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kchszy061ban

TPO 9

The professor totally questioned the assertion made in the reading text. Actually,the professor believes that the author in the reading is too optimistic about the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine,and contends that hydrogen is not a solution to this problem.

First,hydrogen,as claimed by the professor,is not easy to access as the author says in the reading text. The fact is that even hydrogen is present in water,first it should be isolated before it can be used as fuel. The professor also emphasizes that hydrogen is difficult to store and should be keep in liquid state in order to use. Therefore,hydrogen is not easy to produce and store. Thus the assessment in the passage is no more than just imagination.

Second,the lecturer also points out that burning of hydrogen indeed bring no pollution to the environment,but the process to produce hydrogen need energy which comes from burning of coal or oil. Then,the process of producing hydrogen would pollute the atmosphere. The opinion in the reading text is weak and not practical at all.

Third,evidence shows that the material which used to produce the hydrogen engine is too expensive,the cheap material is so far to be accessable. The professor claims that using hydrogen engine is not cheap at all.

kchszy061ban

6月26日100206 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.

Nowadays,many countries across the world undergo a great economic depression,such as the E.U area. lots of people are talking about the future trend of the world economy. One of the question retates to this discussion is whether high school students should be required to take a basic econimic course. Some people believe that high school students do not need such a course,they already have to many courses to study,and basic economics is uesless for them if they do not major in ecomics after they enter university. While ohters think that basci economics has a close link to everyday life,and when their children studying in college or after they get married,they need to have some knowledge about economics. Personally speaking,I agree with the statement that high school students should take this course.

Let us talk about the first benefit of taking a course on basic economics. By taking basic economics course,high school students could obtain the basic knowledge of the commercial aspect of life. As economics is about analyzing the production,distribution,and consumption of goods and services,which connect tightly to students' daily life. Then students could understand the role of some economic phenomena,such as the fluctuation of the price and deposit rate. Students will use these knowlege when they grow up. Thus,taking general economics course is good for students.

Another benefit is that students would interest in how to earn their own money and then learn how to budget their money properly if they take a course on economics. When students are at primary school and middle school,they are not old enough to do part-time jobs. While when they go to high school,they are old enough to take some work experiences in order to cultivate their indenpendence and also make them try to relieve the economic bardens on their parents partly.

Also,a general economic course could benefit high students on their study on other subjects. Economics is a complementation to natural science like math,chemistry,physics,etc. The methods used in economics are different with which used in natural,because the solution to a scientific problem may be only one,while the solutions to econimic question are various,according to the concrete situation. It is useful for high school students to know how to solve some problems about their daily supply and demand.

Of course,add new course to high school students will increase their load. Also,to carry it out means that the school need to hire new teachers and the increase of credit hours to students. However,from the benefits I listed above,it is safe to draw the conclutsion that it is necessary for high school students to take a basic economics course.

zombiee

6月25日101022NADo you agree or disagree with the following statement? The advice from grandparents has no use for their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 5o years.

No one can deny the fact that society had changed a lot during the past fifty years. New technoligies such as the Interent,cell phone,robots and so many biological inventions,all of these have brought great changes to modern people. Also,evevyone would agree that both old people and young people can enjoy the benefits and convenice of these technologies. While,some aspects which youngsters do not have is that old people like our grandparents have years of experiences,and the wisdom to deal with difficulties in life,to face the misfortunes of evevy kind,most importantly,they know the methods to solve these problems. Thus,the above statament is not correct in some degree.

In the first place,some life experiences do not change even the society may alter dramaticly. Some social norms and custom keep unchange for several hundreds of years,not to mention only fifty years. All of the members of the society should conform to these social regulations to ensure the stablity of the society,despite the age difference of them. So,grandparents' advice on these things is indeed helpful for their grandchildren. Such as in my country,when people visit a Muslim's house,there are so many things that they should pay attention to,like not eat pork. If they do so,it will make the host unhappy,and the host would think you smirch their religion. So,old people' advice has its use on these things,and their grandchildren should listen to them to avoid making mistakes.

