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发表于 2013-8-24 22:09:35 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
914托福二战,930GMAT二战,坚持每天写作文!

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2013/08/24 IW
Topic 同不同意,社會制定了太多規矩給年輕人 Do you agree or disagree that the rules in societies today are too strict for young people.  

Youngsters are the future of our society, so it isimportant to provide them with abundant resources, freedom to choose and an openatmosphere. One problem currently is that they are gradually growing up, readyto show their talents and achieve something great, only to find that thesociety has already built too many consolidated rules restricting them to dowhat they really want. In my opinion, young people are indeed suffering fromthese rules.

First and foremost, when young people are still inschool, rules come along with them all the time. Students are told to bediligent and curious about what they have learned. The whole rating system inuniversity focus largely on the students' academic performance. So in order tofollow these rules set by the universities to obtain a good grade, a studentmay have to sacrifice his/her leisure time, time supposed to attend band rehearsal,to watch an art show, or to write his/her own novel chapter. Instead, thestudent do research, writer papers and worry about the GPA all the time. Althoughthe student may get a satisfying result eventually - that is, a high GPA andthe considerable scholarship -, he/she may lose the chance to figure his/herpotential area, or even the possibility of great achievements in anotherunknown field.

When those young people finally graduated from theuniversities, looking for a job, social rules appear again from everywhere.Those "rules from experience" convey the idea that young peopleshould consider whether income is stable, whether the welfare is good, whetherthe promotion path is accessible and so on. And again, to "avoid failureby not following these rule", young people search carefully on the jobmarket and find it so hard to get a "perfect" job. So they complain,sigh, and accept the relatively "better" job. But what if they don'tfollow these rules and just do what they really good at? For example, a PhDstudent majored in biology is interested in research and wants to be aresearcher, but social rules forced him to think about living condition. As aresult, he ends up in a pharmacy company, where he realizes the work is just socommercial for him that he is not interested at all. The PhD may lose theopportunity to become a great scientist. What's more, he does the job he doesnot like. Blame on those so-called rules.

Rules existing in society as an accumulation ofexperience and former success. But things are changing every day andindividuals are different from each other, especially for young people who arenew stream to the society. In conclusion, the rules in society indeed restrictyoung people in  many aspects andmeasures need to be done to solve the problem.
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沙发
发表于 2013-8-24 22:10:32 | 只看该作者
欢迎sherry开贴~!
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2013-8-24 23:19:44 | 只看该作者
Mint静默 发表于 2013-8-24 22:10
欢迎sherry开贴~!

谢谢鼓励呀
地板
发表于 2013-8-25 10:09:16 | 只看该作者
sherry  我发现我粘贴上来之后没有颜色 所以我就添加在附件里了 文件里面上面是我的作文 下面是你的 以及修改

新人第一次改作文..改的不好请见谅哦
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发表于 2013-8-25 10:13:18 | 只看该作者
PS  我也是914  加油!~
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 楼主| 发表于 2013-8-25 12:28:55 | 只看该作者
薄荷妹纸 发表于 2013-8-25 10:09
sherry  我发现我粘贴上来之后没有颜色 所以我就添加在附件里了 文件里面上面是我的作文 下面是你的 以及修 ...

谢谢薄荷的修改!我也给你改好啦。

下次粘贴的时候你可以在回复里选择高级模式,再粘贴就有颜色啦。一起加油~!
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发表于 2013-8-25 12:37:29 | 只看该作者
Sherry我也9.14! 坐等你的综合作文喔~
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 楼主| 发表于 2013-8-25 12:44:51 | 只看该作者
lyslj001 发表于 2013-8-25 12:37
Sherry我也9.14! 坐等你的综合作文喔~

其实我没占座综合作文 = =我也不知道为啥队长给我分了
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发表于 2013-8-25 12:46:24 | 只看该作者
sherryv 发表于 2013-8-25 12:44
其实我没占座综合作文 = =我也不知道为啥队长给我分了

神马!! 简直乱了~~
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 楼主| 发表于 2013-8-25 23:05:25 | 只看该作者
Topic: Playing sports gives importantlesson on life learning.



Have you ever participated in a long-runcompetition and find it hard to run the last few miles? Have you ever practicedsome kinds of ball game for a long time and still not make any progress? Haveyou ever experienced failure on a sports meeting and felt depressed about notwinning the gold medal? I bet you have, or at least some of you have. Playingsports expose people to many difficult situations, situations that is similarto what people may face in daily life. In my point of view, playing sports dogive important lesson on life learning.

First and foremost, playing sports needsone's sheer tenacity. Most of sports require long-time physical persistence,which means large consumption of one's energy. Usually, one become enthusiasticabout a kind of sports for some reasons, playing it almost every day at first.But day by day, he/she may find it less interesting: it consumes too much timeand makes one exhausted after every practice. Just because of that, many peoplegive up playing not long after they begin. And that, to a large extent, issimilar to life. If one can stay playing sports no matter what the obstacle is,he/she may get the important lesson on life about what the persistence is.

Second, hard work is necessary to playsports, just like it is to real life. A sportsman has to hold the determinationthat next move will be quicker, next hit will be better and next score will behigher. Only by hard working can a sportsman make progress in his specificarea. And this rule is also the same in life. An understanding of theimportance of hard work leads people to complain less and practice more. Thatis why playing sports is beneficial to one in daily life.
Third, learning how to face failure is whatone need to do in playing sports, as well as in life. One cannot always win.Once a sportsman lose, he/she has to face it, managing the sadness and figuringout a way of improvement. Sometimes, people feel ashamed about their failure,making them avoid participating the same activity again. But being awell-performed sportsman means to embrace failure and learn from it. Anothervaluable lesson on life learning.
In conclusion, playing sports is just likeliving a life, so what one has learned from sports is also applicable to reallife. After all, the nature of wisdom is all the same.

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