Top MBA Essay Analysis from Jon Frank---P11: THE MOST IMPORTANT THING MBA APPLIC

JonFrank

Dear Jon,

I find your advise very helpful. But I am not very sure my understanding as follows is all correct.

For example, "lease provide any additional information not previously addressed in other areas of the application that you feel would be helpful to the Admissions Committee in its assessment of your candidacy." Under such guide, I can talk about my personality or speciality, right? If so, does it have to be relevent to the application and the program?

But if the guide is "lease use this essay to provide the admissions committee with additional information that will assist us in evaluating your candidacy (for example, an explanation for gaps in employment history or an undergraduate grade point average that is less than 3.0)". Then I should not provide one if I do not have obvious weakness on GPA or GMAT, am I right?

I am looking forward to your reply. Thank you very much for your generous help!

-- by 会员 linjingyuan (2011/10/14 16:34:50)

Yes my friend, you understand what I am saying.  I couldn’t have put it better myself.  Yes, in your first question you have more flexibility, you can talk about other things.  But in the second question, leave it BLANK unless you have gaps or a low GPA etc.  You DO understand, perfectly!


Jon Frank

linjingyuan

Thanks for your kind help！

好想有个农场

If there is any other information that you believe is important to our assessment of your candidacy, feel free to add it to your application. (500 word maximum)

Dear Jon, This is the optional essay of Umich, I'm still kind of questioned if I want to write something about my travel to Canada, could I write in this essay? or Just leave it blank? or write in my CV?

JonFrank

If there is any other information that you believe is important to our assessment of your candidacy, feel free to add it to your application. (500 word maximum)

Dear Jon, This is the optional essay of Umich, I'm still kind of questioned if I want to write something about my travel to Canada, could I write in this essay? or Just leave it blank? or write in my CV?

-- by 会员 好想有个农场 (2011/10/23 9:32:22)

Typically my friend, we advise our clients not to add “extra” stuff in their optional essays, unless there is something BAD to talk about. Low GPA, low GMAT etc.  So yea, lets try to leave this question out if we can.  Cover the travel in your resume, but be sure to give it a LOT of space, if it is an interesting, meaningful experience…two lines, for example, in your resume is not even that much…


Jon Frank
Founder PrecisionEssay

芸梦泽

Hi, Jon

My undergraduate GPA is just fine, but I didn't do well in my mathematical courses, B or even C. Since I want to apply for MSF, do I need to address that in optional essay?
If yes, since My GMAT is 730 (Q51), is it appropriate to make up low grades using high Q score?

One more question:"Provide additional information you feel necessary, regarding academic and test performance or work experience."
Is this a "share information" essay or "cover weakness" one?

Many thanks!

asoka123

Hi Jon, my undergraduate GPA is 2.99 -- it sucks --most schools require .00 decimal in their online application.
Do you think I need to talk about the reason in optional essay?  Thanks!

JonFrank

Hi Jon, my undergraduate GPA is 2.99 -- it sucks --most schools require .00 decimal in their online application.
Do you think I need to talk about the reason in optional essay?  Thanks!

-- by 会员 asoka123 (2011/10/28 13:55:14)

Hello there—yes, with this GPA I would address it in an optional essay.  Nothing long or boring, just 200 words or so, 250 maybe explaining what happened here.  Be confident, and take responsibility for what happened.  Schools will understand!


Jon Frank
Founder PrecisionEssay

好想有个农场

Hi，Jon
Thanks for your suggestions on my Ross essay.
Now I have another question about OSU Fisher's essay question.
It's in my mind for several days.
The essay question is like

Focusing on leadership One of Fisher College's strengths is its dedication to developing leaders. Below are ten attributes that characterize great leaders. Please select the two criteria that best describe you, your leadership style or your leadership successes to date and provide us with concrete evidence of your accomplishments. Write an essay for each of the two characteristics you select, describing situations in which you exemplified these leadership traits. Please title each of your essays with the specific attribute

-* Integrity
* Empathy
* Curiosity*
* Creativity
* Global awareness
* Passion
* Vision
* Self-awareness
* Communication and interpersonal skills

1.How to understand the aim of this question?since one experience of leadership often contains more than one characteristic of me.
2. Does it mean that I should try to find two different leading experiences, each one show one main characteristic?
or does not have to write about" leading "experience, just show the characteristic is ok

Thank you Jon

JonFrank

Hi，Jon
Thanks for your suggestions on my Ross essay.
Now I have another question about OSU Fisher's essay question.
It's in my mind for several days.
The essay question is like

Focusing on leadership One of Fisher College's strengths is its dedication to developing leaders. Below are ten attributes that characterize great leaders. Please select the two criteria that best describe you, your leadership style or your leadership successes to date and provide us with concrete evidence of your accomplishments. Write an essay for each of the two characteristics you select, describing situations in which you exemplified these leadership traits. Please title each of your essays with the specific attribute

-* Integrity
* Empathy
* Curiosity*
* Creativity
* Global awareness
* Passion
* Vision
* Self-awareness
* Communication and interpersonal skills

1.How to understand the aim of this question?since one experience of leadership often contains more than one characteristic of me.
2. Does it mean that I should try to find two different leading experiences, each one show one main characteristic?
or does not have to write about" leading "experience, just show the characteristic is ok

Thank you Jon

-- by 会员 好想有个农场 (2011/11/4 10:27:21)

Hey  there, happy to help.  Yes, you should tell TWO separate stories for each of the two words.  Then at the end of the essay, in yoru conclusion, tie the two words together.  Talk about how the two interact with one another, how successful leadership requires BOTH to be effective.  But don’t let these words impact which stories you tell—always pick your BEST stories, the ones that show you at your best.  Once you know which stories you need to tell in the application, from there you should be in a position to “assign” the words above to them.  Tell your best two stories first—worry about what the “word” is that you select afterwards…


Jon Frank
Founder

poppyatlarge

Hey Jon,

My problem is that I almost have no extracurriculum activity to talk about. Neither internship nor other experience. But I finished my undergradate program in 3years instead of 4, with a gpa around 3.5. How could I explain it in my puspose of statement? Do I need to explain the situation of a B- I got from major courses? Thanks!=D