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包子不包子

5.21 综合
Both of the reading and lecture explore the issue of ethanol fuel. The reading insists that ethanol fuel is not a good replacement of gasoline. However, the professor disproves the writer by pointing out the unconvincing arguments.

It is mentioned in the reading that ethanol fuel would not help to ease global warming. The speaker, on the contrary, claims that it is not true. She explains that corns planted for producing ethanol fuel can compensate the amount of CO2 emitted in to the atmosphere when burning them. In this way, plants use CO2 as their nutrition. They actually remove CO2 from the air. Apparently, the professor's statement disputes its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, the next point made by the reading is that ethanol fuel reduces the amount of plants that are used to feed the animals. Again, the lecturer contests the view by stating that producing ethanol fuel will only consume the cell wall of plants to meet humans' needs. Besides, that part of plants is not eaten by animals. Accordingly, no lack in animals’ food will happen.

At last, the writer believes that ethanol fuel could not win in the price compared to gasoline if there is no help from the government. Whereas, the professor declares that this support of tax subsidies from government is not always needed. That is to say, the more people create the needs of ethanol fuel, the more will be produced by producers and the price will drop consequently. Furthermore, a study displays that if the needs of ethanol grow 3 times greater, its prices would drop by 40%. Therefore, the costs of ethanol will definitely does down even without the assistance from government.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument of the writer, ethanol fuel will not bring benefits, is incorrect.

包子不包子

包子不好意思啊、晨依攒了三篇没有给你改了，这几天赶快给包子补上！
5月19日综合
Both of the lecture and the reading material explore the consequences of Yellowstone fire. The writer displays three kinds of damages produce by the fire. However, the speaker claims that there are positive results of the fire and natural fire is part of the ecological natural cycle.

It is mentioned in the reading that Yellowstone fire caused tremendous damage to the plants and vegetation. The professor, on the contrary, holds the opposite view that the fore creates new opportunities for some kinds of vegetation. That is to say, the fire replaces(个人感觉用replace意思很对但是主语是fire是不是不太合适?) tall plants with other sorts of small plants, which even possess a higher diversity. Besides, some seeds must go through the high temperature to germinate. Therefore, the professor's argument contradicts the counterpart of the reading.(听的好仔细啊，赞！)
Moreover, the next point made by the reading is that wild life in the national park was affected by the fire extremely. Again, the speaker claims that new chances for some types of animals are produced by the fire, which(which不可以指代整个句子) differs from the reading. The small plants talked(?) before bring suitable habits(habitats) for rabbits and hares, after their settlement, predators that make living on them are able to come back. Accordingly, a stronger food chain is provided by the fire.

At last, the author states that local economy suffered from the fire.(我觉得是不是应该加个时间词限定一下，感觉过去时有点突兀呢、包子斟酌下~~)Whereas the lecturer disproves that point by explaining how unusual the 1990s fire was to Yellowstone(the Yellowstone park).(前面加个连词衔接一下)Only that kind of fire happens each year will the tourism be suffered. She gives theexamples(我觉得不是example，应该是elements什么的吧、) of the unusual combination of the weather that year, such as less rainfall and unusual strong wind. Furthermore, this kind of fire has never occurred ever since the 1990s and tourists come back to visit the national park every year after that. No effect on tourism is produced.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the argument, three damages produced by natural fire, is incorrect.



Conclusion：包子的作文很茁壮！文章结构有了很大改善，细节也足足的，最欣赏的是，包子用的动词很精妙。以上的蓝色部分包子斟酌哈、晨依水平有限可能有些地方不是很到位的包子包涵一下啦，总体来说真的很好！

-- by 会员 晨依Jacqueline (2012/5/20 23:30:21)

谢谢晨依修改！ 很细致呀 蓝色部分很有帮助的呀~~ ^_^

包子不包子

5.21 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Food in the past was much healthier than today.

When talk about food people eat nowadays, all the things I can remember are fast food, high calories desserts and can food. Compared with the situation in the past of China, delicious homemade feast, healthy dumplings and traditional cakes just jump into my mind. Clearly, food in the past was much healthier than today. I will explain myself as following.

First of all, fast food is so prevail that it seems they occupy every corner on earth. People in the past do not depend on fast food to squeeze time for their working. Nowadays, on the streets, how many people do not hold a burger in one hand and a cup of coffee in another while walking in a hurry? How many people do not have breakfast in Wendy's or MacDonald's as their lunch? How many people do not call for take-away services when on weekends? Usually, we meet people take the advantages of the convenience of fast food but overlook its unhealthy. On the contrary, people live in the past regard preparing food for the family as pleasure. Mothers changes the dishes and combination of food nutrition every meal. No wonder will there be a healthier food style in the past.

Another point values the same is that chemical elements used to preserve food is harmful.  Although people benefit a lot from a longer shelf life, they do not have to buy daily food frequently, have they considered about a recent research? It is displayed in the study that a certain chemical element in a popular can fish could probably trigger cancer if it is eaten frequently. Besides, not only in preserving food, colors and flavors of food may be added additionally. In this way, a variety of food, juice, cake and chocolate are poisons to some extent. Even though, some people still love those man-made taste and color in their everyday meal. Things are totally different in the past. People eat home-grown vegetables and drink milk from the cow they feed. What else can be healthier than the food from nature directly?

