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sherlock1992

6.10 综合
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The reading passage explores the issue of whether buzzers are reliable or not. In the professor's lecture, he invited a buzzer who argues that buzzers should absolutely be believed by clients, which contradicts what the reading states. And in the lecture, he uses three specific points to support his idea.

First, even though the reading passage suggests that consumers can not figure out the praise is the real one or just being paid, the buzzer argues in the lecture that these praises should be trusted. This is because the company only hires these people who use their products by themselves and do benefit from their products. So, the praise coming from theses buzzers is the real praise, though they surely have been paid. Hence, the buzzer's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that consumers are more likely to buy these goods praised unobjectively by these so-called buzzers, the professor contends that the really situation usually completely different. Then he supports this point with the fact that when consumers buy somethings, they usually ask you many questions regarding to qualities, sell services and the like. If one of these questions you can not answer, they will leave. In other words, the consumer is not so easy to be lied.

Finally, the buzzer asserts that it is not ture to consider buzzing as a tool to destroy citizen relationship. Whereas the author of the reading claims that it will cause a adverse effect on the social. The buzzer continue to buttress his point by saying that if people find the products they buy is low-quality, the company will disappear, which these companies know clearly. So, only if the goods are qualified can these company hire buzzers. And because of the right lead to consumers, buzzers win many trust rather than distrust.

In conclusion, the buzzer clearly identifies the flaws in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, ---that is, that buzzers are not reliable is incorrect.

yzwdan818

6.10独立

In thisday and age, people living in this modern society （意思是不是有点重复？）have many kinds of friends. Despitedifferent backgrounds, they can still get on well with each other. Moreover, they don't care aboutwhether you a rocket scientist or an artist, whether you come from a smallvillage or big city, or whether you are poor or wealthy. Therefore,people can, no doubt, have friends who have more money.

First and foremost, in this opening world and society,people tend to have more courage to express their thoughts beyond (about)the hierarchy ofsociety, language, racial element, and the gap between the rich and the poor.So, the communication scale is much wider than before, which has a strictly limit(为什么用这个单词呢？你想表达什么意思？) between aristocratsand normal people. （你下面这个例子也不是用来证明你上面的判断，上面是负面意思，下面是个正面的例子啊）Here is a case in point, one ofmy roommates named Paul is absolutely a lucky guy because when born to thisworld, he has never shortened of money. And every time I asked him forborrowing some money, he never hesitates to lend me and never exudes acontemptuous or any other negative emotional signs. Naturally, we become so good friends, andmeanwhile accepted by each other rather than pay more attention to these compares（comparisons） of asset.

Besides, it may seem not a so tough thing to make a rich friend.（friend 不能make,只能have或者makefriends with…） Although there do have(我不确定可不可以这样用，你要不直接改成there be?) somedifferent views deriving from the different education coming from families,people can still find their same interests as possible as they try. Forexample, if the guy richer than you is your classmate, the interests may lie inclasses. If the guy is your colleague, the interests may depend on works orex-work activities. Hence, only if you try a further step can you really knowmaking friends with guys with a lot of money maybe a pretty good choice.

Moreover, a few precious characteristics can be foundfrom these wealthy people if you further communicate with them. The reason issimple, because the amount of money you have is usually a significant exponentto measure how successful a man is. So, in most situations, the more money youowns, the more value you possess. Under this circumstances, why not make friendswith these richer guys?

After ruminating these three reasons above, I am fullyconvinced that it is suitable for us to make friends with these guys who arericher.

