蘑菇作文贴：每周都得写点儿什么

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xhbhxhbh 发表于 2014-6-5 11:36
sorry 啊 昨天没找到你的作文 今天才改的。。。

谢谢！~~~

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[0606-独立]Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment

Recently, a heated topic has arose among the public. Even through modern agriculture methods damage the environment, the new methods make it possible providing food for the growing population around the world. This advantage outweighs the importance of protecting the environment in some ways. However, from my perspective, I refute to accept the assertion for some reasons.

In the first place, good and sustainable environment is the fundamental basis for human beings. Although more people can have access to enough food, if the environment gets worse, it means nothing for the development of agriculture. In the past, farmers use traditional method to grow crops. With the introduction of fertilizer, farmers have more harvest than before but the rivers got polluted because of the overuse of the fertilizer. The damage of the environment is more difficult for the government to solve compared with the change of the agriculture methods. As time goes by, these rivers will finally become the places where no fish can live and the water in there will not suitable for the growth of crops. Modern agriculture methods can lift the harvest. However, if it has bad influence on the environment, it will do harm to human beings in long-term.

Second, we only have one Earth, but we have many ways to deal with the population increase and food shortage. As the assertion has mentioned, the main advantage of the modern agriculture method is that they can relief the pressure of food shortage. However, if we must sacrifice the environment to get the advanced agriculture methods, I prefer to say no to the development of the methods. We have many other ways to help people laking enough food. Educating the public and having them have the awareness of not wasting food is the example of the solution. We can see many college students waste a lot of food in their daily lives. If the school or some media take the responsibilities to propagate the importance of food, the situation of food shortage will be much better.

The last point is that the so-called modern agriculture methods are not the best methods for human beings in long-term. If the future method can provide enough food for the increase population and have no harm to the environment, this method is the best method. Since I have mentioned before, what we need to live a better live is a sustainable environment. So we must try our best to keep the smooth going of the environment. Scientists should put more efforts to the study of more environmentally friendly method of crop growing.

In summary, solving the food shortage problem is not the final goal of our human beings. Even through modern agriculture methods can relief the pressure right now, it can do harm to the environment as well. This is not what we want. In order to have a better and lighter future live, more efforts should be made to the research of advanced agriculture methods.

这篇文章真是各种没思路。。要是考场遇上感觉就要跪了。。

sweetyecho

[0606-独立]Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment

Recently, a heated topic has arose among the public. Even through modern agriculture methods damage the environment, the new methods make it possible providing food for the growing population around the world. This advantage outweighs the importance of protecting the environment in some ways. However, from my perspective, I refute to accept the assertion for some reasons.

In the first place, good and sustainable environment is the fundamental basis for human beings. Although more people can have access to enough food, if the environment gets worse, it means nothing for the development of agriculture. In the past, farmers use traditional method to grow crops. With the introduction of fertilizer, farmers have more harvest than before but the rivers got polluted because of the overuse of the fertilizer. The damage of the environment is more difficult for the government to solve compared with the change of the agriculture methods. As time goes by, these rivers will finally become the places where no fish can live and the water in there will not suitable for the growth of crops. Modern agriculture methods can lift the harvest. However, if it has bad influence on the environment, it will do harm to human beings in long-term.

Second, we only have one Earth, but we have many ways to deal with the population increase and food shortage. As the assertion has mentioned, the main advantage of the modern agriculture method is that they can relief the pressure of food shortage. However, if we must sacrifice the environment to get the advanced agriculture methods, I prefer to say no to the development of the methods. We have many other ways to help people laking enough food. Educating the public and having them have the awareness of not wasting food is the example of the solution. We can see many college students waste a lot of food in their daily lives. If the school or some media take the responsibilities to propagate the importance of food, the situation of food shortage will be much better.

The last point is that the so-called modern agriculture methods are not the best methods for human beings in long-term. If the future method can provide enough food for the increase population and have no harm to the environment, this method is the best method. Since I have mentioned before, what we need to live a better live is a sustainable environment. So we must try our best to keep the smooth going of the environment. Scientists should put more efforts to the study of more environmentally friendly method of crop growing.

In summary, solving the food shortage problem is not the final goal of our human beings. Even through modern agriculture methods can relief the pressure right now, it can do harm to the environment as well. This is not what we want. In order to have a better and lighter future live, more efforts should be made to the research of advanced agriculture methods.

sweetyecho

错误修改好

[0606-独立]Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment

Recently, a heated topic has arose among the public. Even through（even though） modern agriculture methods damage the environment, the new methods make it possible providing （to provide）food for the growing population around the world. This advantage outweighs the importance of protecting the environment in some ways. However, from my perspective, I refute to accept the assertion for some reasons.

In the first place, good and sustainable environment is the fundamental basis for human beings. （这个主旨句不能很好概括这一段的意思）Although more people can have access to enough food, if the environment gets worse, it means nothing for the development of agriculture. In the past, farmers use traditional method to grow crops. With the introduction of fertilizer, farmers have more harvest than before but the rivers got polluted because of the overuse of the fertilizer. The damage of the environment is more difficult for the government to solve compared with the change of the agriculture methods. As time goes by, these rivers will finally become the places where no fish can live and the water in there （语法错误：删去in 直接the water there）will not suitable（语法错误：suit或者be suitable） for the growth of crops. Modern agriculture methods can lift the harvest. However, if it has bad influence on the environment, it will do harm to human beings in long-term.