Others may declare that fast food suits the market better than those traditional dishes at present. However, do people want a health body or merely tasty food with a poor health condition? I guess it is the former that most people want. Therefore, no matter how good looking and tasty the food are now, they are not as health as they used to be.

To sum up, food in nowadays are not less healthy than they used to be due to the popularity of fast food and overuse of chemical elements in preserving food.

包子不包子

5.22 综合

Both of the reading and listening explore the issue of the decline in yellow cedar number in northwestern North America. The writer insists three reasons lead to the dropping number of cedars. However, the professor believes all the causes are not adequate.

It is mentioned in the reading that a kind of insect, cedar bark beetle, parasites in the tree results in the lowering number. The speaker, on the contrary, disagrees with that. She explains that the barks and leaves of yellow cedars are all saturated with powerful chemical, which is poison to the insect. It is also the reason for yellow cedars to be much more resistance to the insects than other trees. In order to explain the dead tree with insects, the professor argues that those trees have been damaged before the insects' appearance. Therefore, the speaker's argument disproves its counterpart of the reading.

Moreover, the next point made by the passage is that brown bears' clawing at cedars damages the tree. Again, the speaker disputes this statement by saying that it is not an overall cause. Because yellow cedar both living on the mainland and island are dying and there is no brown bears live on the island. If it is the consequence of bear attacking, whether with or without brown bears around should create different decline pattern in trees' number in those two areas. Unfortunately, there is not. Accordingly, bears should not be blame.

At last, the author asserts that changing climate damages the root system of yellow cedars and that leads to the reducing number of cedars. Whereas, the professor against that view by giving the fact. The situation is that cedars living in the low elevator area, warm area, are facing more decrease in number than the cold area. In this way it is not the weather that harms the root system. At least this reason is not the killing one.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading and convincingly shows that the three reasons mentioned in the passage are incorrect.

包子不包子

5.22 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges and universities should offer students better job preparation before they start working. Use specific reasons to support your ideas.

Population is soaring. People tend to gather in big cities. Financial crisis can happen at every second. All those reasons lead to a tough environment for college students to find job. Therefore, in my opinion, it is necessary for colleges to offer job preparation before students start working. I will explain myself as the following.

To begin with, college students are not familiar with the society and working situation. Students spend most of their time in libraries, classrooms and dormitories to study. It is hard for them to imagine what it looks like at the outside. During school time, students are under the protection of schools. They do not have to worry about what will happen if they do not earn enough money and have nowhere to spend the cold night. They do not have to compete with their classmates for higher salary, either about the result of failing an important task assigned by the boss. However, when students are working, they have to know how to deal with those questions. Accordingly, providing students with enough preparation for job by colleges and universities is of great needed.

Another point of the same value is that students who possess the preparation knowledge are able to gain a better job. For the sake of students’ brighter future, colleges and universities should supply better job preparation. My brother wants to get a high-salary job in Middle East, so he takes preparation courses for job finding. The significant tip he learned in the class is do not hug with Middle East women if not invited or you are regarded to be rude. Before the interview, if it is not the tip he remembered in class, he will hug the women and lost the job even without saying a word. How important is the job preparation that colleges offered!

Others may insist that college students are adults and they should know how to take care of themselves. It is a waste of money and time to offer job preparation in colleges and universities. They are adults, indeed. They are inexperienced either. How can colleges not give students the right to become experienced? Consequently, no way can better job preparation not given to students.

To sum up, job preparation could assist students to be experienced and get used to the society before they start working. Besides, it also ensures a better job and future for the students. In all, colleges and universities should offer better job preparation for students.

chasedreamabc

Both of（both…and…）the reading and lecture explore the issue of ethanol fuel. The reading insists that ethanol fuel is not a good replacement of gasoline. However, the professor disproves the writer by pointing out the unconvincing arguments.



It is mentioned in the reading that ethanol fuel would not help to ease global warming. The speaker, on the contrary, claims that it is not true. She explains that corns planted for producing ethanol fuel can compensate the amount of CO2 emitted in to the atmosphere when burning them. In this way, plants use CO2 as their nutrition. They actually remove CO2 from the air. Apparently, the professor's statement disputes its counterpart in the reading.



Moreover, the next point made (be done) by the reading is that ethanol fuel reduces the amount of plants that are used to feed the animals. Again, the lecturer contests the view by stating that producing ethanol fuel will only consume the cell wall of plants to meet humans' needs. Besides, that part of plants is not eaten by animals. Accordingly, no lack in animals’ food will happen.



