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agree or disagree it is better for children to choose jobs similar to their parents than to choose jobs very different.

Job selections always play an important role in our lives. A proper job could contribute to a pleasant and high standard life, while an inapt profession could influence a person negatively. In this day and age, whether children should choose jobs similar to their parents' have become a debate. As far as I am concerned, children are suppose to make their own decisions rather than merely follow the course of their parents.

To start with, today children have many more choices on job selections than their parents. With society and technology development, multitude new jobs advent, some of which is unimaginable in the age of their parents. Software developer, online merchant, and rocket engineer, these new jobs are more novel, creative and fascinating, and thus more attractive to children. Although efforts are necessary to acquire the new jobs, conventional careers  require no less diligence to pursue. Therefore,  it is reasonable for children to choose a job which is more innovative.

Further, with economy advancement, children nowadays could concern less about living stress when select jobs. In some developed countries, the government provide abundant welfare for its citizens. Even if without a job, a man could still live a fair life. However, in the past, parents of children could struggle for a job to make a living, which hardly left them with choices in career. As a result, children in the contemporary society could take more consideration into their appetites while not surrender to pressure of survival.

Granted, for children who choose the resemble jobs as their parents, they could acquire specific suggestions and experience about the career. When they are confronted with problems in work, they could tackle them more easily with assistance from parents. However, even the same job could be extremely different from that in the past. For instance, as computer is generally commonly used in today's working, the specific work in bank is totally different. People need to acquire abundant knowledge in computer operation in their daily stuff. Therefore, advice form parents could be outdated and less helpful.

It is no wrong for parents to wish that their children could follow their steps in job selection. However, with reasons mentioned above, I reinforce that, children should decide their jobs independently while not concern too much on their parents' occupations.

fadeday

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题目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teaching in the past was a harder job than it is today.

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Some people think that teaching in the past was a harder job than it is today as multimedia tools assisted and modern teaching tools developed, but I do not agree with this point. My views can be greatly substantiated in the following discussion.

On one aspect, knowledge has been developed in depth and breath than it was in the past. It is widely accepted that technology makes the greatest progress as it comes into the age of Information. To take discipline categories as an example, as it comes to today, the scope of subject not only limited to physics, geology, botany, psychology, sociology and so on, but also divided into more specialized subtitles, such as ethnology, climatology, anthropology, and plate tectonics. To illustrate, we may only learn that how the earth orbit around sun and how the gravity function among planets in the galaxy in the past, while the scope of study have already spread to the intergalactic research about how the cosmos emerged – the bigbang theory, and how the celestial bodies developed after bigbang. For a normal student in the high school in China, the number of compulsive subjects they should take are at least ten or twelve in total, along with the laboratory experiments. All these academic pressure exert a huge burden for teenagers to pass the exam and a great challenge for teachers to tackle, as they should not only be an expert to think over the most appropriate teaching ways, but also be knowledgeable enough in the specific area.
       
On the other aspect, knowledge get obsolete faster than in the past, which challenges more about the teaching methods from the requirement of society. A good example can be found in the statistics published in a famous Chinese scientific journal, knowledge of specific area get obsolete and renewed in about every three or four years, even faster. Compared with the time needed for graduation for a full time undergraduate degree in a university, the averaged time is about four years; for such majors as architect and medical study, it will need five years or more. This means portions of knowledge the student learned is out of date once they graduated. What a cruel reality they have to face, since it is time to take advantages of all knowledge they have learned in school to get a good job after graduation. From the standpoint of employer and requirements from different occupancy in society, teachers should integrate the knowledge in class with experiences in society.

In addition, more distractions emerged, which make the teaching hard to sustain efficiency even with multimedia tools assisted. For example, it is an obvious common truth that each student in high school has a cell phone in pocket anytime and anywhere, even in a elementary school. Furthermore, parents acknowledge the necessity of cell phone as a proper communication tool to take to school. For students, cell phone means more video games, more browsers, more twitters, and more friends on face book and more pop-out news. With the widely popularity of wifi connections, they can scan messages or news in class, leading to serious distractions from teaching, especially for dull teaching method or no interactive teaching. At the same time, we hear many complaints from teachers about the cell phone usage in class. In some cases, teachers become so irritate and annoyed that they dictated students playing cell phone in class to hand in the cell phone immediately, but in the end, teachers have to return cell phone to students after a didactic speech as cell phone is one of personal property for students. This process do not have any effect on edifying students and helping them concentrate in class and thus make the best teaching method in vain.
From what have been discussed, teaching becomes harder nowadays than it was in the past，in the light of more various and abstractive subjects, frequently updated knowledge and different distractions, all of these vigorous situation requires teacher not only to be an expert in the specified area, but also be an master in teaching.

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希望楼主可以帮忙批改一下，非常谢谢了。

题目：agree or disagree：In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

Being a controversial issue, a great popularity of the number of cars has aroused a great deal of attention in society during the past decades. Some would claims that several decades ago, there will be fewer cars, while some others may suggest that it is impossible for the number of cars to decline. As for me, I side with the latter. Thus essential and persuasive evidences would be provided in the subsequent paragraphs to verify my perspectives.

Firstly, cars bring us convenience and efficiency, which are arduous to be replaced. It is universally acknowledged that the emergence of cars has reversed our lives’ style, and the impact of cars is consistent. In the past, we had to spend a long time on the way to the adjacent city. However, we only spend few minutes getting to the city nearby by automobiles. As a normal transportation, the automobiles are irreplaceable - that is, people get used to go out by driving cars. When they are on a short journey, the first transportation come to their minds would be the automobile. Therefore, the status of cars cannot be replaced.

Secondly, the cars can boost related industries. The development of cars can bloom closely related industries in the society, such as logistics, accessory and car-cosmetics. Those industries will provide the unemployment with thousands of jobs, which will benefit the entirely society. Due to this merit, the government will facilitate the development of the automobiles. Nowadays, a multitude of people makes use of computers to buy stuffs, which acquire abundant of cars in the future. What is more, people under pressure tend to travel a lot, and a short journey with cars seems to be a best choice for the officials. That is why I believe that numbers of cars will increase.

Finally, the increasing population results in massive of cars. In order to solve the problem of aging population, ample governments are taking some effective actions to encourage their citizens to having more children. The development of cars will definitely benefit from the policy. There is no doubt that the population of human beings would be explosive in the future, which attributes to myriads of cars. As I deeply believe, it is only left to have more cars rather than have fewer cars after twenty years. Without the cars, human beings will lose an important transportation in their mundane lives.

By and large, twenty years later, I suppose that the numbers of cars would not decrease. People cannot live without the cars, which is of great significance to our normal lives. According to what I mentioned above, I deeply insists that massive of people will make use of cars than today.