【写作小分队】prodliu 作文，欢迎拍砖啊，越多越好

prodliu

tpo6综合
The lecturer contradicts the criticisms stated in passage by talking that these criticisms show prejudices on communal online encyclopedia and ignore some achievements it has made.  And the speaker uses three arguments to substantiate his idea.

To begin with, the passage discusses that people to the communal online encyclopedia usually lack professional skills, and then may make errors. On the contrary, the professor claims that the traditional encyclopedias have never been close to perfectly accurate and sometimes it is impossible to find a really comprehensive reference without any mistakes.  He also points out that it is easy for online encyclopedias to correct mistakes, while errors within the traditional encyclopedias need several years to be devised.

Moreover, the author demonstrates that the online encyclopedias are vulnerable target to hackers. But, the lecturer mentions two strategies of online encyclopedias to protect from hacking. The first one is that they only offer some vital articles in read format, so that no one can change it. Another strategy is hiring some special editors whose job is to monitor all articles. Above solutions can prevent such accidents narrated in the passage from happening.

Finally, the professor raise a issue that the problem of tradition encyclopedias is the limited space that as a result they have to choose the important articles and omit unimportant ones. However, the problem for the traditional version is not an issue for online encyclopedias. They can post a great deal of articles and satisfy the great diversity of users' interests. More amazingly, the diversity of its articles is one of their strongest advantages.

To sum up, the contents stated in the passage are totally jeopardized by the speaker and the professor has completely different opinions about the online encyclopedias.

prodliu

4月9日 110415 NA Which is more important: having more facilities or hiring more teachers?
Recently, there is a common phenomenon that many universities allot a majority of their financial budget to perfect facilities or purchase advanced equipment. Is this the way if should be? I am not supportive of this idea, and as far as I am concerned, an increasing mount of budget should be allotted to teachers’ system.

In ancient China, an educator, a great thinker, and a social philosopher, Confucius once said that a teacher is who can propagate the doctrine，impart professional knowledge，and resolve doubts. His philosophies influenced many generations, and people usually regard his words as the truth. Pretty apparently, Confucius points out three characteristics of a teacher, and each attribute demonstrates a key factor, that is teachers will involve more communication with students. Presenting knowledge is not the only goal of a teacher. He or she usually guides students to reach the destination of the truth and find the solution to a question all by themselves. We all know that education is not complete with graduation, and people will face many issues to learn and resolve, if we only the truth but seldom possess the method, I do not think that we can handle them. From this point, facilities or equipment provide no more than some vivid pictures or videos, students cannot establish mind connections with them, and they indeed offers helps during classes, but the vital part in study is teachers.

A grant building will sooner or later fade, but the feat left by those honorable teachers will not. Our students can be encouraged stimulated by teachers they esteemed. Take my university for example. My college is founded by Premier Zhou. And every time I pass through a bust of him, I will remember what he have contributed to our nation, be moved by his dedication, and then make a resolution to contribute to society. However, those facilities cannot provide things like that.

Admittedly, we cannot ignore the important role of facilities. For instance, we can have a better understanding of a topic through a computer, which offers more information; and teachers may introduce a theory more generalized based on some applications. But, I have to maintain that these useful equipment just play a role in assisting in course, our teachers are the main actors in this knowledge stage.

We cannot emphasize the importance of teachers too much, and it pays for schools, from elementary schools to universities, to pay more attention to the improvement of teachers’ abilities. Simultaneously, some functional facilities can be employed to help qualified teachers impart knowledge.

Crystaljoy

4月7日 110513 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One of the ways that parents can help children be ready for adult life is to ask them to do a part-time job.


With a rapid development of science and technology, our social situation changes fast.（前半句俗气，后半句歧义！Over the past few decades, our world is developing at an unparalleled speed.）In order to make（help吧） their children adapt to this fast changing society, most parents suggest them to do a part-time job. From my personal observation, I highly recommend this idea for the following reasons. （弄得跟六级作文似的）

There is a gap between the knowledge we earned( obtained 有earn the knowledge? ) from college studying (study名词优与Ving) and experience gained from social life. Too often we observed that plenty students complaint (complained你写的是名词) that some knowledge and skills obtained from academic classes cannot be applied in a real situation, and that is the reason why the students need to participate（+in） more social activities, such as voluntary programs or part-time job. From these activities, young people can not only broaden their horizons, but also become(get吧) more familiar with the situation out of the ivory tower. For instance, in the college, we usually fix a question (什么意思啊) and find (seek out吧) the solution straightforwardly. However, in reality, sometimes we need to consider the situation thoroughly and logically before we reach the final solutions.

