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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-7 17:00:40 | 只看该作者
chasedreamabc 发表于 2014-9-7 15:34
The lecture and reading passage hold completely different views toward the measures which have been  ...

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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-7 22:40:12 | 只看该作者
Tpo16 综合

The reading passage claims that the scienceof archaeology was faced with serious problems as well as lots of limitation inUK. This claim completely contradicts the idea of the reading passage, whichsuggests that there are three new areas to improve archaeologists’ situation.

First, the reading passage contends that lots ofartifacts were destroyed by the construction projects. However, the professor believes that before the constructionprojects start, all sites should be examined byarchaeologists to assess whether they are archaeology interests and valuablethings or not. If the sites are archaeology interests, builders, archaeologistsand the official government would made a plan to preserve artifacts. Before theconstruction is allowed, archaeological artifactswould be excavated and documented properly. (听力细节好多..求速记方法T T)

Second, according to the reading passage, thefinancial support for archaeologists are inadequate. On the other hand, the lecture argues that there is a new rule andall archaeologistsare paid by construction companies not the government. Construction companiesneed to pay for the initial examination and work under a preservation plan.  The new financial support allows archaeologiststo explore a wider range than ever before.


Third, in the reading passage, the author states thatit is hard to find a job as an archaeologist.In contrast, the lecture holds the opposite opinion and believes that experts arehired of all stages of process ---examine the site for archaeological value, drawthe preservation plan, do the research in a professional scientific manner, andprocess data and write the article(考试根本记不下来如此多的细节...TAT). Currently the job and career opportunityhas increased and archaeologists have increased as well.

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发表于 2014-9-7 23:26:24 | 只看该作者
抱歉,改得好晚

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24#
 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-8 09:25:13 | 只看该作者
angla 发表于 2014-9-7 23:26
抱歉,改得好晚

谢谢!!~~~~月饼节快乐!!!!!~~~~~~
25#
发表于 2014-9-8 22:41:06 | 只看该作者
0906 revised by mushroom

[size=13.63636302948px]9-6 It is much easier to achieve success with help from one’s family nowadays than before. 【需要修改】

[size=13.63636302948px]Family provides the support and backbone that everyone needs to feel accomplished, happy, and loved in life. Thus ,family is of great necessity in our life. Some people advocate that in the recent decades, family is gradually losing its significance because of the fast development of education, which enables people to become more competitive.[size=13.63636302948px] From my perspective, thanks to family’s help, people can achieve success more easily than ever before.

[size=13.63636302948px]Initially, family can provide more vauable(valuable) job opportunities and precious suggestions when we search for jobs[size=13.63636302948px]. Nowadays, family members are occupied in diverse jobs, which can not only provide us various working experience ,but also help us extend the social network efficiently. For instance, last year I hunted for an intership but obtained nothing unfortunately. I complained to my uncle, one of the senior managers in the City Bank, and he firstly understood my personal situation comprehensively and then provided me some specific suggestions---what to wear in an interview, what financial knowledge I should equip with before it, how to become outstanding and confidence in the group interview, what questions I should ask to the interviewers at last,etc. All these suggestions inspired me to a large extent. After an well-organized preparation, I applied a decent position in the Charted Bank consequently.   

Second, financial support is another important contribution from the family in our way to success.[size=13.63636302948px]Psychologically, we know that there is certain bond among members of the families. When we are longing for starting a company, the family will provide financial support at first, since we seldom bail on family members.  Furthermore, as the society advances by leaps and bounds, families’ financial condition has been improved dramatically, which, I have to say, is the base for offering money support. Moreover, thanks to only-one-child(可以去掉only,就是one-child policy) policy in China, nowadays Chinese teenagers can easily get more financial support than ever before for the simple reason that in the past, there was more than one child sharing the limited sources in a family. For those  people who can make use of the financial advantage, there appears to be always a short cut to success.

