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Vance1991

TOPICo you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems in today's world will be solved in our lifetime.


Due to the development of science andtechnology, a great number of breakthroughs had been made to change the wholesociety even the progress of the human dramatically. For instance: the developmentof the internet enriches people’s life, the advent of the smart-phone improvesthe communication between people, the high speed transportation makes people’slives more convenient. From that perspective, some people may hold the viewthat the most important problems will be solved in our lifetime. However, in myeyes, I insist that there are still numerous of significant problems need to behandle and them will not be tackled in our lifetime. I will illustrate thereasons as following in this essay.

To begin with, as the technologydeveloping, it really solved a great number of problems which people sufferedfrom. Such as: the organic transplant saves numerous people’s lives. Nevertheless,while the technology settling old problems, new problems will come out and somemay even more severe than the previous ones. Take the nuclear energy as anexample: when people find out that nuclear energy can replace the nonrenewableenergy, such as, fossil oil, and coal. They are content with it and build nuclearpowers as possible as they can. But they ignore the problem about how tocontrol the nuclear energy appropriately. And this problem is becomingincreasingly severe nowadays. The leak of nuclear energy happened in Japan in2011 is a lesson. The nuclear power station exploded after the earthquake. Itcaused hundreds of people got infected and near twenty thousand of people haveto leave their home because of the radiation.

What’s more, technology innovations havetaken place, but the overall condition of humanity is no better. Wars, violence,and poverty are still with us. Take Syria as an example, there was a explosionhappened there several days ago. One of bodyguards exploded the bomb whichleaded the national defense administrator and several officials died in theincident. I believe technology cannot change the condition of humanity.

Taking all these aspects intoconsideration, I hold the view that although the technology developed fast andthe society changed dramatically, still there are various important issuescannot be solved in our lifetime.

Vance1991

TOPICo you agree or disagree with the following statement? Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place.


Due to the development of science andtechnology, a great number of breakthroughs had been made to change the wholesociety and even the progress of the human dramatically. For instance: theorganic transplant saves people’s lives, the advent of the smart-phone improvesthe communication between people, the high speed transportation makes people’slives more convenient. From that perspective, some people hold the view thatthe quality of people’s lives has been improved significantly. However, in myeyes, the quality of people’s lives does not be improved and may even be deteriorated.I will illustrate the reasons as following in this essay.

To begin with, although the development ofthe technology accelerates the progress of the society, the cost of it is thepollution of the environment. The damage of the environment is becomingincreasingly severe issue, such as: the increasingly exhausted gas in the air,the increasingly severe congestion on the road, the increasingly poor qualityof water. How can people lead high quality lives in such environment? When Iwas as a kid, I always swam with my father in the river near my house. Thewater was clear at that time. But now, even fishes are unwilling to swim in theriver! The water is dirty and filled with rubbish. In the summer, the rivergives out foul smell which disturbs us a lot.

What’s more, some kinds of the technologyseem benefit the society in ostensibly, but the drawbacks it have are outweighits advantages. Take the assemble-line manufacturing as an example: admittedly,it improves the efficiency of the factories and stimulates the economy of the society.However, it has numerous disadvantages. The less cost and efficient assemble-linesreplace the positions of the manual workers. As a result, a great number ofworkers lost their jobs. In addition, it also rendered us become the slaver tothe machines. The Foxconn, one famous factory in China, is a typicalrepresentation. In that factory there were nearly 10 people jumped from thefactory in succession in 2011 because the above reason.

Taking all these aspects intoconsideration, I am not in favor of the view that the quality of people’s liveshas improved already.

Vance1991

TOPICo you agree or not: people should know the events happening around the world, even if it unlikely have some influence on your daily life.


Although people from different countriesare separated by regional boundaries, thanks to the increasingly advancedtechnology of mass media and the internet, we can access to plenty informationall over the world. Notwithstanding, parts of the information seems unrelatedto and have no influence on we individuals but we still need to be aware ofthose message. I will illustrate the reasons as following in this essay.

To begin with, having an international viewcan help you find great jobs especially to those who want to work in theinternational companies. As the increasingly number of international companiesestablish branch companies in China, it is essential for the employees to havean international view and pay attention to the information in foreign countrieseven which seems have no affect on their lives. Take me as example, last summerI was interviewed for an internship in Microsoft. During the interview, theinterviewer asked me talk about the economic crisis which happened in America. Iwas so embarrassed at that time because I had no knowledge about it. I thoughtthat was not happened in my country and was unrelated to my daily life. It isobviously, I failed in the interview. After that I realized that informing themovement of the world is becoming a basic skill for the employees especially incurrent globalized era.

