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包子不包子 · 发表于 2012-5-7 12:47:39

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to choose a friend with whom you can have fun than to choose a friend that will help you when you are in need. Use specific examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, with the expansion influence of easy communication among people, like telephone, internet and instant messages. it is increasingly important for us make correct choice in making friend, a friend to have fun with or a friend who will help us out of trouble. For me, both kinds of friends are of great needed, which depends on the differences of situations.

When summer holiday is coming, what will happen if i spend the entire holiday with myself is hard to imagine. Therefore, a friend who i can have fun with will help to color my vacation life a lot. For example, jo, a friend of mine, he is such a kind person. i remember in my last high school summer holiday, in order to memory our beautiful three-year-long high school life, a trip to Hong Kongwas created. Though it was in the middle of July, long trip and hot weather, we still had joke with each other, talked about the past three years studying together and imagined about the coming future. Even now, I insist that the trip with jo was one of my most unforgettable and funny trips.

for other situation, when i am in trouble, a friend who is always willing to get me out of difficulties is whom I appreciate most, and i am lucky enough to have another friend Zoë, who is kind to assist those who are in trouble. Once, in the middle of nowhere, i lost my way to the city town hall, with no map, not enough money but only a Mobil phone. Zoë rang a bell in my mind immediately. i called her, she said no problem and drove her tiny old car to give me a ride within 15 minutes. Thanks for her kind heart, or i had to walk 4 hours without water and light!

In a word, hardly is it easy for us to make on or two close friends. Accordingly, friends of different kinds, who is easy to have fun with and who is willing to help me out of trouble, are all of equal importance for me.

包子不包子 · 发表于 2012-5-7 20:52:46

又写了一篇虽然不是作业还是希望大家狂批～
185 第四篇Which is more important? book knowledge or experience

Tracing back to the prehistoric time, people of any tribe in that period of time did not have word. Depending on what kind of approach can they make a living? Experience, indeed. Knowledge from body experience was brought back home to the whole tribe, without book knowledge people managed to break through the roughest time in history. Therefore, from the personal perspective, experience is more important than book knowledge.
First of all, not every aspects of knowledge are possible to be absorbed from books. As a toddler, without the ability to read, there does exist a great number knowledge to learn by experience. For example, a toddler may eager to touch the shining and swaying thing -fire for satisfying their curiosity. Apparently, it hurts them, pains them. on the other hand, the toddler will never try to feel the fire, even things characterized to be the same again, which regarded to be the security of their life for the toddler learned what the dangerous are from their experience and it is unforgettable. Other things like how to communicate with another child, how to brush teeth and how to say I love you to the beloved one are not easy to find in books.
Additionally, knowledge gained from experience is more unforgettable than those from books. That is also the reasons for the existence of experiment in the studying period of students. At school, for the first time in chemistry class, the teacher would rather show the students the color of a bottle of burning pure oxygen than simply put the page number on the board and let the students read them tediously. Compared with the plain black and white text book, to see the color directly in eye with the true feeling of experience of their burning will no doubt impress the light blue of the pure burning oxygen in students mind steadily.
In a word, practice makes perfect, to experience directly in eye or straightly by hands certainly sends the knowledge more impressive. Moreover, as a remarkable implement of books, personal experience will enlarge people' ken of variety of knowledge. So, experience is more important than book knowledge.

包子不包子 · 发表于 2012-5-8 10:46:16

再接再厉 185第6
the most important thing you want to change about your hometown

I live in a quiet and small town Fenghuang, which located in south east china. It is beautiful and its charming attract tourist visiting every summer. However, once winter is coming, it is difficult for people to live here, because the major income of the local economy is shirked by the decreasing number of tourists. Therefore, the most important thing I want to do is to set up a factory to ensure the whole year happiness of my hometown.

Although factory is likely to bring pollution and other disadvantages to my hometown, but compared to the advantages, I think its benefits will overweigh the shortcomings. Here are the reasons for my strong eager to establish a new factory.

To smoothly run a factory, the steady supporting of water and electric must be ensured. Accordingly, the local people will benefit from this point. Old water pipes and electric systems will probably be reconstructed and renewed in remote areas; people there will gain a steady utilizing of clean water, high level of electric, which is an unbelievable thing for them in the past. Also the expanses for all the resources can be reduced due to the new factory' contribution in local tax. what' more, owing to the high consumption of water of the factory, water recycle system is forced to be built to maintain the local scenery, and no worry about the cleanness of the drinking water will be there of the residents.

The most important thing is that much more working opportunities will be produced by the factory, which would improve the living condition of the local people. Lots of my neighbors used to depend their life on selling little souvenirs to the visitors in summer, which was of little profits. As long as there is a factory, residents in the local places may become the first consideration to work in the factory. In this way, a fix amount of salary can be gained by people despite of the changes in seasons here; following that, clean cloth, health food and warm house would be ensured. If the workers work hard enough, they may be able to afford larger houses and even possible to move to a developed city far away.

