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AnthonySummer

2012-11-9 spending money on traveling & vacation VS. saving for future.

People are in the tendency to possess much more money than in the past, improved by the developing of economy, resulting in the situation of surplus money for us to manage.  Whether people should spend their money on traveling, vacation or saved it for future becomes a problem. In my opinion, I upright that they should better save money for the future. For the reasons that people can hardly stop once they keep spending money on traveling. Furth more, they cannot help themselves out of trouble if some emergencies would happen; besides, the accumulations of money can be spent on more valuable and enjoyable things.

First of all, people need save extra money in order to deal with some emergencies. Like an old saying, "accidents will happen". It is impossible we can predict what is going to happen next in our life. Fitting examples are the cases of car accident or lose our job. Definitely, car accident is happening always, we are not hope it happened on our life but we need some backup plan, because we might staying in the hospital for several weeks even months, and cost huge amounts of money for medical cure. We have no income during this time, and even would lose our job after recovering. It takes time to find a new job at nowadays bad economics. Under no circumstances can we ignore the significance of saving money.

From a different dimension, the accumulations of money enable people to purchase expensive merchandises. People were stimulated by the increasing level of life, and the desire of quality was growing. To illustrate this, house, car and overseas education are the appropriate examples. Every family wants to own a house, so they can no longer worry about someday the landlord would take the house back, and investing money on a house is a good deal in China. Meantime, people want to own a car so they can drive anywhere, release working pressure by driving around the countryside, or invent some friends go to a picnic together.

There is no denying that people should reward themselves for achieving some goals, so they can travel to some place and take a deep break, preparing for the next big challenge. However, I have a profound conviction that too many traveling and vacation would make people laziness. When people chose to spend their money to enjoy the life now, it simply means that people put their precedence on the present over their financial future, we would want more and more luxury and expensive vacation, do not want to work, even lose the job. Once we going to this path, it is hard to get out of it.

Broadly speaking, we should save majority money for the future, not only we can handle unprecedented accidents, but also have a better life and brighter future.

AnthonySummer

Tpo 25

The professor disagreed about the reading passage’s opinion that vessel were not ancient electric batteries from three different aspects:

First of all, the professor pointed that the vessels was discovered by the local people, who were not trained archaeologists. They might find some wires and other electricity conductors nearby the vaessels, but they overlook and not interested in those materials. That was why there had no evidence of metal wires been found.

What is more, the reading passage said that the copper cylinders inside the jars look exactly like copper cylinder discovered in another place, which was used for holding scrolls of texts. However, the professor argued that the vessel was original invented for one purpose but later it was adopted into another purpose. He said that ancient inventors found that they could use iron and liquids to generate a small electric current.

Finally, the professor illustrated that ancient people could use the electricity to shock people, an evidence of invisible power, and convinced other that they have the power. Meantime, he demonstrated that the modern medical had used electricity to heal patients and release their pain. So ancient can use the electricity for same use.

Thus, it can be inferred that the professor challenged the passage by giving reasons why he thought the vessel were ancient electric batteries.

amissrosa

11.9 綜合改 TPO25 抱歉來晚了>_<橘色建議 紅色錯誤


Theprofessor disagreed about the reading passage’s opinion that vessels were notancient electric batteries from three different aspects:

First of all, the professor pointed that thevessels was werediscovered by the local people, who were not trained archaeologists. They mightfind some wires and other electricity conductors nearby the vessels, but theyoverlook and(or) not interested in those materials andthrown away them. That was why there hadno evidence of metal wires been found.

What is more, the reading passage said that thecopper cylinders inside the jars look exactly like copper cylinder discoveredin another place, which was used for holding scrolls of texts. However, theprofessor argued that the vessel was original invented for one purpose butlater it was adopted into another purpose. He(教授好像是女的) said that ancient inventors found that they(copper cylinders) could use iron andliquids to generate a small electric current.

