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sunflowerclan

 28号 重新发下      
Admittedly, Taking priority of the academic class is the key to student's further success. Dozens of books enable student to acquire a great deal of knowledge which might helps student become a promising young man. However, the attainment of success is not our whole life. Taking part in school's organization benefits us more due to the high salary and decent job, mental health and physical health which it could bring.

        To begin with, participating school activity makes students more competitive in their future career and is more likely to find a good job. As we know, the ultimate goal for a student to study is to find a job. Taking part in organization promote students to learnmore skills about finding a job .Communication is one of the most significant skills .Communication is the bridge between people .Students can gain more communication skills through taking parting in the activities. In most cases ,in order to completing activities like a sports game, a ceremony or a performance ,students speaks more than others in terms of the total amount of the time. Therefore, this kind of experience will definitely improve student's skills in speaking. . Moreover, Students gain much experience from activities. The experience of Jerry who is my school-fellow will perfectly illustrates this point. Jerry is not good at study, but he have deep interest in participating in school activities , especially the internship. When we are sophomore, most of students are taking course aimlessly ， Jerry got his internship in 4S Feng tian after one usual activity organized by school. Two years later, Jerry is the first student to get a job in his class. This example is not rare. Taking organization do help student find a job.

School activities not onlystrengthen our body but also edify our mind .Taking part in the sports games will force us to use our muscles， stretch our body and deepen our breath , all of which promote a healthy body . Taking part in the club activities also gives us a good chance to meet acquaintances and make new friends , all of which will leave uspleasure and happiness. I personally take part in the school's orchestra three years ago. Because of the orchestra, I make friends with schoolmates of different major .We had a little get together and helped each other , which make me feel safe and comfortable. Because of the orchestra, I enjoyed the beauty of music form Mozart， Paganini and Beethoven. It is the activities that color our life.

Last but not the least, Taking part in school activities motivates us to study. After taking part in the English Song Contest, I fall in love with English song. The insistent melody fosters me to recite more vivid English words and practice my speaking during the singing. It is the benefit that activities could bring to us that encourage us to take part in more school organization and activities.
To put it in a nutshell, Because all of the reason I cited above, I safely draw the conclusion that school organization and activities are indispensable part of student's live .

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Admittedly, Taking priority of the academic class is the key to student's further success. Dozens of books enable student to acquire a great deal of knowledge which might helps student become a promising young man. However, the attainment of success is not our whole life. Taking part in school's organization benefits us more due to the high salary and decent job, mental health and physical health which it could bring.

       To begin with, participating school activities makes students more competitive in their future careers， and is at least they are（不然主语就是participating school activities了~） more likely to find a good jobs. As we know, the ultimate goal for a student to study is to find a job. Taking part in organization promotes students opportunities to learn more skills about finding a job .Communication is one of the most significant skills .Communication is the bridge between people .Students can gain more communication skills through taking parting in the activities. In most cases ,in order to completing activities like a sports game, a ceremony or a performance ,students speaks more than others in terms of the total amount of the time. Therefore, this kind of experience will definitely improve student's skills in speaking. . （不要过度发散，这一段的论点是交流是一项很好的技能，这已经和你的主题参加学校活动很好没有什么联系了~）Moreover, Students gain much experience from activities.（不错的观点哦~） The experience of Jerry who is my school-fellow will perfectly illustrates this point. Jerry is not good at study, but he have deep interest in participating in school activities , especially the internship. When we are sophomore, most of students are taking course aimlessly ， Jerry got his internship in 4S Feng tian after one usual activity organized by school. Two years later, Jerry is the first student to get a job in his class. This example is not rare. Taking organization do help student find a job.

School activities not only strengthen our body but also edify our mind.Taking part in the sports games will force us to use our muscles， stretch our body and deepen our breath , all of which promote a healthy body . Taking part in the club activities also gives us a good chance to meet acquaintances and make new friends , all of which will leave us pleasure and happiness. I personally take part in the school's orchestra three years ago. Because of the orchestra, I make friends with schoolmates of different major .We had a little get together and helped each other , which make me feel safe and comfortable. Because of the orchestra, I enjoyed the beauty of music form Mozart， Paganini and Beethoven. It is the activities that color our life.（这段的中心是音乐可以帮我交朋友。也是离参加活动好没什么关系了。）

Last but not the least, Taking part in school activities motivates us to study. After taking part in the English Song Contest, I fall in love with English song. The insistent melody fosters me to recite more vivid English words（很形象啊~） and practice my speaking during the singing. It is the benefit that activities could bring to us that encourage us to take part in more school organization and activities.
To put it in a nutshell, Because all of the reason I cited above, I safely draw the conclusion that school organization and activities are indispensable part of student's live .