[size=13.63636302948px]Admittedly[size=13.63636302948px], sometimes family members have limited time or energy to offer help because they are all trapped in busy work and trivial daily things. However, if we encounter some major problems like downsizing, family members would definitely give us comfort and help us find a better job in first time. It is family members that show solicitude to us most.(让步段内容相较于之前两段偏少,不过在不影响总字数的情况下应该没什么关系)

[size=13.63636302948px]In a nutshell, in order to achieve economic and career success, the need to get benefit from help provided by family members is more obvious than before. Without such help, the road to success seems often under construction.


总的来说写得真的蛮好的,语法错误也比较少。
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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-8 23:33:23 | 只看该作者
The students nowadays do not respect theirteachers as much as the students in the past.

The recent decades have witnessed the drastic improvement in every social aspect by virtue of which students’ comprehensive ability has been greatly improved. Currently, some people advocate that the students nowadays do not esteem teachers the same as students in previous years since now students’ minds are extremely active and they do not follow authority blindly. However, others have opposite ideas. From my perspective, students do respect professors as the students in the past.

To begin with, from the subjective aspect, students’ comprehensive ability is greatly enhanced and the virtue awareness is improved. There is no denying that all schools are propelling the quality-oriented education and they are putting more emphasize on the methods which can cultivate students to have a well round personality. As a result,except for the conventional subjects like maths, science, history, universities are paying more attention to some moral lessons like the Moral Education. Under this policy, students realize that respecting teachers is a virtue which is an indispensable part in the daily life and conflicts with teachers shouldn’t occur in a harmonious school;consequently, they show adequate esteem and complimentto teachers. According to a recent survey conducted by my university, 87.5% teachers agree that “when been responded about certain doubts, students actvery respectfully rather than show any aggressiveness or impoliteness. “ morethan 70% claim that “ even if there is conflict of ideas, students never disapprove the teachers’ ideas in front of them. ” Furthermore, it is the professional knowledge of teachers that enables students to respect them thoroughly. Nowadays there exist lots of methods for teachers to enhance the level of teaching, such as increasing training institutions, more communicational meetings and opportunities to study broad, which I have to say,can definitely improve the professional knowledge and build authority among students.

In addition, from the objective aspect, it is the society influence that enables students to respect teachers. First, no doubt the teachers influence has been drastically enlarged and the payment forteachers has been extremely improved. Nowadays with the mass media, some beneficial publicity is put on the screen. For example, every year there is one of the most significant TV programs called Teachers Touching China which sifts the top ten teachers devoting their love to students without selfish motives. All school students watch the program in classrooms with tears. Under such condition, why students show disrespect to teachers?    Second ,with the social culture of analogizing teachers to gardeners, students are highly unlikely to behave disgracefully against teachers, which means an obvious fight against social norms.

Admittedly, some students do not think teachers are indispensable in their lives and they do not follow the authority blindly. However, in my opinion, students can have the choice to be independentand and do not rely on teachers’ help, but they are not supposed to show disrespect to teachers which is a way of exceeding moral line. I used to discussed a topic concerning the reasons of hazy whether in Beijing with my teacher. Although we had different opinions and I thought I had more objective evidence, I still regarded him as a very authoritative teacher.


In a nutshell, students nowadays do show respect to teachers and the tendency will keep.
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发表于 2014-9-9 00:34:18 | 只看该作者
have studied many from you!!!

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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-9 08:51:11 | 只看该作者
TPO 17

According to the passage, the growth of human populationand increase of agriculture and pesticide use have detrimental effect on birds,which  apparently  refutes the  points  illustrated in  the  lecture.

First, the passage says the natural habitats for birdswill continue to disappear due to the expansion of human population andsettlements. As a result, the bird population will decrease. On the contrary, theprofessor contends that the urban city would not affect the growth of birds andit would provide better and larger habitats for other types of birds. So city dwellersoften complainabout the increase the population of seagulls at landfills, pigeons on the streets and so on .Even  Birds like hawk and falcon which prey on the pigeons and rodents canbe found in cities.  So, the populationof birds would not decline , although some populations may shrink, other typesof birds would increase.

Second, the reading asserts that The growth ofagriculture will lead to  the furtherdestruction of bird habitats which are converted to agriculture use. Incontrast, the professor claims that now the United States is using less andless land for agriculture every year. They introduce a new productive cropswhich will produce more food on the land per unit. . As a result, there is noneed to destroy wildnessareas.