Finally, the professor illustrated that ancientpeople could use the electricity to shock people, whichwas regarded as an evidence of invisiblepower,and (to)convinced other that they have had the power.Meantime, he demonstratedthat the modern medical had (has) usedelectricity to heal patients and release their pain. So ancient can use the electricityfor the sameuse.

Thus, it can be inferred that the professorchallenged the passage by giving reasons why he thought the vessel were ancient electricbatteries.

幾次改學長的綜合下來發現學長綜合作文的結構都有變化，考官應該就是喜歡這種吧！但是教授的性別要稍微注意一下，否則考官會認為有背範本的嫌疑＠＠，這樣就太可惜了！

AnthonySummer

to lmy, 抱歉的晚些上交了，7點左右~

lmylacoste

我的独立写好了，tpo25想留着模考，先不做了哈~
你的还没有贴上啊，图书馆要关了，看来你写完我只能明天帮你再改了，抱歉啊~

AnthonySummer

11月10日
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government and corporation should share all their scientific discoveries with other countries in the world? Please use specific details and examples to support your opinion.

The latest science discoveries can bring unlimited people a better life style and make this world better. It would be a win-win solution between countries to share the scientific discovers with people all over the world. The world would back to one thousand years before if old generation scientist kept their discoveries inside their mother country or company. Ironically, few countries would use the latest discoveries into military manufacturing therefore broke the world peace. So, we must restrict some nuclear technology but welcome civil discoveries.

“If I saw further, it was because I stood on the shoulders of giants.” said Isaac Newton. He accumulated all the physical theory from all over the world, then he discovered the universal gravitation and the three laws of motion. We would never have a chance take airplane for traveling without his theory if his mother country restricted publish of his theory. Henry Ford is the founder of assembly line that increase speed of manufacturing and decrease the price of products, so ordinary family can afford a car. Other country and company borrow his creation and use to own manufactory. We cannot image how expensive the product would be without his sharing of assembly line, even worst, our living standard would back to one hundred years ago.

Some sensitive technologies such as nuclear weapon and missiles that will bring nothing but damages, and it even damaged the world peace. To illustrate this, Nazi German’s scientists discovered the latest jet engine technology; therefore, they took an initially advantage of air space and crash the British and Russian air force. Fortunately, Nazi German did not have the technology of nuclear bomb. Otherwise, the World War 2 would become a nuclear war, and it would destroy the plant we live.

Furth more, some discoveries such as space technology and space aircraft can both using in military and civil. Several countries such as America can launch a satellite for weather using or spying other country. This technology can bring people convenient. Meantime, it will harm a country’s right and even influence a war. For example, Israel has many modern technology using against to Iran, despite the land area of Israel.  

In one words, we should encourage the civil technology discoveries that bring benefits, as instead, military discoveries would bring nothing but damage.

lmylacoste

The latest science discoveries can bring unlimited people a better life style and make this world better. It would be a win-win solution between countries to share the scientific discovers(noun is needed here) with people all over the world. The world would back to（”back” can be a vi，but it’s so occasional, so “be back will be better）one thousand years before if old generation scientists kept their discoveries inside their mother country or company. Ironically, few countries would use the latest discoveries into military manufacturing therefore broke the world peace. So, we must restrict some nuclear technology but welcome civil discoveries.

“If I saw further, it was because I stood on the shoulders of giants.” said Isaac Newton. He accumulated all the physical theory from all over the world, then（has not a “conj” form）he discovered the universal gravitation and the three laws of motion. We would never have a chance to take airplane for traveling without his theory if his mother country restricted publish（publication is correct） of his theory. Henry Ford is the founder of assembly line that increasesthe speed of manufacturing and decreases the price of products, so ordinary family can afford a car. Other country and company（+s will be a general trend） borrow his creation and use it to into own manufactory. We cannot image how expensive the product would be without his sharing of assembly line, even worst (even worse)(How this example embodies the progressive relationship? The consequences without ALà the living standard recedes), our living standard would back to one hundred years ago.

