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No one would deny that an increasing number of problems have been solved with the rapid development of science and technology. Under this circumstances, some people hold the idea that the most essential problems in today's world will be solved in people's lifetime. However, I stand for the opposite side and three reasons are listed below to support my view.(额 opposite side?)
To begin with, we have faith in solving different types of problems with the help of advanced science and technology. For example, the low efficiency in production used to be a troublesome problem to the manegement(management) of big factories.But thanks to the appearence (appearance) of steam power engine, which was invented by Watt, the first industry revolution was launched and led the Britain a fast developed country at that time. Later, the invention of electricity, has given people all over the world an easy access to brightness in the dark. Not only did the working efficiency largely improve, but people also constantly shocked by a series of great inventions, such as cellphones, microwaves, televisions and so on. Thus, abundant evidence proved that the improvement of science and technology may help us find solutions to important problems in predictable future.
What is more, the improvement of human beings' intelligence is of great significant in solving essential problems in modern society. As a better environment for growth provides higher intelligent people, we are sure to see the perspective outlook that one day some important problems would be solved. As we all know that with the joint effort of so many outstanding experts, our dream of flying to the sky has achieved. Moreover, rockects(rockets) and spaceships invented by excellent scientists made it possible for us to explore universe. (例子不太贴切,解决困难和实现梦想是两码事)
这段没太明白。。是想说一切皆有可能咩?In addition, the modern world is full of quick changes and no one can hastily assert that a problem will spend people's whole life to work out. Limitless people's creativity is, amazingsmay happen every day. Tor instance, the discovery of gravity was by accident. And then, Newton developed the thoery(theory) on force, which eventually managed to solve a lot of problems in physics, astronomy, and even mathmatics(mathematics).
To draw a conclusion, we are living in a fast changing world and people are getting smarter and smarter. So we can foresee that the key problems which trouble people in today's world will be solved with the help of science and technology. 这位同学,我很稀罕你的文章,你的前几篇我都看了。。文风小清新,语言流畅,读起来不费力。我也就没一句一句的抠,我自己虽然考过GMAT,但语法什么的忘光了,你就放过我吧。但是,读完2.29这篇,我的最大感受是论点选的不好。第一个论点本身是OK的,但下面两个稍微牵强。论点选的不好,写起来就会很费力。站在你的论点,我觉得可以说说人类意识形态或者态度的变化(经济已经得到了长足的发展,人们越来越意识到社会、环境、发展平衡方面的问题,但是你又没点出你认为的most important problem是啥米,所以有点难办啊)或者可以说说人类越来越团结,团结就是力量blabla。。。。这些都是比较好写的 另外一个感受是例子运用的不贴切。。要举例子,可以。但是你为什么每个例子都一笔带过呢?我对例子的观点是,要么只写一个,前后对比都写清楚了,才能表现出从有困难到科技解决了这个困难的过程;要么就是排比句,但要求每个例子都一针见血。。在要求句式多变的同时,也应该考虑用怎样的表达方式,才能使这个例子跟主题靠的更近。这句:Not only did the working efficiency largely improve, but people also constantly shocked by a series of great inventions, such as cellphones, microwaves, televisions and so on. 不仅生产效率提高,人们也被一系列伟大的发明震惊。这个跟你的论点什么关系?为什么要加这一句?其实你想表达的是,许多伟大的发明接踵而来,解决了人们生活的困难,使人们大为震惊——这就是伟大科技的力量。。。所以,必须要换个表达。 最后,说说我自己的2.29的作业。这个题目与我前几天看的经济学人上的一篇文章不谋而合,题目就叫.there could be trouble ahead。是当前经济形势与1930年大萧条一些对比云云。所以当时做的摘抄就派上了用场。还有文章中举得数据,是我瞎编的。以前有看过,确切的记不清,数量级是差不多的,不会太离谱。 |
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