新加入的童鞋。。。求带。。。

minnowbunny

Nowadays, in this information explosionage, there are a burgeoning number of people concerning about whether peopleshould develop many skills or focus on one skill in order to achieve success.As always, there is a solid body of opinion that one has such a short life thatone cannot perform well in every part. On the other hand, some may argue theage need more tales（talents?） who have skills in a wide range of fields. I, given thechance, prefer to endorse that those who have developed many skills are moresuccessful in this age.（第一段先阐明双方观点再陈述自己的，很有条理值得学习~）

To begin with, high-standards companieshave a tendency to select people who have different skills. Currently, nothingis impossible to turn back the tide of globalization(仔细读来好像意思模糊了呢，Nothing is possible to ... ?), not only do we have moreand more multinational corporations but also our domesticated companies have tocommunicate more frequently with foreign companies in order to get updatedtechnology. Employers are desired to get tales who are good at both their majorknowledge and foreign language. Unfortunately, that is still not enough. Inthis information explosion time, everything keeps changing so fast that ouremployees will not be recruited if he know(knows/knew) nothing about the(觉得可以去掉) computer— the mostimportant and convenient medium to learn the world. High-standards companiesalso want talents who have good representation skill, the creative ability, thegood handwriting, etc. Anyway, the more skills one has, the more chance onewill be recruited.

Moreover, to satisfy the division of laborin society. as an employee, one has more choices when applying for a job. Inour country（用自己国家来举例很生动，值得学习~）, our graduate students are facing a problem to find a job. Ourcompanies are always disappointed about our graduate students who cannotsatisfy their standard, while our students are forever complaining their salaryis too low. One way to cope with the problem is to develop more skills. If youhave adequate skills, as a employee, you can always find a satisfying job inthe talent market. I mean, one can has （have）more choices if he masters(多样化的动词用得好~) many skills.There must be some place suiting for him（suit him?） and he definitely will satisfy one of (these)companies.

Last but not the least, the more skillsoften represents the better learning ability. We are now undergoing an age ofrevolution without any previous human experience that we can refer to. In thisever-changing world, people need to keep learning in order to catch up with themajority. And the more skills often mean one has better learning capability(这句和前句是否有点重复了？).They have better ways to learn something efficiently, know how to save their invaluabletime, have better comprehension ability. There is no doubt that those abilitiescan help one become successful.

All in all, from the reason listed above,we can safely conclude that people who have developed many different kinds ofskills are more successful than people who focus on only one skill.

tsyxyss

5,26 独立
As always, a number of people are currentlydiscussing about the question whether we can learn a person from the books andmovies he likes. Different people may hold contrary attitudes. I, given thechance, prefer to endorse that one can learn a person from his favorite booksand movies.



To begin with, I argue that the books andmovies one likes can reflect the philosophy to some extent. Whether readingbooks or watching movies is not only a way to relax ourselves but also anopportunity to express our philosophy. For example, as we all know, Daodejing,which influence Chinese traditional culture for centuries, is one of the mostfamous works made by Laozi, who pursued the liberty for his whole life andargued that one should live in accordance with its natural tendency in order tohave a happy life. If one is keen on the Daodejing, he must be a person busilyengaged in seeking happiness and looking forward to freedom.

Moreover, I insist that the books andmovies one fancies now can reflect the mental state one is experiencing— theanger, the depression, the excitement or the sadness. We are now undergoing anage of revolution without any previous experience that we can refer to. Thereare a adequate number of books and movies emerging in our market that ourconsumers can have more options and choose the book or movie can reflect theirmood. One is often more likely to watch exciting movies when the person hasdone something successful, like a successful presentation. On the other hand,one is inclined to watch some depressed movies while the person is undergoingupset difficulties. We can always learn people's recently mental state throughlearn the books or movies they like now.

Last but not the least, we can learn whatthey are looking forward to and what they need in their true life from thebooks and movies they like. Plenty of knowledge can be found in books so thatpeople are forever referring to books when they meet some formidable trouble ontheir way to the destination they want. People who are chasing the financial benefitswill intend to like to read some practical books, which include the way to savetheir cost and enlarge social circle. Girls who are eager to have a romanticrelationship with a handsome boy may like to read some love novels.