An advantage of taking part-time job is that students can apply the knowledge from books into a working place（a real practice）. Through the daily work, we will discover some domains that needed (need 为啥要被动) to improve(be improved 要被动), and when we back to university, we can just study (further our study in) these specific fields（+ to diversify our educational backgrounds感觉你说的不妥啊，实习回来都是更多充电，怎么会just study certain subjects）. Take my own experience for example, last year I did an internship at a financial department (不是说让你最好加个具体的公司名字嘛？不听老人言。。。). During dealing with the cases, I figured out that my analysis ability is weak. Fortunately, my university just offers a course about logical analysis. Finally I made up this gap through my assiduousstudying（study）.

Involving within social life with a young age will ensureyoungsters become mature. (这句各种不顺，Involve被动吧，ensure sth/that 吧。改改：Involving youngsters in social life at an early age can better prepare them for challenges they will face in careers and lives.)A majority offamily (today’s families) have only one child due to the family plan policy (family planning policy 固定的), that lead to a phenomenon that (+most 严谨点) parents will spoil their children badly. As a result, this generation has little knowledge about the truth of society. Sometimes they cannot endure unequal treatments or impolite words. Thus, such kind of social activities can make young people grown up（仿佛是对的，但是你能给我讲讲这个是原型还是变形嘛，是V还是adj, 我自己查了也不会。） both mentally and physically.

Admittedly, some people will argue that too early taking part in job （too early移到后面顺）may distract students from study, concerning that students usually have a lot of courses. But, in some degree, I believe that a relative (relatively) proper mount（amount）of social activities will benefit students a lot.

Based on the reasons above, I can draw a conclusion that it is beneficial for the young to do a part-time job as long as it will not conflict (+with) their normal life, because such social activity will strong(没动词好不好 build ) young people’s fortitude and endurance.



我觉得这一篇加上过渡词更好，因为没有明显的转的标志，段落之间也没衔接。句子毛病也相对多了一点吧。

每次改完你的都觉得把我自己掏空了，我也回去得recharge myself了。

Crystaljoy

" Is this the way if should be? "

K！ 不小心瞥见一句。你这么坚持啊。

I believe, You are wasting other's time and energy !!!

喵喵了个咪

改4月9日 110415 NA Which is more important: having more facilities or hiring more teachers?



Recently, there is a common phenomenon that many universities allot a majority of their financial budget to perfect facilities or purchase advanced equipment. Is this the way if should be?(是想说it should be吗？用if句尾应该加or not吧) I am not supportive of this idea, and as far as I am concerned, an increasing mount of budget should be allotted to teachers’ system.

In ancient China, an educator, a great thinker, and a social philosopher, Confucius once said that a teacher is who can propagate the doctrine，impart professional knowledge，and resolve doubts. His philosophies influenced many generations, and people usually regard his words as the truth. Pretty apparently, Confucius points out three characteristics of a teacher, and each attribute demonstrates a key factor, that is teachers will involve more communication with students. Presenting knowledge is not the only goal of a teacher. He or she usually guides students to reach the destination of the truth and find the solution to a question all by themselves. We all know that education is not complete with graduation, and people will face many issues to learn and resolve, if we only realize the truth but seldom possess the method, I do not think that we can handle them. From this point, facilities or equipment provide no more than some vivid pictures or videos, students cannot establish mind connections with them, and they indeed offers(offer主谓一致) helps during classes, but the vital part in study is teachers.(我觉得这段举的孔子的例子与论点应该重点论述老师可以与学生有更多的交流，文中的传播知识神马的就可以省略了，因为不能突出老师与设备之间的矛盾，显示老师更为重要。)

A grant building will sooner or later fade, but the feat left by those honorable teachers will not. Our students can be encouraged and stimulated by teachers they esteemed. Take my university for example. My college is founded by Premier Zhou. And every time I pass through a bust of him, I will(时态不对，用still比较好) remember what he have contributed to our nation, be moved by his dedication, and then make a resolution to contribute to society. However, those facilities cannot provide things like that.