In all, the factory can benefit local people' essential life needs and provided them with opportunities for seeking better life. When talked about the possibilities for the pollution brings out by the factory, more environment protection rules can be imposed into the construction of the factory to prevent the environment from going bad to worse. I believe with the building of the new factory, residents here certainly will live a happy and less worrying life.

Crystaljoy · 发表于 2012-5-8 11:58:52

包~185的题库很老了，不建议拿来练习呢，拿来学习逻辑，结构，语言还是不错的~

可以练习近两年北美考试真题~

包子不包子 · 发表于 2012-5-8 12:01:59

！！这样
大谢大谢～迅速转移～～

包子不包子 · 发表于 2012-5-8 17:22:23

Currently, with the gradual fiercer growing competition in the society, it is of great significance for people to choose the right and proper career, which is regarded as a secure for their further life. As there are great number of people in my country chooses to study finance and accounting, it does not mean everyone in the field like the subject and it will influence the development of their future. Again it stress that a great concern should be paid to choose the suitable career. From my perspective, it is better to choose the career as our parents.

To begin with, when we were children spent a long period of time at home with our parents; their profession talking, whether chemistry, art or literature, were the first thing that we were able to get familiar with. If it was art, oil paintings, pigments and sculptures of various kinds would probably trap us in the colorful world. As children are surrounded by all those stuffs, they touch the painting brushes and painting board frequently; besides getting familiar, at least it is not scary for them to see those manlike sculptures standing there, lifelessly and rigidly. Therefore, the related career environment is set up by parents even though the children are young, they have the easiest access to feel them, touch them and fail in love with them.

In addition, if children choose the same career as their parents do, the possible guidance, assistance and advice will not be difficult to obtain. With the additional help from parents, a high possibility to success is created. Take the most traditional career in China, farmer, for example. Not long before, 60% of China' population is still farmer; they are usually a family of farmers for generations. Accordingly, fathers will teach their sons from young age about when to start planting carrots, what time is the best to water the field and how to use the limited tools to fight against pests in the land depends on the variations in areas. Imaging there is no such kind of help and guidance from parents, what will happen? Waste several years of time to search for the right answer by himself. Certainly it is not realistic, because he cannot afford to lose; there is the whole family he has to feed.

To sum up, children should choose the same career as their parents do. In this way, they are able to receive the guidance and assistance, which will help them to be competitive in the human resources market. Moreover, it is easier for the young to establish relation with the career that they are familiar with when they were young, which will also lead to their higher preference.

晨依Jacqueline · 发表于 2012-5-8 21:51:22

包子亲~不好意思哇我改错文章了……
捂脸~这就给你修改……wait~~
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红色为错误，蓝色为疑惑建议，高亮为精彩！
Currently, with the gradual fiercer growing competition in the society, it is of great significance for people to choose the right and proper career, which is regarded as a secure(security n.) for their further life. As there are great number of people in my country chooses to study finance and accounting, it does not mean everyone in the field like the subject and (actually) it will (also) influence the development of their future. Again it stress(es) that a great concern should be paid to choose the suitable career. From my perspective, it is better to choose the (same)career as our parents.

To begin with, when we were children(, we) spent a long period of time at home with our parents; their profession talking, whether chemistry, art or literature, were(was) the first thing that we were able to get familiar with. If it was art, oil paintings, pigments and sculptures of various kinds would probably trap us in the colorful world. As children are surrounded by all those stuffs, they touch the painting brushes and painting board frequently; besides getting familiar, at least it is not scary for them to see those manlike sculptures standing there, lifelessly and rigidly. Therefore, the related career environment is set up by parents even though the children are young,(.They) they have the easiest access to feel them, touch them and fail(fall)in love with them.

In addition, if children choose the same career as their parents do, the possible guidance, assistance and advice will not be difficult to obtain. With the additional help from parents, a high possibility to success is created. Take the most traditional career in China, farmer, for example. Not long before, 60% of China' population is still farmer; they are usually a family of farmers for generations. Accordingly, fathers will teach their sons from young age about when to start planting carrots, what time is the best to water the field(s) and how to use the limited tools to fight against pests in the land depends on the variations in areas(regional differences). Imaging(Imagine 祈使句) there is no such kind of help and guidance from parents, what will happen? Waste several years of time to search for the right answer by (the child) himself. Certainly it is not realistic, because he cannot afford to lose; there is the whole family he has to feed.

To sum up, children should choose the same career as their parents do. In this way, they are able to receive the guidance and assistance, which will help them to be competitive in the human resources market. Moreover, it is easier for the young to establish relation with the career that they are familiar with when they were young, which will also lead to their higher preference.

