asd 的作文贴，希望互相提高

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Recently，a very controversial issue has been brought into our eye-sights that whether the job has a more effect on people's happiness than social life does. As the saying goes, one hundred people will have one hundred Hamlets in their minds. This proverb also applies to this issue. For me, however, I hold the definite opinion that job indeed has a greater influence on people's life than social life. My reasons following will substantiate my opinion.

To begin with, people live in today's society have to be confronted (be surrounded by)many problems such as the debt for housing, cost to the food .The list will go on. All these problems can be solved by a decent job. Undeniablly, a fat-paying-job,to some extent, can bring joyfulness to people. people can make full advantage of the money brought by the job to meet their need. Moreover, I think it is the most delight thing for me to buy things for people whom I love. For instance, once I bought my little brotyher Tom a toy car. Even if is was not cheap, when I saw the shining eyes of Tom, I was sure it was worthy. At this point,a decent life without worrying basic need is based on having a stable job, therefore,I think a job oughtweigh the social life.

In addition, job itself can bring friendship. In a big company, all the staff are just like a big family. Colleagues work together and live together.A famous Chinese saying describ this subtle relationship that the people you fight with will never slip out of your memory. I might cite my own story to illustrate this relationship. When I was at sophomore at college, I found a part-time job. I am too unexperienced to handle some certain problems which might lead to boss to fire me. Thanks to my predecessor Tom, he taught me a a great deal of experiences so that I can keep the job. At that time, I really felt happy.WE finally become best friends. To this point ,social life can not provide this kind of happiness. (这个结论不太准确，在工作上获得快乐本身并不能否定在社会生活中不会获得快乐。)

From what have have been taken into consideration carefully, I can draw the conclusion that the happiness brought by job outweigh that brought by social. admittedly, social life can indeed expand one's eye-sight, but the the finacial advantage and the real friendship created by job is of greater importance.

asd君，比较佩服你四段就字数过400啊~这篇文章比你之前大部分的作文分数都要高，没白练啊~ 唯一还需要提高的部分是：你的说理信服程度--你的逻辑：工作可以让衣食无忧，甚至可以给爱的人买礼物满足他们的愿望，所以工作比社会生活更重要。你要注意，工作好的同时社会生活没准会带给你更多，因此你要说明社会生活无法代替工作。这就是说理要改善的地方。不过真的已经很好了，用词精准，切合题意，那么继续加油吧。
ps：我在想不然今天就做20日的综合写作吧，不知asd君意下如何，我还不太会写那个。

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那就这么定了

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The reading passage maintained the opinion that cane toads in Austrilia have posed a threat to small animals and the eco-system, Therefore providing three methods to limit the population of the toads.The professor in the listening passage, however, disagreed with these three ways in that she thought it was not only unecssary but also dangerous.
Firstly, the reading passage held the opinion that people should build a national fence to protect the palces in which the cane toads have not coloniced. But the professor in the listening part reputed this measure since there are many streams flowing across the nations. these streams will certainly transfer the toads and the toads' eggs to different parts of the country. Moreover, only a small number of toads can graduall grow into a large population. So a national fence is useless.
Secondly, the reading part provided a way to let volunteers to make traps and destory the toads' eggs. The professor thought it was indeed useful, but this behavior will threaten the endangered Austilia frogs.Too many volunteer,some of wihich are untrained, will inevatably destory some frogs by mistakes because toads and Austilia frogs look the same, especially when they are young.
Finally, the reading part held the opinion that the virus would be a good way to limit the cane toads population. Again the professor disagreed with that since it was so dangerous for the ecological system in America. The cane toads are often transfered across countries. cane toads are local to America and play an important role in local eco-system. If the toads are infected with the virus, the whole eco-system will suffer.
So the professor totally disagreed with the reading part.

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The reading passage maintained the opinion that cane toads in Austrilia （Australia）have posed a threat to small animals and the eco-system, Therefore providing three methods to limit the population of the toads.The professor in the listening passage, however, disagreed with these three ways in that she thought it was not only unecssary （unnecessary）but also dangerous.
Firstly, the reading passage held the opinion that people should build a national fence to protect the palces in which the cane toads have not coloniced. But the professor in the listening part reputed （refute）this measure since there are many streams flowing across the nations. these streams will certainly transfer the toads and the toads' eggs to different parts of the country. Moreover, only a small number of toads can gradually grow into a large population. So a national fence is useless.
Secondly, the reading part provided a way to let volunteers to make traps and destory the toads' eggs. The professor thought it was indeed useful, but this behavior will threaten the endangered Austilia （Australia）frogs.Too many volunteers,some of wihich are untrained, will inevatably（inevitably） destory some frogs by mistakes because toads and Austilia（Australia） frogs look the same, especially when they are young.
Finally, the reading part held the opinion that the virus would be a good way to limit the cane toads population. Again the professor disagreed with that since it was so dangerous for the ecological system in America. The cane toads are often transferred across countries. cane toads are local to America and play an important role in local eco-system. If the toads are infected with the virus, the whole eco-system will suffer.
So the professor totally disagreed with the reading part.

