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maxwellserena

太感谢！同时建议lz把题目也一起贴出来，方便大家练习。

人间烟火Sue

maxwellserena 发表于 2016-11-10 15:40
太感谢！同时建议lz把题目也一起贴出来，方便大家练习。

不是我不贴题目，而是我只有范文

人间烟火Sue

感觉我每天的话题怎么都是天气呀
不过今天上海天气是真的好，很适合拍照啊，哈哈。
暖暖的太阳拍了照，发完帖子就要修片啦
开森！！！


【范文7】

       In this argument the author concludes that people trying to lose weight are better

offconsuming sugar than the artificial sweetener aspartame. To support thisconclusion

theauthor argues that aspartame can cause weight gain by triggering food cravings,

whereassugar actually enhances the body's ability to bum fat. Neither of these reasons

providessufficient support for the conclusion.

       The first reason that aspartame encourages food cravings is supported by research

findingsthat high level s of aspartame deplete the brain chemical responsible for

registeringa sense of being sated, or full. But the author's generalization based on this

researchis unreliable. The research was based on a sample in which large amounts of

aspartamewere administered; however, the author applies the research findings to s

targetpopulation that includes all aspartame users, many of whom would probably not

consumehigh levels of the artificial sweetener.

       The second reason that sugar enhances the body's ability to bum fat is based on

thestudies in which experimental groups, whose members consumed sugar after atleast

45minutes of continuous exercise, showed increased rates of fat burning. Theauthor's

generalclaim, however, applies to all dieters who use sugar instead of aspartame, not

just tothose who use sugar after long periods of exercise. Once again, the author's

generalizationis unreliable because it is based on a sample that clearly does not

representall dieters.

       To conclude, each of the studies cited by the author bases its findings onevidence

that doesnot represent dieters in general; for this reason, neither premise of this

argumentis a reliable generalization. Consequently, I am not convinced that dieters are

betteroff consuming sugar instead of aspartame.

我要做大牛

顶楼主！               

人间烟火Sue

上海，起雾了。




【范文8】

     Based upon a survey among workers that indicates a high level of interest in the

topics ofcorporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs, the author

concludesthat workers are not apathetic about management issues. Specifically, it is

arguedthat since 79 percent of the 1200 workers who responded to survey expressed

interestin these topics, the notion that workers are apathetic about management issuesis

incorrect.The reasoning in this argument is problematic in several respects.

       First, the statistics cited in the editorial may be misleading because the total

number ofworkers employed by the corporation is not specified. For example, if the

corporationemploys 2000 workers, the fact that 79 percent of the nearly 1200

respondentsshowed interest in these topics provides strong support for the conclusion.

On theother hand, if the corporation employs 200,000 workers, the conclusion is much

weaker.

       Another problem with the argument is that the respondents' views are not

necessarilyrepresentative of the views of the work force in general. For example,

becausethe survey has to do with apathy, it makes sense that only less apatheticworkers

wouldrespond to it, thereby distorting the overall picture of apathy among the work

force.Without knowing how the survey was conducted, it is impossible to assess

whetheror not this is the case.

       A third problem with the argument is that it makes a hasty generalization about

the typesof issues workers are interested in. It accords with common sense that workers

would beinterested in corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs, since

theseissues affect workers very directly. However, it is unfair to assume thatworkers

would besimilarly interested in other management issues ones that do not affect them or

affectthem less directly.

       In conclusion, this argument is not convincing as it stands. To strengthen it, the

authorwould have to show that the respondents account for a significant and

representativeportion of all workers. Additionally, the author must provide evidence of

workers'interest other management topics not just those that affect workers directly.

人间烟火Sue

今天人大选举呀，爬了个大清早，竟然是去投选票了。我也是被自己的政治觉悟感动了


【范文9】

      Based upon a survey among workers that indicates a high level of interest in the

topics ofcorporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs, the author

concludesthat workers are not apathetic about management issues. Specifically, it is

arguedthat since 79 percent of the 1200 workers who responded to survey expressed

interestin these topics, the notion that workers are apathetic about management issuesis

incorrect.The reasoning in this argument is problematic in several respects.

       First, the statistics cited in the editorial may be misleading because the total

number ofworkers employed by the corporation is not specified. For example, if the

corporationemploys 2000 workers, the fact that 79 percent of the nearly 1200

respondentsshowed interest in these topics provides strong support for the conclusion.

On theother hand, if the corporation employs 200,000 workers, the conclusion is much

weaker.

       Another problem with the argument is that the respondents' views are not

necessarilyrepresentative of the views of the work force in general. For example,

becausethe survey has to do with apathy, it makes sense that only less apatheticworkers

wouldrespond to it, thereby distorting the overall picture of apathy among the work

force.Without knowing how the survey was conducted, it is impossible to assess

whetheror not this is the case.

       A third problem with the argument is that it makes a hasty generalization about

the typesof issues workers are interested in. It accords with common sense that workers

would beinterested in corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs, since

theseissues affect workers very directly. However, it is unfair to assume thatworkers

would besimilarly interested in other management issues ones that do not affect them or

affectthem less directly.

       In conclusion, this argument is not convincing as it stands. To strengthen it, the

authorwould have to show that the respondents account for a significant and

representativeportion of all workers. Additionally, the author must provide evidence of

workers'interest other management topics not just those that affect workers directly.