[CONCLUSION]很好的文章啦~主要是小细节注意下，比如指代、单复数的问题。开头有点长了。。。不过整体还是很好的~~加油哦！

很好的文章啦~主要是小细节注意下，比如指代、单复数的问题。开头有点长了。。。不过整体还是很好的~~加油哦！

包子不包子 · 发表于 2012-5-8 22:26:42

没事儿～我也刚给你改好
不管是写还是改都没水平啊啊啊.... 见笑了

tyyhappy · 发表于 2012-5-9 11:34:26

红色是修改，蓝色是疑问，黄色是精彩

Currently, with the gradual(gradually副词修饰形容词) fiercer growing（fiercer是个比较级，是不能用来修饰growing的哈。这个可以换个说法说的。） competition in the society, it is of great significance for people to choose the right and proper career, which is regarded as a secure for their further life. As there are （a）great number of people in my country chooses (choose) to study finance and accounting, it does not mean everyone in the field like the subject(s,上文提到了finance 和 accounting 两个学科) and it will influence the development of their future（s）. Again it stress(es) that a great concern should be paid to choose the suitable career. From my perspective, it is better to choose the career as our parents.

To begin with, when we were children (，we) spent a long period of time at home with our parents; their profession talking, whether chemistry, art or literature, were the first thing that we were able to get familiar with. If it was art, oil paintings, pigments and sculptures of various kinds would probably trap us in the colorful world. As children are surrounded by all those stuffs, they touch the painting brushes and painting board frequently; besides getting familiar, at least it is not scary for them to see those manlike sculptures standing there, lifelessly and rigidly. Therefore, the related career environment is set up by parents even though the children are young, (两个句子并列了，加个and) they have the easiest access to feel them, touch them and fail（fall） in love with them.

In addition, if children choose the same career as their parents do, the possible guidance, assistance and advice will not be difficult to obtain. With the additional help from parents, a high possibility to success is created. Take the most traditional career in China, farmer, for example. Not long before, 60% of China' population is still farmer; they are usually a family of farmers for generations. Accordingly, fathers will teach their sons from young age about when to start planting carrots, what time is the best to water the field and how to use the limited tools to fight against pests in the land depends on the variations in areas. Imaging there is no such kind of help and guidance from parents, what will happen? Waste several years of time to search for the right answer by himself(觉得这个地方用祈使句不合适，祈使句是省略了you的主语，那么这句话完全了就是you waste several years···貌似不合适呀). Certainly it is not realistic, because he cannot afford to lose; there is the whole family he has to feed.（这段论证挺好的^_^，一气呵成，连贯性强）

To sum up, children should choose the same career as their parents do. In this way, they are able to receive the guidance and assistance, which will help them to be competitive in the human resources market. Moreover, it is easier for the young to establish relation with the career that they are familiar with when they were young, which will also lead to their higher preference（higher preference 没看懂嘿）.

To 包子

结构整齐，论点鲜明。

但是包子的小错误有点多哈，类似于单三或者谓语动词并列累的小错误，细心哟，包子。^_^

包子提个小建议哈，下次粘文的时候表上日期呗^_^

包子不包子 · 发表于 2012-5-9 14:13:58

5.9 独立~

Final exam is coming! There is still a lot of knowledge I have not reviewed yet. Whom should I turn to for help? In school time, it is not strange for us to hear that kind of worrying words. How should students solve this problem? Find a partner to study together. However, who is better, a friend or a tutor？From my point of view, it is better to ask for assistance from a tutor.

First of all, tutors are more experienced and they are the authority of the certain subject. What is more, it is tutors who design the papers but not our friends. Suppose you raise a question for your friends. Unfortunately, no one can answer that question or they answer it with an opaque number, and finally, still, you have to turn to your tutor for help. If it is your tutor who is the first you ask for answer, a large amount of time could be saved to review other subjects or to find some more tough questions. Assistance from tutor is not only of high accuracy but also efficient.

In addition, students are not tutors anyway. It is the words from tutors that can inspire you. Usually, we can hear stories from our friends that after having only one class from Mr. Smith, Jo comes to be the top students of the whole grade! Though it is hard to imagine, that is where the intelligence of tutors lies. With mere several words or equations, the question becomes so clear and seem could not be easier, even the related one is no longer difficult to finish. When preparing for exams, time is limited, only with the concrete and inspiring words from tutors can we complete in finishing all the review work.

Maybe it is comfortable to talk to a friend and maybe study with a friend will not be so boring. Anyway, for me, it is the help from tutors that makes me feel confident and it eases my anxious. In all, It is better to ask help from your tutor when you find it is hard for you to pass the exam.

这个题目好尴尬什么都想不出来啊。。。

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