1.段与段之间不需要空两行   2.论证思路不是很清晰，段内和段间的逻辑性和联系不强。  3，结尾好像有点太简单了，可以再简单重复一下自己的论点，或作适当升华。

sherlock1992

确实，今天写的太差了

yzwdan818

sherlock1992 发表于 2013-6-11 22:13
确实，今天写的太差了

其实还好，我觉得你用词什么的就还挺好的，至少词汇量肯定是比我大的。你找时间也帮我改一下吧

sherlock1992

6.12 独立

It is undeniable that in this information explosion era, printed books and the television are two most significant resource poors, from which people absorb useful and ample nutrients concerning to varies of angles towards life. Maybe it is true that people have different dictionaries of their own, where the words contain are as disparate as apples and oranges that are beyond comparison: the issue of whether printed books are more influential on society or the television is incessantly heated discussed. While, I buttress the former with no exception.
The first reason to support my point lies in that the benefits we can get from printed books outweigh those from televisions. A vivid example in point comes from a comic, in which depicts two boy: One boy is reading a book whilst imagning the colorful content in his brain, whereas, the other boy is watching the colorful televsion but full of blank in his mind. Hence, from the instance above, it is probably not difficult to come a conclusion---the printed books enrich one's mind but televison pales.
Secondly, printed books are indispensable medium to instill precious knowledge to our normal people, and such examples are everywhere as textbooks, tool books, or encyclopedias. Moreover, Just as Sir. Bacon ever said---the knowledge is power. So, printed books, needless to say more, have a huge effect on our society. And if the television can replace the firm position where printed books functions,  why innumerable top-class unversities still regard these paper books as the first choice? In a word, regarding to education area, the function of printed books is unparalled.
Last, but not the least, granted, the televison provides us with unmatched enjoyment of the auditory sense and sight sense, the screen, however, are saturated with gratuitous violent and pornographic contents. Meanwhile, the commercial characteristic of television shows has, from the far beginning, settled the main key: the platform of televisons is not only a simple poor to transmit information, more importantly, but a business war full of turbulent undercurrent. Therefore, compared to televisions, the printed book appears to be more pure.
After ruminating those three-above reasons, i am fully convincing that printed books have many advantages compared to television and ,equally, more influential on society than television does.

sherlock1992

6.12 综合

The reading passage explores the issue of  whether modified trees are beneficial or not. The professor's lecture deals with the same issue. However, she thinks that these modified trees are not as perfect as what the reading mentioned. And in the lecture, she uses three specific points to buttress her idea.

First, even though the reading passage suggests that modified tress are more resistant to some particular problem such as virus infections, the professor argues in the lecture that it is probably not a good thing in the long run. This is because gene has its diversity ans when climate changes at least one specie will survives. But as for these whose gene has been modified will likely to disappear.

Moreover, despite the statement in the reading that genetically modified technology will bring more profits to farmers than in the past, the professor contends that the real situation is not in tune with the reading has described. Then she supports his points with the fact that the companies will charge the technology users for some fees. Besides, according to law, the farmers should pay for every plant every time they grow.

Finally, the professro asserts that theses gene-designed trees will break the balance of ecosystem before, whereas the authors of the reading claims that genetically modified trees can ease the problem of overexploitating. The professor points proves that this claim is indefensible by  pointing out that the aggression of these gene modified tress will hold more soil resources and water, which will indirectly influence those the grow process of other plants.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the flaws in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, ---that is, benefits gene modified tress bring is incorrect.

yzwdan818

sherlock1992 发表于 2013-6-13 07:07
6.12 综合

The reading passage explores the issue of  whether modified trees are beneficial or not.  ...

不好意思，我之前和你说过，段与段之间不需要空两行对不对？我今天看之前的讲义，发现段与段之间还是需要空一行的。有两种方式：1.开头空四个字母位置，2.顶格写，每段空一行。

sherlock1992

谢谢yzwadan的提醒。

sherlock1992

yzwdan818 发表于 2013-6-13 07:45
不好意思，我之前和你说过，段与段之间不需要空两行对不对？我今天看之前的讲义，发现段与段之间还是需要 ...

谢谢yzwdan的提醒。

yzwdan818

sherlock1992 发表于 2013-6-13 11:54
谢谢yzwdan的提醒。

没事，应该的，不能放误导你啊，哈哈