Admittedly, we cannot ignore the important role of facilities. For instance, we can have a better understanding of a topic through a computer, which offers more information; and teachers may introduce a theory more generalized based(没有必要用被动) on some applications. But, I have to maintain that these useful equipment just play a role in assisting in course, our teachers are the main actors in this knowledge stage.(没有具体反驳这段比设备能让我们更好的理解topic，只是说teachers are the main actors没有论据。)

We cannot emphasize the importance of teachers too much, and it pays for schools, from elementary schools to universities, to pay more attention to the improvement of teachers’ abilities. Simultaneously, some functional facilities can be employed to help qualified teachers impart knowledge.(应该加强论点hiring more teachers,否则显得中心不明确了。)



除了一些小的语法错误，文笔很不错的。不愧是大神。

文章的逻辑和结构也比较缜密。除了最后一段有点瑕疵。

然后就是我觉得第三四段的论据不够充分，尤其是第四段的反驳论据，只是说了老师是主导的，并没用用具体的例子来反驳”we cannot ignore the important role of facilities.”

如果我哪里说得不对欢迎大神和我讨论~~

Crystaljoy

Tpo5 综合
In the passage, three theories are stated as likely explanations of the function of Chaco Canyon great houses. However, the lecturer claims that none of the theories is convincing, and points out flaws in each theory.

The first theory in the passage argues that these houses are built for residential purpose. However, the lecturer（deems that） the number of fire places contradicts the residential theory. Normally, if these huge houses can hold hundreds of people, there must have（been） many fire places for people to cook. But, even in one of the biggest houses, there are few fire places, thus this theory is unsupportable.

Another theory (in the reading) states that these great houses are used for a function of storing food. On the contrary, the lecturer argues that a place that had been used for storing food, would leave many traces of maize or maize containers, but in the region of Chaco Canyon, there is little(few可数) indicators about that.

The third theory demonstrates that the houses are used for ceremonial activities due to some broken pots in the excavation. In the lecture, some other materials such as large building tools are found near those pots, and this discovery suggests that these pots may just trashes discarded by workers after finishing their jobs.

To sum up, the contents narrated in the reading are totally jeopardized by the lecturer, and the professors have completely different opinions about the purposes of building these houses.

prodliu

tpo8

TPO8
The speaker disagrees with the statement in the passage that some critics pointed out Chevalier distorted or concocted events in his memoir, instead, she thinks that the Chevalier's memoir is pretty accurate and reliable.

First of all, in the reading, critics mention that Chevalier's wealth came from a Swiss merchant, and actually, he was quite poor. So he must fabricate stories about his wealthy life. However, the lecturer states that the loan from merchant does not mean his poverty. Chevalier did spend a lot of money on parties and gambling, but he did that by selling his things, and sometimes it took several days to wait the money back, and that is the reason he borrowed money.

Moreover, critics challenge the accuracy about the content in the conversations with Voltaire. O n the contrary, the speaker believes that these contents are accurate. According to Chevalier, he wrote everything he could remember during the conversation, and many witnesses confirmed that he consulted notes when composing the memoir.

Furthermore, critics claimed that Chevalier escaped from the jail by bribing officers. Oppositely, the speaker contends that many his contemporary people in the jail had more powerful friends in social, they did not escape by bribing, how did Chevalier can escape by doing so? In addition, some old documents from the prison suggest that the ceilings in the jail were repaired after his escape. This evidence can prove the truth that he escaped from jail.

To sum up, the lecture totally disagrees with the views in the passage, and points out her opinions to support the accuracy of Chevalier’s memoir.

prodliu

马上要考了，写寂静的作文
101210 NA Which do you prefer, finishing one project before starting another or doing two or more projects at the same time?
Nowadays, some people are more inclined to begin to deal with a project after finishing another, while others prefer to process more projects simultaneously. In my point of view, processing projects one by one or handling several tasks at the same time depends on the attribute of projects, because choosing a proper method under a specific situation will yield twice the results with half effort.

On one hand, projects that are closely related with each other could be done at the same time. For one thing, relative projects usually contain similar motif. They either possess an identical mechanism or could be processed by the same method, so dealing with such projects can help you come across a same principle or theory for a better understanding of the issue and inspire you to discover a convenient way to finish them. Take my own experience for example. Once I was engaged in several accounting exams, and at the very beginning, I was confused by so much professional terms. Later, when I made a connection among them I found some identical characteristics and a general way to memorize these terms. As a result, I got high scores in each subject. Furthermore, multitasking method can increase your working efficiency and effectiveness, and save your time and energy from repetitive works.