Second, we only have one Earth, but we have many ways to deal with the population increase and food shortage. As the assertion has mentioned, the main advantage of the modern agriculture method is that they can relief the pressure of food shortage. However, if we must sacrifice the environment to get the advanced agriculture methods, I prefer to say no to the development of the methods. We have many other ways to help people laking （这个单词不认识也没查到，是不是打错了？）enough food. Educating the public and having them have the awareness of not wasting food is the example of the solution.（此句话，直接接在上一句后边，用for example：blablabla 是不是更好？因为你现在这句话感觉头重脚轻了） We can see many college students waste a lot of food in their daily lives. If the school or some media take the responsibilities to propagate the importance of food, the situation of food shortage will be much better.

The last point is that the so-called modern agriculture methods are not the best methods for human beings in long-term. If the future method can provide enough food for the increase population and have no harm to the environment, this method is the best method. Since I have mentioned before, what we need to live a better live is a sustainable environment. So we must try our best to keep the smooth going of the environment. Scientists should put more efforts to the study of more environmentally friendly method of crop growing.

In summary, solving the food shortage problem is not the final goal of our human beings. Even through modern agriculture methods can relief the pressure right now, it can do harm to the environment as well. This is not what we want. In order to have a better and lighter future live, more efforts should be made to the research of advanced agriculture methods.

总结一下哈，文章语句思路清晰顺畅。分论点找的很赞，如果鸡蛋里挑骨头，那就是第三段论点的选取。因为从我的理解，你是想写一边倒的态度。但是，你的第三段表达的意思是个折中：就是要找到best solution既要保护环境，也要养活人们。我不知道这样的叙述好不好或者说切不切题？

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sweetyecho 发表于 2014-6-8 22:16
错误修改好

[0606-独立]Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing  ...

谢谢echo！我会好好看修改的！~

小蘑菇开始打怪

[0610-综合]TPO27

In the reading material, it discussed some causes may contribute to the Little Ice Age. It sounds convincing. However, the professor says according to the recent study, all the evidences and reasons the article mentioned are out of date. The professor argues this from three aspects.

In the first place, the professor refutes that the disruption of current cannot lead to the lower temperature. For the reason that the current change can only have influence on the Europe and America, it cannot affect New Zealand and South Africa as the data said. There is no explanation about the impact of current disruption on the climate.

Secondly, the professor disagrees with the assertion that the volcanic eruption block the sunlight which resulted in the start of Little Ice Age. It is true that enough dust released by volcano can low the temperature, but it will also cause some visual effects on human, for example color sunset. However there is no report of this kind of thing. Thus it is obvious that the volcanic eruption is not strong enough to cause the Little Ice Age.

The last point that the professor refuses to accept is that it is the decrease of population leaded to the cooler atmosphere. From the current research and record, there is no enough time for the change of population to show its influence on the climate. The population grows back quickly and of course the forest are cut to make more land for corps. With more carbon dioxide in the atmosphere, the increase of forest is no longer help the creation of Little Ice Age.

又晚交作业了。。以后TPO26以后的文章都不占了。。

qq2228757

楼主，改好了~加油~~~

小蘑菇开始打怪

qq2228757 发表于 2014-6-13 09:31
楼主，改好了~加油~~~

谢谢！~~我会好好看的，辛苦~~

小蘑菇开始打怪

[0613-独立]There is no reason to be impolite to other people

Currently, more social problems among different groups of people come to the public eye. It seems that people become more impolite to others. However, from my perspective, we still have no reason to show our ignorance or to be impolite to other people no matter how angry we are in that situation.

In the first place, as the word goes, everyone borns equal. It is true that there are rich people and poor people in the same world and society. However the money and fortune are only some additional things attached to your life. There is no link between the money and superior status. Since everyone shares the equal rights, there is no reason to see others are lower than you or just be impolite to others just because he is poor. In fact, a rich man is the person who has love and desire to help others rather than the person whose mind is filled of money.

Second, since we have had so many pressure in the modern life, why don’t show our kindness to others even though you do not know the guy? Recently, I listened to a TED speech on how people feel vulnerable in their relationship with their friends. Sometimes they just want to seek some courages or advice from their friends whom they trust a lot. It is sad that they will feel heartbroken if their friends show their impatience and ignorance to them. Then I started to remember my own experience about how I was discourage by my closest friends. I know that they do not mean to hurt me but it really let me down at that time, so if they show their care to me, the situation will be completely different. With the support and love from others, we will be brave to chase the thing we want. Even the positive words from strangers can give me power as well.

The last point is that sometimes you will never know whether the kind behavior will bring you. We have heard a lot of stories about how people give help to strangers, then the stranger turn out to be a great man. I do not believe in it at first, after I heard about the true story of my sister, I start to have faith in that every kind behavior can lead to some happy thing. Last year, my sister was trying to find a job related to her major. Someday, a man drove a car stopped to ask her how to get to the building. My sister just told him how to get there. In the info session of a local accounting firm, my sister found that the partner of the accounting firm is the man who asked her the route. After the session, my sister had some talk with the partner and the partner showed his appreciation on my sister. You guess what, my sister finally got the job from that accounting firm. What I want to say is that everyone should be polite to others and you may get surprise.

To sum up, we have no right to show our ignorance to others. You will never know how your words can hurt others on matter it is your best friends or just a stranger. The polite behavior may bring you a gift for your kindness to others. There is no reason to be impolite to other people.

这篇文章写得太难受了。。想不出点，感觉最近两三篇独立都是这个毛病，最后总结得也是渣啊。。没有限时，如果限时一定跪。。
怎么办啊！

超级无敌小鹤鹤

我是企鹅，改好啦，我看到题目也是感觉不知道从哪儿下笔写，所以看到你的文章真的是有点“想不出点”然后在硬扯的感觉。。。。。。。。请容许我那么残忍啊，不过全文都没有啥语法问题，很流畅这点值得赞啊