eleven 作文贴 么么哒 成长吧！~

elleven806

sweetyecho 发表于 2014-7-1 13:21
错误修改好

6.29 The ability to read and write is more important now than in the past.   ...

谢谢SWEET 我就是这个感觉 自己一直在presentation 根本木有critical 的切论证 你说的那个意思就是我想表达的，但是写的时候还是被思维和英语语言表达的功底局限了 写的好丑呀！！  谢谢SWEET啊 说的都很有用

sweetyecho

elleven806 发表于 2014-7-1 13:47
谢谢SWEET 我就是这个感觉 自己一直在presentation 根本木有critical 的切论证 你说的那个意思就是我想表 ...

不客气呀，11号～～～作文的思路我看的最棒的估计就是Johnny蜀黍了～好膜拜！嘿嘿～

elleven806

sweetyecho 发表于 2014-7-1 13:46
综合么的问题，非常好！！！赞！

SWEET 你看看现在这样改了逻辑好点木有~~~
To start with,nowadays read and write ability is a fundamental requirement in every field. If one can not read or write, he can do nothing in this cruel and competitive world. Decade years ago,  because people suffered a hard time, they took burden of life  when they are very young and do not have the opportunity to go to study. Thus they all have little ability to read or write and it's not a big deal in that time. On contrary, nowadays, current generation all take a higher education. It is no denying that the ability to read and write becomes a basic skill and requirement for people. Without this skill, people could not live a normal life. As time goes on, the significant of read and write has been increasing recognized in recent days.

Johnnyli

elleven806 发表于 2014-7-1 10:02
嗯嗯，蜀黍说的我一定记到！！谢谢蜀黍~~

拍拍 不要慌，加油！

sweetyecho

elleven806 发表于 2014-7-1 14:15
SWEET 你看看现在这样改了逻辑好点木有~~~
To start with,nowadays read and write ability is a fundamen ...

嗯嗯～好很多！语法拼写也没什么问题～很赞！

elleven806

7.1 TPO18综合
Clearly, the professor is totally disproved what is suggested in the reading passage. According to the author, there are several approaches to  address the decline of Torreya, such as reestablishing, moving to different location, and preserving in research center. However, the professor points out that none of those ways is useful.
To start with, the author suggests that Torreya could be rebuilt in same location which has a specific microclimate. The microclimate could contribute a lot to regulate temperature of surrounding region.  However, the professor argues that one fact is being left consideration. Global warming increases overall temperature.The cooler weather condition in microclimate region will interact with the increasing entire temperature. Thus, it seems useless of microclimate.
Furthermore, according to the reading material, the writer proposes that moving Torreya to another totally different environment where Torreya is likely to thrive. Pointed by professor, the author fails to take into acconut that the new introduced Torreya may destroy all native trees when the original trees already become extinct. Like Black trees, they kill lots of original trees when they were introduced to new area.
Finally, the author claims that Torreya in reaserch centers not only could be protected careful but also are convenient to be observed. But, the lecturer presents that Torreya may be infected by some disease due to less genetic diversity. Research center can not prevent them from some desaster.

elleven806

7.1
In the past,it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure and successful future.

In the 50 years ago, success means easy for people. Only if people get a good job, it seems to reach the achievement. The reason is a wonderful job could lead secure and successful future and this certain type of career is easier to identify than nowadays.

To begin with, the category of job is very clear and little in the past. For example, 50 years ago in China, the focus of country's development was on agriculture even though with little profit. Besides, with the poor economy condition and slow advanced society, people could get enough educated. Therefore, most of people became peasants with small earning. Only few educated people went to city to find opportunities. In some extent, getting a job in developing city is means better future. In urban area, jobs almost devide as teacher, officer, banker and so on. Those jobs are not only having better salary but also having a good living quality than being a farmer. Thus, because the limit of job types, for most people in that time, it is very easier to identify types of job which could offer successful future.

What's more, there are less factors influencing success in the past. With fast development of modern society, it goes without saying that the society is much complex than past. Time is changing. For example, teachers always represent a good job. It not only has certain holidays but also is security. But , nowadays, especially the advance in the area of technology such as internet and social media, teachers could put their open classes teaching videos in the internet or make use of lots of  new sources. Through those new ways, They may get chance to go to broad to get a speech or receive top schools' offer that they may have opportunity to find a better job in top schools. Therefore, even people all do the job as teacher, their future may totally different because those new influencing factors. On contrast, in the past, there almost no influencing factors, the society is simple. For people, choosing a job is more easier to identify the future without those factors consideration.

To sum up, as time goes on, world is changing. It seems that choosing a career is not a easy job any more nowadays.

超级无敌小鹤鹤

我是企鹅，改好了，亲写的作文越来越好啦

elleven806

7.3 综合TPO8
Clearly, the professor disproves what is presented in the reading passage. According to the author, the Chevalier's life was not as accuracy as he wrote in the memoir. However, the professor is totally disagreed with following reasons:
To start with, the author points out the Chevalier was not rich while he was living in Switzerland. The evidence shows that the Checalier was lack of money and borrowed lots of money from a Swiss merchant. Pointed by professor, one fact is being left consideration. It needs some time to waiting for cash when Chevalier sold his property. In that period, Chevalier need to use money. Thus, this is the reason why he borrowed money from other. Borrowing money not means money insufficient.
Furthermore, the writer argues the authenticity(accuracy) of the Chevalier conversation with writer Voltaire. One could not remember all details of conversations after many years past. But, the lecturer claims that the author fails to take into account that the Chevalier wrote down the conversation after he talked with Voltaire in every night. Therefore, even though he writes record lots of years after conversations. It is still filled with details due to his general notes.
Finally, the author asserts that Chevalier get out of prison by offering bribe instead of using a piece of metal. The reason is that he has lots of politically well-connected friends which could help him. On contrast, according to the lecture, the speaker points out there are lot's of prisoners who have more powerful friends than the Chevalier. But, only the Chevalier get out of Prison. Besides, a document shows that after the Chevalier escaped from jail, the jail got repaired. This fact also supports that the Chevalier really used metal piece to escape from jail.

elleven806

超级无敌小鹤鹤 发表于 2014-7-2 23:10
我是企鹅，改好了，亲写的作文越来越好啦

谢谢企鹅的建议 很有用~~