[原创] iBT@CD 第一写作小组(8 月), 开始啦....

Water_Water

先把完成的第一篇贴上来，谢谢大家点评。

这是昨天写的，花了大概一小时吧，太惨了。。。

写作第一篇:  011(185题库).

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

 

As we all know, university is a place where students are trained to be competent persons who are able to live and work independently in the society. In this sense, obtaining relevant and useful academic knowledge in university is the crutial goal for every student to achieve. Although being healthy are also important for students, university don’t need to pay the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they do to their libraries.

 

On one hand, all universities have the responsibility to equip facilities, such as classroom, lab and library, to provide a good environment for students to study. Since dormitories usually are not quiet and spacious to be a good place for students to study, universities should make their libraries comfortable and suitable to study there. A good university library should keep as much as possible books and data in stock and get these resources well-organized, supply students the Internet access, and be open as long time as possible since many students used to have lots of tasks and need to work overnight. Also, a library should big enough to hold many students who would like to study and do research there. Librarians need to be highly trained and competitive to help students in the library. All these requirements will not be satisfied if the university doesn’t finance properly.

 

Moreover, university libraries always cost much more to maintain than does the sports activity field. Every year, universities will buy lots of new books, meterials and even computers to keep up with the rapidly developing science and technology.

 

On the other hand, sports activities are also important in students’ daily life, but these activities play very small role in students’ college life and are only account for small part of everyday’s time, probably for only one-tenth of daytime. In addition, university can provide students sports ground without paying too much money to maintain. Even a gym will not cost the university very much.

 

Considering that the main commitment of universities is to develop students’ mind and not their body, universities should put more of their resources into libraries rather than their sports activities.

alexwithibt

以下是引用小流星在2007-7-3 22:13:00的发言：

6/26/2007, 写作第一篇:  011(185题库).

For university study, a library is a significant resource for
     students. What ever you study in which subject, you must make use of library for your lecture or academic project. However, educations not only focus on academic result but also all rounded development. University Students required good academic results and healthy bodies. In my opinion, universities should not give the same amount of money to their students.

First of foremost, Library provide a learning environment to student which can not supersede. For a changing society, many new knowledge produced everyday. Student may need a lot of time to search for this new knowledge. Library plays a role that cut students’ time of searching and provides a great amount of books. Some professor or lecturers may also make use of them. How can we give the money to library as same as give to sports activities.

Moreover, the cost of providing library service is much greater than that of sport activities. For university, library should keep latest resource for learning. To maintain this latest resource, library need to spend a lot of money continuously to buy books and academic magazines like economists. Unlike sport activates, a large amount of money can use for a long period of time. Besides that, there are many kinds of sport activities in universities. It is difficult for university to measure the amount of money they need to give.

To conclude, universities should give money according to the rate of usage and how important to students. In this way, resources can be effectively allocate and reach win-win situation to both parties.

希望大大可以指導一下...

For university study, a library is a significant resource for
     students. What ever you study in which subject, you must make use of library for your lecture or academic project. However, educations not only focus on academic result but also all rounded development. University Students required good academic results and healthy bodies. In my opinion, universities should not give the same amount of money to their students.

First of foremost, Library provide a learning environment to student which can not supersede. For a changing society, many new knowledge produced everyday. Student may need a lot of time to search for this new knowledge. Library plays a role that cut students’ time of searching and provides a great amount of books. Some professor or lecturers may also make use of them. How can we give the money to library as same as give to sports activities.

Moreover, the cost of providing library service is much greater than that of sport activities. For university, library should keep latest resource for learning. To maintain this latest resource, library need to spend a lot of money continuously to buy books and academic magazines like economists. Unlike sport activates, a large amount of money can use for a long period of time. Besides that, there are many kinds of sport activities in universities. It is difficult for university to measure the amount of money they need to give.

To conclude, universities should give money according to the rate of usage and how important to students. In this way, resources can be effectively allocate and reach win-win situation to both parties.

