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剪布石 发表于 2017-2-2 22:27
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大部分的没有收集到题目，只有个范文。。

人间烟火Sue

【41】

      The author rejects the claim that the loud engine noise of American-made

MotorcycleX appeals to the manufacturer's customers and explains why they are not

attracted to quieter, foreign-made imitations. The author's rejection is based on two

reasons.First, the author points out that foreign cars tend to be quieter than similar

American-madecars, yet they sell just as well. Secondly, the author claims that ads for

MotorcycleX do not emphasize its engine noise; instead, the ads highlight its durability

and sleeklines, and employ voice-overs of rock music rather than engine roar. In my

view,these reasons do not establish that the quieter engines of the foreignimitations fail

toaccount for their lack of appeal.

       To begin with, the first reason rests on the assumption that what automobile

customers find appealing is analogous to what motorcycle customers find appealing.

This assumption is weak, since although there are points of comparison between

automobiles and motorcycles, there are many dissimilarities as well. For example,

headroom,smooth ride, and quiet engines are usually desirable qualities in a car.

However,headroom is not a consideration for motorcycle customers; and many

motorcycleriders specifically want an exciting, challenging ride, not a smooth one. The

same maybe true of engine noise; it is possible that motorcyclists like what loudengine

noise adds to the experience of motorcycle riding.

       The author's second reason is also problematic. Although the engine noise of

MotorcycleX is not explicitly touted in advertisements, it does not necessarily follow

that engine noise is not an important selling feature. Because Motorcycle X has been

manufactured in the U.S. for over 70 years, its reputation for engine noise is probably

already well known and need not be advertised. Moreover, the advertisers might use

rock music on Motorcycle X ad soundtracks for the specific purpose of suggesting, or

even simulating, its loud engine noise.

       In conclusion, this author has not provided convincing reasons for rejecting the

claim that quieter engines make foreign-made motorcycles less popular. The author's

analogy involving foreign car sales is weak, and the claim about Motorcycle X

advertisements misses the purpose of including rock music in the ads.

人间烟火Sue

【42】

        The author of this article argues that, to reverse declining revenues from campus

housing rentals, campus housing officials should decrease the number of available

housing units and reduce rent prices on the units. The author's line of reasoning isthat

fewer available units will limit supply while lower rents will increase demand,thereby

improving overall occupancy rates, and that the resulting increase in occupancy rates

will, inturn, boost revenues for the campus. This reasoning is unconvincing for several

reasons.

       To begin with, the author assumes that boosting occupancy rates will improve

revenues.All other factors remaining unchanged, this would be the case. However, the

author proposes reducing both the supply of units and their rental prices. Both ofthese

actions would tend to reduce revenues. The author provides no evidence that the

revenue-enhancing effect of a higher occupancy rate will exceed the revenue-decreasing

effect ofreduced supply and price. Without such evidence, the argument is

unconvincing.

       Secondly, the author assumes that lowering rents will lead to higher revenues by

increasing demand. However, it is possible that demand would decrease, depending on

the extent of the rent reduction as well as other factors—such as overallenrollment and

the supply and relative cost of off-campus housing. Moreover, even if demandincreases

by lowering rents, revenues will not necessarily increase as a result. Otherfactors, such

as maintenance and other costs of providing campus housing units and the reduced

supply ofrental units might contribute to a net decrease in revenue.

       Thirdly,in asserting that lowering rental rates will increase demand, the author

assumes that current rental rates are causing low demand. However, low demand for

student housing could be a function of other factors. For instance, the student housing

units maybe old and poorly maintained. Perhaps students find the campus housing rules

oppressive,and therefore prefer to live off-campus; or perhaps enrollments are down

generally,affecting campus housing occupancy.

       In conclusion, the author of this editorial has not argued effectively for a decrease

in thenumber of available campus housing units and a reduction in rental rates forthose

units. Tostrengthen the argument, the author must show that a rent reduction will

actually increase demand, and that the revenue-enhancing effect of greater demand will

out weighthe revenue-reducing effect of a smaller supply and of lower rental rates.

人间烟火Sue

【43】

       The conclusion in this Avia Airlines memorandum is that a review of the airline's

baggage-handling procedures will not further its goal of maintaining or increasing the

number of Avia passengers. The author's line of reasoning is that the great majority of

Avia passengers are happy with baggage handling at the airline because only one

percent of passengers who traveled on Avia last year filed a complaint about Avia's

procedures.This argument is problematic in two important respects.

       First, the argument turns on the assumption that the 99 percent of Avia passengers

who didnot complain were happy with the airline's baggage-handling procedures.

However,the author provides no evidence to support this assumption. The fact that, on

theaverage, 9 out of 1000 passengers took the time and effort to formally complain

indicates nothing about the experiences or attitudes of the remaining 991. It is possible

that many passengers were displeased but too busy to formally complain, while others

had no opinion at all. Lacking more complete information about passengers' attitudes,

we cannot assume that the great majority of passengers who did not complain were

happy.