Then,children can learn lessons from the mistakes made by their grandparents,and hopefully can aviod making the same mistakes again. Old people had made so many mistake in their life,and some of the quesions might be encountered by their garandchildren. Thus,by realizing and learning from the mistakes of their grandparents,young children can develop quichly with less setback than all depend on their own efforts. Most of the children nowadays are required to go to schools to study,and they will meet some problems in their learning process. Then,their grandparents might confront the same problems fifty year ago. Becasue some of the basic knowledge are remian the same even the courses in the university may changed a lot because of the progresses of science and technology. Thus,grandparents advice on these problems is really useful for their grandchildren to make progresses quickly.

Finally,young children can have a different perspective of view on the difficulties they face,even their grandparents' advice may not seem useful for them to sovle the question. The develoopment of the society is a contiuneous process,so children need to learn how their grandparents' opinion on the same question in order to broaden their horizon. At the same time they can have a better understanding of their grandparents.

Of course,some advice may seem useless,such as grandparents' advice on the use of Inernet or on the knowledge on some specific areas which are developing so quickly. But,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that the advice from our grandparents is useful even the society had changed a lot in the past fifty years.

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/26 11:42:28)

No one can deny the fact that society had changed a lot during the past fifty years. New technoligies such as the Interent,cell phone,robots and so many biological inventions不知道可以不可以这样用，只知道so on,so forth如果可以请告知谢谢,不清楚为什么老用逗号all of these have brought great changes to modern people. Also,evevyone would agree that both old people and young people can enjoy the benefits and convenice of these technologies. While,some aspects换个词 which youngsters do not have is that old people like our grandparents have years of experiences,and the wisdom to deal with difficulties in life,to face the misfortunes of evevy kind,most importantly,they know the methods to solve these problems. 和前面不平行Thus,the above statament is not correct in some degree.

In the first place,some life experiences do not change even the society may alter dramaticly. Some social norms and custom keep unchange for several hundreds of years,not to mention only fifty years. All of the members of the society should conform to these social regulations to ensure the stablity of the society,despite the age difference of them. So,grandparents' advice on these things is indeed helpful for their grandchildren. Such as in my country,when people visit a Muslim's house,there are so many things that they should pay attention to,like not eat pork.举例到底用like还是such as?If they do so,it will make the host unhappy,and the host would think you smirch their religion. So,old people' advice has its use on these things,and their grandchildren should listen to them to avoid making mistakes.
这个例子可以举但是没有针对性，因为任何人都可以提出这种advice不是非得grandparents
Then,children can learn lessons from the mistakes made by their grandparents是他们当时犯的错还是现在犯的错这个应该交代否则很难理解,and hopefully can aviod making the same mistakes again. Old people had made so many mistake in their life无厘头语言,and some of the quesions might be encountered by their garandchildren. Thus,by realizing and learning from the mistakes of their grandparents,young children can develop quichly with less setback than all depend on their own efforts. Most of the children nowadays are required to go to schools to study,and they will meet some problems in their learning process. Then,their grandparents might confront the same problems fifty year ago. Becasue some of the basic knowledge are remian the same even the courses in the university may changed a lot because of the progresses of science and technology. Thus,grandparents advice on these problems is really useful for their grandchildren to make progresses quickly.

Finally,young children can have a different perspective of view on the difficulties they face,even their grandparents' advice may not seem useful for them to sovle the question. The develoopment of the society is a contiuneous process,so children need to learn how their grandparents' opinion on the same question in order to broaden their horizon. At the same time they can have a better understanding of their grandparents.

Of course,some advice may seem useless,such as grandparents' advice on the use of Inernet or on the knowledge on some specific areas which are developing so quickly科技发展快的结果必定是老人知识落伍吗，这句话逻辑有问题. But,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that the advice from our grandparents is useful even the society had changed a lot in the past fifty years.