希望大大可以指導一下...

For university study, a library is a significant resource for
   students. What ever you study in which subject, you must make use of library for your lecture or academic project. However, educations not only focus on academic result but also all rounded development. University Students required good academic results and healthy bodies. In my opinion, universities should not give the same amount of money to their students.

First of foremost, Library provide a learning environment to student which can not supersede. For a changing society, many new knowledge produced everyday. Student may need a lot of time to search for this new knowledge. Library plays a role that cut students’ time of searching and provides a great amount of books. Some professor or lecturers may also make use of them. How can we give the money to library as same as give to sports activities.

Moreover, the cost of providing library service is much greater than that of sport activities. For university, library should keep latest resource for learning. To maintain this latest resource, library need to spend a lot of money continuously to buy books and academic magazines like economists. Unlike sport activates, a large amount of money can use for a long period of time. Besides that, there are many kinds of sport activities in universities. It is difficult for university to measure the amount of money they need to give.

To conclude, universities should give money according to the rate of usage and how important to students. In this way, resources can be effectively allocate and reach win-win situation to both parties.

希望大大可以指導一下...

First of foremost (First and foremost), Library provides a learning environment to student which can not supersede. (Library provides for students a learning environment whose priority can not be superseded) For a changing society, many (more and more) new knowledge produced (originates) everyday. Student may need a lot of time to search (explore) for this new knowledge. Library plays a role that cut students’ time of searching and provides a great amount of books. Some professor or lecturers may also make use of them. How can we give the money to library as same as give to sports activities.

我觉得这段可以再改改.表达不是很清楚.

另外从字数上看,还可以再多写些.

德克的猪

Zd's词汇替换表

1.important=crucial(extremely important), significant(amount or effect large enough to be important)

2.common=universal, ubiquitous(if something is ubiquitous, it seems to be everywhere)

3.abundant=ample(enough and usually extra), plentiful(enough for people's needs and wants)

4.stick=adhere, cling(hold on something tightly)

5.neglect=ignore.(difference: neglect means someone has not paid enough attention to something; ignore means no attention.)

6.near=adjacent(two things next to each other), adjoin(the same as adjacent)

7.pursue=woo(man woos woman, old-fashioned), seek(if you seek sth, you try to obtain it.FORMAL)

8.accurate=precise(precise is exact and accurate in all details), exact(correct in every detail)

9.vague=obscure(unknown or known by only a few people)

10.top=peak, summit

11.competitor=rival, opponent(especially in sports and politics)

12.blame=condemn(if you condemn something, you say it is very bad and unacceptable)

13.opinon=perspective, standpoint(means looking at an event or situation in a particular way)

14.fame=prestige(describe those who are admired), reputation

15.build=erect(you can erect something as buildings,FORMAL), establish

16.insult=humiliate(do something or say something which makes people feel ashamed or stupid)

17.complain=grumble(complain something in a bad-tempered way)

18.primary=radical(very important and great in degree), fundamental

19.relieve=alleviate(alleviate means you make pain or sufferings less intense or severe)

20.force=coerce sb into(coerce means you make someone do something s/he does not want to), compel

21.enlarge=magnify(magnify means make something larger than it really is)

22.complex=intricate(if something is intricate, it often has many small parts and details)

23.lonely=solitary(if someone is solitary, there is no one near him/her)

24.small=minuscule(very small), minute

25.praise=extol(stronger than praise), compliment(polite and political)

26.hard-working=assiduous(someone who is assiduous works hard or does things very  thoroughly)

27.difficult=arduous(if something is arduous, it is difficult and tiring, and involves a lot of efforts)

28.poor(soil)=barren, infertile(used to describe the soil is so poor that plants cannot be planted on it)

29.fragile=brittle, vulnerable(someone who is vulnerable is easily hurt emotionally or physically)

30.show=demonstrate(to demonstrate a fact means tp make it clear to people.)

