【写作小分队】prodliu 作文，欢迎拍砖啊，越多越好

prodliu

Recently, somefirms plan to offer their employees a three-day work scheme instead of normal fivedays a week. Managers hold the philosophy that working three days a week canincrease company profits, reduce employees’ workload and change unemploymentsituation (revert unemployment). However, I think that this plan is notgorgeous as people believe, and three arguments stated below will substantiatemy point.

First of all, theplan will force company to spend more, because the same mount of work, whichis distributed to employees who work three days a week, will get morepeople involved in company, and add new employees that means more money (capital)to invest. Additionally, the company needs to provide extra training programsto help new employees adapt to job as soon as possible, let alone the medical benefitsand the costlyoffice spaces and computers (facilities). All of these additional expenditureswill cut the profits.


Moreover, themajority of socialists believe that this plan will eventually reduce unemploymentrates. They simply think that less work time may create more available jobs, andthus more workers are needed. However, these people who hold optimisticattitude towardsthe plan ignore an alternative for the company. The employers would ask theiremployees to work overtime in order to make up different. This would pose agreat threat to job pleasant (comfort) and do nothing to solve unemploymentproblem.

Finally, workingthree days will lower the quality of life, rather than improve it. Working timeshorter(shorterworking schedule) can/may更婉转一些 reduce employee’s jobs stability, which(which用的也不对，不能指前面整句话) and this situation would harm their chancesfor a job promotion. Sometimes they are more likely to be the first tolose jobs during an economic downtown (downturn) or financial crisis, because thecompany prefers to retain five days employees in management position for ensurecontinuous coverage and consistent supervision.(翻译一下：因为公司往往更倾向于那些一周工作五天的员工在管理部门，为了可以使公司可以更好的经营和监管下去。这里的continuous coverage可以理解为连续经营，consistent supervision是持续监管。我在economic上看到的)

Admittedly, askingpeople to work three days will definitely provide employees more free-controltime, as they can spend more time with their families such as traveling abroadwith wife and children. Cutting off(我觉得这个不删，这句我的意思说减少工作时间不是唯一的方法) work time is not, however, the only approach possible.Examplesabound in daily life. Many companies choose to arrange a group trip forstimulation. Not only can employees enjoy beautiful sceneries with family members,but also develop the relationship among colleagues. What a win-win plan!

To sum up, I aminclined to work five days a week, for this time-schedule maintain myprofessional skills and motivate me to work assiduously.

Crystaljoy

我枯竭了，以后的问题请Jason来解答。我也要去出去耍耍，不想陷入文字狱了。。。

Recently, somefirms plan to offer their employees a three-day work scheme instead of normal fivedays a week. Managers hold the philosophy that working three days a week canincrease company profits, reduce employees’ workload and change unemployment situation(combat joblessness 这个怎么样~). However, I think that this plan is notgorgeous as people believe, and three arguments stated below will substantiatemy point.

First of all, the plan will force company to spend more, because the same mount of work, which is distributed to employees who work three days a week, will get more people involved in company, and add new employees that means more money (capital) to invest.（这个句子太长了吧。建议and adding new employees means more money to invest） Additionally, the company needs to provide extra training programs to help new employees adapt to job as soon as possible, let alone the medical benefitsand the costly office spaces and computers (facilities). All of these additional expenditures will cut the profits.


Moreover, themajority of socialists believe that this plan will eventually reduce unemploymentrates. They simply think that less work time may create more available jobs, andthus more workers are needed. However, these people who hold optimisticattitude towards the plan ignore an alternative for the company. The employers would ask theiremployees to work overtime in order to make up different. This would pose agreat threat to job pleasant (comfort) （job pleasant是固定搭配么？job pleasure?）and do nothing to solve unemploymentproblem.

Finally, working three days will lower the quality of life, rather than improve it. Working time shorter(shorter working schedule)(我还是觉得你原来那个语序混乱) can/may更婉转一些reduce employee’s jobs stability, which(which用的也不对，不能指前面整句话) and this situation would harm their chances for a job promotion（嗯，那就改成thus would harm....）. Sometimes they are more likely to be the first tolose jobs during an economic downtown (downturn) （你什么意思）or financial crisis, because thecompany prefers to retain five days employees in management position for ensurecontinuous coverage and consistent supervision.(翻译一下：因为公司往往更倾向于那些一周工作五天的员工在管理部门，为了可以使公司可以更好的经营和监管下去。这里的continuous coverage可以理解为连续经营，consistent supervision是持续监管。我在economic上看到的) （好吧，很厉害）

