新新新手，求狠批~

kellyzhou0000

北极的企鹅123 发表于 2013-9-16 11:48
亲，9-14独立改好了，你看看
PS：这是我的，等你有空了请批阅下吧
http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-873 ...

之前没有细细看点评~亲给我改的那么认真，很中肯！谢谢~不过问一下关于gmat那，有什么材料推荐吗？

北极的企鹅123

kellyzhou0000 发表于 2013-9-24 22:33
之前没有细细看点评~亲给我改的那么认真，很中肯！谢谢~不过问一下关于gmat那，有什么材料推荐吗？ ...

不知道你GMAT的阅读能力怎么样，总之要想高分一定要持续练阅读。材料的话经典的那些材料量已经够大了，建议OG 做两遍，注意分析，然后就是新旧PREP，数学陈向东的不错，其他的暂时没想起来，加油哈。材料不在多，gmat真的是要分析总结啊

kellyzhou0000

TPO19  
The reading passage is talking about a new tactic used by companies to appeal consumers, buzz. The speaker in the lecture speaks the same topic. However, the speaker disagree with the opinions in the reading materials, and provides his evidences.
Firstly, the reading passage states that the consumers should have known whether the person who promoted the product is hired, which might be misleading for consumers. The speaker in the lecture says he is a buzzer, he used the product and think it is good, so the company hired him to praise their product, but all his talking is true feeling about the product.
What’s more, contradicting to the reading passage that the consumer might be less critical to buzzers, the speaker claims that the consumer are paying more attention and asking a lot of questions. Such as the prize, the service and how long the speaker has used. If he cannot answer the question, consumers won’t buy the product.
Finally, the speaker in the lecture thinks that the buzzing would destroy the social relationship which is pointed out in the reading material is not true. The speaker asserts that only good companies are able to hire buzzers. Buzzers feel good about the product would tell the truce to consumers. Then the consumer experiencing the fantastic of the product, they would feel more trustful to people.
In conclusion, the speaker in the lecture disapproves the ideas in the reading passage, he believes that buzzing is good to consumers that it should not be banned.

kellyzhou0000

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and televisions
should always show audience good people are being rewarded and bad people are
being punished
In the present day and age, watching movies or televisions has become one dominate way for people to consume spare time. With more and more people enjoy watch them, they seem to have a responsibility to present right aspect of value and social moral. Thus, as a long last social rule that good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished is needed to show in the media obviously. So I agree with the topic that movies and televisions should always shoe audience good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished.
Admittedly, not all the movies or television behave as required. For example, many outstanding tragic opera like  Shakespares’ which are not obey this rules that good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished. The reason why tragedy can attract audiences might because the ending that is not going as audiences’ wishes. Sometimes good people experience poor circumstance and bad people win money and beauty. However, this kind of movies and television are still needed by market and society.
But the tragic movies and televisions are small part in whole moving and television market.
Firstly, the presenting of good people are being rewarded and bad people are punished can foster children with right social moral. It is not uncommon that kids start watching movies or televisions in small age. They are tending to learn everything they witness. If they see the televisions that good people are being rewarded, they will learn to do good things, to gain rewards; when they see that the bad people are being punished, they will avoid such bad behaviors. Therefore, they will cultivate a moral system by themselves through watching movies and television. And this system would have significant influence on their life.
What’s more, this scene, good people are being rewarded and bad people are punished, is most expected by audiences. As we all know that life is not going on what you wish. In real world, owning to some reasons, that scene may not happened frequently. Some good man would complain about such an unequal life they have. As consequently, people with bad people like the bullies in society are punished and good people like themselves are being rewarded. In order to cater this need, movie or television company will make such videos to earn more audiences. Therefore, the rule that good people are being rewarded and bad people are punished is required by people to show in movie and televisions.
In conclusion, the basic social rule that good people are being rewarded and bad people are punished should be presenting in the most movies and televisions.