At last, the writer believes that ethanol fuel could not win in the price compared to gasoline if there is no help from the government. Whereas, the professor declares that this support of tax subsidies from government is not always needed（needed过去式和always经常发生，这个逻辑可以连用吗）. That is to say, the more people create the needs of ethanol fuel, the more will be produced by producers and the price will drop consequently. Furthermore, a study displays that if the needs of ethanol grow 3（标准语法中，数字应该依然使用英文标出） times greater, its prices would drop by 40%. Therefore, the costs of ethanol will definitely does down even without the assistance from government. (名词不能单独使用，+a或者the)



In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument of the writer, ethanol fuel will not bring benefits, is incorrect.



在综合中，OG给出的是听力对文章的支持或者反驳，并且OG的范文都是先将听力内容放在前面，阅读在后的。

hysx1988

Population is soaring. People tend to gather in big cities. Financial crisis can happen at every second. All those reasons lead to a tough environment for college students to find job. Therefore, in my opinion, it is necessary for colleges to offer job preparation before students start working. I will explain myself as the following.（首段演绎得很精彩哦，非常吸引人）


To begin with, college students are not familiar with the society and working situation. Students spend most of their time in libraries, classrooms and dormitories to study. It is hard for them to imagine what it looks like at the outside. During school time, students are under the protection of schools. They do not have to worry about what will happen if they do not earn enough money and have nowhere to spend the cold night. They do not have to compete with their classmates for higher salary, either about the result of failing an important task assigned by the boss. However, when students are working, they have to know how to deal with those questions. Accordingly, providing students with enough preparation for job by colleges and universities is of great needed.（应该是need吧，be of +名词）


Another point of the same value is that students who possess the preparation knowledge are able to gain a better job. For the sake of students’ brighter future, colleges and universities should supply better job preparation. My brother wants to get a high-salary job in Middle East, so he takes preparation courses for job finding（常用job hunting）. The significant tip he learned in the class is (应该加that,表语从句是不可以省略that引导的)do not hug with Middle East women if not invited or you are regarded to be rude. Before the interview, if it is not the tip he remembered in class, he will hug the women and lost the job even without saying a word. How important is the job preparation that colleges offered!


Others may insist that college students are adults and they should know how to take care of themselves. It is a waste of money and time to offer job preparation in colleges and universities. They are adults, indeed. They are inexperienced either. How can colleges not give students the right to become experienced? Consequently, no way can better job preparation not given to students.


To sum up, job preparation could assist students to be experienced and get used to the society before they start working. Besides, it also ensures a better job and future for the students. In all, colleges and universities should offer better job preparation for students.


总结：逻辑非常清晰，语法错误灰常少，写得很不错哦，向你学习~加油~ps: 我一直搞不懂为什么题目中有better，很担心是不是机经翻译不准，原题会不会是要和过去神马的作对比，所以我很紧张得一直和现状作对比，求解答~

包子不包子

谢谢修改～

Doyouagree or disagreewiththefollowingstatement? Colleges or universitiesshouldoffer more courses to prepare students for the future beforetheystartworking
beforetheystartworking

这是我找的另外一个版本 忽略颜色吧
个人感觉对比不一定是必需的 只要能说明自己的观点 有说服力就好～

hysx1988

嗯，在这种情况下确实木有必要对比的~！太感谢啦，还找出另一个版本的来~~对了，有人发你TPO24了吗~我刚才才看到你发的帖~

晨依Jacqueline

5.21 综合
Both of the reading and lecture explore the issue of ethanol fuel. The reading insists that ethanol fuel is not a good replacement of gasoline. However, the professor disproves the writer by pointing out the unconvincing arguments.
（开头超级shine~~！）
It is mentioned in the reading that ethanol fuel would not help to ease（好词，但是ease一般是用来减轻痛苦的，用在这里并不合适。） global warming. The speaker, on the contrary, claims that it is not true. She explains that corns planted for producing ethanol fuel can compensate the amount of CO2（Attention！一定要在文章首次提到的时候先写全称，后面括号CO2，这样比较好，或者全文都写carbon dioxide） emitted in to（into） the atmosphere when burning them. In this way, plants use CO2 as their nutrition. They actually remove CO2 from the air. Apparently, the professor's statement disputes its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, the next （这个会不会有点感觉重复？）point made by the reading is that ethanol fuel reduces the amount of plants that are used to feed the animals. Again, the lecturer contests the view by stating that producing ethanol fuel will only consume the cell wall of plants to meet humans' needs. Besides, that part of plants is not eaten by animals. Accordingly, no lack in animals’ food will happen.

At last, the writer believes that ethanol fuel could not win in the price compared to gasoline if there is no help from the government. Whereas, the professor declares that this support of tax subsidies from government is not always needed. That is to say, the more people create the needs of ethanol fuel, the more（这里没有东东？）will be produced by producers and the price will drop consequently. Furthermore, a study displays that if the needs of ethanol grow 3 times greater, its prices would drop by 40%. Therefore, the costs of ethanol will definitely does down even without the assistance from government.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument of the writer, ethanol fuel will not bring benefits, is incorrect.（感觉插入语那里不是很对呢、你再体会体会）



晨依迟到的批改……

还是只说说缺点吧，优点不说了哈~~嘻嘻

唯一的缺点我觉得这次的句子写得有点碎，但是关联词很出彩，适当长短句结合吧！