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913 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges or Universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.

time consuming: 35:43                 words: 473   一个早上连写两篇真心吃不消，这篇感觉第三段弱爆了

擦，刚才改的那篇忘了换号，要被master版那群人鄙视了...

There is no doubt that colleges and universities contribute a lot to career success of students, but the question is what kind of course those schools should offer. When it comes to the topic whether universities should arrange more courses on career for students, preparing them to the future challenge from career or not, opinions vary from person to person. While some people say no to the question, as they value specific knowledge more, I, personally hold the belief that students can gain a lot from courses about career, and university do need to offer those courses more. (有了自己的模版，不错)

First of all, through these career courses, students are more likely to acknowledge what kind of jobs they will face, and then as they have deeper understand of various of career jobs, more chance are that students could figure out the most suitable job for them(这句话主语有问题，应该是students have more chances to figure out. 这里的话 可以改成More probable are that ). Once students know where their suitable job lies, they can fight straight forward to it without wasting time on looking for suitable jobs through personal working experience. Take myself for example. My university did offer a lot of course on career, and these courses shows what the specific jobs each career do. Through those classes, I have a much closer look at numerous industries. Once I want to be an accountant, but then I realize accounting need careful working and it seems to be a little flat in the career path. Furthermore, I learnt that there are challenges lying in marketing. Addicted to adventures, I made up my mind to work in marketing field. Lucky for me, I have the opportunity to sign for marketing course in time, and I no longer need to waste time on the field I have no interests in. (论证比较严谨)

Besides, courses on careers teach students how to behave in future working, such as skills on interview, communication and cooperation. These knowledge make student more inclined to standout in the fierce competition in modern society. According to the investigation conducted by Peking University, 91 percent students think they benefit from courses on careers which they received during school time, and 94 percent students vote for the action that university offer more course about careers.(这段说的不对劲了，前面你说提高了blah blah,后面就该从那边来说，而不是很无力地举个和论点不相关的例子)

Admittedly, universities are obligated to teach student specific knowledge in their major, preparing them with excellent command of expertise. However, it does not mean that courses on career should be place as less value. As finding job is the ultimate goal of study, people could not emphasize the importance of course of career too much, since it brings so many benefits.

In summary, with the above-mentioned reasons, there is no doubt students would benefit a lot if universities offer more courses on the career. Therefore, we can arrive to the conclusion safely and soundly that colleges or Universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.


To 瓜瓜同学
1， 别的还真没发现什么问题，中规中矩
2，第三段的逻辑构造上再去雕琢
3，字数真的有明显提高，well done
4, good luck

瓜瓜不瓜

914 Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past?

There is no doubt that education plays an essential part in one’s success, and thus education has been paid increasing attention to recently. When it comes to the topic whether people are now easier to become educated than in the past, opinions vary from person to person. While some people contend the situation of education has not been improved, I, personally, hold the point of view that people do have more convenience to access to education. I would like to support my statement with following reasons.

First of all, with the development of the society, a increasing number of people become aware the indispensible role education plays, as it not only benefits career success, but also fulfill one’s life. Thanks to the raised attention, people are so eager to enter the school and learn things they want that they overcome a lot of difficulties. In the past, only wealthy people can have the access to school, and females had less chance to get education due to gender discrimination. Since people’s financial condition, to the whole scale, has been improved a lot, money seems no longer the top concern for people longing to enter school. To the aspect of gender, the barrier has also been swept away, because the social situation of women has been put in the equal height as that of men.

In addition, the innovations in technology provide numerous conveniences for people to get education. The wide application of Internet, long-distance classes, and the electronic learning devices makes it much easier for people to connect themselves with study. Here, I would like to use my mother for example to illustrate my opinion. My mother did not attend high school in her teenage because at that time family did not have enough time to support her further study, and she was so regret that she missed the chance to study in psychology, her favorite learning field. Last year, my mother heard that Peking University opened psychology major course online, permitting everyone to listen to lectures delivered by psychological experts and professor. Without any hesitation, she register online and watches these courses whenever she has time. I can feel the happiness and satisfaction she got through the learning, as one of her childhood dream finally came true.