All in all, from the reason listed above,we can conclude that we can learn about a person from the books and the moviesthat the person likes.      

sherlock1992

tsyxyss 发表于 2013-5-26 15:51
5,26 独立
As always, a number of people are currentlydiscussing about the question whether we can le ...

As always, a number of people are currentlydiscussing about the question whether we can learn a person from the books andmovies he likes. Different people may hold contrary attitudes. I, given thechance, prefer to endorse that one can learn a person from his favorite booksand movies.



To begin with, I argue that the books andmovies one likes can reflect the philosophy to some extent. Whether readingbooks or watching movies is not only a way to relax ourselves but also anopportunity to express our philosophy. For example, as we all know, Daodejing,which influence Chinese traditional culture for centuries, is one of the mostfamous works made by Laozi, who pursued the liberty for his whole life andargued that one should live in accordance with its natural tendency in order tohave a happy life. If one is keen on the Daodejing, he must be a person busilyengaged in seeking happiness and looking forward to freedom.

Moreover, I insist that the books andmovies one fancies(这里用fancy不太合适） now can reflect the mental state one is experiencing— theanger, the depression, the excitement or the sadness. We are now undergoing anage of revolution without any previous experience that we can refer to. Thereare a adequate number of books and movies emerging in our market that ourconsumers can have more options and choose(choosing) the book or movie can reflect theirmood. One is often more likely to watch exciting movies when the person hasdone something successful, like a successful presentation. On the other hand,one is inclined to watch some depressed movies while the person is undergoingupset difficulties. We can always learn people's recently mental state throughlearn(learning） the books or movies they like now. (这一段理由感觉有点牵强）

Last， but not the least, we can learn whatthey are looking forward to and what they need in their true life from thebooks and movies they like. Plenty of knowledge can be found in books so thatpeople are forever referring to books when they meet some formidable trouble ontheir way to the destination they want. People who are chasing the financial benefit(financial benefit在这里用的不太恰当）swill intend to like to read some practical books, which include the way to savetheir cost and enlarge social circles. Girls who are eager to have a romanticrelationship with a handsome boy may like to read some love novels.(最好在结尾总结一下段落中心）

All in all, from the reason listed above,we can conclude that we can learn about a person from the books and the moviesthat the person likes.      

词汇用的稍显简单，每段结尾要有总结，加油！

tsyxyss

2 June「Today」
Independent Writing：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
學校或工作Presentation 你習慣一個月前就開始準備或有idea 後才晚一點開始進行

Nowadays, with the technology becoming more and more sophisticated, the tempo of our life quickens to great extent. Regarding the problem listed above, as always, there is a solid body of opinion that we should start working on it righ taway, since we have to move fast in order to catch up the majority in this fast-changing world. On the other hand, some may argue that it is essential to wait until you have a good idea about it for the sake of the good quality. I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that I would work on it right away.

To begin with, working fast can leave me more sufficient time to do other meaningful things, which can refresh my mind and equip my mind with knowledge. In this modern world, everyone is always working for the sake of utilitarian purposes. But it is vital to get a life outside your work you are bored with, preventing you biding your time in your stressful and mundane work forever. If I finish my assignment in advance, I can spend my time on all sorts of books, which will be able to not only broaden my knowledge level but also leave a positive mind to view everything. It is the book that reminds me tragedy is not always removed far from comedy, then I never get a lop-sided view of the thing. After reading those books, I find it becomes easier to tolerate the monotonous work and the reading helps me keep things in perspective.

Aside from sufficient time one can save from the fast work, a faster pace can also lead to a better result. Good result comes from one's great effort paying on them. Actually, no one is willing to think about the presentation if he/ she decides to do nothing but wait for a good idea. What they often do is to convert their invaluable time to relax.  In the end, if they still cannot come up a good idea, what should they do? Undoubtedly, those who wait until they have a good idea often cannot get a satisfied consequence. Just like examinations, you can have extra time to review and reconsider if you finish them quickly. On the contrary, you may have to solve a number of formidable difficulties you leave at the end of exam, for you have spent more time on easy problems. So the faster you work, the better result is.

