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sunflowerclan

21号独立
    Wonderfully as swift development of the economy is . The rapid economy growth  improve the people's living standard ,promote the state's strengthen and advance the development of human race. However ，Due to the the fact that the  significant bad influence of the enivironment ,the complementary relationship between economy and environment and favor of voters. I strongly believe that government can never ignore the enviromental concern.
    To begin with , The current situation calls for pretecting the environment.Only if human exists ,the development of the economy will exist. But when human race are wiped out form the surface of the earth, economy take-off is nonsense.The depleting of ozone layer  perfectly illustrates this point. In last century ,in order to pursuit the development of the electric household industry. Refrigerators and air-conditioners using ＣＦＣ　are produced in hudge quantities. The demage effect of this chemical is visible on the Ozone layer in Antiarctic. The UV ray of the sun has reached the surface of the earth ,causing skin cancer and other ailments. It is because the government's unawareness of the significance of the environment that results in such disaster.
     Moreover, common sense tells developing the environment and protecting the enviroment are proportional to each other. In order to promote the sustainable economical development,government must take environment into consideration. Nauru,the phosphate-rich  South Pacific island had used to be the most rich country in the world in terms of the per capital income. But now it is lurching towards bankruptcy. Exporting the phosphate, the chemical compound used as the fertilizer, is the main income of local people.  After decades  of the environmental damage of exploration of the phosphate, Nauru had little left. That't the reason why government should develop the sustainbale economy.
     Last but not the least,The priority of taking citizens's feeling into consideration guarantees the favor the voters. The environment pollution creates the barrier that prevent people from enjoying happiness. Due to  bad air conditon, we never can smell the fresh air of the sunny sunday morning. Because millions of the huge industiral monsters which are important part of economical development are delivering waste fume and waste material every day ,far more than the amount you can image. In such cases, the country do strengthen the economy but most of the citizens are stuck in unhappiness. How can voter support this kind of the govenment ?
    Therefore，I safely draw the conclusion that government have no doubt to pretecting the environment.

sunflowerclan

错误肯定一大筐，求狠批

sunflowerclan

22号独立 求狠批！
     Undeniably, friends are not always easily found but they will find you when time is right. However, when it comes to this topic: which way do you think is the best way for a student to make friends? I personally prefer to make friends during a trip.
To begin with, it is the travel that turns a stranger into a friend. It is definitely a wonderful opportunity to make friends when we are separated from old friends and travel alone .Although hiking，camping， skiing，Mountain climbing and other travel exercise enable us use our muscle， stretch our bodies and deepen our breath， all of which result in a good sleep. In addition, the enchanting beauty of landscape and folk culture edify our minds and spirits. But no one could share this sense of happiness with us. Especially, when we arrived at a new place we need someone's help to overcome such difficulties like loneness and nostalgia. Talking with new friends and playing cards will help to drive away loneness .Last summer, I went to the Qinghai Lake which is famous for its Birds island in Qinghai Province of China by myself. It is not surprise that after days of travel, I made dozens of friends and traveled half-way around China with them, most of whom I am still in contact with. Such case is not rare in reality. Because the loneliness and our need to drive us to find a friend, making friends with strangers is much easier.
Traveling not only provides a great deal of friends but also some true friends.
It is an adventure that develops acquaintances into close friends. Making friend during the vocation helps us to find a reliable friend ".Common sense tells us that trust is the most significant character in friendship. A dangerous situation during the trip will prevent you making some false friend.When I was a freshman, Ｉtraveled with five of my school-fellows whom have seldom spoken to. We went to the Yellow Mountain, a scenery spot in Anhui Province. Unfortunately, when climbing mountain through a narrow path alongside the deep cliff, we were attacked by a numbers of monkey just because one of member, Jerry, refused to give his red bag to monkey. One monkey even rode on jerry’s shoulder to beat him. Jerry was crying .We were scared, we were worried, we felt helpless. Someone even runed away .But at this time, Tom yelled “Throw away the bag” , Jerry did so and immediately all the moneys were garbing the red bag. . We were saved. Afterwards, Jerry and Tom became the best friend. "A friends indeed is a friends indeed" is much true
In sum, Because the number of friends and high quality of friends that travel can provide us, we safely draw the conclusion that Traveling is the best way to make friend.

