as cancers. Also, the medicinecannot ensure people to be health but can only make them live longer. It is notuncommon that people who receive the treatment in the hospital have to suffer alot but cannot retrieve health again. The main driving force behind variousdiseases is the unhealthy life style. While enjoying the convenience brought bystate-of-the-arttechnology such as internet, people have great tendency to lead a sedentarylifestyle. In other word, people are devoid of the sufficient exercise, which(可能会理解成指代exercise造成歧义) exerts detrimental effects on their health. After work,people always stay at home enjoy(enjoying) the TV shows or surf(surfing) the internet, which is really unhealthy. What's more,people are addicted to fast food which lacks nutrient because of the high speedof life.
Further, there is no denying that people are under the huge pressure induced bythe work and family. The competition has become more and more fierce. Peoplehave to spare no effort to keep their jobs especially during the economicrecession. The expenditure on the life also puts a great strain on the people. Anumber of people have to work overtime in order to make a living. A recentsurvey conducted by Peking University indicates that the pressure in the cityhas soared up several times compared with ten years ago. Moreover, in thesurvey, the researchers point out that under the huge stress, citizens are morelikely to suffer the psychological diseases which make it formidable to keephealth.
Last but not least, it is widely acknowledged that the environment has been deterioratedseverely. The clean water, fresh air and green tree no longer exist because ofthe development of society. A number of factory(factories)discharge numerous sewage into the river every day. The manufacturers chop of myriad offorest in order to make the profits. People living in the city have towear the mask(s) to prevent the air pollution(说戴口罩防止空气污染好像不大合适to prevent harmful air from entering airway). However, the adverse effectscannot be counteracted by wearing masks. More and more people suffer the respiratory diseases, which dramatically influences the living standard. Also, the climate change and thedecline of ozone which exposes people in the excessive ultraviolet pose greatthreat to human's health.
Admittedly, the medical science has advanced significantly. However, peoplehave to face a number of challenges nowadays which breed great negative impactson people's health. Therefore, I cannot share the argument that it is easier tomaintain health than ever.

表达很成熟，论证很详细，学习了~

lihaolan

4.15独立
When making friends, people always give priority to the honesty, which they assume is the most important character of a good friend. With the dramatic development of society, the trust between people has been damaged by the deception. Therefore, a number of people urge that friends should be totally honest to each other, which not only promotes the friendship between the people but also makes the world become better. However, they fail to take into account some situations when telling truth may hurt the friends, their relation or even other people. Thus, I am in favor of the argument that it is unlikely to be totally honest to friends even though honesty is a good character.
First and foremost, although people nowadays place considerable emphasis on pursuing honesty, telling truth sometimes exerts detrimental impacts on friends' life. Assume that a friend suffers the incurable disease such cancer, are you supposed to tell him the truth? Obviously, if you tell him that his disease is incurable, he will give up the hope of life or even conduct some misbehavior such as suicide. I would be hard-pressed to imagine that a good friend can act like this, which eliminates the friend's hope instead of giving him courage and hope. Personally, I believe it is reasonable to tell lie to him for sake of his health as well as his future life. So, if you are always honest to your friends indiscriminately, it is possible that your honesty just hurts your friends' feeling and life.
Further, it is widely acknowledged that something is arduous to explain, which always damages the relation between people. Moreover, even though telling truth to friends at this time, they cannot calm down to listen to the explanation, thereby causing the irreversible harm to the friendship. For instance, a person is late for meeting because he has admitted his girlfriend to accompany her to have a meal. His friends may already be annoyed for his late. If he tells them truth, his friends may consider him as the person who cherishes girlfriend more than friends. However, it is not the fact but hard to explain. At this time, he can use the traffic congestion as the excuse. Although he lies to his friends, he just wants to keep a good friendship with friends and does not cause any hurt to his friends.
Last but not least, it is not uncommon that people always admit others to keep secrets for them. When friends ask them about the secret which is the privacy of others, should they break the promise to others by confessing the secret to their friends? If they tell their friends the privacy about other people, they are bound to breed adverse impact to other people as well as their own reputation. Therefore, telling lies is superior to being honest in this situation.  A recent survey conducted by Peking University indicates when being asked how they evaluate the people who break the promise to keep secret to others, majority of people say these people cannot be a good friend.
Admittedly, being honest is always the objective of human. However, in the reality, people will be confronted with various situations when telling lies may be more reasonable and beneficial to both himself and his friends.

kao154

今天比较忙。。现在才传。。多担待下

lihaolan

4.16独立

Are you familiar with your neighbors? Maybe, a number of people are not well-acquainted with their neighbors because of proliferation of the internet which makes it more convenient for citizens to communicate with others. Some people, therefore, argue that neighbors depend on each other less than the people in the past. However, they overstate the function of the modern science and neglect the significant role that neighbors play in people's life in present society, which cannot be replaced by the internet or other communication technology.

