【写作小分队】prodliu 作文，欢迎拍砖啊，越多越好

prodliu

对对，哈哈，谢谢鸟姐

stones4

4月5日
110528NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One can learn a lot about the person from the type of friends the person has.

Some people will judge a person based on his friends, because they hold the philosophy that people with the similar traits are usually more likely to be associated with each other. At the first glance, this argument seems plausible, however, from my personal observation, such a belief may not be impeccable.好开头

Obviously, the personalities of a person can be multifaceted and it is too simple to appraise him or her just based on the friends he or she has. On different occasions, a person can behave totally differently. A seemingly serious man may act casually privately and vice versa that thus havehas entirely different kinds of friends. Take my college teacher for example. Pro. Zhang teaches us accounting and has a lot of friends in academic circle.(my accounting teacher Pro. Zhang who has o lot of friends share the same domain这样感觉是不是更好一些)From this point, people may judge that he is a martinet因为学术所以严肃？, just like many of the cynics who living in the ivory tower.象牙塔里的人很martinet？On the other hand,这里使用表转折的词是否更好 privately, he is a super football fan, and often goes into raptures at the mere mention of the club he supports wins the title. Accordingly, it is unilateral to assess a person based on the friends he or she has.前面已经用过一次喽，换一个用法更赞啦

True, people with separate social status or interests may also be good friends for various reasons. In my dorm, for instance, six students are living in one room, and sharing different attributes有点中式英语的干嚼. Three of us like basketball, and two are big fans of comic, and only I am fond of classic music. Another example is in the famous sitcom ‘Friends’.  Six people of different social backgrounds and distinctive characteristics become closely related. We may never know Joey, an actor, is by looking at his friends Ross, a researcher. Therefore, it is somewhat naïve to say that knowing a person’s friends can help us really know a person.

Admittedly, people with similar concerns tend to be more closely related to each other. To put it exactly, it is usually impossible to let a person who is introverted to make friend with another去掉extroverted one. People with similar social status or interests are more likely to hang out together, because their ways of live are subjected to similar factors. Sometimes housewives may become acquainted with housewives in the supermarket; people who love sports often make friends in the gym. However I still challenge the idea that we can really know about people by what kind of friends they have.这段总体weaken了主要观点哦

I concede that a person is living a kind of circle that contains many people who share the same or similar personalities, but it does not mean that he or she is trapped in that circle, because people can have many kinds of ways of life and various types of friends, so it is difficult to tell a person’s characteristic by estimating his friends.
以下是个人建议，仅供参考

用词很好，但是个人感觉是一边写一边查字典的感觉，有些用法说不出的奇怪，在用词的准确度上要加强。

但总体上，词汇很出彩。



行文整体还是很流畅的！这个很棒！



第三段，反面说的太多了，就在最后一句转了个折哦



句式的变化。在陈述事件上的句子的流畅性远不如议论板块。



还有有些意思可以简单概括的，感觉为了句子加了好多冗长的东西。多点多余了···

Crystaljoy

对对，哈哈，谢谢鸟姐

-- by 会员 prodliu (2012/4/6 11:55:51)

prod姐姐很过分是不是。。。

Crystaljoy

4月5日 110528NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One can learn a lot about the person from the type of friends the person has.

Some people will judge a person based on his friends, because they hold the philosophy that people with the similar traits are usually more likely to be associated with each other. (觉得“有关联”和“做朋友”还是有差别的,仇人也是有关联的。 establish friendships.）At the first glance, this argument seems plausible, however, from my personal observation, such a belief may not be impeccable.

Obviously, the personalities of a person can be multifacet and it is too simple to appraise him or her just based on the friends he or she has. On different occasions, a person can behave totally differently. A seemingly serious man may act casually privately and vice versa that(多余)thus have entirely different kinds of friends.（这句话什么因果啊？诡异~） Take my college teacher for example. Pro. Zhang teaches us accounting and has a lot of friends in academic circle. From this point, people may judge that he is a martinet, just like many of the cynics who（删除） living in the ivory tower. On the other hand, privately, he is a super football fan, and often goes into raptures at the mere mention of the （+news that the 这句话你run on 了吧）club he supports wins the title. Accordingly, it is unilateral to assess a person based on the friends he or she has.

True, people with separate（不懂） social status or interests may also be good friends for various reasons. In my dorm, for instance, six students are living in one room, and sharing different attributes. Three of us like basketball, and（删） two are big fans of comic, and only I am fond of classic music. Another example is in the famous sitcom ‘Friends’.  Six people of different social backgrounds and distinctive characteristics become closely related. We may never know （+what a man）Joey, an actor, is by looking at his friends Ross, a researcher. Therefore, it is somewhat naïve to say that knowing a person’s friends can help us really know a person.

