MarieZhu MM has written an interesting AA essay. But, I'm not convinced yet. First, let's look at the conclusion of the argument and the evidence provided in the passage: Conclusion: The high success rate (somehow) still shows insufficient canvassing effort of the fund-raisers Evidence 1 (E1): Fund-raisers were able to get donation from 80% potential donors contacted. Evidence 2 (E2) : The success rate is exceptionally high for university fund-raisers Evidence 3 (E3): People most likely to donate are those who have donated in the past Evidence 4 (E4): Good fundraisers constantly try less-likely prospects in an effort to expand the donor base Now let's look at why C weakens the conclusion. C states that most repeat donors (please note, not most donors!) this year were not contacted by fund-raisers. Since they are not contacted by fund-raisers, they are not considered "potential donors contacted" as in E1. Therefore, their donations were not counted towards the 80% percentage success rate. The 80% success rate must be based on another group of people. Who? The only possibility left is those new donors. Therefore, the fund-raisers did contact lots of new donors and got 80% of them to donate. According to E2, this is a very respectable rate. Therefore, C indicates that fund-raisers were contacting new donors and did a good job to get them donate. So, the conclusion is weakened. Let's look at why A strengthen the conclusion. A says that Smithtown University (SU)'s fund-raisers were no more successful than other fundraisers in their contact with new donors. How do you define a successful contact for fundraising purpose? A successful contact for fundraising purpose means the fundraiser is able to get the contacted to donate. O.K. SU fundraisers were no more successful than others in getting donation from new donors. How come they can achieve the 80% rate in E1, which is much higher than other fundraisers (E2)? The only logical explanation is, SU fundraisers went after those folks who have donated before to ask for donation. Since E3 tells us that former donors are most likely to donate again, by going after former donors, SU fundraisers were able to pump up their success rate. But, they didn't do a good job to solicit new donors - their canvassing effort was insufficient. A strengthen the argument. Well, it's a little long-winded. I hope that I've convinced you if you have the patience to finish reading this 400+ words AA essay :-) Otherwise please let me know, I'd love to hear different opinions. Thanks!
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