Admittedly, askingpeople to work three days will definitely provide employees more free-controltime, as they can spend more time with their families such as traveling abroadwith wife and children. Cutting off(我觉得这个不删，这句我的意思说减少工作时间不是唯一的方法) （我知道你的意思，就是觉得cutting working hours就可以了，没必要cut off "切断，隔离"）work time is not, however, the only approach possible. Examples abound in daily life.(你怎么这么喜欢这句话，哈哈) Many companies choose to arrange a group trip for （morale）stimulation. Not only can employees enjoy beautiful sceneries with family members,but also develop the relationship（为什么我一直觉得这个词组是谈恋爱的意思）among colleagues. What a win-win plan!

To sum up, I am inclined to work five days a week, for this time-schedule maintain my professional skills and motivate me to work assiduously.（V三单呢~）

prodliu

3月15日 101210 NAWhich do you prefer, finishing one project before starting another or doing twoor more projects at the same time?

Nowadays, some people are more inclined tobegin to deal with a project after completing another, while others prefer todo two or more projects simultaneously. In my point of view, the issue that whetherstarting projects one by one or doing some projects at the same time depends onthe attribute of the projects, because choosing the proper method will make youreceive multiple effectiveness.

First of all, I think that projects thatare closely correlated with each other could be done at the same time. For onething, relative items sometimes contain similar motif. They either possess identicalmechanism or can be analyzed by same method, dealing with theses projects canhelp you find the same principle or theory to handle, and inspire you todiscover a better solution to complete them. Taking my own experience forexample, once I prepared for the term exams in accounting, and I found ageneral way to remember many professional terms, as a result I got high scoresin each subject. Moreover, there is really no need to separate the projectsespecially projects are in common. Starting same projects simultaneously canincrease your working efficient and effectiveness, and save your time to doother things you like, such as swimming, playing the piano or just having abreak.

In addition, while conducting differenttypes of projects, people should cope with one by one. On one hand, focusing onone thing can concentrate your attention to deal with only one project. This coulddefinitely assist you to complete the case more thoroughly, because you havetried your utmost to do. On the other hand, people can make a proper scheduleto handle these projects. We all know it is impossible for us to manage so manydifferent things at the same time, because it could exhaust us, and leads toany project may not be finished perfectly. So, classifying these differentprojects and concentrating your energy on a single project will absolutely improveeffectiveness and avoiding confliction from different projects. For instance,when I was senior, I had an internship at a financial department. And at thebeginning, there are so many projects awaiting for me to deal with, and Iapplied my professional skills to classify the projects, and then focus on eachpart, so it is conceivable that I finished my job perfectly.

To sum up, sometimes we cannot keep our oldrules and are unwillingly to make a change, especially when we face with theabove issue. We need to analyze the situation and choose the best method tosolve difficulties.

Crystaljoy

3.15 修改

Nowadays, some people are more inclined to begin to deal with a project after completing another, while others prefer to do two or more projects simultaneously. In my point of view, the issue that whether （读着别扭，查一下，只发现whether + 句子/to do http://www.thefreedictionary.com/whether）starting projects one by one or doing some projects at the same time depends on the attribute of the projects, because choosing the proper method will make you receive multiple effectiveness.（yield twice the results with half effort.事半功倍）

First of all, I think that projects that are closely correlated with each other could be done at the same time. For one thing, relative items sometimes contain similar motif.They either possess identical mechanism or can be analyzed by same method,（+so 你又来run-on）dealing with theses(HIAHIA~~~你还想用复数？)projects can help you find the same principle or theory to handle, and inspire you to discover a better solution to complete them. Taking my own experience for example, once I prepared for the term exams in accounting, and I（删去） found a general way to remember（memorize） many professional terms, as a result I got high scores in each subject. (这个例子像我这种门外汉就看不懂，准备会计考试看起来就像一件事；each subject 之间的相似性有必要点一下吧？) Moreover, there is really no need to separate the projects especially projects are in common（不顺啊 projects in common/ projects that are in common ）. Starting same projects simultaneously can increase your working efficient（efficiency） and effectiveness, and save your time to do other things you like（读着好像是节省了做其他事情的时间）, such as swimming, playing the piano or just having a break.