31.big=massive(large in size, quantity, or extent), colossol(use this word, you emphasize something is large), tremendous(INFORMAL)

32.avoid=shun(if someone shuns something, s/he deliberately avoid that something or keep away from it.)

33.fair=impartial(someone who is impartial is able to give a fair opinion or decision on something.)

34.attack=assault(physically attack someone), assail(attack violently)

35.dislike=abhor(abhor means you hate something to a extreme extent for moral reasons), loathe(dislike very much)

36.ruin=devastate(it means damage something very badly, or utterly destroy it.)

37.disaster=catastrophe(a catastrophe is an unexpected event that cause great suffering and damages)

38.finally=eventually(espcially after a lot of delays), ultimately(after complicated series of events)

39.always=invariably(the same as always, but better than always)

40.forever=perpetual(a perpetual state never changes), immutable(something immutable will never change or be changed)

41.surprise=startle(it means surprise you slightly), astound(surprise you to a large degree), astonish(the same as astound)

42.enthusiasm=zeal(a great enthusiasm), fervency(sinere and enthusiasm)

43.quiet=tranquil(calm and peaceful), serene(calm and quiet)

44.expensive=exorbitant(it means too expensive that it should be)

45.luxurious=lavish(impressive and very expensive), sumptuous(grand and very expensive)

46.boring=tedious(if you describe something tedious, you mean it is boring and frustrating)

47.respect=esteem(if you esteem someone, you respect and admire him/her. FORMAL)

48.worry=fret(if you fret about something, you worry about it)

49.cold=chilly(unpleasantly cold), icy(extremely cold)

50.hot=boiling(very hot)

51.dangerous=perilous(very dangerous, hazardous(dangerous, especially to people's safety and health)

52.nowadays=currently

53.only=unique(the only one of its kind), distinctive

54.stop=cease(if something ceases, it stops happening or existing)

55.part=component(the components of something are the parts that it is made of)

56.result=consequence(the results or effects of something)

57.obvious=apparent, manifest

58.based on=derived from

59.remarkable=conspicuous(if something is conspicuous, people can see or notice them very easily)

60.quite=fairly

61.pathetic=lamentable(very uncomfortable and disappointing)

62.field=domain(a particular field of thought, activities or interest)

63.appear=emerge(come into existence)

64.whole=entire(the whole of something)

65.wet=moist(slightly wet), damp(slightly wet), humid(very damp and hot)

66.wrong=erroneous(incorrect or partly correct)

67.difficult=formidable

68.change=convert(change into another form)

69.typical=quintessential(this word means represent a typical example of something)

70.careful=cautious(very careful in order to avoid danger), prudent(careful and sensible)

71.ability=capacity, capability(the same as ability)

72.strange=eccentric(if some one is eccentric, s/he behaves in a strange way, or his/her opinion is different from most people)

73.rich=affluent(if you are affluent, you have a lot of money)

74.use=utilize(the same as use)

75.dubious=skeptical(if you are skeptical about something, you have doubts on it.)

76.satisfy=gratify(if you are gratified by something, it gives you pleasure and satisfaction)

77.short=fleeting, ephemeral(if something is ephemeral, it lasts a short time)

78.scholarship=fellowship

79.angry=enraged(extremely angry)

80.smelly=malodorous(used to describle an unpleasant smell)

81.ugly=hideous(if something is hideous, it is very ugly or unattracitve)

82.attractive=appealing(pleasing and attractive), absorbing(something absorbing can attract you a great deal)

83.diverse=miscellaneous(a miscellaneous groups consists of many different kinds of things)

84.disorder=disarray, chaos

85.crazily=frantically(used to describe someone who behaves in a wild and uncontrolled way)

86.rapid=meteoric(ATTENTION:meteoric is only used to describe someone achieves success quickly)

87.ordinary=mundane(very ordinary and not at interesting or unusual)