sunflowerclan

TPO17 写的时候头就晕晕的~
   The lecture talks about the issue that the number of the United Stated-birds will not affected by the human activity. He says that the theory stated in the passage was very different and somewhat inaccurate when it is taken into careful consideration.
First, it is not all types of the birds are vanishing. The lecture also indicates that although the number of a few types of birds is incline, but most of types of birds have larger and better habitats than before. In city, some types of the bird's population are even increasing. Moreover, the reason why the other species are inclining is that they do not live in the city at all.In other words, this is not because the human dwellings occupy other species habitat. This is not the truth.
Second, there is no need to increase the area of crops at all. The passage says that in order to satisfy the need of the increase of the population .lots of native habitats of birds have become the arable land. However, the speakers indicate that because of the new type of crop, we have increased production per acre, all of which results in no demand of more wild land. This is another part that experiment contradicts theory.
Thirdly, the lecture indicates that although previously birds did threatened by pesticides, but now this is not the case at all. Because we have already made two changes. One is the using of the pesticide has decreased sharply. The other is the trend-- crops has becomes more and more pest-resisted .Therefore, it eventually does not harm birds.

vanessa923

同学，我改你22号作文哟。。
嘿嘿，我的可能得下午交。见谅！

vanessa923

黄亮精彩，蓝色建议，红色错误。

Undeniably, friends are not always easily found but they will find you when time is right. However, when it comes to this topic: which way do you think is the best way for a student to make friends? I personally prefer to make friends during a trip.
To begin with, it is the travel(ing) that turns a stranger into a friend. It is definitely a wonderful opportunity to make friends when we are separated from old friends and travel alone .Although hiking，camping， skiing，Mountain climbing and other travel exercise enable us use(不是很地道哦） our muscle， stretch our bodies and deepen our breath， all of which result in a good sleep. （这句话与下文逻辑不通，建议删掉。）In addition, the enchanting beauty of landscape and folk culture edify our minds and spirits. But no one could share this sense of happiness with us. Especially, when we arrived at a new place we need someone's help to overcome such difficulties like loneness and nostalgia. Talking with new friends and playing cards will help to drive away loneness .Last summer, I went to the Qinghai Lake which is famous for its Birds island in Qinghai Province of China by myself. It is not surprise that after days of travel, I made dozens of friends and traveled half-way around China with them, most of whom I am still in contact with. Such case is not rare in reality. Because the loneliness and our need to drive us to find a friend, making friends with strangers is much easier.
Traveling not only provides a great deal of friends but also some true friends.
It is an adventure that develops acquaintances into close friends. Making friend during the vocation helps us to find a reliable friend ".Common sense tells us that trust is the most significant character in friendship. A dangerous situation during the trip will prevent you making some false friend.When I was a freshman, Ｉtraveled with five of my school-fellows whom have seldom spoken to. We went to the Yellow Mountain, a scenery spot in Anhui Province. Unfortunately, when climbing mountain through a narrow path alongside the deep cliff, we were attacked by a numbers of monkey just because one of member, Jerry,（who） refused to give his red bag to monkey. One monkey even rode on jerry’s shoulder to beat him. Jerry was crying .We were scared, we were worried, we felt helpless. （We were scared,worried and felt helpless) Someone even runed away .But at this time, Tom yelled “Throw away the bag” , (and)Jerry did so and immediately all the moneys were garbing the red bag. . We were saved. Afterwards, Jerry and Tom became the best friend. "A friends indeed is a friends indeed" is much true.（这句话本来就是proverb，无所谓true，所以放在这里感觉很奇怪。你可以把这句话改写一下，用来支撑这个例子。）
In sum, Because the number of friends and high quality of friends that travel can provide us, we safely draw the conclusion that (t)Traveling is the best way to make friend.

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sunflowerclan

24号 求狠批
   Although it is universally believed that because of the food additive, air pollution , stress     overburden our people today are less likely to maintain health .However, as the times progress and society advances,  reservation of a good health is much more easier task for people in modern society than ever because of the self awareness, healthy lifestyle as well as the development of the medical technology.

    To begin with, health awareness is the most efficiency way to keep health. If a man wants it, he will chase for it and will finally get it. Health awareness is the core motive for people to maintain a good health .If we are healthy, we can easily to fight with other problems of life .But if we are unhealthy, our most of life will go in fighting with the health problems , which eventually leads us to failure . Therefore, a increasingly number of people believe in "health is wealth ".They will do whatever it works to achieve the goal -keep fit.

    Moreover, People in modern society have a much healthier life style than before. Previously, people will eat whatever they found. But nowadays，people eat nutritious food and read the ingredient of food product as well as the how many vitamins it contains. I personally selected food products according to my needs of vitamins, mineral etc. What's more, it is a fashion to take a regular exercise , which  strengthen their bodies . I personally prefer Yoga , because it not only provides a physical exercise but also brings mental relaxation .After I did Yoga two years ago ，I seldom got illness .At the same time , people also schedule a regular medical check-up .I often take care of dentists once in three mouth and schedule a appointment with my physician once in six mouth .Eating nutrition，doing exercise and taking medical check-up are few examples . There are dozens of rightly life-styles that are encouraged by the scientists and are engaging by people. All these good habits result in a better health.