北极的企鹅123

kelly 貌似是不是最紧要准备考试啊，貌似挺忙的，唔，你忙完了能不能帮忙改一下9-20和9-24的独立啊

北极的企鹅123

貌似 我这几天都忘了改同志们的作业了，实在不好意思啊

xiaobaishu67

题目：To solve the present and future problems, it is necessary to understand the past.
Philosophically, everything in the world has a close contact with anything else everywhere. The author's statement about the past background and history's role in addressing present and future problems tends to be a definite position. Well, the claim is reasonable when it comes to such incidents, for example, especially the political ones, that have close and inseparable relationship with the past history. However, it fails to consider that not all the issues can not get rid of the past. Basically, lots of diverse new things show up everyday at present, in future years as well. Also, the past owned different condition and situation with current society.  Therefore, the statement is circumscribed.
       To start with, the first reason why I oppose the author's opinion is the global background-like the information explosion era, advanced technology and improvement of international cooperation, etc. In fact, in this day and age, numerous problems, resulted from the advancement of technology and increase of intense strain among many other countries and scarcity of awareness on global culture, could be eliminated by collaboration of different states. If you take a close look at my point, you could see that not only do the problems not exist before but also the past do not share the same universal situation. Thus, nothing could be learned from the past about such confusion.   
      Second, another reason we should take into consideration is the societal environment. Without doubt, all what we can name about the widespread phenomenon is the booming population, the deterioration of environment, the decrease of natural resources and the less face to face communication among people and so on. Definitely these objective factors are nothing but vital elements that could give rise to problems. Based on this changeable occasion do you think we humankind could still follow the measure adopted before to solve the problem?  The answer entirely do not need deep analysis. Concrete methods are supposed to be carried out accordingly. Take the environment and tourism in china for example, in order to develop its economy in the past, the government strongly encouraged the tourism, which consumed lots of natural resources and brought serious pollution to environment. Whereas, nowadays china has to adopt other means, instead of the previous means, to stir economic development in light of the limited resources and alleviation of environmental contamination. This case illustrates there is no use understanding unpractical old times for that the societal situation has changed.
       Granted, to better scrutinize and solve the present and future problems, it sometimes really need people to dig the past background and keep track on them like some long-term issues. The matters usually develop step by step, day by day as well and call for a standing management. Here the well-known example comes to my mind-that is global warming. This is a long-range problem caused by large amounts of fuel burning, increase of car exhaust, and the booming population. It is a durable process in demand of lasting control. Apparently, the comparison between the historical document and the current data can bring us more meaningful enlightenment and guidance. Finally, we can deal with problems more completely.
    To sum up, the specific questions need different analysis. It is unwise for us to make a sweeping generalization that the past has to be understood in order to solve future and current problems. Of course, we could draw on the experience from the past. But blindly adherence indicates nothing but stupid. Only on the basis of societal background and global strategy can we come up with the proper method and conquer the obstacles.

kellyzhou0000

10.01
People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.
First of all, different people have different definition of success. Some people value obtaining great deal of money and big houses as success, others may think that one need to achieve to peak of one’s career which can be said to be success. However, I disagree with both the ideas above. In my perspective, I believe success means you live a life you want, a feeling of satisfactory from deep in one’s heart, not limited to material life. And I believe, moat people enjoy a colorful life, which means one person who masters different skills is more easily to feel satisfactory. And I think this kind of people is considered to be successful.
Admittedly, some successful people are known with their specialize career, such as scientist, dancer, and painter. They devoted all their life to the career they affected with, in other words, they focus on only one skill. An oil painting drawer may be able to paint oil painting fabulous, but cannot handle portrait. It is the same with scientists. They learned one particular subject from bachelor to doctor, and keep investigating the mystory of that subject in career work. It is obvious that a scientist majored in astronomer doesn’t know things about biology. However, their focus in only one filed make them success.
But for most normal people, they cannot reach such a high level in one’s career. The majority of the crowd are living a life depended on repeating regulated work, such as workers in the cloth factory and office ladies. They will easily feel tired with daily work, and master other things no related to work will satisficted them Therefore, for most people, focus on more skills may create more success. Firstly, mastering other skills will improve their life quality. It is not uncommon that people would choose to watch TV or play computer after work, which is totally a waste of time as I believed. If people have other skills, they can use them to cut time. For example, people who are good at dancing can join a dance club after work. Not only can the person spend spare time more meaningful, but also improve one’s health. So, more skills one person handeled, more enjoy one had, and more successful one gained.
What’s more, mastering more skills will improve your career. As it is known to all, the multiple people are most popular in this society. If an office worker can speak one foreign language apart from his daily work, he or she will be more possible to be improved, which permitted people to pursue higher destination to achieve success in one’s career.
In conclusion, more skills will bring more satisfaction and possibility to one person. And as far as I concerned, this two factors contribute to the successful life.

ChristinaJuris

哥们，我的作业的链接http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-868770-1-1.html
辛苦了，多谢！