Admittedly, there are still many people, especially the young in rural area have difficulty to get education due to lack of money. However, recent decades have witnessed so much capital has been put into the construction of charity school, and so many people are willing to give a hand to help the poor students to realize their education dream. Thus, no one can deny that the situation is get better and better.

In summary, through the above-mention reasons, we can reach the conclusion safely and soundly that since lots of barriers are swept away, and the technology offers so much convenience, people are now easier to get educated than in the past.

婷婷connie

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914 Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past?

There is no doubt that education plays an essential part in one’s success, and thus education has been paid increasing attention to recently. When it comes to the topic whether people are now easier to become educated than in the past（这么写没有问题，不过建议改写一下，展示语言多样性： whether people currently are able to receive education with more ease）, opinions vary from person to person. While some people contend the situation of education has not been improved, I, personally, hold the point of view that people do have more convenience to access(这里感觉more convenient access好点，access做动词是transitive，不用to) to education. I would like to support my statement with following reasons.

First of all, with the development of the society, a(an) increasing number of people become aware （of）the indispensible(indispensable) role education plays, as it not only benefits career success, but also fulfill（fulfills） one’s life. Thanks to the raised（这里是想表达增加的意思吗？用growing更好） attention, people are so eager to enter the school and learn things they want that they overcome a lot of difficulties. In the past, only wealthy people can have the access to school, and females had less chance to get education due to gender discrimination. Since people’s financial condition, to the whole scale, has been（没必要用被动） improved a lot, money seems no longer the top concern for people longing to enter school. To the aspect of gender, the barrier has also been swept away（生动，好！）, because the social situation of women has been put in the equal height as that of men.

In addition, the innovations in technology provide numerous（这个通常是修饰可数名词，用considerable吧） conveniences for people to get education. The wide application(popularity普及) of Internet, long-distance classes, and the electronic learning devices makes it much easier for people to connect themselves with study.(这个观点比婷婷表达得好~) Here, I would like to use my mother for example to illustrate（类似的还可以用bolster/demonstrate/prop/embrace/uphold/uphold） my opinion. My mother did not attend high school in her teenage because at that time family did not have enough time to support her further study, and she was so regret（regretful） that she missed the chance to study in psychology, her favorite learning field. Last year, my mother heard that Peking University opened psychology major course online, permitting everyone to listen to lectures delivered by psychological experts and professors. Without any hesitation, she registersonline and watches these courses whenever she has time. I can feel the happiness and satisfaction she got through the learning, as one of her childhood dream finally came true.

Admittedly, there are still many people, especially the young in rural areas have difficulty to get education due to lack of money. However, recent decades have witnessed so much（mints of/scads of这两个都是表示大量的意思） capital has been put into the construction of charity school, and so many people are willing to give a hand to help the poor（underprivileged） students to realize their education dream. Thus, no one can deny that the situation is get better and better.

In summary, through the above-mention reasons, we can reach the conclusion safely and soundly that since lots of barriers are swept away, and the technology offers so much convenience, people are now easier to get educated than in the past.



Conclusion:

1.注意s大神，不要犯它哦

2.有些词的词性要注意

3.观点和思路都很好，赞一个~~

瓜瓜不瓜

Some people think university professor should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time education students.

There is no doubt that university professors play an essential role in the development of technology, as well as society. The question is what they should focus on. When it comes to the topic whether university professors should devote themselves to research or to the education of students, opinions vary from person to person. Some people assert that since students are the future of the society, university professor should spend more time on education. However, I, personally, hold the belief that it is of great importance for professors to focus on research, and I would like to state my reasons in following passage.

First of all, the research performed by university professors are the main force that push the technology and the whole society move forward, since the responsibility of universities has changed from merely teaching to both research and education. In most situation, people would put research in front of education because recent decades have witnessed the great benefit brought by advanced technology. Take the NO.6 Shenzhou Satelite for example, which is invented and made mainly by professors in Peking University, the most famous university in China. It is the first aircraft sent by Chinese to the Moon, and the success of the sending brought a lot of precious information of the space, which contributes much to the exploit of the space. Without the efforts of university, there would be such movement in human beings’ history.

