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追梦CY

9-28考试，已经很久没有写过作文了，希望各位看官严格要求，欢迎各种批评指导建议！
祝愿大家都能够取得理想的成绩(*￣▽￣)y

[0902]独立写作
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.

The length of vacation time is always a headache of the HRs' in various of companies, as a bit of adjustment in vacation time may not only have influence on employees' mood, but also bring about changes in  working efficiency, royalty to the company, as well as culture of the whole enterprise. In my mind, a job with more vacation time beneifts a lot for many reasons.


To start with, a longer vacation time may stimulate the working efficiency of the whole company. Since people have more free time out of work, they may totally relax themselves, by taking a sun bath, go hiking, and watching soap operas on the couch, etc. Compared to an employee who is exhausted, an energetic man after holiday time is more efficient and less likely to make mistakes in work. What's more , it is so widely seen in China that an "overworking"  employee has more probability to commit a suicide or get some mental illness, worsening the working atmosphere in the company in a long run.


More vacation time, secondly, seems to be a artificial bonus for employees for behaving well in daily works. As a stimulus, a longer holiday is regarded more enjoyable than a bonus for working extra hours by many employees in survey. My mother is awarded for the star of year 2012 in her company, and she feels so excited about enjoying her 7-day-long travel to Yunnan Province. To some extent, permitting employees more vacation time may boost their satisifaction and improve their royalty to the company, as for they can feel actually the carefulness and close attention from their boss.


Consequently, it is also a wonderful choice for the company to organize part of its employees to go on holidays together. As for my father, he is a big fun of traveling with his colleagues on vacation. Those colleagues who are strict and rigid in office will express another aspect in group activities, for example climbing the mountains. If employees are given more vacation time to take joint part in some activities, they are sure to bond with each other and build trust. Therefore, there is no need for a company to set aside some money on improving the culture of company.


To sum up, a longer vacation time is no more than an amazing idea both for employees and for the company in several aspects. I bet a job with more time for vacation will be more popular and competitive!

413words 45min  严重超时了……最后发现还有点偏题(￣_￣|||)

sherryv

你的我也改好啦，欢迎交流！

追梦CY

不好意思交晚了！
9-3 独立写作
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: All high-school students should take basic economic courses.
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While the roar in Wall Street is spreading all around the world, economic affairs are discussed increasingly frequently by people of all ages. Under this circumstance, a saying turns up that an economic course is fundamental to all students in high school.  Plausible as this idea seems be, however, I vote against the basic economic class prepared for high-school students for the following reasons.

To begin with, unlike other scientific subjects, economics is so complex that requires students not only understand specific principles but also make inference by collecting data and calculating them. I, as a senior student in college, still feels difficult to conclude some key information from many charts on my economics textbook after a systematical study of economics. No doubt that few students who are only taught basic mathematics could have themselves involved in such complex calculations and really understand those principles. Not to mention analyze current affairs in economic fields.

Why do "Aunties in China" recently crazily purchase golds on the market? Why does the ratio between different currencies float quickly day by day? Why do some people earn a great amount of money from the stock market but others not? Ecomonic phenomenon like the questions mentioned above happened around us everyday, but it seems to be a arduous task to well explain all those phenomenon with the help of knowledge learned from basic economic courses. As we all know, the study of psychology, socialogy and statistics contributes a lot to explore an economic problem. Hence, physics, chemestry or biology class that high-school students learned is so limited to the study of economics.

What's more, changing the course schedule in all high schools is absolutely a great challenge to the current education system, since the additive basic economic course requires a large number of professors or teachers majored in economics and a newly-revised economic textbook. Some people may argue that learning economics is helpful to improve the abilities of analyzing problems and collecting data. However, students could also acquire such abilities through studying other subjects like mathematics and moral ethics. Therefore, there is no necessity for all high school students to take economic class.

To conclude, take the factors of complexity of the subject, the high requirements for students and the cost of staff and resource into consideration, I oppose to the opinion that all high-school students should take economic courses.

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wanggang0411

追梦CY 发表于 2013-9-4 17:55
不好意思交晚了！
9-3 独立写作
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: All high-school ...