1.拼写先用word查一便，这种错误就不用说了
2.表达有问题，不太明确
3.举例无针对性，不深入

kchszy061ban

1 : constituting an unspecified number <can only read so many chapters each night>
2 : constituting a group or pack <behaved like so many animals>

多谢改正额，改的太好了，都是我最弱的地方，嘿嘿。确实是，  因为是限时写，是在txt格式写的，辛苦你了！

DanielleZ

Nowadays, many countries across the worldundergo a great economic depression, such as the E.U area.(这个时事例子用的非常好) lots ofpeople are talking about the future trend of the world economy. One of thequestion retates to this discussion is whether high schoolstudents should be required to take a basic econimic course. Some people believe that high schoolstudents do not need such a course, they already have to many courses to study, and basic economics（economical knowledge） is uesless for them if they do not major in ecomics after they enter university. While ohtersthink that basci economics has a close link to everyday life, andwhen their children studying(arestudying) in college orafter they get married, they need to have some knowledge about economics.Personally speaking, I agree with the statement that high school studentsshould take this course.

Let us talk about the first benefit of taking acourse on basic economics. By taking basic economics course, high schoolstudents could obtain the basic knowledge of the commercial aspects oflife. As economics is about analyzing(analysisof) theproduction, distribution, and consumption of goods and services, which connecttightly to students' daily life. Then students could understand the role ofsome economic phenomenas, such as the fluctuation of the price anddeposit rate. Students will use these knowlege when they grow up. Thus, taking generaleconomics course is good for students.

Another benefit is that students would become (我觉得加个become会好一些)interest in how to earn their own money（个人建议哈~我觉得也可以写成earn moneyby themselves） and then learn how to budget their moneyproperly if they take a course on economics. Whenstudents are at primary school and middle school, they are not old enough to dopart-time jobs. While when they go to high school, they are old enough to takesome work(这两句话的句式完全一样，所以显得比较直白，banban可以尝试用另一句话试试的~) experiences in order to cultivate their indenpendence and also make them try to relieve the economic bardens（burden） on theirparents partly.

Also, a general economic course could benefit highstudents on their study on other subjects.(我觉得这段的主题句没有说明白，benefit应该说的更清楚一些。) Economics is a complementation to naturalscience like math, chemistry, physics, etc(最好不要用这种缩写，用and so the forth，或者and soon都可以的).The methods used in economics are different with (the method) which used in natural subjects, because the solution to a scientific problemmay be only one, while the solutions to (an) econimic question are various, according to theconcrete situation. It is useful for high school students to know how to solvesome problems about their daily supply and demand.

Of course, add new course to high school studentswill increase their (working)load. Also, to carry it out means that theschool need to hire new teachers and the increase ofcredit hours to students. However,from the benefits I listed above, it is safe to draw the conclutsion that it is necessary for high school studentsto take a basic economics course.(总结段落感觉写learning economic 的坏处太多了，之前的论点没有提到)
这篇文章的三个论点讨论的都有点空洞。banban可以尝试着写的更具体一些呢。
还有啊，我6.26的作文还没有po上来，我这几天停一下写作文，把200句背完再写呢。
到时候我写好了，通知你，再麻烦你帮我改哦~

超级无敌小鹤鹤

TPO 9
The professor totally questioned the assertion made in the reading text. Actually,the professor believes that the author in the reading is too optimistic about the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine,and contends that hydrogen is not a solution to this problem(这儿后半句还不如去掉好~~ 因为这儿this problem 到底是什么problem你并没说~~~).(你的这种开头的写法给我感觉有一点点太突然。我觉得你开头可以来一句类似于 The reading and the lecture both discuss the energy for cars 这之后在讲professor怎么怎么样 会比较好~~~)

First,hydrogen,as claimed by the professor,is not easy to access as the author says in the reading text. The fact is that，(加入一个逗号，把后面的even什么的最为插入语) even hydrogen is present in water,first it should be isolated before it can be used as fuel. The professor also emphasizes that hydrogen is difficult to store and should be keep in liquid state in order to use. Therefore,hydrogen is not easy to produce and store. Thus the assessment in the passage is no more than just imagination.

Second,the lecturer also points out that burning of hydrogen indeed bring no pollution to the environment,but the process to produce hydrogen need energy which comes from burning of coal or oil. Then,the process of producing hydrogen would pollute the atmosphere.  and The opinion in the reading text is thus weak and not practical at all.