On the other hand, doing just one project at a time enables people concentrate on it and a better chance to finish it quickly. Confronted with the situation where everything is labeled “limited”, people have to focus on time, human labor, resources etc. in order to finish tasks as soon as possible. In addition, people could deliver high-quality results by doing just one project. Taking responsibility of several projects at the same time means distracted attention, great pressure and tight schedule. According to an experimental statistics, only the feeling of overburden will trigger people’s anxiety that will bring about the memory and initiative in decline. In this way, no matter how hard they try, high rate of mistakes are reported in the group of people who are assigned more workload.

Too often we just follow the stereotype rules and are reluctant to change, especially when we confront with the issues above. What we need is to analyze the situation thoroughly and logically, and then make a decision to choose the most appropriate method to process projects.

prodliu

20091031
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lost of old friends?

Living in the modern society, one has to have a network even though he or she decides to live alone. In the meantime, migration has become a notable demographic feature. Some are reluctant to migrate, worrying about losing old friends. However, in the midst of all technological advances and complexity of interpersonal relationship, that concern is a bit too much. I contend that moving to a new city has nothing to do with the loss of old friends.

One needs only observe the multiple ways and cutting-edge infrastructure by which information is being communicated to understand why the national boundary or oceans can by no means hinder our relationship. Dating 500 years ago when oceans were still insuperable/insurmountable obstacles, people’s friendship was largely determined geographically. Yet the oceans have now becoming highways that significantly shrunk the world in a way that perpetuates one’s friendship with others even when he moves to a new continent.

Nowadays, the world is tightened in a way that has no precedent. The global has witnessed the rise of social networking online, which among many technological advances most directly transforms the way friendship is formed and maintained. People share links, dairies, and videos online, meet friends who share the common interests and chat live, a phenomenon that obviates the need to make friends physically and to be concentrated about losing old friends as a consequence of migration. Despite a distance of thousands of miles away, one could still readily keep in touch with friends.

Besides, more insight into friendship substantiates my point as well. In essence, friendship refers not merely to physical relationship. Alternatively, except for that friends talk, play and travel together, people care about each other spiritually, an element that accounts for truly valuable friendship. In this sense, moving to a new country could at most reduce people’s physical, not spiritual interaction, which is not limited by space or time.

To sum up, I disagree with the statement that moving to live in a new country threatens our old friendship in terms of the advanced communication technologies and the nature of friendship.

gre呀gre

101210 NAWhich do you prefer, finishing one projectbefore starting another or doing two or more projects at the same time?

Nowadays, some people are more inclined tobegin to deal with a project after finishing another, while others prefer toprocess more projects simultaneously. In my point of view, processing projectsone by one or handling several tasks at the same time depends on the attributeof projects, because choosing a proper method under a specific situation will yield twice the results withhalf effort.

On one hand, projects that are closelyrelated with each other could be done at the same time. For one thing, relativeprojects usually contain similar motif（用motif不太好，指的是文艺作品的主题，我觉得换成theme或者core吧？）. They either possess an identical mechanism or could be processedby the same method, so dealing with such projects can help you come across asame principle or theory for a better understanding of the issue and inspireyou to discover a convenient way to finish them. Take my own experience forexample. Once I was engaged in several accounting exams, and at the verybeginning, I was confused by so much professional terms. Later, when I made aconnection among them I found some identical characteristics and a general wayto memorize these terms. As a result, I got high scores in each subject.Furthermore, multitasking method can increase your working efficiency andeffectiveness, and save your time and energy from repetitive works.

On the other hand, doing just one projectat a time enables people concentrate on it and a better chance to finish itquickly. Confronted with the situation where everything is labeled “limited”, peoplehave to focus on time, human labor, resources etc. in order to finish tasks assoon as possible. In addition, people could deliver high-quality results bydoing just one project. Taking responsibility of several projects at the sametime means distracted attention, great pressure and tight schedule. Accordingto an experimental statistics, only the feeling of overburden will triggerpeople’s anxiety that will bring about the memory and initiative in decline. Inthis way, no matter how hard they try, high rate of mistakes are reported inthe group of people who are assigned more workload.

Too often we just follow the stereotyperules and are reluctant to change, especially when we confront with the issuesabove. What we need is to analyze the situation thoroughly and logically, andthen make a decision to choose the most appropriate method to process projects.


膜拜大神！写的太好了我实在是改不出什么了！求教大神的写作方法什么的！