In addition, while conducting different types of projects, people should cope with （them）one by one. On one hand, focusing on one thing can concentrate your attention to deal with only one project ( concentrate on 吧，这句纠结的像绕口令). This could definitely assist you to（assist in doing吧）complete the case more thoroughly, because you have tried your utmost to do. On the other hand, people can make a proper schedule to handle these projects. We all know it is impossible for us to manage so many different things at the same time, because it could exhaust us, and leads to any project may not be finished perfectly.（有点混乱 and leads to / leaving imperfect results ）So, classifying these different projects and concentrating your energy on a single project will absolutely improve effectiveness and avoiding (avoid 跟improve并列吧) conflictionfrom different projects (conflicts between each other).For instance, when I was senior, I had an internship at a financial department. And(删去吧。有时候也不是一定总要连接词连接的) at the beginning, there are so many projects awaiting for me to deal with, and I applied my professional skills to classify the projects, and then focus on each part, so it is conceivable that I finished my job perfectly.

To sum up, sometimes we cannot keep our old rules（follow the stereotyped rules）and are (be) unwillingly to make a change, especially when we face with the above issue(s). We need（What we need is强调一下） to analyze the (specific) situation and choose the best（most appropriate 换个） method to solve (tackle 换个) difficulties.



organization, content 还是没的说，好！
觉得你的文章说服力强，这次注意了下，好像是逻辑关联词用的好! 学习~
有的句子太长了，XDF老师上课说世界上最完美的句子是22个单词。怎么也得长短交错着吧，我想。嘿嘿。

prodliu

3月15日 101210 NAWhich do you prefer, finishing one project before starting another or doing twoor more projects at the same time?

Nowadays, some people are more inclined tobegin to deal with a project after completing another, while others prefer todo two or more projects simultaneously. In my point of view, starting projectsone by one or doing some projects at the same time depends on the attribute ofthe projects, because choosing the proper method will yieldtwice the results with half effort.

First of all, I think that projects thatare closely correlated with each other could be done at the same time. For onething, relative items sometimes contain similar motif. They either possess identicalmechanism or can be analyzed by same method, so dealingwith these projects can help you find the same principle or theory to handle,and inspire you to discover a better solution to complete them. Taking my ownexperience for example, once I prepared for the final term exams in accounting,and I(删去)found a general way to remember（memorize） many professional terms, as a result I got high scores in eachsubject. Moreover, there is really no need to separate the projects, especiallyprojects that are in common. Starting sameprojects simultaneously can increase your working efficient (efficiency) and effectiveness, and save your time todo other things you like, such as swimming, playing the piano or just having abreak.

In addition, while conducting differenttypes of projects, people should cope with themone by one. On one hand, focusing on one thing can concentrate your attentionto deal with only one project (换成focusing on one taskwill avoid you making things messed up). This could definitely assistyou to（查了朗文字典，是assistin/with doing ）complete the case more thoroughly, because you have tried yourutmost to do. On the other hand, people can make a proper schedule to handlethese projects. We all know it is impossible for us to manage so many differentthings at the same time, because it could exhaust us, and leadto any project may not be finished perfectly(换成confused us）. So, classifying these different projects and concentrating yourenergy on a single project will absolutely improve effectiveness and avoidingconfliction from different projects(avoid conflictsbetween each other). For instance, when I was senior, I had aninternship at a financial department. At the very beginning, there are so manyprojects awaiting for me to deal with, and I applied my professional skills toclassify the projects, and then focus on each part, so it is conceivable that Ifinished my job perfectly.

To sum up, sometimes we cannot keep our oldrules (follow the stereotype rules) and beunwillingly to make a change, especially when we face with the above issues. Weneed to analyze the specific situation and choose the most appropriate methodto tackle difficulties.

prodliu

110304NA Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement? The most important problems in today’sworld will be solved in our lifetime.

With a rapid development of technology, more industriesdischarged more contaminated waste， such asgreenhouse gases and polluted water, into our environment, and this phenomenonhas a detrimental effect on human’s health. In view of the seriousness of theseproblems, effective measures should be taken before things get worse.Personally, I persist that these important problems that are closely related topeople’s daily life can be solved in our lifetime as long as we take effort toconfront and to tackle.

To begin with, I think that it is our responsibilities tosolve these problems. Decade years, we hold a stereotype philosophy that theresources are so affluent that we can consume unscrupulously. But humans seemto fail to take into account the fact that every resource will be depletedsooner or later, we just make full use of the resource without considering theoutcome when the resource run out. For example, the petroleum, the naturalgases and the coal are non-renewable resources, and are essential materials forhuman beings. Our cars need petroleum, and people need gases to cook and keep warm.If we consume them without a well-planned schedule, we will pay for it in thefuture. Thus, I believe that only if people contemplate the consequence ofthese problems and spend no effort to deal with them, we can control thesituation and achieve sustainable development.