88.despite=notwithstanding(FORMAL)

89.best=optimal(used to describe the best level something can achieve)

90.sharp=acute(severe and intense)

91.unbelievable=inconceivable(if you deem something inconceivable, you think it very unlike to happen)

92.puzzle=perplex(something perplex someone means it confuses and worries him/her because he/she does not understand it)

93.method=avenue(a way of getting something done)

94.famous=distinguished(used to describe people who are successful in their career)

95.ancient=archaic(extremely old and extremely old-fashioned)

96.decorate=embellish(embellish means make something look more attractive via decorating it with something else)

97.possible=feasible(if something is feasible, it can be done, made or achieved)

98.so=consequently, accordingly

99.rare=infrequent(does not happen often)

100.greedy=rapacious(greedy and selfish)

短语

101.in my opinion=from my perspective

102.very much=a great deal

103.for example=to give a demonstration

104.however=as a matter of fact, it is the other way around

105.agree with=uphold(support and maintain)

106.be full of=be saturated with(be filled with sth completely)

107.by=via

108.according to=in the light of

109.when it comes to=in terms of

110.from a XXX perspective=in XXX sense

111.find a job=land a job

112.latest=up to date

113.achieve a goal=attain an accomplishment

114.at the same time=simultaneously

115.at the start of=on the threshold of

116.certainly=to a certain extent

117.with doubt=indubitably

118.in XXX means=via XXX avenue

119.disagree with=be the last one to uphold

120.as fast as=apace with

单词

121.awful=nauseous(if something makes you nauseous, you want to vomit)

122.lack=scarcity(if there is a scarcity of something, there is not enough of it for people)

123.suddenly=abruptly(very sudden and often unpleasant)

124.agree=espouse(the same as agree with)

125.immortal=eternal(something that is eternal can last forever)

126.gigantic=enormous(very large in size or amount)

127.horrible=macabre(strange and horrible or upsetting)

128.generous=munificient(very genrous, FORMAL)

129.advantage=merit(if something has merit, it has good or worthwhile qualities)

130.happy=jovial(if someone is jovial, s/he is happy and behaves in a cheerful way)

131.sad=inconsolable(extremely sad and cannot be comforted)

132.brave=gallant(if someone is gallant, s/he behaves bravely)

133.disappear=vanish(ATTENTION:vanish means disappear suddenly or in a way cannot be explained)

134.difference=divergence(a divergence is a difference between two or more things, opinions or attitudes)

135.repeat=iterate

136.effective=efficacious(the same as effective, FORMAL)

137.dishonest=mendacious(a mendacious person is someone who lies)

138.talkative=loquacious(if someone is loquacious, s/he talk a great deal)

139.think over=contemplate(think carefully), ruminate on(think carefully)

140.tendency=vogue(in vogue means very popular)

141.protect from=shield from(the same as protect from)

142.lazy=slothful(lazy and unwilling to make an effort to work), indolent(lazy, FORMAL)

143.limited=finite(something that is finite has a definite fixed size or amount)

144.disadvantage=defect(a fault or imperfection in a person or thing)

145.useless/in vain=futile(ATTENTION: if you say something is futile, you mean there is no point of doing, usually it has no chance of succeeding)

146.undeniable=there is no gainsaying(FORMAL)

147.potential=latent(used to describe something hidden or not obvious at the moment, but which can develop further in the future)

148.harmful=baneful

149.daring=audacious(someone who is audacious takes risk to achieve something)

150.talent=aptitude(someone's aptitude for a particular kind of work or activity is his/her ability to learn it quickly and to do it well)

151.waste=dissipate(dissipate means waste money, time or effort in a foolish way)

152.obstacle=stumbling block

153.many=a multitude of, a myriads of

154.good=superb(if something is superb, its quality is very good indeed)

155.random=haphazard

156.behave=conduct(if you conduct yourseld in a particular way, you behave in that way)