改完了, 写的非常好.
见附件

追梦CY

9-5 迟到的独立写作

A few days earlier, my best friend came to me desperately bacause she was rejected by a famous international company. She cried for the unwritten rules that only a student from top colleges has the right to be interviewed, although she had prepared for the precious interview deliberately for months and she was confident in being a competitive candidate of that position. I feel extremely sorry for her, as well as for the modern society. From my perspective, it is the rigid rules that not only make the recruitment unfair, but also deprive the valuable opportunities for young people today.

Everyone on the earth is unique. However, strict rules seem to shape the specialty to similarity. For instance, the symbol of a successful man in China today, as a basic rule, is that owning an independent apartment, a good car, and a stable work. From that strange rule, we can easily understand why China has such a large number of bachelors working crazily for house and money nowadays. For young people today, in my opinion, they should be permitted a supportive environment for shaping and perfecting themselves. Unfortunately, a number of the young are forced to pursue wealth and reputation instead of maintaining their own personalities, for the sake of rules restricted by the current society.

As a Chinese saying goes that everyone has his faults, actually no one could perfectly fit the rigid disciplines. A lot of celebrities in China, especially the younger celebrities, are prone to make themselves look more like a “standard beauty” or a “perfect man” by having some micro-operations on eyes, nose or breast. From my standpoint, this phenomenon is derived from the unspoken rule in the entertainment industry, fiercely driving the young to chase the “golden rule of beauty”. Obviously, unspoken rules are so widespread among the public. For example, the competitive candidates of the Voice of China were once rejected by a tutor just because they are not handsome enough to attract fans to purchase their CDs. What a rediculous rejection!

Hereby too many strict rules are endangering young people’s personalities and getting rid of their chances to show themselves. Admittedly, rules are essential to a well-operated society. In my mind, rules should play as a reference or a model in modern society, instead of a restriction that kills the young.

追梦CY

09.06 独立写作
Young people today more likely to give time and effort improving the world than young people were at the past.  
現在的年輕人比過去的年輕人更願意把自己的時間精力投入到改善世界中。
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Since everyone belongs to our shared global village, a concern for improving the world has been awared by many young people today. However, the young are less likely to devote their time and effort to the improvement of the world than in the past because they are more independent and enjoy a better environment now.

With the increasing self-awareness of young people nowadays, they are prone to concentrate more on their private lives, such as their academic performance, their emotions, their relationships with family members, an so on. Instead of imagining changing the world, young people now think more independently and put their efforts into more practical acts. As a saying goes that a man who wants to control the whole world has to control himself, manage his family and govern his country in a right order, so the youth are willing to spend time and effort on making some changes in their personal affairs before they making sure to have the ability of changing the world.

Not only an independent and practical thinking contributes to this phenomenon, but the improving environment of our life also leads the young shift their concentrations from the world to several specific and personal areas. In ancient times of China before the Qin Danysty, fierce wars took place frequently, depriving people of their living places and family member. It was the poor condition that resulted in a variety of thoughts that persuing the world peace, as well as a number of sociologists focusing on the study of improving the world, for example the famous sociologist Confucious. In the modern society, however, wars and confilicts have decreased sharply and the living conditions of people have greatly improved. Since the environment perfectly satisfy the young now than in the past, no wonder the young prefers not to spare much of their time and efforts on changing the world.

Granted, young people currently still contribute to make improvements of the world constantly. There are a number of volunteers every year, for instance, flying to remote areas limited with life necessities and education resources to help them get rif of poverty. Plus, groups and organizations are playing an active part in advocating a better world via quitting bad behaviors and evil actions. But the time and effort the young put, in general, is more less than in the past.

sherlock1992

09.06 独立写作
Young people today more likely to give time and effort improving the world than young people were at the past.  
現在的年輕人比過去的年輕人更願意把自己的時間精力投入到改善世界中。
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红色修改 蓝色建议 高亮表赞
Since everyone belongs to our shared global village, a concern for improving the world has been awared by many young people today. However, the young are less likely to devote their time and effort to the improvement of the world than in the past because they are more independent and enjoy a better environment now.