The last but not the least, working fast can help one have more preparation for the next challenge. Currently, there is an undesirable trend towards the worship of self-indulge. Those who do nothing but wait until the good idea comes out may ease into a work day in a pair of fuzzy slippers with drowsy sunshine but they will be extremely stressful and painstaking if another assignment comes out soon. Under the heavy pressure to work double assignment simultaneously, it is tough to accomplish any of them successfully. By contrast, if one has completed the former assignment, he does not to be worry about no time to accomplish the next mission. And he can prepare his next mission sufficiently so that it is not a difficult thing to get a good result.

All in all, from the reasons listed above,we can safely conclude that starting working on it right away is better thanwaiting until I have a good idea about it when I am assigned to finish writing about an important presentation in a month.

tsyxyss

Independent Writing
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today are less independent on their parents than in the past.

The youth is a forever problem in this modern world. Nowadays, there are a burgeoning number of people concerning about the issue that young people become less independent than the past. As always, there is a solid body of opinion that the youth is always engaged in seeking freedom and there is no one more desiring the independent life than a teenager. On the other hand, some people may criticize that the young today, who have a dreary commitment of love of comfort, rely everything on their parents. I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that young people today are less independent on their parents than in the past.

First of all, currently most of the youth do not know how to lead a normal life if they do not have their parents. More than half of the high school students in cities cannot wash the clothes by themselves. The majority of the college students do not know how to cook a meal. For instance, in my dormitory, every semester one of my roommates spends fifty Yuan for several hundred of cheap socks in order not to wash them. He wears a pair of socks for a few days then when they become smelly, he will just throw them away, never washes them. Another roommate, a timid boy, cannot sleep without his parents' company. As a result, he have to go back home instead of staying at home after a day's hard work for the sake of a better sleep. Therefore, most of the youth lack of the ability to take care of themselves and lead a normal life without parents.

Moreover, the new generation of young people are so egocentric and self-closing that they hardly make any friends with others. What they can depend on are always their parents every time they confront any difficulties. With the electronic industry becoming more and more sophisticated, everyone nowadays can have at least a cell phone, an Ipad, and a laptop. They no longer make friends even though friends are vital for the past generations of people since they always need someone company then to play. Nowadays' teenagers consume more spare time on electronic devices to play games. When they meet any tough difficulties, the only people they can seek help are their parents.

The reason why young people become more dependent on their parents is that the society is totally different now. The current society is even more complex. The parents are afraid of their kids to plunge into the dangerous society by themselves. Parents love their children more than the past generations of parents since the government published the policy that it is allowed to raise only one child for each family. Parents love their children so much that they even spoil their children. Consequently, it becomes a fact that young people today are less independent on their parents than in the past.     

After ruminating those above-mentioned reasons, I am fully convinced that young people today are less independent on their parents than in the past.     

tsyxyss

七月14综合

The lecturer claims that salvage logginghas severe long-term effects. This claim is not in agreement with that of thereading passage, which suggests that salvaging logging is beneficial to us.

First, the lecturer debuts the reading's opinionthat carrying the dead trees away from the forest will leave adequate space forthe future generations. She believes that leaving the trees decomposing in theforest can enrich the soil, leading to a healthy generation of trees whilecarrying away those dead trees can make the soil less nutritious. Clearly, theprofessor's argument disproves its counterpart in the passage.

Moreover, the professor argues thatdecaying woods can offer habitats not only to harmful insects but also to otherbirds or insects that are beneficial to the forest. Then, he adds the fact thatthose harmful insects actually have no severe damages to the forest and thesuitable habitats provided by the decaying woods for birds and insects can havelong-term benefits for the forest. The point of view is in direct contradictionwith the claim in the reading passage.