What’s more, knowing the events happened inother countries can help us to handle some emergency crisis. In currentglobalized society, if some county occurs crisis, no matter in the flied ofeconomy, culture or science, it will affect other countries in a short time.Therefore, knowing the latest trends of the international affairs can help us preventthe crisis from happening and prepare measures to deal with it in advance. Takethe economic crisis happened in America in 2008 as an example. Although it was originatedin the America, it spread quick and involved nearly all of the countries. Sincemy country had a prediction of that and made some policies to protect the economyin domestic, the influence of the crisis was not severe.

Taking all these aspects intoconsideration, I hold the view that even though some kinds of the global eventsseems have no influence to our daily lives, we still require to know them.

Vance1991

TOPIC: It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Do you agree?


Certain people prefer to relax by watchingmovies or reading books rather than doing physical exercise in their sparetime. On account of it can relieve their stress and make their minds peaceful.However, compared with watching movies and reading, I believe that doingphysical exercise is a better choice. I will illustrate the reasons asfollowing in this essay.

To begin with, doing exercise can strengthenour bodies and keep us fit, which do not take place while you reading books orwatching movies. Only do we have healthy life then we can pay more attentionand put more energy on our work. Take me as an example: my major is computerscience. As a consequence, I have to face to the computer nearly 8 hours everyday to program software. And I do not have time to do exercises. It leads thesituation that after facing to the computer for a long time, my neck will beache and sore. As a result, the efficiency becomes increasingly lower. Afterwards,I spend one hour doing exercise with my friends, such as running on theplayground, playing basketball. Several weeks later, the condition of my neckis relieved. In addition, the efficiency of programming is boosted. It isobvious that exercising plays an important role in people’s working, especiallyto those who always face to the computer and do not stretch for a long time.

What’s more, doing exercise also canrelease the stress and improve the quality of sleep. As the pressure of workbecoming increasingly heavy day by day, people should pay more attention to thisissue. Two weeks before I took the TOEFL test, I felt upset and stressed aboutthe test. It resulted in the situation that I could not go sleep well at night.In other words, I always woke up in the night or hardly slept deeply. Then mymother required me to have a walk around our community after dinner with her. Breathingthe fresh air, my mood become down and the stress was smoothed. As a result, mysleeping quality became great and I have enough energy for fighting in the nextday.

Taking all these aspects intoconsideration, I hold the view that doing exercise is more efficient andeffective as a relax method in your spare time.

Vance1991

TOPIC:  Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? There is never a reason to be rude (impolite) toanother person. Use specific reasons to support your answer.(7月24日 110821NA)



As the rhythm of people’s lives is becomingincreasingly rapid, numerous people hold the view that there is no need to bepolite to friends, such as: people do not say hello when they meet theirfriends. Because they think such manners waste a lot of time. However, I believethat it is essential to be polite to others no matter of your friends or acquaintances.I will illustrate the reasons as follows in this essay.

To begin with, beingpolite to your friends is indispensible, if you want to maintain a friendship. Beingpolite to your friends equals showing respect to them. If you are rude to them,they will feel you insult to them and they will depart from you. Take me as anexample: last month my friend Mark asked me to accompany him to go shopping forseveral times through texting message and making phone calls. But I did notwant to go with him so I did not reply him every time. As a result of this impolitebehavior, he did not contact with me for a long time until I made a sincereapologize to him for that. Being polite and showing respect is the fundament ofkeeping a companionship.

What’s more,being polite to your team members during work is helpful to stimulate thepassion of your coworkers. Therefore, they can accomplish their workefficiently and effectively. It is common sense that if your boss or leader is unpleasantto you, you will be depressed and unwilling to finish your work. Last summer, Ihad an internship in Microsoft in ShangHai. I was assigned to a camera team. Tony,my team leader, was a amicable person, every time when he assigned missions tome, he would end it up with some encourage and grateful words, for instance:thank you so much, great job. Due to his genial words, I was willing and hadpassion to finish my job. And I felt happy to work with him. Obviously, suchfriendly behaviors even those grateful words can have great power in certainsituation.

More over, our governmentpays great attention to structure the harmonious society in recent times. Why? Politenesscan be infectious and have reactions. Only you are polite to the people youmeet, will they be friend to you in return. As a consequence, it can reduce theviolence and preserve the society stable.