First and foremost, although the rapid advance of the technology enables people to have a broad network and provides them with more ways to enjoy their leisure time, neighbors still exerts profound influence in one's life. The people who you chat through the internet are not as reliable as the neighbors, because majority of teenagers tend to communicates with the strangers who they never meet on the internet. When people are confronted with trouble and resort to net friends for help, it is not a wise behavior. The friends on internet may not evaluate the problems carefully, which are not related with their interests. On the contrary, if you ask neighbors for help, they are willing to help you from within. Therefore, the advice put forwards by neighbors are more feasible and reasonable. Also, people are bound to face some emergency in their daily life. By seeking help from the neighbors, people can solve these problems more efficiently.

Further, it is widely acknowledged that neighbors can drive away the loneliness for others. It is not uncommon that after work people have great tendency to sit in front of the television and watch various programs, while this method cannot drive away the sense of loneliness. Gradually, people will detect that they become more and more solitary. A recent survey conducted by Boston University indicates that people who lack interaction with neighbors are more likely to suffer the loneliness, which may trigger the psychological diseases. Having a good relation with neighbors, people can share their happiness and sadness with them. Moreover, in the vacation, people can go hiking with their neighbors, which contributes to a good health.

Last but not least, having a good relation with neighbors ensures people a good reputation, which is an indispensable part of one's success. As is known to us, when employer decides whether to hire one worker or promote him, the employer may go to his neighborhood and acquire the information about him. If he never interacts with his neighbors, the employer will assume that the applicant is incapable of getting along with colleagues well, which definitely impedes his promotion. In contrast, if he always assists his neighbors or attends activities with them, neighbors will praise his character as much as possible. So the manager will hire him or promote him without hesitation.

Admittedly, the society has made extraordinary progress which not only facilities the communication between people but also offers people more entertainment. However, neighbors cannot be replaced by the advanced technology because neighbors can afford people a sense of belonging as well as a good reputation.

kellyzhou0000

Are you familiar with your neighbors? Maybe, a number of people are not well-acquainted with(学习了,一直找不到合适的表达这个意思的词) their neighbors because of proliferation of the internet which makes it more convenient for citizens to communicate with others. Some people, therefore, argue that neighbors depend on each other less than the people in the past. However, they overstate the function of the modern science and neglect the significant role that neighbors play in people's life in present society, which cannot be replaced by the internet or other communication technology.
(however这句话写的超棒，个人想法，function改成influence可行么？)
First and foremost, although the rapid advance of the technology enables people to have a broad network and provides them with more ways to enjoy their leisure time, neighbors still exerts profound influence in one's life. The people who you chat through the internet are not as reliable as the neighbors, because（改成 for example，such as，teenagers是在举例吧 ） majority of teenagers tend to communicates with the strangers who they never meet on the internet. When people are confronted with trouble and resort to net friends for help, it is not a wise behavior. The friends on internet may not evaluate the problems carefully, which are not related with their interests. On the contrary, if you ask neighbors for help, they are willing to help you from within（这个词不太了解，如果改whole-heartedly？）. Therefore, the advice put forwards by neighbors are more feasible and reasonable. Also, people are bound to face some emergency in their daily life. By seeking help from the neighbors, people can solve these problems more efficiently.
Further, it is widely acknowledged that neighbors can drive away the loneliness for others. It is not uncommon（学习这句子！） that after work people have great tendency to sit in front of the television and watch various programs, while this method cannot drive away the sense of loneliness.（感觉这句可省） Gradually, people will detect that they become more and more solitary. A recent survey conducted by Boston University indicates that people who lack interaction with neighbors are more likely to suffer the loneliness, which may trigger the psychological diseases. Having a good relation with neighbors, people can share their happiness and sadness with them. Moreover, in the vacation, people can go hiking with their neighbors, which contributes to a good health.（Boston 例子编的好啊，学习）
Last but not least, having a good relation with neighbors ensures people a good reputation, which is an indispensable part of one's success. As is known to us, when employer decides whether to hire one worker or promote him, the employer may go to his neighborhood and acquire the information about him. If he never interacts with his neighbors, the employer will assume that the applicant is incapable of getting along with colleagues well, which definitely impedes his promotion. In contrast, if he always assists his neighbors or attends activities with them, neighbors will praise his character as much as possible. So the manager will hire him or promote him without hesitation.
Admittedly, the society has made extraordinary progress which not only facilities the communication（of communicating） between people but also offers people more entertainment. However, neighbors cannot be replaced by the advanced technology because neighbors can afford people a sense of belonging as well as a good reputation.
文章整体很好，用的词很高级，我基本想不到的，有的刚背过….楼主厉害！
看了楼主几篇文章，感觉整体已经有自己的模板了，应对各种题目，问一下，独立写作是不是要总结一个自己的模板？我总是根据题目随心写，感觉不会用模板套题目，求指导~

lihaolan

kellyzhou0000 发表于 2013-4-17 11:15
Are you familiar with your neighbors? Maybe, a number of people are not well-acquainted with[/backco ...

就开头想下怎么引出来，最后一段让步，中间基本都是没有模板，有些固定的词汇或者用法替换。