Third,evidence shows that the material which used to produce the hydrogen engine is too expensive, and the cheap material is so far to be accessable. so The professor claims that using hydrogen engine is not cheap at all.

基本上没什么问题，唯一就是注意一下多用一些连接词是的文章结构更加紧密一些~~~

kchszy061ban

TPO 9
The professor totally questioned the assertion made in the reading text. Actually,the professor believes that the author in the reading is too optimistic about the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine,and contends that hydrogen is not a solution to this problem(这儿后半句还不如去掉好~~ 因为这儿this problem 到底是什么problem你并没说~~~).(你的这种开头的写法给我感觉有一点点太突然。我觉得你开头可以来一句类似于 The reading and the lecture both discuss the energy for cars 这之后在讲professor怎么怎么样 会比较好~~~)

First,hydrogen,as claimed by the professor,is not easy to access as the author says in the reading text. The fact is that，(加入一个逗号，把后面的even什么的最为插入语) even hydrogen is present in water,first it should be isolated before it can be used as fuel. The professor also emphasizes that hydrogen is difficult to store and should be keep in liquid state in order to use. Therefore,hydrogen is not easy to produce and store. Thus the assessment in the passage is no more than just imagination.

Second,the lecturer also points out that burning of hydrogen indeed bring no pollution to the environment,but the process to produce hydrogen need energy which comes from burning of coal or oil. Then,the process of producing hydrogen would pollute the atmosphere.  and The opinion in the reading text is thus weak and not practical at all.

Third,evidence shows that the material which used to produce the hydrogen engine is too expensive, and the cheap material is so far to be accessable. so The professor claims that using hydrogen engine is not cheap at all.

基本上没什么问题，唯一就是注意一下多用一些连接词是的文章结构更加紧密一些~~~

-- by 会员 超级无敌小鹤鹤 (2012/6/27 20:00:38)

多谢鹤鹤大神修改。  我多背些连接词去

kchszy061ban

6月27日101009NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

People are always wondering whether the countryside or the city is the ideal place to take better care of their families. If there is on preference-which I take leave to make a conclusion-then it is the countryside rather than the city that provides people with optimal conditions to look after their family members. There widespread teatimonies for it and the primary ones are listed as follows.

The foremost reason for choosing the rural areas is the soothing and comfortable life provided by the pastoral view. Hardly anyone could deny the fact that the fresh atmoshpere-which is rich in negative oxygen ion,less carbon dioxide and even no sulfur dioxide,is good for people health. Also,people can be more close to the nature in the countryside. They can enjoy listening to birds' warble from the branch,the breathtaking sight of the sunrise in the east and sunset in the west,the brightness of the stars in the Milky Way. All of this could offer countless pleasure to family members. Under these conditions,young family members can grow healthily,old members can enjoy the beauty of the nature.

Another advantage to better take care people' family is less social life compared to the forever-lasting parties,feasts and so many meetings which reduce people' time with their family. How satisfactory and refreshing it could be to have dinner together with you family members after a busy day. Our family members who need to be taken care of are children or old parents and grandparents,they demand less material conditions than us. Thus the tranquil and relaxing atmosphere in the rural areas is suitable for their needs.

Moreover,people in the rural areas live abdantly with heathy and natural food. Food provided in the city comes from the rural areas by transporting for a long distance,the quality can not compared with those in the rural areas. Furthermore,the safety can not be completely endured because the use of fertilizer and pesticides in modern mass productin agriculture. Therefore,with plenty of fresh fruits,vegetables,milk and meat in the rural areas,people could definetely better take car of there family with healthy food.

Of course,the fact that the opportunities in studies and the accesses to various people involved in different culture are all advantages for living in the cities. However,these does not prevent us from concluding that rural areas is a better place to look after our family members. Moreover,the rapid growing of modern transportation system such as the freeway and high quality country road makes it possible to drive to the nearby city in only a few hours. Meanwhile,the new communication technologies like cell phone and Internet connect the countryside tightly to other parts of the world. Thus transportation and communication are not problems for current people who lived in the countryside. Thus,if one want to choose a place to better take care of their families,I would recommend the rural areas.

kchszy061ban

TPO 11 综合


The author of the reading text believes that it is troubling that youngsters are less interesting in reading literature,novels,plays and poems nowadays. However,the professor in the lecture thinks that the judegment is just too pessimistic.