Admittedly, people with similar concerns tend to be more closely related to each other. To put it exactly, it is usually impossible to let a person who is introverted to make friend with another extroverted one. People with similar social status or interests are more likely to hang out together, because their ways of live（life名词）are subjected to similar factors. Sometimes（删除更对称） housewives may become acquainted with housewives in the supermarket; people who love sports often make friends in the gym. However I still challenge the idea that we can really know about people by what kind of friends they have.（这样转折太突兀了吧？至少后面带一句原因吧。）

I concede that a person is living （active in）a kind of circle that contains many people who share the same or similar personalities, but it does not mean that he or she is trapped in that circle, because people can have many kinds of ways of life and various types of friends, so(So另起一句吧，我觉得一句话不能because ,so 都出现) it is difficult to tell a person’s characteristic by estimating his friends.



其实我个人比较支持自己计时写完，然后利用各种工具书修改完善后再拿来对改，这样节省伙伴修改低级语法错误的时间。欣赏高水平的文章获得更大进步嘛。



你为什么把朋友都等价于有关联的人？

Crystaljoy

中文的“人与人关系密切”跟英文的closely related to 不太一样吧。英文表示一种有联系而已，无论好坏的关系。

你可以说 Air is closely related  to people.
              His failure in the exam was closely related to his poor health condition.

这句子我自己造的，我查查牛津再跟你交流。

Crystaljoy

查了查，related 的解释：

1. connected with sb or sth in some way
   eg: a related issue 相关课题
     Much of the crime in this area is related to drug abuse. 这一地区许多犯罪与滥用毒品有关。
2. in the same family
   eg: We are distantly related. 我们是远亲。
3. belonging to the same group
   eg: related species 同一物种

prodliu

prodliu

4月5日 110528NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One can learn a lot about the person from the type of friends the person has.

Some people will judge a person based on his friends, because they hold the philosophy that people with the similar traits are usually more likely to establish friendship. At the first glance, this argument seems plausible, however, from my personal observation, such a belief may not be impeccable.

Obviously, the personalities of a person can be multifacet and it is too simple to appraise him or her just based on the friends he or she has. On different occasions, a person can behave totally differently. A seemingly serious man may act casually privately and vice versa, thus have entirely different kinds of friends. Take my college teacher for example. Pro. Zhang teaches us accounting and has a lot of friends in academic circle. From this point, people may judge that he is a martinet, just like many of the cynics living in the ivory tower. On the other hand, privately, he is a super football fan, and often goes into raptures at the mere mention of the news that the club he supports wins the title. Accordingly, it is unilateral to assess a person based on the friends he or she has.

True, people with separate(不同的) social status or interests may also be good friends for various reasons. In my dorm, for instance, six students are living in one room, and sharing different attributes. Three of us like basketball, two are big fans of comic, and only I am fond of classic music. Another example is in the famous sitcom ‘Friends’.  Six people of different social backgrounds and distinctive characteristics become best friends. We may never know what a men Joey, an actor, is by looking at his friends Ross, a researcher. Therefore, it is somewhat naïve to say that knowing a person’s friends can help us really know a person.

Admittedly, people with similar concerns tend to be more closely related to each other. To put it exactly, it is usually impossible to let a person who is introverted to make friend with another extroverted one. People with similar social status or interests are more likely to hang out together, because their ways of life are subjected to similar factors. Housewives may become acquainted with housewives in the supermarket; people who love sports often make friends in the gym. However, I still challenge the idea that we can really know about people by what kind of friends they have due to the complex of human’s characteristic.

I concede that a person is living a kind of circle that contains many people who share the same or similar personalities, but it does not mean that he or she is trapped in that circle, because people can have many kinds of ways of life and various types of friends. Therefore it is difficult to tell a person’s characteristic by estimating his friends.

Crystaljoy

阅！


蛤蛤，Prod妹子的文章真流畅！

周花生

1.结构很好字数很好语法很好
2,你似乎非常喜欢用大词是考完GRE的后遗症吗？我也有（希望你不要生气。。。。。）
A。cynic只有大写的时候表示犬儒主义者 可是在这里犬儒也似乎不太合适
小写的时候表示one who believes that human conduct is motivated wholly by self-interest
B。martinet是个十足的贬义词 甚至有批评的含义。和臭老九有点像。。。（不过在文中也没什么要紧的）

我用的是韦氏词典和柯林斯  

写的真的很好呢。。！！！