语言上没多少错误，细节注意点就ok了。注意一下例子的使用，以更好的强化主题~

sunflowerclan

29号独立      
No matter what excellent idea or brilliant mind about a presentation we have, if we don't take action right away, the amazing idea or brilliant mind will always be something in the air and our presentation will never finish. Therefore, I personally prefer to work it right away because of the stunning result, good habitat and amiable relationship, which it can bring.

To begin with, Working on a job step by step everyday will create a comprehensive and wonderful presentation because it can encourage students to work positively rather than passively. If we work on a presentation at the beginning we may know what we should do and how to do it. In this way we can accumulate the information about that topic form our in daily life, which will definitely bring us a remarkable result. More significantly, we can assign this important presentation into periodic ones. Thus we can stress our pressure on everyday which will motivate us to make good preparation and we can find our progress during this process. Therefore, because we pursue to finish the ultimate job ,we had a bigger faith in our own ability and therefore have confidence to finished this assignment perfectly.

In addition, Doing is preparation is good habitat which will exert a profound influence in our careers. Succeed favors those prepared mind. Actually most of successful people are likely to get everything ready beforehand and work on their job a little bit every day. An outstanding student must have good habitats of which contain what time he should review an old content for the final exam every day. How long it should make preparation for some important task such as TOFEL or GMAT. An excellent businessman must have a rational research plan to assign the total output into each mouth and make reasonable budget for his effort. All these examples show us that "the key to success is not waiting for a chance, but seizing it."Making timely preparation from every day helps us to achieve success.


Last but not the least, starting preparation earlier enables you have a harmonious relationship with team mate. If we finished the work in time, we have ability to help other and to contribute to office community .We can adjust our schedule to accommodate other's emergency or give reasonable suggestions when they need a helping hand. However, just have a imagination, if our work is left not done ,it might hold up everybody else ,which will bring us some embarrassing situation
Form what we have mentioned above, although waiting until we have a fantastic idea sometimes might be practical, in most cases, working on job everyday is a better choice.

1369179610

29号独立      
No matter what excellent idea or brilliant mind about a presentation we have, if we don't take action right away, the amazing idea or brilliant mind will always be something in the air and our presentation will never finish. Therefore, I personally prefer to work it right away because of the stunning result, good habitat and amiable relationship, which it can bring.

To begin with, Working on a job step by step everyday will create a comprehensive and wonderful presentation because it can encourage students to work positively rather than passively. If we work on a presentation at the beginning we may know what we should do and how to do it. In this way we can accumulate the information about that topic formed in our daily life, which will definitely bring us a remarkable result. More significantly, we can assign this important presentation into periodic ones. Thus we can stress our pressure on everyday which will motivate us to make good preparation and we can find our progress during this process. Therefore, because we pursue to finish the ultimate job ,we had a bigger faith in our own ability and therefore have confidence to finished this assignment perfectly.

In addition, Doing is preparation（taking action immediately） is a good habitat which will exert a profound influence in on our careers. Succeed（success） favors those prepared mind. Actually most of successful people are likely to get everything ready beforehand and work on their job a little bit every day. An outstanding student must have good habitats of which contain including what time he should review an old content for the final exam every day. How long it should make preparation for some important task such as TOFEL or GMAT. An excellent businessman must have a rational research plan to assign the total output into each mouth and make reasonable budget for his effort. All these examples show us that "the key to success is not waiting for a chance, but seizing it."Making timely preparation from every day helps us to achieve success.


Last but not the least, starting preparation earlier enables you have a harmonious relationship with team mates. If we finished the work in time, we have ability to help other and to contribute to office community .We can adjust our schedule to accommodate other's emergency or give reasonable suggestions when they need a helping hand. However, just have a imagination,（imagine this：） if our work is left not undone ,it might hold up everybody else ,which will bring us some embarrassing situations
Form what we have mentioned above, although waiting until we have a fantastic idea sometimes might be practical, in most cases, working on job（presentation啦~） everyday is a better choice.