First,the professor disagree with the assertion that only literature offers intellectual stimulation to young people. Other forms of reading books like science,history and politics are of high quality as literature. At the same time,they can stimulate youngsters' imagination. Thus,the explaination made in the reading text is unfounded.

Second,the professor points out that literature is not the only high quality form in modern culture. Others like music and movies are brilliant and valuable too. And according to the professor, the society is changing,as well as the stardands to judge a high quality of general culture. Moreover,music and movies are more directly to the audience that paper-based reading books. This directly casts doubt in the reading text.

Third,the professor believes that the decline of modern literature is not because of the reader,but the reason is that modern writters of literature make their works difficult to understand. Furthermore,earlier generations of readers may not have read a lot of today's literature either. So,the reading text's opinion is weakened by the professor's fresh opinion.

瓜瓜不瓜

6月27日
红色为错误 蓝色为建议 紫色为总评
101009NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

People are always wondering whether the countryside or the city is the ideal place to take better care of their families.（whether的用法错了额，怎么可以跟两个选择呢。。直接就说 With more and more people move to cities, some stare to wonder whether the city is the ideal place to take better care of their families） If there is on preference-which I take leave to (没见过这个表达，小K确定么？）make a conclusion-then it is the countryside rather than the city that provides people with optimal conditions to look after their family members. There widespread teatimonies （这个词神马意思？我的金山词霸木有查到o(╯□╰)o）for it and the primary ones are listed as follows.

The foremost reason for choosing the rural areas is the soothing and comfortable life provided by the pastoral view. Hardly anyone could deny the fact that the fresh atmoshpere-which is rich in negative oxygen ion,less carbon dioxide and even no sulfur dioxide,is good for people health. Also,people can be more close to the nature in the countryside. They can enjoy listening to birds' warble from the branch,the breathtaking sight of the sunrise in the east and sunset in the west,the brightness of the stars in the Milky Way.（enjoy后面的成分木有平行，最好改成平行结构，把listening去掉就可以了） All of this could offer countless pleasure to family members. Under these conditions,young family members can grow healthily,old members can enjoy the beauty of the nature.

Another advantage to better take care people' family （直接family就好了）is less social life compared to the forever-lasting parties,feasts and so many meetings which reduce people'（+s） time with their family. How satisfactory and refreshing it could be to have dinner together with you family members after a busy day. Our family members who need to be taken care of are children or old parents and grandparents,（两个完整句之间缺少连词）they demand less material conditions than us. Thus the tranquil and relaxing atmosphere in the rural areas is suitable for their needs.

Moreover,people in the rural areas live abdantly with heathy and natural food. Food provided in the city comes from the rural areas by transporting for a long distance,the quality can not compared with those in the rural areas. Furthermore,the safety can not be completely endured because the use of fertilizer and pesticides in modern mass productin agriculture. Therefore,with plenty of fresh fruits,vegetables,milk and meat in the rural areas,people could definetely better take car of there family with healthy food.

Of course,the fact that the opportunities in studies and the accesses to various people involved in different culture are all advantages for living in the cities. However,these does not prevent us from concluding that rural areas is a better place to look after our family members. Moreover,the rapid growing of modern transportation system such as the freeway and high quality country road makes it possible to drive to the nearby city in only a few hours. Meanwhile,the new communication technologies like cell phone and Internet connect the countryside tightly to other parts of the world. Thus transportation and communication are not problems for current people who lived in the countryside. Thus,if one want to choose a place to better take care of their families,I would recommend the rural areas. （这一段的让步挺好的，但是建议将conclusion从里面分开来单独成段）


总评：瓜瓜最近老是迟到T.T 不好意思
         小错误有点多，要尽量改正。
         观点逻辑挺好的，但是最后一段最好将让步和conclusion分成两段。
        一起加油