Third, the reading claims that chemical pesticide usewill continue to increase, which does harm to bird population. On the otherhand, the professor indicates that the government is increasing the awarenessof the consequence of using traditional pesticide. There are two changes. First,they develop the new and less toxic pesticide, which is very important. Second,more importantly, there is growing trend to develop more pest resistant crops which aregenetically designed to be unattractive to the pests. Pest resistant corpsgreatly reduce the need for chemical pesticide. As a result, pest resistantcorps do not harm birds at all.  

29#
 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-9 19:25:48 | 只看该作者
9-8过去老师比现在老师对年轻人影响力更大

Education has been performing an important role in the process of a society and teachers definitely have enormous effect on cultivating students---driven force of country’s prosperity. From my perspective, teachers, no matter in the past time or in current time, do have the same influence on youth.

In the past, the reason why teachers exerted tremendous influence upon students was that students who were longing for knowledge lacked access to study. This phenomenon was abounding in China. For instance, in the Qing Dynasty, The Imperial Civil Examination System---the unique gateway to secure an official position---was the rage. According to a survey conducted by China Daily, there were almost 16000 people attended the test but merely 308 could be admitted, which indicates the fierce competition between the students. Deficient resources enabled teachers to play a vital role in imparting knowledge. Currently, it is the internet that provides us a multitude of information we are searching for, but in ancient time, teachers were the sole intermediary for broadcasting knowledge. There is no denying that all students showed great esteem and appreciation towards teachers, which greatly enhanced their reliability and enlarged their influence. In addition, it was the professional knowledge of teachers that enabled students to respect them thoroughly. For example, Socrates, as an eminent teacher, had a far-reaching impact on Plato and Aristotle, which cannot be neglected. Socrates’s saying---I know nothing except the fact of my ignorance---embodied not only his sagacity but also modesty.

In the 21st century, students are obviously overwhelmed by homework and shouldering severe stress from various examinations, especially the College Entrance Examination. Consequently, students necessitate the help from teachers who have the ability to provide appropriate studying methods. Obviously, it is teachers who pose great effect on students’ every studying stage. Nowadays I am an undergraduate and at the end of every semester, I always run into a rushing time, because I have to prepare for the examinations, finish several papers, and close some research report. It is quite easy to get lost in such a busy time. I remembered one day I felt extremely frustrated with so many works undone and complained to my tutor. He told me that planning was leveraged time and several minutes planning before tackling a problem can improve your productivity and efficiency greatly. Thus, I started to learn planning strategically to improve my efficiency. I established a “to do” list according to priorities of things and ticked off the items as I moved forward. In this way, I not only managed my time but also solved multiple problems at the same time. Had I got the valuable advice from my teacher, I would not have dealt with such huge workloads.

In a nutshell, teachers, the beacon on my way to success, exert the same influence upon young people every time.

30#
 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-9 20:18:24 | 只看该作者
TPO 18 综合

The reading introduces three methods to solve the decline of Torreya. However, the professor claims that these methods are not effective.

First, the reading passage contends that it is better to reestablish Torreya in the same place, which has a specific microclimate. However, the professor argues that the microclimate areas are not suitable to the growth of Torreya since they are strongly affected by changes in climate of larger region. Now the global warming has resulted in the overall increasing temperature and the wet land was drained. So lands become drier. As a result, the Torreya cannot survive anywhere within the microclimate area.

Second, the reading states that moving Torreya to a completely new area, far from its Florida microclimate and further north, is another choice. However, the speaker says that relocating trees to a new area cannot solve the problem. For example, when Black locust Tree was brought to a new area, it spread rapidly and even killed off the plants and trees, which were very endangered and nearly extinct. As a result, relocating can bring lots of unpredictable outcomes for the new environment.

Third, according to the reading passage, the third option is to protect the Torreya in research centers. On the contrary, the professor believes that in that condition, Torreya cannot resist the disease. Only large and genetically diverse trees in wild areas can resist disease. But the research area cannot keep large tress, and as a result, the trees cannot survive in the long run.

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