157.kind of=sort of

158.loyalty=fidelity(fidelity is loyalty to a person, or organization, or set of beliefs)

159.embarrassing=awkward(an awkward situation is embarrassing and difficult to deal with)

160.building=edifice(ATTENTION: an edifice is a large and impressive building)

161.unendurable=unsufferable(if you say something is unsufferable, you are emphasizing that it is very unpleasant and annoying)

162.undoubtedly=as no doubt

163.although=albeit(the same as although)

164.unwilling=grudging(a grudging feeling or action is felt or done very unwillingly)

165.hardly=scarcely(you use scarcely to say that something is not true or is not the case, in a humorous or critical way)

166.courage=nerve(nerve is the courage you need in order to do something difficult or dangerous)

167.generally=as a rule

168.understand=discern(if you can discern something, you are aware of it and know what it is)

169.obviously=transparently(easily understand or recognize)

170.define as=address as

小流星

這次的topic不太好想...
因此字數寫得不多...
其他部分如何?
我是7.21的

alexwithibt

谢谢德克

alexwithibt

以下是引用小流星在2007-7-4 14:57:00的发言：

這次的topic不太好想...
因此字數寫得不多...
其他部分如何?
我是7.21的

这些题目都专们找不好写的挑的.

qianrene

7/04/2007, 写作第四篇:  035(185题库).

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Nearly every people say yes when asked the question"Do you watch television programs for play,concert, or sporting event?"As the technology develops more quickly, the day when literature art can only be seen in a certain location where audiences gatered together has gone, the convenience of the technological development of television has made the dream of people in the past to become ture, i.e, to watch these interesting shows at home, drinking beer while enjoying ketchups.
from my point of view, it is more comfortable to enjoy the performance in front of your own television and buried yourself in your own velvet sofa, it is sort of a very relaxing period of time.

Some people may still prefer to buy a ticket of the live performance,saying that the live show is more vivid and more eye-catching, however, it is always not ture for most of the juvenile like me, because we youth would like to enjoy our private life, rather than stay in a stupid chair for as long as 2 or 3 hours, we presume that would be time-consuming and tedious.So,if there is a more preferable way to choose, why not choose the more expedient one?Watching TV at home wil definitely save us a lot of time which could be used for studying and reading  after all.

Besides, the televison give us a lof of choice, when we dislike a program or we are not fond of that channel, we can always switch to another show, it's up to you!Just put your finger on the remote controller in your hand. But attending a live performance, you will be so  unlucky to have only one selection, sticking onto the chair till the show is off  if you don't fell into it, unless you can just leave without the refund.

Eventually,from my own experience and my observation, I would say that it is better to stay home watch your favourite performance, no matter it is a play, a concert, or a sports meeting.You will certainly enjoy the way in which you enjoy watching television leisurely.

才343字，呆会再自己检查一下：）也希望有好心人能够大略的帮我批一下，最好能从结构上^^谢谢

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-7-4 18:03:14编辑过]

yaoshuming

以下是引用qianrene在2007-7-4 17:59:00的发言：

7/04/2007, 写作第四篇:  035(185题库).

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Nearly every people say yes when asked the question"Do you watch television programs for play,concert, or sporting event?"As the technology develops more quickly, the day when literature art can only be seen in a certain location where audiences gatered together has gone, the convenience of the technological development of television has made the dream of people in the past to become ture, i.e, to watch these interesting shows at home, drinking beer while enjoying ketchups.
from my point of view, it is more comfortable to enjoy the performance in front of your own television and buried yourself in your own velvet sofa, it is sort of a very relaxing period of time.

Some people may still prefer to buy a ticket of the live performance,saying that the live show is more vivid and more eye-catching, however, it is always not ture for most of the juvenile like me, because we youth would like to enjoy our private life, rather than stay in a stupid chair for as long as 2 or 3 hours, we presume that would be time-consuming and tedious.So,if there is a more preferable way to choose, why not choose the more expedient one?Watching TV at home wil definitely save us a lot of time which could be used for studying and reading  after all.