Besides, the research conducted by university professors bring honor to both the university and themselves. Once the university receives such kind of award, its reputation will be raised, attracting more students to the university, thus the whole society will get benefits since more people get education. One the other hand, as the professor are granted with these extraordinary honor, they will be largely encourage, and work more hard on their research field, which will also bring benefits to the whole society. For example, Gan Li, the professor in Southwestern University, majored on economics, last year established a mathematic model about the balance between demand and supply, and gain the Zengkanglin Price, the top award for economist in China. Not only the reputation of Southwest University is raised, but also Professor. Gan was motivated to work more hard on this field.

Admittedly, professor should not ignore their obligation on education, since it is the object for student to attend school. However, it is no conflicts between research and eduction. Indeed, the research would do help to education, as professors sometimes show their students the perspective of their research, spurring their interests to the specific field. What is more, sometimes professor would ask students to join the research, which is a precious chance and experience for students in learning.

In conclusion, through the above-mentioned reasons, we can see focus research brings a lot of advantages. Thus, we can reach to the conclusion safely and soundly that university professors should spend more time on research rather than education.

瓜瓜不瓜

Some people think university professor should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time education students.




There is no doubt that university professors play an essential role in the development of technology, as well as that of society(你這兒as well as並列的是兩個develoment吧，一個是技術的發展，一個是人類社會的發展). The question is what they should focus on. When it comes to the topic whether university professors should devote themselves to research or to the education of students, opinions vary from person to person.(這兒的話，兩句話其實在意思上是重複的。。。所以應該合併一下，或者乾脆把第一句去掉。。。還有啊，第二句我覺得可以把主句移到前面，也就是：However, opinions vary from person to person when it comes to the topic whether XXXXX. 因為這句話裏面主句比較短，所以避免頭中腳輕。。。) Some people assert that since students are the future of the society, university professors(第一段其他地方都是professors，所以這兒也用複數以保持一致。。。) should spend more time on education. However, I, personally, hold the belief that it is of great importance for professors to focus on research, and (my reasons are stated) in following passage.



First of all, the research performed by university professors (is) the main force that push the technology and the whole society move forward, since the responsibility of universities has changed from merely teaching to both research and education. In most (situations), people would put research in front of education because recent decades have witnessed(recent decades可以witness?) the great benefits brought by advanced technology. Take the NO.6 Shenzhou Satelite for example, which is invented and made mainly by professors in Peking University, the most famous university in China. It is the first aircraft sent by Chinese to the Moon, and the success of (this project…這不僅僅只是sending。。。) brought a lot of precious information of the space(這個應該是這個任務，或者飛船帶回來寶貴的信息，不是成功帶回來。。。成功帶來的經驗。。。), which contributes much to the exploit of the space. Without the efforts of the university, there would not be such movement in human beings’ history.(已經無力吐槽了。。。神州六號是神馬？是宇宙飛船親，不是satelite。。。你見過哪個衛星肚子里還載著兩個宇航員嗎?還有，中國的探月的是天宮一號啊親。。。神舟系列都是繞地球飛行的。。。。。。哎。。。)



Besides, the research conducted by university professors brings honor to both the university and themselves. Once the university receives such kind of award, its reputation will be raised, attracting more students to the university, thus the whole society will get benefits since more people get education. One the other hand, as the professor are granted with these extraordinary honor, they will be largely encouraged, and work more hard on their research fields, which will also bring benefits to the whole society. For example, Gan Li, (a) economic professor in Southwestern University(逗號去掉) and majored on economics, last year established a mathematic model about the balance between demand and supply, and gain the Zengkanglin Price, the top award for economists in China. Not only the reputation of Southwest University (has been) raised, but also Professor. Gan (is) motivated to work more hard on this field.



Admittedly, professors should not ignore their obligation on education, since it is the object for students to attend school. However, (there) is no conflict between research and education. Indeed, the research would do help to education, as professors sometimes show their students the perspective of their research, spurring their interests to the specific field. What is more, sometimes professors(和前面的professors單複數一致) would ask students to join the research, which is a precious chance and experience for students in (study).



In conclusion, through the above-mentioned reasons, we can see focus on research will bring a lot of advantages. Thus, we can reach to the conclusion safely and soundly that university professors should spend more time on research rather than education.



槽點實在太多了。。。最噁心的是，各種單複數問題。。。。。。。。。。。。哎。。。(ˉ▽￣～)