Moreover, our technological improvements guarantee us toresolve these problems. Actually, our scientists have developed some usefulmethods to find solutions to deal with these problems. For instance, scientistsdiscover a kind of bacteria can disintegrate the toxic waste into water andnon-toxic substances and this invention could not only govern the contaminationaround environment, but also figure out a direction towards potentialsolutions.  Thus, I can envision that nottoo far in the future, we can find ways to protect our environment.

Finally, we need to solve these problems for ourdescendants. We cannot hold the theory that it is best to use the resourceswhile it is still economically profitable to do so, and we need to protect themfor our children. If we do not face them and leave them to the next generation,the situation may become worse that can be a disaster for our descendants. Takingwater resource for example, water is the basic resource we live by, and now weface a serious water-depletion problem, if we close our eyes or use the ostrichpolicy, our descendants may face not a single problem about water-depletion, maybeat that time, no available fresh water for them to use. So, we must try ourbest to solve problems and eventually construct a gorgeous space for ourchildren to live.

Though, it may be difficult to imagine from a later perspective,a strain of critical opinion think that these methods will fade quickly, yetthey neglect to taking into account our resolutions would take no for ananswer. The situation is very urgent, and we need express determinations andtake pragmatic actions to save our home.

To sum up, I have faith in dealingwith all problems, only if proper measures are taken to restrict dischargingand great efforts are made to achieve common goal.

Crystaljoy

骗人。你写的是3.20的独立。

我还没写呢，写完再来看，不然会受你影响。

prodliu

Recently, many new technological devices are released topublic such as the ipad and the iphone, and lead to surge many people to stayup late only to buy one. Frankly, sometimes, having a newly released device maymake a person fashion and different. But in my opinion, because some flaws liein these emerging devices, I prefer to possess one until it becomes popular.

First of all, I just think that we need to adopt others’opinions before purchasing, because people who have owned the device, which youwant to buy, can give you some beneficial advices. For example, your friendswill tell you the characteristics, the performances and the functions about thedevice, and these practical suggestions may help you to make a smart decision.While in some cases, you may experience a situation that you buy a device witha surge of impulsion, and soon feel regretful for such an unwise decision. So,with contemplation, you can make a win-win choice.

Moreover, some newly released devices will appear flawsin design or function at the very beginning. And it is pretty inconvenient andannoying to sent the device back to repair. So, we had better buy until someproblems within the devices are solved, in case we will not evolved introublesome. Here is a tip, we can browse some online chat rooms to see whetherflaws are revised or pay more attention to relative news.

Finally, some more attractive applications would bereleased after a period of time, so if you want to make full use of the device,you need to control your curiosity and wait till more interesting applicationsare programmed that make your life convenient.

Admittedly, owning a new technological device when it becomesavailable could make you fashion, and you will enjoy the happiness from theseadvanced techniques, but it also needs you to take risks when you get benefitfrom the devices. Thus, it would better to buy a device until it becomespopular.

To sum up, new technological devicesare pretty crucial and useful for people, they could release job burden, makelife amazing, and add more fun into daily life, but they still contain risks. Sowise people will buy a device until it becomes popular.

婷婷connie

Recently, many new technological devices are released topublic such as the ipad and the iphone, and(用which连接更好)lead to surge（用provoke更好） many people to stayup late only to buy one. Frankly, sometimes, having a newly released device maymake a person fashionable and different. But in my opinion, because some flaws liein these emerging devices,I prefer to possess one until it becomes popular.

First of all, I just think that we need to adopt others’opinions before purchasing, because people who have owned the device, which youwant to buy, (people who have owned your dreaming device这样更简洁)can give you some beneficial advices. For example, your friendswill tell you the characteristics, the performances and the functions about thedevice, and these practical suggestions may help you to make a smarter decision.While in some cases, you may experience a situation that you buy a device witha surge of impulsion, and soon feel regretful for such an unwise decision. So,with (a moment for)contemplation, you can make a win-win choice.

Moreover, some newly released devices will appear flaws（之前用过了，更换成weakness）in design or function at the very beginning. And it is pretty inconvenient andannoying to sent the device back to repair(get repaired地道). So, we had better buy （it缺少宾语）until someproblems within the devices are solved, in case we will not evolved introublesome(in a troublesome condition). Here is a tip, we can browse some online chat rooms to see whether(these )flaws are revised(renovated更换) or(and)pay more attention to relative news.