Finally, the speaker refutes the passage's ideathat salvage logging can have economic beneficial. She proves that this claimis indefensible by pointing out that the decaying woods can only used for alimited range of things, such as the helicopter. In addition, she emphasizesthat the provided job positions are temporary. Also, employers would like to recruitexperts rather than local residents. This is in marked contrast to theassertion in the reading passage.

tsyxyss

7,14 Independent Writing：

Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement?

Two people can become good friends even ifone of them has much more money than the other.

Currently, there are a burgeoning number ofpeople concerning about the question whether two people can become friends evenif one is much richer than the other. As always, there is a solid opinion thatfriends can only be the same social class. Richer people are always lookingdown upon root grasses. On the other hand, some may debate that there is noboundary between friends whether you are the noble or the grass root level. I,given the chance, prefer to endorse that two people can become good friends eventhough one is very rich.

First of all, the bond between friends isnot based on the same social class or the similar financial ability but thetrust between them. If one is very well-off while the other is stuck in poverty,that does not mean there is no possibility that one can become the other'schum. I think the most important thing between friends is nothing but thetrust. Compared to those fair-weather friends who have a lot of money, theopulent one often tend to find a person who is much more sincere and frank evenif he may be a bit poor and superficial. Developing a friendship is a mutualprocess, especially needing the mutual trust. I believe the loyal friend isalways the best one.

Moreover, the same hobby and interest canbreak the constriction between the different economic strengths. People whohave more economic strengths are more likely to have detachment problem. Theyare more desired to find a truly good friend than anyone else. If you share thesame hobby or interest with them, you can always be friends with them. Thereason why most people who are not rich do not like to make friends with therich men is that they are so self-conscious that they are afraid of whethertheir clothes, their weight or even their teeth can match with others.Actually, those are not problems. For example, my family was not very opulentwhen I was young. As I was a high school student, I met a boy who had the samehobby with me, playing table tennis. His family had opulent assets and he woremuch more expensive clothes than mine. However, that did not matter. He stillbecame my buddy, since we had the same hobby.

Last but not the least, if one has a numberof money, it can offer them a lot more chance to do much more joyful things.For example, a friend of mine is very rich. Whenever he has free time, he willcall his friends including me to go somewhere interesting to have a party. Hewill rent a big car and take camps. Then he will take us to the beach or amysterious and isolated area to have a big party. We will sing and dance. Wemay light a fire and barbeque. I cannot imagine how can we have such anexciting party if we do not have such a friend who has a lot of money.

After ruminating those threeabove-mentioned reasons, I am fully convinced that two people can become goodfriends even if one of them has much more money than the other.

Whoolwhop

7,14 Independent Writing：
Do you agree or disagree with thefollowingstatement?
Two people can become good friends evenifone of them has much more money than the other.