人间烟火Sue

【10】

有题目的作文终于来了，hhhh~
不多说了，直接放文章

       On average, middle-aged consumers devote 39% of their retail expenditure to

departmentstore products and services, while for younger consumers the average is

only 25%.Since the number of middle-aged people will increase dramatically within the

nextdecade, department stores can expect retail sales to increase significantlyduring

that period.Furthermore, to take advantage of the trend, these stores should begin to

replacesome of those products intended to attract the younger consumer with products

intendedto attract the middle-aged consumer.

Sample Essay 1:

        The argument that department retailsales will increase in the next 10 years and

thusdepartment stores should begin to replace products to attract middle-aged

consumersis not entirely logically convincing, since it omits certain crucial

assumptions

        First of all, the argument ignores theabsolute amount of retail expenditure of

middle-agedand younger consumers devoted to department store products and services.

Althoughyounger consumers spend a smaller percentage of their retail expenditure to

departmentstore products than do the middle-aged consumers, they might actually

spendmore in terms of the absolute amount.

        Even if middle-aged consumers arespending more than younger ones in

departmentstores, the argument ignores the possibility that the trend may change within

the nextdecade. Younger consumers might prefer to shop in department stores than in

othertypes of stores, and middle-aged consumers might turn to other types of stores,too.

This willlead to a higher expenditure of younger consumers in department stores than

that ofmiddle-aged consumers.

        Besides, the argument never addressesthe population difference between middle-

agedconsumers and younger ones. Suppose there are more younger consumers than the

middle-agedones now, the total population base of younger consumers will be bigger

than thatof the middle-aged ones if both of them grow at the same rate in the next

decade.Thus there will be a bigger younger consumer base.

        Based on the reasons I listed above, theargument is not completely sound. The

evidencein support of the conclusion does little to prove the conclusion since it does

notaddress the assumptions I have already raised. Ultimately, the argument mighthave

been moreconvincing by making it clear that the absolute population of middle-aged

consumersare higher than that of the younger consumers and the number will continue

to growin the next decade, and that the middle-aged consumers will continue to spend

moremoney in department stores than younger consumers do in the next decade.

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【10】

Sample Essay 2:

       The argument that retailers should replace some of the products intended to attract

theyounger consumers with products intended to attract the middle-aged consumersis

notentirely logically convincing, since it ignores certain crucial assumptions.

       First, the argument omits the assumption that the business volumes of both the

middle-agedconsumers and the younger consumers are the same. If the business

volume ofthe middle-aged consumers' 39% is smaller than that of the younger

consumers'25%, the retail sales will not increase during the next decade.

       Second, even if the business volumes of both the middle-aged consumers and the

youngerconsumers were the same in the last decade, the increase of the middle-aged

people inthe next decade is not same as the increase of the retail expenditure, for the

retailtrade depends more on such factors as the economic circumstances, people's

consumingdesire.

       Finally, the argument never assumes the increase of the younger consumers within

the nextdecade. If the younger consumer increase at the same rate and spend the same

amount ofmoney on the goods and services of department stores, the retailers should

neverignore them.

       Thus the argument is not completely sound. The evidence in support of the

conclusionthat the growing number of middle-aged people within the next decade does

little toprove the conclusion-that department stores should begin to replace some of

theirproducts to attract the middle-aged consumers-since it does not address the

assumptionsI have already raised. Ultimately, the argument might have been

strengthenedby making it clear that the business volumes of both types of consumers

are thesame and comparable, that the increase of a certain type of consumers are

correlatedwith the increase of the retail sales, and that the growth rate of the younger

consumersare the same as that of the middle-aged consumers.

人间烟火Sue

仍然是接着之前那个题目的范文哟~

Sample Essay 3:

       Based on an expected increase in the number of middle-aged people during the

nextdecade, the author predicts that retail sales at department stores willincrease

significantlyover the next ten years. To bolster this prediction, the author citesstatistics

showingthat middle-aged people devote a much higher percentage of their retail

expenditureto department-store services and products than younger consumers do.

Since thenumber of middle-aged consumers is on the rise and since they spend more

thanyounger people on department-store goods and services, the author further

recommendsthat department stores begin to adjust their inventories to capitalize on this

trend.Specifically, it is recommended that department stores increase their inventoryof

productsaimed at middle-aged consumers and decrease their inventory, of products

aimed at younger consumers. This argument is problematic for two reasons.

       First, an increase in the number of middle-aged people does not necessarily

portendan overall increase in department-store sales. It does so only on the assumption

thatother population groups will remain relatively constant. For example, if the

expectedincrease in the number of middle-aged people is offset by an equally

significantdecrease in the number of younger people, there will be little or no net gain

in sales.

       Second, in recommending that department stores replace products intended to

attractyounger consumers with products more suitable to middle-aged consumers, the

authorassumes that the number of younger consumers will not also increase. Since a

sizableincrease in the population of younger consumers could conceivably offset the

differencein the retail expenditure patterns of younger and middle-aged consumers, it

would beunwise to make the recommended inventory adjustment tacking evidence to

support this assumption.

       In conclusion, this argument is unacceptable. To strengthen the argument the

authorwould have to provide evidence that the population of younger consumers will

remain relatively constant over the next decade.

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