     Last but not the least, the rapid development of the medical technology helps more and more patients regain good health. In old days, diseases like malaria ， diabetes ， infertility are disaster for human beings .But today, what people need is to go to hospital .Therefore , People will become much healthier than before .

     According to the health awareness, health life-style and the medical treatment, feel obligatory to draw a conclusion that people is definitely much healthier than ever .

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  Although it is universally believed that because of the food additive, air pollution , stress     overburden our people today are less likely to maintain health .However, as the times progress and society advances,  reservation of a good health is much more easier task for people in modern society than ever because of the self awareness（health awareness）, healthy lifestyle as well as the development of the medical technology.

   To begin with, health awareness is the most efficiency（efficient） way to keep healthy. If a man wants it, he will chase for it and will finally get it. Health awareness is the core motive for people to maintain a good health .If we are healthy, we can easily to fight with other problems of life .But if we are unhealthy, our most of life will go in fighting with the health problems , which eventually leads us to failure . Therefore, an increasingly number of people believe in "health is wealth ".They will do whatever it works to achieve the goal -keep fit.

   Moreover, People in modern society have a much healthier life style than before. Previously, people will eat whatever they found. But nowadays，people eat nutritious food and read the ingredient of food product as well as the how many vitamins it contains. I personally selected food products according to my needs of vitamins, mineral etc. What's more, it is a fashion to take a regular exercise , which  strengthen their bodies . I personally prefer Yoga , because it not only provides a physical exercise but also brings mental relaxation .After I did Yoga two years ago ，I seldom got illness .At the same time , people also schedule a regular medical check-up .I often take care of dentists once in three mouth and schedule a appointment with my physician once in six mouth .Eating nutrition，doing exercise and taking medical check-up are few examples . There are dozens of rightly life-styles that are encouraged by the scientists and are engaging by people. All these good habits result in a better health.

    Last but not the least, the rapid development of the medical technology helps more and more patients regain good health. In old days, diseases like malaria ， diabetes ， infertility are disasters for human beings .But today, what people need is to go to hospital .Therefore , People will become much healthier than before .

    According to the health awareness, health life-style and the medical treatment,I feel obligatory to draw a conclusion that people is definitely much healthier than ever .

写的还不错哦~~，继续多看范文，会有突破的~

sunflowerclan

28号 写着写着感觉越来越怪~但又不知道哪里怪，求狠批！ Admittedly, Taking priority of the academic class is the key to student's further success. Dozens of books enable student to acquire a great deal of knowledge which might helps student become a promising young man. However, the attainment of success is not our whole life. Taking part in school's organization benefits us more due to the high salary and decent job, mental health and physical health which it could bring.
To begin with, participating school activity makes students more competitive in their future career and is more likely to find a good job. As we know, the ultimate goal for a student to study is to find a job. Taking part in organization promote students to learnmore skills about finding a job .Communication is one of the most significant skills .Communication is the bridge between people .Students can gain more communication skills through taking parting in the activities. In most cases ,in order to completing activities like a sports game, a ceremony or a performance ,students speaks more than others in terms of the total amount of the time. Therefore, this kind of experience will definitely improve student's skills in speaking. . Moreover, Students gain much experience from activities. The experience of Jerry who is my school-fellow will perfectly illustrates this point. Jerry is not good at study, but he have deep interest in participating in school activities , especially the
internship. When we are sophomore, most of students are taking course aimlessly ， Jerry got his internship in 4S Feng tian after one usual activity organized by school. Two years later, Jerry is the first student to get a job in his class. This example is not rare. Taking organization do help student find a job.
School activities not onlystrengthen our body but also edify our mind .Taking part in the sports games will force us to use our muscles， stretch our body and deepen our breath , all of which promote a healthy body . Taking part in the club activities also gives us a good chance to meet acquaintances and make new friends , all of which will leave uspleasure and happiness. I personally take part in the school's orchestra three years ago. Because of the orchestra, I make friends with schoolmates of different major .We had a little get together and helped each other , which make me feel safe and comfortable. Because of the orchestra, I enjoyed the beauty of music form Mozart， Paganini and Beethoven. It is the activities that color our life.
Last but not the least, Taking part in school activities motivates us to study. After taking part in the English Song Contest, I fall in love with English song. The insistent melody fosters me to recite more vivid English words and practice my speaking during the singing. It is the benefit that activities could bring to us that encourage us to take part in more school organization and activities.
To put it in a nutshell, Because all of the reason I cited above, I safely draw the conclusion that school organization and activities are indispensable part of student's live .