学习一下，你写的很紧凑~

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There is a long-standing debate among people that whether the government should increase the economy regardless of the environmental concerns. Different will hold different opinions just as the proverb goes that one hundred people will have one hundred Hamlets in their minds. For my part, I think government can not concentrate on the economic without paying attention to the environemnt concerns.

To begin with, what is the most important thing for an individual? Money? Big houses? A pretty face? I think none of these factors is more significant than a healthy body. There is an old Chinese saying that the body is the base for everything. If the government focus all its energy to the economic growth, it will inevitably cause some pollution which will cause myriads of diseases. have you heard that the polluted water from a big medical factory give rise to a high cancer rate to people nearby? If you have, I think you might stand on my side that on no account can we ignore the importance of the environment since our health and happiness are all based on the environment.

In addition,many governments are paying for the the poor air and water pollution caused by the unlimited economic development. The money they pay for the worse environment may offset,or even outweigh the profits brought by the development. A recent survey conducted by the Chinese Living Condition Agency(CLCA) indicated that in 2011, Chinese government spent more than sixty billion Yuan for protecting and remedying the bad environment. It was a huge number of money, and Chinese started to draw attention to this issue. So the high speed development of economy may not result in an ideal concequence.

Last but not the least, paying attention to environment may be beneficial. I might cite an island county as an example. This remote island is very beautiful and has a good environment.A great deal of tourists come to this island every year, bringing a lot of financial benefits to this country. so a good environment also creates profits.  

from what have been taken into consideration, I can draw the very conclusion that by no means can government ignore the status of environment concerns. A good living environment will not only bring everyone a high-quality life but also can save a great deal of money. Even someone would disagree with me, saying that economic booming will enable people to buy cars and luxury goods. But I think all these things,compared with a health,seem to be ignorable.

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Independent Writing:  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns.


There is a long-standing debate among people that whether the government should increase the economy regardless of the environmental concerns. Different will hold different opinions just as the proverb goes that one hundred people will have one hundred Hamlets in their minds. For my part, I think government can not concentrate on the economic without paying attention to the environemnt concerns.

To begin with, what is the most important thing for an individual? Money? Big houses? A pretty face? I think none of these factors is more significant than a healthy body.（观点很不错） There is an old Chinese saying that the body is the base for everything. If the government focus all its energy to the economic growth, it will inevitably cause some pollution which will cause myriads of diseases. have you heard that the polluted water from a big medical factory give rise to a high cancer rate to people nearby? If you have, I think you might stand on my side that on no account can we ignore the importance of the environment since our health and happiness are all based on the environment.

In addition,many governments are paying for the the poor air and water pollution caused by the unlimited economic development. The money they pay for the worse environment may offset,or even outweigh the profits brought by the development. A recent survey conducted by the Chinese Living Condition Agency(CLCA) indicated that in 2011, Chinese government spent more than sixty billion Yuan for protecting and remedying the bad environment. It was a huge number of money, and Chinese started to draw attention to this issue. So the high speed development of economy may not result in an ideal concequence.

Last but not the least, paying attention to environment may （can）be beneficial. I might cite an island county as an example. This remote island is very beautiful and has a good environment.A great deal of tourists come to this island every year, bringing a lot of financial benefits to this country. so a good environment also creates profits.  

from what have been taken into consideration, I can draw the very conclusion that by no means can government ignore the status of environment concerns. A good living environment will not only bring everyone a high-quality life but also can save a great deal of money. Even someone would disagree with me, saying that economic booming will enable people to buy cars and luxury goods. But I think all these things,compared with a health,seem to be ignorable.