Currently, there are a burgeoning number of people concerning about thequestion whether two people can become friends even if one is much richer thanthe other. As always, there is a solid opinion that friends can only be thesame social class. Richer people are always looking down upon root grasses. Onthe other hand, some may debate that there is no boundary between friendswhether you are the noble or the grass root level. I, given the chance, preferto endorse that two people can become good friends even though one is veryrich. 牛开头！
First of all, the bond between friends is notbased on the same social class or the similar financial ability but the trustbetween them. If one is very well-off while the other is stuck in poverty, thatdoes not mean there is no possibility that one can become the other's chum. Ithink the most important thing between friends is nothing but the 不要trust. Compared （Comparing） to thosefair-weather friends who have a lot of money, the opulent one often tends to find a person who is much more sincere and frankeven if he may be a bit poor and superficial. Developing a friendship is amutual process, especially needing the mutual trust. I believe the loyal friendis always the best one.
Moreover, the same（此ｓｉｍｉｌａｒ）hobby and interest can break the constriction between the different economicstrengths. People who　have more economic strengths are more likely to havedetachment problem. They are more desired to find a truly good friend thananyone else. （有点罗嗦）If you sharethe same hobby or interest with them, you can always be friends with them. Thereason why most people who are not rich do not like to make friends with the　rich men isthat they are so self-conscious that they are afraid of whether　theirclothes, their weight or even their teeth can match with others.　Actually,those are not problems. For example, my family was not very opulent when I wasyoung. (When) As不要 I was ahigh school student, I met a boy who had the same hobby with me, playing tabletennis. His family had opulent assets and he wore much more expensive clothesthan mine. （He always wore much more expensive clothes thanmine which included Nike, Kaplan, and etc. Later, we found out that his familyhad a rich background, however, it didn’t stop us from becoming buddies!）However,that did not matter. He still became my buddy, since we had the same hobby.
Last but not the least, if one has a numberof money, it can offer them (who? Not clear) alot more chance to do much more joyful things. For example, a friend of mine isvery rich. Whenever he has free time, he will call his friends including me togo somewhere interesting to have a party. He will rent a big car and takecamps. Then he will take us to the beach or a mysterious and isolated area tohave a big party. We will sing and dance. We may light a fire and barbeque. Icannot imagine how can we (we may) have such an exciting (excellent) party if(without)we do not have such a friend who has a lot of money. (I can hardly imagine how we may afford such an excellentparty without this particular rich friends?)
After ruminating those three above-mentioned 不要了，否则句子有点不通。。。reasons,I am fully convinced that two people can become good friends even if one ofthem has much more money than the other.
　改了不少小错误，以后打字时请注意哦。。。
         我个人觉得，你写的文笔很好，可是没有很多例子来证明论点。。。

请你看一下吧

tsyxyss

Whoolwhop 发表于 2013-7-15 10:53
7,14 Independent Writing：
Do you agree or disagree with thefollowingstatement?
Two people can becom ...

谢谢啦。。。。。。。。。。。。。。。

tsyxyss

7,15 独立 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow their childrean to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes. Currently, there is a burgeoning number of people concerning about whether parents should allow their kids to make mistakes and let them learn from their own faults. As aways, there is a solid body of opinion that a child growing under laissez-faire parents is more likely to face numerous promblems as an adult. On the other hand, some may argue that the mistake is like the best teacher who can teach everything one need to know. I, given the chance, prefer to endorse that parents should not allow their children to make mistakes, since there are mistakes you cannot remedy. Human biology is ill-suited for the modern world. Nowadays, junk food wreaks havoc around the world. It is cheap and delicious; fims spend billions advertising it. People, especially our adolescent, cling to go to those fast restraunts. As a result, we consume more calories than we spend. It turns out that in America more than two thirds of people is over weight or obese. And the developing countries are catching up. For instance, thirty percent of Chinese adults is too wide. It poses a grave challenge to the health system. The effect of eating junk food is long-term, which one cannot easily notice it right away. It can lead to the increasing risk of cardiovascular diseases, diabetes, liver diseases, and even some cancers. However, our teenagers, who are more likely to eat those fast food, cannot realize it is a kind of chronic suicide if their parents just let them go. Aside from the threaten of junk food to our youth, can't our parents just let their children indulge themselves in watching those pornographic pictures and movies prevailing in the internet until they have severe healthy problems? Since the end of the last century, we have entered the information era. With the technology becoming more and more sophisticated,  our computers have become more efficient and our web sites have been made more gorgeous. However, our laws cannot catch up with the development of the science. All kinds of unhealthy things, especially the pornographic movies and pictures, are put on the internet for the sake of utilitarian purposes without any restrictions. Under such a circumstance, if parents do not restraint their kids' actions, a lot of teenagers will induldge themselves in the internet and lost themselves, causing detachment problems, school refusal, and even severe physical diseases. Admittedly, the mistake is the best teacher for our teenagers. Learning from the mistakes is better than larning from any one else. But let's get down to the foundamental and agree that there are no parents that do not love their children. If you were a parent of a kid, can you just indifferently see your kid go astray and be stuck in the miserable dilemma? All in all, from the reasons listed above, we can safely conclude that parents should not allow their children to make mistakes.