Finally, some more attractive applications would bereleased after a period of time, so if you want to make full use of the device,you need to control(hold) your curiosity and wait till more interesting applicationsare programmed that make your life (more与more interesting对应) convenient.

Admittedly, owning a new technological device when it becomesavailable could make you （in）fashion, and you will enjoy the happiness from theseadvanced techniques, but it also needs you to take risks when you get benefitsfrom the devices. Thus, it would (be) better to buy a device until it becomespopular.

To sum up, new technological devicesare pretty crucial and useful for people,(for) they could release job burden, makelife amazing, and add more fun into daily life, but they still contain risks. Sowise people will buy a device until it becomes popular.



Conclusion:1.竟然是22号的独立？？第一次看到四个主段的文~



语言地道性仍需加强，相同意思的词句多进行替换，有一些句子缺少成分，建议写完再修改一遍。

Crystaljoy

3.20 吐血改完


With a rapid development of technology, more industries discharged more contaminated waste， such as greenhouse gases and polluted water, into our environment, and this phenomenon has a detrimental effecton human’s health. In view of the seriousness of these problems, effective measures should be taken before things getworse. Personally, I persist that these important problems that are closely related to people’s daily life can be solved in our lifetime as long as we take effort to confront and to tackle（总读着后面不加宾语很奇怪）.

To begin with, I think that it is our responsibilities to solve these problems.Decade years, we hold a stereotype philosophy that the resources are so affluent that we can consume unscrupulously（wow,我不认识，崇拜一下）. But humans seem to fail to take into account the fact that every resource will be depleted sooner or later, we just make full use of（好好利用，是褒义词吧。推荐个drain） the resource without considering the outcome when the resource runs out(被动好吧。once it was depleted.). For example, the petroleum, the natural gases and the coal are non-renewable resources, and are essential materials for human beings (to power the technosphere.我很努力地吹毛求疵一下). Our cars need petroleum, and people need gases to cook and keep warm. If we consume them without a well-planned schedule, we will pay for it in the future. Thus, I believe that only if people contemplate the consequence of these problems and spend（spare） no effort to deal with them, we can control the situation and achieve sustainable development. （thus 后转的牵强吧，前面看完都以为你要跑去支持反面了。再努力往it is our rather than any generation else’s responsibility方面靠一下。）

Moreover, our technological improvements guarantee us to resolve these problems. Actually, our scientists have developed some useful methods to find solutions to deal with these problems.（罗里吧嗦的，而且develop这样用感觉多表阐述。Current science has made it possible to alleviate the grave seriousness. ） For instance, scientists discover a kind of bacteria （which 你又run-on了哈哈）can disintegrate the toxic waste into water and（and并列的好乱，要不后面这句也补充个into吧，哪我就不懂了）non-toxic substances (,喘口气) and this invention could not only govern the contamination around（in the 就行了吧？） environment, but also figure out a direction towards potential solutions.  Thus, I can envision that not too far in the future, we（+generation跟题目的in our lifetime 呼应一下） can find ways to protect our environment. (你默认当今世界最大难题是环保问题？)

Finally, we need to solve these problems for our descendants. We cannot hold the theory that it is best to use the resources while it is still economically profitable to do so, and we need to protect them for our children.（我晕了） If we do not face them and leave them to the next generation, the situation may become worse that can be a disaster for our descendants.（总觉得that奇怪了。试试the situation is likely to worsen before it begins to improve, leaving a disaster for our descendants. ） Taking water resource for example, water is the basic resource we live by, and now we face a serious water-depletion（water shortage?） problem, if we close our eyes or use(adopt) the ostrich policy(wow again), our descendants may face not a single problem about water-depletion, maybe at that time, no available fresh water for them to use. （句子真long~~~ like a speaker. 这不是表扬啊。）So, we must try our best to solve problems and eventually construct a gorgeous space for our children to live.

Though, it may be difficult to imagine from a later perspective（which？）, a strain of critical opinion（你真高级，是单数吧？）think that these methods will fade quickly, yet they neglect to taking（take） into account our resolutions would take no for an answer. (take what into account了我没看懂) The situation is very urgent, and we need express determinations and take pragmatic actions to save our homeland.

To sum up, I have faith in dealing with all problems, only if proper measures are taken to restrict discharging（可以么？）and great efforts are made to achieve common goal.