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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-25 23:37:30 | 只看该作者
amylala3 发表于 2014-9-25 22:27
写得很赞,先不说看起来很美观,字斟句酌的句式,单说字数都有550了诶,而且没啥错。所以我真的想弱弱的问 ...

恩恩自己有改过~
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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-26 19:15:13 | 只看该作者
9-26作文写完啦!~~~
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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-27 20:26:00 | 只看该作者
9-26 基金作文The rules in societies today are too strict for young people.
Nowadays young people are shouldering increasingly pressure since the society has putting more expectation to on them. There is a heated discussion that whether the rules currently are too strict for teenagers . Some people advocate that there isn’taren’t too many demanding rules for young people who have more freedom to choose the subjects and careers they like. However, other individuals have opposite ideas. From my perspective, the rules for young people today are too strict.

To begin with, consider educational field. Tthere is no denying that our teachers, parents and the whole society are expecting young people, as me, to get a decent scores and performance in academic subjects and future careers. Furthermore, not only do are we supposed to learn the a second language in schools , but also forced to study abroad for more distinctive diplomas. For example, when I entranced entered in the senior high school for the first day, I was told to spare no effort preparing the Ccollege Eentrance Eexamination no matter I loved am fond doing it or not. However, I was keen on dancing and I intended to attend toparticipate in some dancing clubs during the weekend. Although my parents were did not evidently opposed for my hobby, they arranged several classesd for the sake of improving my academic scores. As a result, you know, some most of my recreational time  was deprived and I was obliged to do things which I was reluctant to do. Millions of students in this societies are like me , which guides in to an easy conclusion thatIn short , the expectation for the society  concerning education are putting more pressure and rigid roles on young people.  

What’s more, consider career choice. a statics shows the conventional expectation: in a survey covering more than 30,000 of the Chinese citizens about the job choice, more than 87.5% agreed thatobviously, the traditional expectation of the society is that the steady stable job is the most suitable job. In addition, even more than 70% argued the a job with high salaries is also seemed considered to be an appealing choice. As far as I am concerned, however ,it is ridiculousridiculous for a large amount people to hold the opinion that the careers concerning art and musicart majors are not practical. The job we choose must reflect our own interests and no one can deprive the right to make our own decisions.  However, sometimes we have no choice to pursue our own dreams since we have to cater parents and society’s expectation and the society. Tthe freedom for young people has been expropriated, which I have to say, is one of the phenomenon that the rules are too strict for young people.

At last, consider some conceptsocial norms. Some instinct concepts are definetlydefinitely constrainings students’ teenagers’ development. For instance, university students are supposed to study in the school rather than travelling around the world ;yYoung people should depositedeposit the money they earned rather than investing it to more risky areas; the definition of success is obtaining a decent job; what’s more, female young people are should better getting marriage at certain age, etc. Wwe cannot turn a blind eye to to those concepts , traditional rules,  hindering restricting young peolple’s development.

In a nutshell, the rules in societies today are too rigid for young people.


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发表于 2014-9-28 11:05:36 | 只看该作者
改好啦啦啦

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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-29 09:25:17 | 只看该作者
橙圆 发表于 2014-9-28 11:05
改好啦啦啦

many thanks!!!! 我去我以为复制修订之后的就是修改好的了 !!!辛苦了妹子=333333333=
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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-29 21:15:23 | 只看该作者
9-28 Business to successful, mustput more money in advertising.

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107#
发表于 2014-9-29 22:18:35 | 只看该作者
亲爱的,看一下,如果有问题联系我哈

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 楼主| 发表于 2014-9-30 18:54:41 | 只看该作者
9-30 Government should support the scientific research even there's no practical use
好难写。。。死命修改+借鉴好句子。。。求狠批 写的有点空洞

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 楼主| 发表于 2014-10-1 22:23:24 | 只看该作者
10-1 the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important for the young people than they are to the older people.

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发表于 2014-10-1 23:31:44 | 只看该作者
最近好拖延。。实在抱歉

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