很不错！没什么错误了~~asd君，恭喜你啊~      可以略写某个例子，加进另一种论证方式--解释和推理。

ps：世界末日快乐哦~~

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asd君，今天我作文整体写的不如你流畅啊……学习一下。还是有点困惑那个审题的问题，个人看法：环境问题要围着是否促进经济发展来谈。

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asd君，今天我作文整体写的不如你流畅啊……学习一下。还是有点困惑那个审题的问题，个人看法：环境问题要围着是否促进经济发展来谈。

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你说的对，但是我觉得我三个主体段也都有谈经济发展，不过我下次还是注意点。

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Independent Writing: Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends. a. joing a sports team, b. participate in community activities, or traveling。

Recently a controversial issue has been brought into our eye-sights that which choice can enable us to make new friends best? Joining a sports team? Participating in community activities? Or going for a travel? There is no definite answer because different people will maintain different opinions. For me ,however, I hold the strong perspective that no other ways are better to make friends than to join a sports team. My reasons will substantiate my view point below.

To begin with, there is an old saying in China that the people who you fight with will never slip out of your memory. In a competing sports team, for instance a football game, team members have do their utmost to play the game. They watch their teammates' back and invade in "rival's field ". The whole game will boost the team spirit, making everyone in the game friends. Besides the team work,a similar dream is also an important factor for people's making friends. Some people join the sports team maintain the goal to get the first prize. it is universally known that same goal will create the soil for friendship.At this point. people will find it is the best way to make friends in a sports team.

In addition. In a certain sports team. members are confronted with many problems. These problems, in turn , will not separate the members but make them stick to each other more closely. I might cite my story as an example, I once joined a sprint rely team. there were four members in the rely. At first people seldom talked to each other, giving rise to a poor performance in the rely race. As we all know, a tacit understanding among the team members is crucial to a rely team. So we communicated with eacher other, we made mistakes with each other, and the most important, we become friends with each other. based on that kind of understanding, we did a great job in a national level sports game.Till now, I still maintain a good relation with other three team mates. I think my story is convincing that the sports team will be best for us to make new friends

From what have been taken into consideration carefully, I can draw the conclusion that the best choice for us young people to make new friends is to join a sports team in that a harsh training environment will create good relationship. The same dream will make people stick tightly. A tacit understanding will make strangers friends. Even if other will disagree with me, indicating that activities and travelling enable people meet more people. I have to admit they are also good ways to make new friends. But I think a sports team will not only make new friends but also create tight friendship.

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Independent Writing: Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends. a. joing a sports team, b. participate in community activities, or traveling。

Recently a controversial issue has been brought into our eye-sights that which choice can enable us to make new friends best? Joining a sports team? Participating in community activities? Or going for a travel? There is no definite answer because different people will maintain different opinions. For me ,however, I hold the strong perspective that no other ways are better to make friends than to join a sports team. My reasons will substantiate my view point below.（很流畅~~~很好很好~）

To begin with, there is an old saying in China that the people（students啦~~~） who you fight with will never slip out of your memory. In a competing sports team, for instance a football game, team members have done their utmost to play the game. They watch their teammates' back and invade in "rival's field ". The whole game will boost the team spirit, making everyone in the game friends. Besides the team work,a similar dream（such as winning the champion in the football-game case） is also an important factor for people's making friends. Some people join the sports team maintain the goal to get the first prize. it is universally known that same goal will create the soil for friendship.At this point. people will find it is the best way to make friends in a sports team.

In addition. In a certain sports team. members are confronted with many problems. These problems, in turn , will not separate(isolate) the members but make them stick to each other more closely. I might cite my story as an example, I once joined a sprint relay team. there were four members in the relay. At first people seldom talked to each other, giving rise to a poor performance in the rely race. As we all know, a tacit understanding among the team members is crucial to a rely team. So we communicated with eacher other, we made mistakes with each other, and the most important, we become friends with each other. based on that kind of understanding, we did a great job in a national level sports game.Till now, I still maintain a good relationship with other three team mates. I think my story is convincing that the sports team will be best for us to make new friends
From what have been taken into consideration carefully, I can draw the conclusion that the best choice for us young people to make new friends is to join a sports team in that a harsh training environment will create good relationship. The same dream will make people stick tightly(draw closwer to each other). A tacit understanding will make strangers friends. Even if other will disagree with me, indicating that activities and travelling enable people to meet more people. I have to admit they are also good ways to make new friends. But I think a sports team will not only make new friends but also create tight friendship.(有点突兀啊~~再加半句，therefore,joining a sports team is apparently better.)


写的很好啦~~asd君，我看范文通常都有极其明显的优势（语言华丽/说理层层递进/或是多样的论证方式/非常新颖的观点），你要不要考虑选一个你擅长的展示一下？