Some sensitive technologies such as nuclear weapon and missiles that will bring nothing but damages, and it even damaged the world peace. To illustrate this, Nazi German’s scientists discovered the latest jet engine technology; therefore, they took an initially advantage of air space and crash（+ed） the British and Russian air force. Fortunately, Nazi German did not have the technology of nuclear bomb. Otherwise, the World War 2 would become a nuclear war, and it would destroy the plant（planet） we live.

The example in this para is not persuasive enough to lend a hand to the argument，since “crash the air force” is not equal to “break the peace”, you can add something additional as G wanted to conquer the world, kill the innocent races, and seize the scarce resources, elevating conflicts and bringing the people into chaos.

Furthermore, some discoveries such as space technology and space aircraft can both using in military and civil. Several countries such as America can launch a satellite for weather using(delete it，and the meaning will be clearer) or spying other country. This technology can bring people convenient. Meantime, it will harm a country’s right(what do you mean by the right of a country? Independence, freedom or constituationalizing?) and even influence a war. For example, Israel has many modern technology using against to Iran, despite the land area of Israel.

In one words( no “s”), we should encourage the civil technology discoveries that bring benefits, as instead(there is not such a set phrase), military discoveries would bring nothing but damage.



It’s a passage with various vocabulary and sentence structure and demonstrated by rich and detailed examples.

The most important weakness worth being noticed is that the carefulness to check the errors in set phrase and other syntax problems like plural.

AnthonySummer

不好意思今天的作文要8點才能交了。

AnthonySummer

11月11日
to Rosa， 由於地區差異原因，你的每次修改，英文都會擠在一起，能不能直接貼一個word文檔啊！O(∩_∩)O謝謝！
It is more important to choose friends that have fun together than to choose friends that will help you when you need them. Please use specific details and examples to support your opinion.

With the developing of social networking such as Face Book and helping of modern high-speed car, we can have more friends than ever before. Some people prefer to have friends with mutual interesting, so they can have fun together; others prefer friends with benefits, so friends can help us when we in need. In my point of view, I upright that we should have friends who can help us.

I spent my entirely summer holiday travel to the states two years ago, I met many new friends there, and we shared lots of interesting and memorable experience. We met by accident and keep in touch via Face book and email, but due to the long distance gap and lack of communication, we am impossible to know each deep in the heart and maintain a good relationship, and friendship would disappear. Therefore, I would choose to have friends who can help me, not too many, but we can truly understand each other. Like most famous television episodes "friends". Six people live in one city become good friends, the most thing they need is a friend, like an old saying: " a friends in need is a friends indeed." and I think the most memorable and touchable parts in the show is that when Rachel in trouble, all of her friends would give her a hand.

I took part in many groups such as swimming club when I was in college. We came together with common interesting. We trained together in the swimming pool, helped each other improve swimming skill, the benefit was that our body become stronger and healthier, and we are skillful, we also won a national college amateur swimming competition. As instance, I had a crash on computer games, and I played the game with my classmates, we have much fun together but after the interesting of the game disappeared, we hardly see each other even we live nearby. With the time goes by, I tend have more serious and senior friends, that is true we have some fun together, but I need to take more responsibility after I start to work. I need cut some game friends, so I have more time to know more life-long friends and who can help on my career.

From other dimensions, people would have several kinds of friends when they growing up. Teenager would have friends who emphasize sharing activities such play toys together and geographical closeness. So children can have more friends sharing fun.

With the reasons above, I believe it is more important to choose friends who can help you than who will have fun together. That is not to say, of course, the other points of view are completely without merit. Nevertheless, I believe the reasons I have provided in favor of my point of view are stronger.

amissrosa

學長你好,我明天再將批改的檔案給你,今天太忙了,抱歉抱歉><