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sherryv

Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement? Young people today more likely to givetime and effort improving the world than young people were at the past.
复制上来有些单词连在一起了，直接看附件吧！
For centuries, humankind has beend edicating in making the world a better place. Historically, the significant responsibility usually taken by middle-aged adults, who were once thought to bethe main power in the society. At present, however, young people are graduallyovertaking the place. Dozens of magazines and TV talk shows are resoundingvoice from youngsters claiming their concerns about the world. In fact, it ismore likely for young people in today's society to give time and effortimproving the world than for those at the past.
First and foremost, young people currentlyare better educated than young people at the past, hence the former are morequalified to improve the world. In comparison, young people today have a widerknowledge range, better language skills and more advanced technique skills.Once equipped with these abilities, they would find it easy to make contributionsto the society. More importantly, a sense of responsibility is regardedincreasing crucial in today's world and that is what most young people todayare told since childhood. So they are more likely to willing to pay effortsadding value to the society than those who were dictated so.
Second, with abundant resources nowadays,making the world a better place is more accessible than before for youngpeople. Specifically, there are well-organized non-profit organizationsencouraging young people to become volunteers in impoverished areas astemporary teachers, culture transmitters or direct NPO assistants. AIESEC, aninternational student organization, is committed to send students from ratherdeveloped countries to undeveloped countries. Such kind of opportunity isincreasing provided by an assortment of organizations, which has made it more convenientfor young people today to make contributions.
Third, young people today are commonlyenjoying a better living condition than those at the past, so according to thetheory of Hierarchy of Needs suggested by Maslow, they are more likely topursuit the mental fulfillment. In contrast, young people at the past were mostlystill concerned about the improvement of the living standards, thus had no timeeven considering about personal contribution to the world.
The world is becoming a better placebecause of the efforts young people have made, and in return, young peoplebenefits from the improved world and utilize the benefits as their advantagesto change the world. Therefore, young people today are indeed more likely togive time and effort improving the world than young people were at the past.

追梦CY

写的太好了！

sherryv

追梦CY 发表于 2013-9-7 11:20
写的太好了！

多谢鼓励啊！！

sherryv

0907

In the past young people aremore depended on their parents in making decisions. Today, young people arebetter able to make decisions in their own lives.



Young people are the apples in their parents' eyes, hence forcenturies parents have been enthusiastic about making decisions for theirchildren. They would send their children to various extra curriculum lessons,dominantly choose college majors for them, and even help their children find a position on the job market. However, things are different in today's society. Young people currently is better able to make their own decision for their future.

The improvement firstly lies in an increasing sense of independence, which is among  many sparkling characteristics today's young people have. A child nowadays has been educated to be independent since childhood: dress himself independently, fold his own quilt and check his homework by himself instead of his parents. The point is best illustrated in a newly added article in the textbook of Chinese elementary-school students. The author of the article writes about an independent girl named Wuta, who begins to travel on her own at the age of seven. Once she arrives at a new place, the girl send a postcard to her parents to inform them of her safety. The selection of such articles into textbooks shows a tendency to encourage independence among youngsters.

Besides, an assortment of information sources enable young people today to be better at making decisions than young people in the past. Dozens of magazines, radios and TV talk show all resound opinions from different people on how to choose one's own path. Young people could obtain more information from celebrity confessions, peer advice and various online workshops. For example, when deciding their future career, a college studentcould ask the alumni of the university or people who is working in theindustry, or just do some research on the Internet. In comparison, the previous generation only had limited information source and thus was less confident in making decisions on their own.

When it comes to making crucial decisions in one's lifetime, only the person himself has the clearest idea about what he really cares most. With better education and increasingly abundant resources, young people intoday's society are undoubtedly better at making decisions in their lives.

sherlock1992

同学，我9.6的作文你还没改呢，下面附上链接： http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-836006-12-1.html

iammuse

sherryv 发表于 2013-9-7 21:08
0907

In the past young people aremore depended on their parents in making decisions. Today, young p ...

改完了哈

sherryv

iammuse 发表于 2013-9-8 22:58
改完了哈

Thanks for your advice! Just two things：1 an assortment of = various, 2 advice is non-countable as "建议“

iammuse

sherryv 发表于 2013-9-9 00:41
Thanks for your advice! Just two things：1 an assortment of = various, 2 advice is non-countable a ...

没明白你第二点啥意思？

sherryv

iammuse 发表于 2013-9-9 11:19
没明白你第二点啥意思？

advice做“建议”讲时是可数名词

sherryv

0908综合
The reading passage concentrates on Rembrandt's painting, claiming that some of the painting once attributed to Rembrandt were not actually painted by him. One of such paintings is analyzed in the article to prove why it is not Rembrandt’s work. However, the professor in the lecture indicates the painting mentioned in the reading is actually painted by Rembrandt based on the following three reasons.

Firstly, the reading passage declared that the way the woman in the painting dresses is not consistent with the time stage. Specifically, one could not be wearing a white linen cap and a luxurious fur at the same time. Nevertheless, the professor explains that fur collar is added by someone else after the portrait has been done. By that the professor means that perhaps the painting is recreated by others, hence in the original portrait, the woman’s clothes and accessories are consistent.

Secondly, the article continues mention that the light and shadow in the painting is totally wrong because the illuminated face does not compatible with the dark below. But the professor points out that in the original painting, it is the light color collar that illuminates the woman's face. In other words, because of the light color collar the woman wears, her face appears to be illuminated although there is no light coming from below.

Thirdly, the reading indicates that the painting is made of a glued panel, which is not common in Rembrandt's works. However, the lecture contends that in order to make the painting more grand and valuable when the fur collar was added, the masterpiece was enlarged. The original painting is on a single piece of wood, which is the same style of wood as the wood of Rembrandt’s other paintings.