写的不错哦~进步很大啊~~思路很清晰，膜拜一下~

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No matter what excellent idea or brilliant mind about a presentation we have, if we don't take action right away, the amazing idea or brilliant mind will always be something in the air（in vain） and our presentation will never finish. Therefore, I personally prefer to work it right away because of the stunning result, good habitat and amiable relationship, which it can bring. （好句）

To begin with, Working on a job step by step everyday will create a comprehensive and wonderful presentation because it can encourage students to work positively rather than passively. If we work on a presentation at the beginning we may know what we should do and how to do it. In this way we can accumulate the information about that topic form our in daily life, which will definitely bring us a remarkable result. More significantly, we can assign this important presentation into periodic ones. Thus we can stress our pressure on everyday which will motivate us to make good preparation and we can find our progress during this process. Therefore, because we pursue to finish the ultimate job ,we had a bigger（stronger） faith in our own ability and therefore have confidence to finished this assignment perfectly.

In addition, Doing is preparation is good（？？） habitat which will exert a profound influence in our careers. Succeed（这是动词吧，不能做主语） favors those prepared mind. Actually most of successful people are likely to get everything ready beforehand and work on their job a little bit every day. An outstanding student must have good habitats of which contain what time he should review an old content for the final exam every day. How long it should（should it） make preparation for some important task such as TOFEL or GMAT. An excellent businessman must have a rational research plan to assign the total output into each mouth and make reasonable budget for his effort. All these examples show us that "the key to success is not waiting for a chance, but seizing it."Making timely preparation from every day helps us to achieve success.


Last but not the least, starting preparation earlier enables you have a harmonious relationship with team mate. If we finished the work in time, we have ability to help other and to contribute to office community .We can adjust our schedule to accommodate other's emergency or give reasonable suggestions when they need a helping hand. However, just have a imagination, if our work is left not done ,it might hold up everybody else ,which will bring us some embarrassing situation
Form what we have mentioned above, although waiting until we have a fantastic idea sometimes might be practical, in most cases, working on job everyday is a better choice.
很不错了，注意一些词语的用法，有很多句子是不错的，但是chinglish的感觉较明显，加油

45573asdasd

帅哥，你怎么没给我改啊~

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大哥你不靠谱啊。。。

sunflowerclan

30号 作文
Some people think professor should concentrate their work on carrying out the research because most of the high techniques come from the discoveries of the university professors. And technology is an indispensable part of the development of the society. However, the most significant job of a professor is to not to seek glory for himself , develop new technology for the country but to cultivate students in university, improve the quality of the courses and foster students to be promising young men.

To begin with, although some people might say professor can do research well and prepare courses excellent. But there is an old saying goes" Put all of your eggs in one basket and then watch that basket."As we all know, One's energy is limited and how excellent your course in most cases depended on how much time and energy you have put into it. Admittedly, the courses teached by the professor is the same every year. But with the rapid develop of the society, if a teacher who concentrate most of his energy on doing the research must do not have energy left to up date his courses, in this way the knowledge acquired by the students is outdated and useless, which waste their previous time and energy. Moreover, a good professor must have enough time and energy to care about students. Only if a professor really aware of the needs of the students can he could be called a competent teacher. The only way to attain success for most of the students is to study. Therefore, every student is eager to acquire knowledge from wonderful courses. So professor must pay attention to the quality of the courses. In most cases, if a professor devote most of the time to his course, he may act as a guide to lead students to success. He may tread students as if they were his own children. He may render advises when students are in a dilemma and give a helping hand when they encounter difficulties. He may tells students how to study and how to absorb information and how to apply what you have learn to other subjects .He may also help to broaden the scope of the horizon by providing extra material for students to read. In this way, Students are more likely to be a successful young man.

Moreover, The behavior of the professor exerts a profound influence on the students moral standards. A professor should have a strong responsibility for his work and be a honest and reliable teacher. However, the truth is that the only motivation for most of the professors, especially professor in some of Chinese University, is to get higher salary and seek the glory for themselves. In order to pursue that aim, some even cheated on the paper. As we all know teacher should set good example for students. How could you expect such professor to study faithful students? Therefore, the research oriented teaching style in university only results a disaster.

All in all, because of all of the points I mentioned above, I safely draw the conclusion that professor should concentrate on teaching students.

sunflowerclan

错了， 是31号 求狠批
Some people prefer to learn by watching TV because it can bring them vivid image and great deal of updated information. However, in most cases, not all the knowledge can learn by watch TV because of its limited resources for learning. Far more disappointing than this, Watching tends to lead to deterioration in our study performance.