Besides, the televison give us a lof of choice, when we dislike a program or we are not fond of that channel, we can always switch to another show, it's up to you!Just put your finger on the remote controller in your hand. But attending a live performance, you will be so  unlucky to have only one selection, sticking onto the chair till the show is off  if you don't fell into it, unless you can just leave without the refund.

Eventually,from my own experience and my observation, I would say that it is better to stay home watch your favourite performance, no matter it is a play, a concert, or a sports meeting.You will certainly enjoy the way in which you enjoy watching television leisurely.

才343字，呆会再自己检查一下：）也希望有好心人能够大略的帮我批一下，最好能从结构上^^谢谢

宝儿写得好好噢~~~能不能问一下是多长时间写完的？我觉得如果考试的时候写成这个样子，至少4分了吧？

明天写这个第四篇

rio

以下是引用qianrene在2007-7-4 17:59:00的发言：

7/04/2007, 写作第四篇:  035(185题库).

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Nearly every people say yes when asked the question"Do you watch television programs for play,concert, or sporting event?"As the technology develops more quickly, the day when literature art can only be seen in a certain location where audiences gatered together has gone, the convenience of the technological development of television has made the dream of people in the past to become ture, i.e, to watch these interesting shows at home, drinking beer while enjoying ketchups.
from my point of view, it is more comfortable to enjoy the performance in front of your own television and buried yourself in your own velvet sofa, it is sort of a very relaxing period of time.

Some people may still prefer to buy a ticket of the live performance,saying that the live show is more vivid and more eye-catching, however, it is always not ture for most of the juvenile like me, because we youth would like to enjoy our private life, rather than stay in a stupid chair for as long as 2 or 3 hours, we presume that would be time-consuming and tedious.So,if there is a more preferable way to choose, why not choose the more expedient one?Watching TV at home wil definitely save us a lot of time which could be used for studying and reading  after all.

Besides, the televison give us a lof of choice, when we dislike a program or we are not fond of that channel, we can always switch to another show, it's up to you!Just put your finger on the remote controller in your hand. But attending a live performance, you will be so  unlucky to have only one selection, sticking onto the chair till the show is off  if you don't fell into it, unless you can just leave without the refund.

Eventually,from my own experience and my observation, I would say that it is better to stay home watch your favourite performance, no matter it is a play, a concert, or a sports meeting.You will certainly enjoy the way in which you enjoy watching television leisurely.

才343字，呆会再自己检查一下：）也希望有好心人能够大略的帮我批一下，最好能从结构上^^谢谢

第一段的细节描写很好，第二段欠缺说服力，因为即使在家看电视还是可能花几个小时。而且你第二段究竟想说什么呢？是现场表演无聊？还是花时间？其实你不如把注意力集中到一点，比如现场看贵反而看得没家里清楚。性价比不高。

第三段最后一句太过冗长。第一句也是，其实应该是三个句子。严格的说，第二句是个病句。你可以按照GMAT SC的修改标准看看

其实这个话题很好写，应该能写在350以上，何况还写了很多from my point of view这类无实际意义的话

第一段literature art是要说明什么？而且那句话太长。

[此贴子已经被作者于2007-7-5 6:56:17编辑过]

德克的猪

以下是引用rio在2007-7-5 3:23:00的发言：

第一段的细节描写很好，第二段欠缺说服力，因为即使在家看电视还是可能花几个小时。而且你第二段究竟想说什么呢？是现场表演无聊？还是花时间？其实你不如把注意力集中到一点，比如现场看贵反而看得没家里清楚。性价比不高。

第三段最后一句太过冗长。

其实这个话题很好写，应该能写在350以上，何况还写了很多from my point of view这类无实际意义的话

第一段literature art是要说明什么？而且那句话太长。

special thanks to rio

谢谢对iBT的支持呀!!!!