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包子不包子

嗯，在这种情况下确实木有必要对比的~！太感谢啦，还找出另一个版本的来~~对了，有人发你TPO24了吗~我刚才才看到你发的帖~

-- by 会员 hysx1988 (2012/5/23 22:18:04)

嘿嘿
挣扎一番 找到了四部分分开的24...
要准备期末考试了过两天再写...

婷婷connie

嗯，在这种情况下确实木有必要对比的~！太感谢啦，还找出另一个版本的来~~对了，有人发你TPO24了吗~我刚才才看到你发的帖~

-- by 会员 hysx1988 (2012/5/23 22:18:04)

嘿嘿
挣扎一番 找到了四部分分开的24...
要准备期末考试了过两天再写...

-- by 会员 包子不包子 (2012/5/24 8:58:15)

恩，包子，写完了告诉我哦，再给你改文~
婷婷飘过@

包子不包子

嗯，在这种情况下确实木有必要对比的~！太感谢啦，还找出另一个版本的来~~对了，有人发你TPO24了吗~我刚才才看到你发的帖~

-- by 会员 hysx1988 (2012/5/23 22:18:04)

嘿嘿
挣扎一番 找到了四部分分开的24...
要准备期末考试了过两天再写...

-- by 会员 包子不包子 (2012/5/24 8:58:15)

恩，包子，写完了告诉我哦，再给你改文~
婷婷飘过@

-- by 会员 婷婷connie (2012/5/24 15:38:41)

好的 没问题～

晨依Jacqueline

哭……我这是肿么了啊，又改错作文了

包子不包子

哭……我这是肿么了啊，又改错作文了

-- by 会员 晨依Jacqueline (2012/5/24 18:35:27)

哈哈
我都没发现啊
不急不急 慢慢来~~~~

晨依Jacqueline

包子不要恨我……我自己都不好意思发了……
People now live in an era of information explosion. No matter where you are or what time it is, (No matter where and when,这样比较简洁一点吧)just by simply pressing a button on your computer or cellphone, myriad of most (the most of)up-to-date information will come up. Owing to this, young people, who are always more familiar with the brand new technique than their parents, are less likely to depend on their parents compared with the past. More reasons will be given as the following.(开头写得很流畅自然，让人读着特别舒服。)

To begin with, technology is developing,(as technology develops,) Internet, Facebook and Twitter jump into people's life, which provide young people with great convenience in communication.(这么好的论点加上这么妙的表达，赞！)In those social networks, people in every field can be found without effort. Merely by clicking the mouse, young people can talk with a professor in biology, math or linguistic face to face(个人觉得这里的f2f是不是需要解释一下是通过视频聊天神马的、、、略感突兀。。。) to solve (这里没有啥错误，只是晨依觉得为了突出net的强大作用可以加一个形容词哇比如emergency啊difficult啊什么的)problems. Moreover, parents have the limited ability in helping us(我觉得直接说are limited in providing young people help就好，limited ability有点缀余的感觉不是很地道), they have their own profession(s). When things happened out of their profession, it is time for the Internet. Again, by typing the questions into Google or Bing, young people can find whatever they want quickly and precisely without bothering their parents. Therefore, due to the technology development, young people are less dependent on their parents than in the past.

Another point will make the statement clear is that more young people nowadays regard their independence as a kind of matureness(maturity) and braveness. In my community, lots of young people at my age step into the society right after their graduation from high school. They believe people who can live on their own effort rather than their parents（parents'？？）are worth respecting. Some of them move out of their parents' house and struggle in the society to achieve success. Other young people insist to do part time job to pay for their college fees. In this way, young people learn to live with themselves(on their own), earn money by themselves and study by themselves.(看明白了包子是想写并列的，可是晨依觉得这里表达不够简洁，可不可以把三个动词词组都写完了最后写by themselves呢？)No wonder there is less dependence of young people on their parents.

Some people may doubt that whether this independence can bring a health development for the young. In my opinion, mistakes in young people's independent living are impossible to avoid(这里应该是it is impossible to avoid...吧，主语这样好像不对呢). However, we should not jump into the conclusion that these mistakes are harmful and only negative results are produced.(感觉这里的被动语态用着不舒服，我觉得用主动就完全可以啊and only produce negative results) In fact, young people could learn a lot from their own mistakes or experience, which will assist and guide them in their future life. Always, this kind of experience is difficult to forget. With all these instructive experience, how can people announce that there will not be a health(y)development?

To sum up, with the help of myriad, easy accessed information, technology and social network as well as the new conception of matureness and braveness, young people are more independent on their parents than in the past.（结尾感觉和前面有点重复了，略显逊色，可以再升华升华的哈！）



特别喜欢包子举例子的地方，很自然有木有~！晨依只会for example再for example……汗。。。

我觉得句子的高效性和简洁性还可以再提高提高，真是挑不出其他毛病了哇 思路和语言写得很好，感觉想XDF外教的范文了！

包子不包子

谢谢晨依修改～～夸得包子都不好意嘞
包子一定再简洁 再高效些

包子不包子

tpo 24 综合 终于补上！
5.24

Both of the reading and listening discuss the issue of the existence of the actual animal tissue in the fossils of T.rex. The writer lists three evidences to support his idea. However, the professor believes that the three evidences are skeptical.

First, the soft organic substance is not necessarily the remains of blood vessels in the leg bone of T.rex, the professor claims. He says the after the death of the animal, bacteria colonized the hollows in the bone and left traces of organic material. Therefore, the soft organic material could be soft residues left by colonies -- bacteria instead of the tissue of blood vessels. This directly disproves its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, the next point made by the speaker is that sphere presented in the bone may have another origin rather than left by the red blood cells. He explains that by pointing the findings of sphere in other animal fossils in the same area, which indicates the fossils of primitive animals which do not have red blood cells when they are alive are found to have sphere in the microscope examination. Accordingly, the sphere could be just reddish mineral and the author’s theory is challenged.

At last, the professor asserts that collagen cannot be discovered older than 100000 years old. Consequently, the collagen found in the 70 million-year-old fossil is too improbable. As for the appearance of collagen, the lecturer insists that they come from the skin of researchers who handles the bone. In this way the theory raised by the reading material is disproved.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the reading and convincingly shows that the three arguments in the passage are incorrect.

包子不包子

6.10 综合

Both of the reading and listening discuss the issue of addressing the decline of a kind of evergreen tree-Torreya. The author comes up with three possible solutions. The speaker, on the contrary, insists that none of the solutions are satisfied.

First, the professor believes that the microclimate in the same location where Torreye have thrived thousands years is affected by the larger region greatly. Climate change and drain out of the wet land in Florida could produce a drier environment for Torreya, which is difficult for Torreya to survive in any microclimate within its original location. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart, reestablish Torreya in the same location, in the reading.

Moreover, the speaker contends that move Torreya to different location are unlikely to be successful, because it can produce unpredictable outcome to the new environment. She explains that by providing an example about the moving of another tree species. When this kind of tree was planted in a different region, it spread so quickly that killed local trees which were already endangered. Accordingly, the second solution is proved to be not practicable.

At last, the professor asserts that research center is not a satisfied solution either, which contradicts with the idea proposed by the author. She says that Torreya in the research center are in small population and less genetic diversity. Therefore, they cannot resist disease and do not have enough capacity to survive like the trees in the wild environment in the long term. Consequently, the research center theory is also disproved.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identified the weakness in the reading and convincingly shows that all the solutions raised by the writer are not satisfied.

包子不包子

婷婷~ 5.24 tpo24 写好了
好久没写 很没感觉... 麻烦了~