Taking all theseaspects into consideration, I insist that we should be polite to others.

hansxiao7

As the rhythm of people’s lives is becoming increasingly rapid, numerous people hold the view that there is no need to be polite to friends, such as: people do not say hello when they meet their friends. Because they think such manners waste a lot of time. However, I believethat it is essential to be polite to others no matter of your friends or acquaintances.I will illustrate the reasons as follows in this essay.

To begin with, being polite to your friends is indispensible, if you want to maintain a friendship. Being polite to your friends equals showing respect to them. If you are rude to them,they will feel you insult to them and they will depart from you(这个这个。。。depart不如改成你们的friendship break up). Take me as an example: last month my friend Mark asked me to accompany him to go shopping for several times through texting message and making phone calls. But I did not want to go with him so I did not reply him every time. As a result of this impolite behavior, he did not contact with me for a long time until I made a sincere apologize to him for that. Being polite and showing respect is the fundament ofkeeping a companionship.

What’s more,being polite to your team members during work is helpful to stimulate the passion of your coworkers. Therefore, they can accomplish their work efficiently and effectively. It is (a?) common sense that if your boss or leader is unpleasant to you, you will be depressed and unwilling to finish your work. Last summer, I had an internship in Microsoft in ShangHai. I was assigned to a camera team. Tony,my team leader, was a amicable person, every time when he assigned missions tome, he would end it up with some encourage and grateful words, for instance:thank you so much, great job. Due to his genial words, I was willing and hadpassion to finish my job. And I felt happy to work with him. Obviously, such friendly behaviors even those grateful words can have great power in certainsituation.

More over, our governmentpays great attention to structure the harmonious society in recent times. Why? Politenesscan be infectious and have reactions. Only you are polite to the people youmeet, will they be friend to you in return. As a consequence, it can reduce the violence and preserve the society stable.

Taking all theseaspects into consideration, I insist that we should be polite to others.

思路写的很棒！单词也不错！给您提两点建议 1是单词的使用上不是越难越好 恰当的才是最好的 2是句型上要再多下功夫 :-D加油吧

Vance1991

TOPICo you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems in today's world will be solved in our lifetime.(7月25日110304NA)


Due to the development of science andtechnology, a great number of breakthroughs had been made to change the wholesociety even the progress of the human dramatically. For instance: the developmentof the internet enriches people’s life, the advent of the smart-phone improvesthe communication between people, the high speed transportation makes people’slives more convenient. From that perspective, some people may hold the viewthat the most important problems will be solved in our lifetime. However, in myeyes, I insist that there are still numerous of significant problems need to behandle and them will not be tackled in our lifetime. I will illustrate thereasons as following in this essay.

To begin with, as the technologydeveloping, it really solved a great number of problems which people sufferedfrom. Such as: the organic transplant saves numerous people’s lives. Nevertheless,while the technology settling old problems, new problems will come out and somemay even more severe than the previous ones. Take the nuclear energy as anexample: when people find out that nuclear energy can replace the nonrenewableenergy, such as, fossil oil, and coal. They are content with it and build nuclearpowers as possible as they can. But they ignore the problem about how tocontrol the nuclear energy appropriately. And this problem is becomingincreasingly severe nowadays. The leak of nuclear energy happened in Japan in2011 is a lesson. The nuclear power station exploded after the earthquake. Itcaused hundreds of people got infected and near twenty thousand of people haveto leave their home because of the radiation.

What’s more, technology innovations havetaken place, but the overall condition of humanity is no better. Wars, violence,and poverty are still with us. Take Syria as an example, there was a explosionhappened there several days ago. One of bodyguards exploded the bomb whichleaded the national defense administrator and several officials died in theincident. I believe technology cannot change the condition of humanity.

Taking all these aspects intoconsideration, I hold the view that although the technology developed fast andthe society changed dramatically, still there are various important issuescannot be solved in our lifetime.

Vance1991

TOPICo you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier to become educated than in the past.(7月26日101030NA )

In recently, more and more children gain knowledge by entering schools than those in earlier time.People in recent times, in other words, are easier to be educated than inthe past. There are many reasons forthat, such as more and more parents having the ability to offer their children to accesstothe college, national policy paying greater attentionto the education and a great number of universities that have been  established.

To begin with, as the country is developing dayby day, more and more families are becoming affluent than before. As aresult, most of these families will require their childrento go study at schools. Take my family as an example: in thegeneration of my grandparents, most of these people did not have the chance toaccess to knowledge. The reason is that at that time the wholesociety was less affluent; a lot of the families were eventoo poor to meet their basic living requirements. Therefore, mostpeople during those decades did not receive education. Inthe generation of my father, the living condition is  improved a lot; most family could afford for theirchildren to study at school. However, the level of education was still quite low. Most of them stopped further education after they graduated fromhigh school, because their parents wanted them to make money to supporttheir families. In my generation, nearly all thechildren can access to the university. More and more people go abroadfor further education. It is obvious that people are easier be educated thanbefore.