To begin with, what we learned from the TV is not practical for us to use it in our daily life. Admittedly, people are good watcher. They like to watch other's life in the movie. But as it all known to us , the key function for TV program is to entertain people .Therefore, the resources for edifying people in TV is so limited that it is not enoughfor us to acquire real knowledge. In such cases, some people regard watching TV shows and movies also as"Learning ".The truth is watching movie or TV series may help people find a excuse to escape from the real world. TV do satisfied their fascination but do not teach them how to succeed. The heroes and heroines in the movie can achieve great success of their business, attain the sweet love of the life and gain highly respected of their fame so easily in a two hours long movie. But this is not the real life. People who devote their time learning from watching TV show will definitely lost balance in lives. Moreover, If we hold positive view on this kind of learning, most of people tend to addicted to watch TV, which leads to learning nothing. If a students who spend most of their time in watching TV to learn, he may experience falling grade, decreased academic experience and dedication. Adults who are addicted to this kind of TV learning may experience a similar dedication in work performance, job dedication and career inspiration. In extremes cases, job may be lose due to poor work performance, watching at work or frequent absences. As we can see, Learning from watching TV tend to lead to disaster


In a contrast, Books is the most effective way of learning. By reading book, we can contact with what some of most brilliant mind have thought. By reading book, we learn dozens of famous theories and a great deal of equations to help us get professional occupation. By reading book we can even get the first hand information about the world political situation and social problem. Moreover, knowledge form book can retain in our memories for a longer period of time. As an old saying goes "If there are a thousand people there will be a thousand Hamlets." Therefore, we can draw our own conclusion by reading the material from boo , which will foster us to remember some important knowledge.

All in all, because of the reasons I mentioned above, I safely draw the conclusion that reading book helps us more.

conanwang

Some people prefer to learn by watching TV because it can bring them vivid image and great deal of updated information. However, in most cases, not all the knowledge can learn by watch TV because of its limited resources for learning. 开头不错。后面这句话可以删去，因为题目问的是“是否能学到更多”Far more disappointing than this, Watching tends to lead to deterioration in our study performance.


To begin with, what we learned from the TV is not practical for us to use it in our daily life. Admittedly, people are good watcher. They like to watch other's life in the movie. But as it all known to us , the key function for TV program is to entertain people .Therefore, the resources for edifying people in TV is so limited that it is not enoughfor us to acquire real knowledge. In such cases, some people regard watching TV shows and movies also as"Learning ".The truth is watching movie or TV series may help people find a excuse to escape from the real world. TV do satisfied their fascination but do not teach them how to succeed. The heroes and heroines in the movie can achieve great success of their business, attain the sweet love of the life and gain highly respected of their fame so easily in a two hours long movie. But this is not the real life. People who devote their time learning from watching TV show will definitely lost balance in lives. （这段太长了，建议分段）

Moreover, If we hold positive view on this kind of learning, most of people tend to addicted to watch TV, which leads to learning nothing. If a students who spend most of their time in watching TV to learn, he may experience falling grade, decreased academic experience and dedication. Adults who are addicted to this kind of TV learning may experience a similar dedication in work performance, job dedication and career inspiration. In extremes cases, job may be lose due to poor work performance, watching at work or frequent absences. As we can see, Learning from watching TV tend to lead to disaster


In a contrast, Books is the most effective way of learning. By reading book, we can contact with what some of most brilliant mind have thought. By reading book, we learn dozens of famous theories and a great deal of equations to help us get professional occupation. By reading book we can even get the first hand information about the world political situation and social problem. Moreover, knowledge form book can retain in our memories for a longer period of time. As an old saying goes "If there are a thousand people there will be a thousand Hamlets." Therefore, we can draw our own conclusion by reading the material from boo , which will foster us to remember some important knowledge.（自己支持的观点应该写得多一点，至少差不多一样多，这样段落之间就平衡。）

All in all, because of the reasons I mentioned above, I safely draw the conclusion that reading book helps us more. （结尾再加一句话解释原因会好一些。）





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However, in most cases, not all the knowledge can learn by watch TV because of its limited resources for learning.
==>> However, not all the knowledge can be acquired by watching TV because of the limited study resource.

But as it all known to us , the key function for TV program is to entertain people .
==>> However, the TV programs can be entertaining, which is its main function.


Therefore, the resources for edifying people in TV is so limited that it is not enoughfor us to acquire real knowledge.
==>> Therefore, educational programs in TV are so limited that we are unable to acquire enough knowledge from them.

The truth is watching movie or TV series may help people find a excuse to escape from the real world.
==>> In reality, seeing movies or watching TV series may help people to escape the frustrations of the real world.


TV do satisfied their fascination but do not teach them how to succeed.
==>> TV simply amazes audiences but do not teach them how to succeed.

People who devote their time learning from watching TV show will definitely lost balance in lives.
==>> People who spend too much time in learning from television will lose the balance of life.