With the increasing self-awareness of young people nowadays, they are prone to concentrate more on their private lives, such as their academic performance, their emotions, their relationships with family members, an so on. Instead of imagining changing the world, young people now think more independently and put their efforts into more practical acts. As a saying goes that a man who wants to control the whole world has to control himself, manage his family and govern his country in a right order(这是传说中的“修身、齐家、治国、平天下”吗）, so the youth are willing to spend time and effort on making some changes in their personal affairs before they making（make) sure to have the ability of changing the world.
带亮黄的那句话在这个场合使用似乎不太合适。
Not only an independent and practical thinking contributes to this phenomenon, but the improving environment of our life also leads the young to shift their concentrations from the world to several specific and personal areas. In ancient times of China before the Qin Danysty, fierce wars took place frequently, depriving people of their living places and family members. It was the poor condition that resulted in a variety of thoughts that persuing the world peace, as well as a number of sociologists focusing on the study of improving the world, for example the famous sociologist Confucious. In the modern society, however, wars and confilicts have decreased sharply and the living conditions of people have greatly improved. Since the environment perfectly satisfy(satisfies) the young now than in the past, no wonder the young prefers（prefer) not to spare much of their time and efforts on changing the world.

Granted, young people currently still contribute to make improvements of the world constantly. There are a number of volunteers every year, for instance, flying to remote areas limited with life necessities and education resources to help them get rif(rid) of poverty. Plus, groups and organizations are aplaying(playing） an active part in advocating a better world via quitting bad behaviors and evil actions. But the time and effort the young put, in general, is more（much) less than in the past.

小结：小丸子童鞋的作文很流畅，许多我不知道怎样表达的例子，小丸子同学都可以轻轻松松一笔带过，佩服。虽有些些错误，但不值一提。加油！

iammuse

追梦CY 发表于 2013-9-6 17:32
9-5 迟到的独立写作
A few days earlier, my best friend came to me desperately bacause she was rejecte ...

个人意见哈，水平有限。

追梦CY

98 独立写作
School always collect information of the teaching performance of teachers and according to it, give teacher who has efficient teaching rewards. So which is more useful: evaluation by students or by other teachers?  
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In a rapid developing knowledgeable era, the pursuit of highly-qualified schooling has been attached to immence significance. So it is in schools, the places which are called a micro society, that excellent teachers contribute largely to the reputation of schools, and to some extent the level of students enrolled. Hence, it is crucial for schools to improve teachers' performance, according to the evaluations both from students and other teachers.

Since students are the benefited directly from teachers, whether the teaching methods, attitude towards work, as well as teaching abilities are passible or not could be clearly evaluated by students. The teaching performance management system in our school permits all students an access to make comment to teachers on a variety of indicators, such as the effectiveness of teaching, the design of ppts, and the communication with students after class. This act greatly motivated the teachers to prepare for classes in a more active way in case of getting fired or fined. Such evaluation of students provides the school a fair reflection of the quality of teaching, meanwhile protects students' privacy and rights of commenting a teacher.

Unfortunately, the results offered by students is not fair enough to judge a teacher's performance. For example, students tend to weigh their final score as an important factor when commenting their teacher. That is to say a teacher who is not skilled enough in teaching but gives students high scores is more likely to be spoken highly of by students. On the other hand, a low grade will disappoint students and get rid of all good impression in a student's heart. Thus the school needs to introduce a more scientific evaluation system.

With the help of judgements evaluated from other teachers, information of the teaching performance will be more wholesome anyway. Ratings from colleagues are persuasive to reflect other sides of a teacher, for instance the researching progress, the plan of teaching and so on, which are invisible to students throughout the teaching process. And because teachers are familiar with each other and think in a matural and independent way, their evaluation on co-workers seems to be more objective than that from students, well assessing the qualities and attitudes of other teachers.

As mentioned above, only integrating the evaluation from students and the assessment from other teachers can help a school better gathers the objective information of its quality of teaching and thus gives rewards to teachers. It is a wise way to strike a  balance on the judgements in both aspects.

solde

追梦CY 发表于 2013-9-8 20:56
98 独立写作
School always collect information of the teaching performance of teachers and according  ...

改好了，写的很棒呢~