Moreover, the government pays enough attention to the education nowadays. Takemy country, China, as an illustration. In the lastseveral decades ago, our government legislated a law called 9 yearscompulsory education, which forces parents to make their children go toschool for 9 years. In other words, everyone has to graduate from highschool. Besides, a few years ago, our government had reduced thefee for the primary school in some poor regions. All these policies are aimed to let more and more people to access tothe education easier.

What’s more, in the recent decades government has established many universitiesand colleges. Now there are nearly 250 universities and a lot of colleges inthe whole country to meet the great requirement of education.

Taking all these aspects into consideration, I believe that nowadays people have easier access to education thanbefore.

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蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

Due to the development of science and technology, a great number of breakthroughs had been made to change the whole society even the progress of the human（这个可以不要额，society包括了人） dramatically. For instance: the developmentof the internet enriches people’s life, the advent of the smart-phone improves the communication between people, the high speed transportation makes people’s lives more convenient. From that perspective, some people may hold the view that the most important problems will be solved in our lifetime. However, in my eyes, I insist that there are still numerous of significant problems need to be handle and them will not be tackled in our lifetime. I will illustrate the reasons as following in this essay.

To begin with, as the technology developing, it really solved a great number of problems which people suffered from. Such as: the organic transplant saves numerous people’s lives. Nevertheless,while the technology settling old problems, new problems will come out and some may even more severe than the previous ones. Take the nuclear energy as an example: when people find out that nuclear energy can replace the nonrenewable energy, such as, fossil oil, and coal. They are content with it and build nuclear power plants as possible as they can. (这个要和上句合并，不然是破碎句)But they ignore the problem about how to control the nuclear energy appropriately. And this problem is becoming increasingly severe nowadays. The leak of nuclear energy happened in Japan in2011 is a lesson. The nuclear power station exploded after the earthquake. It caused hundreds of people got infected and near twenty thousand of people have to leave their home because of the radiation.

What’s more, technology innovations have taken place, but the overall condition of humanity is no better （developed？）. Wars, violence,and poverty are still with us. Take Syria as an example, there was a explosion happened there several days ago. One of bodyguards exploded the bomb which leaded the national defense administrator and several officials died in the incident.（这里增加一个过渡的句子吧） I believe technology cannot change the condition of humanity.

Taking all these aspects into consideration, I hold the view that although the technology developed fast and the society changed dramatically, still there are various important issues cannot be solved in our lifetime.

楼主的语言和例子都很好，小处注意就好了。

Vance1991

TOPIC:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should know the events happening around the world, even if it unlikely has some influence on your daily life.


Although people from different countriesare separated by regional boundaries, thanks to the increasingly advancedtechnology of mass media and the internet, we can access to plenty informationall over the world. Notwithstanding, parts of the information seems unrelatedto and have no influence on we individuals but we still need to be aware ofthose message. I will illustrate the reasons as following in this essay.

To begin with, having an international viewcan help you find great jobs especially to those who want to work in theinternational companies. As the increasingly number of international companiesestablish branch companies in China, it is essential for the employees to havean international view and pay attention to the information in foreign countrieseven which seems have no affect on their lives. Take me as example, last summerI was interviewed for an internship in Microsoft. During the interview, theinterviewer asked me talk about the economic crisis which happened in America. Iwas so embarrassed at that time because I had no knowledge about it. I thoughtthat was not happened in my country and was unrelated to my daily life. It isobviously, I failed in the interview. After that I realized that informing themovement of the world is becoming a basic skill for the employees especially incurrent globalized era.

What’s more, knowing the events happened inother countries can help us to handle some emergency crisis. In currentglobalized society, if some county occurs crisis, no matter in the flied ofeconomy, culture or science, it will affect other countries in a short time.Therefore, knowing the latest trends of the international affairs can help us preventthe crisis from happening and prepare measures to deal with it in advance. Takethe economic crisis happened in America in 2008 as an example. Although it was originatedin the America, it spread quick and involved nearly all of the countries. Sincemy country had a prediction of that and made some policies to protect the economyin domestic, the influence of the crisis was not severe.

Taking all these aspects into consideration, I holdthe view that even though some kinds of the global events seems have noinfluence to our daily lives, we still require to know them.