       Secondly, in the absence of information about the number of passengers per flight

and about the complaint records of competing airlines, the statistics presented in the

memorandum might distort the seriousness of the problem. Given that most modern

aircraft carry as many as 300 to 500 passengers, it is possible that Avia received as

many as 4or 5 complaints per flight. The author unfairly trivializes this record.

Moreover, the author fails to compare Avia's record with those of its competitors. It is

possible that a particular competitor received virtually no baggage-handling complaints

lastyear. If so, Avia's one percent complaint rate might be significant enough to

motivate customers to switch to another airline.

       In conclusion, the author has failed to demonstrate that a review of the baggage-

handling procedures at Avia Airlines is not needed to maintain or increase the number

of Avia'spassengers. To strengthen the argument, the author must at the very least

provide affirmative evidence that most Avia passengers last year were indeed happy

with baggage-handling procedures. To better evaluate the argument, we would need

more information about the numbers of Avia passengers per flight last year and about

the baggage-handling records of Avia's competitors.

人间烟火Sue

【44】

     The author of this article argues that the country of Sacchar can best solve its

current trade deficit problem by lowering the price of its main export, sugar. The lineof

reasoning is that this action would make Sacchar more competitive with other sugar-

exporting countries, thereby increasing sales of Sacchar's sugar abroad and, in turn,

substantially reducing the trade-deficit. This line of reasoning is unconvincing for a

couple ofreasons.

       In the first place, this argument is based on an oversimplified analysis of thetrade

deficit problem Sacchar currently faces. A trade-deficit occurs when a country spends

more onimports than it earns from exports. The author's argument relies on the

assumption that earnings from imports will remain constant. However, the author

provides no evidence that substantiates this assumption. It is possible that revenuesfrom

imports will increase dramatically in the near future; if so, the course of actionproposed

by the authormight be unnecessary to solve Sacchar's trade deficit problem. Conversely,

it ispossible that revenues from imports are likely to decrease dramatically in thenear

future.To the extent that this is the case, lowering sugar prices may have a negligible

countervailingeffect, depending on the demand for Sacchar's sugar.

       In the second place, increasing sales by lowering the price of sugar will notyield

anincrease in income unless the increase in sales is sufficient to overcome theloss in

income due to the lower price. This raises three questions the author fails toaddress.

First,will a price decrease in fact stimulate demand? Second, is demand sufficient to

meet the increase in supply? Third, can Sacchar increase the sugar production

sufficientlyto overcome the deficit? In the absence of answers to these questions, we

cannot assess the author's proposal.

       In conclusion, the author provides an incomplete analysis of the problem and, as a

result,provides a questionable solution. To better evaluate the proposal, we wouldneed

to knowhow revenues from imports are likely to change in the future. To strengthen the

argument,the author must provide evidence that demand is sufficient to meet the

propose dincrease in supply, and that Sacchar has sufficient resources to accommodate

the increase.

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Aspartame vs. sugar
People who use the artificial sweetener aspartame are better off consuming sugar, since aspartame are actually contribute to weight gain rather than weight loss. For example, high levels of aspartame have been shown to trigger a craving for food by depleting the brain of a chemical that registers satiety, or the sense of being full. Furthermore, the studies suggest that sugars, if consumed after at least 45 minutes of continuous exercise, actually the body’s ability to burn fat. Consequently, those who drink aspartame-sweetened juices after exercise will also lose this calorie-burning benefit. Thus it appears that people consuming aspartame rather than sugar are unlikely to achieve their dietary goals.

In this argument, the author concluded that aspartame does not contribute to weight loss as the sugar do. He manipulated two reasons to support his position. First is that high level of aspartame consuming will trigger more demand for food. Second is that sugar but not aspartame, if took after at least 45 minutes of continuous exercise, can help to burn the body’s fat. This argument is neither sound nor convinced for below reasons.
First, the author failed to compare comparing objects, or sugar and aspartame, on the same ground. Just as in his first reason he utilized to support his final conclusion, he just mentioned sugar’s benefit for weight losing. However, he explained nothing about aspartame in this aspect. Without this kind of direct comparing, this findings about sugar should be used as a cause to reach the final conclusion that aspartame does no help for achieving dietary goals.
Second, still focusing on the first excuse. The author said that high level of aspartame will deplete the brain of chemical that controls human sense of being full or statiety. One concern is how high level it is. Can that high level of consuming aspartame be too high to obtain in our daily live. If the level for aspartame consumption to cause brain to secrete the chemical is too high, as such 10 kilograms of aspartame consuming is the minimum amount for causing brain chemical, we will have more confidence to refuse this findings as one reason for author’s final conclusion.
Adding all analyses together, the author failed to compare aspartame and sugar at the same ground. He did not provide more information about high level for evaluating whether or not it is easy to get that level. So at the current stage, his final conclusion citing that consuming aspartame but not sugar is difficult to achieve dietary goals.

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kaito1412 发表于 2017-5-11 13:45
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