橙子酱的作文贴：每天都要写写写

橙圆

0819 独立

If I happen to be good at my friend’s weaksubject, should I lend a hand to him or her? Some people might say “yes”, sinceas is so often pointed out, the rose is in her hand, the flavor in mind.However, other people are against this idea, and I would like to recommend myfriend to ask help from tutors.

The tutors could provide my friend more specialexplanation than mine, because schools hire them only if they are qualified fortheir jobs. For instance, a tutor for universities often acquires doctordegree. He or she has ready learned the knowledge my friend and I now arestudying for many years. Therefore, there is no reason that I could be more familiarwith this knowledge than he or she is. More importantly, doctors should havedone further research in this area. Thus when my friend asks them a question,they could offer my friend many extra-specialized information, which mightthrow new light on my friend’s study. In contrast, my perspective is limited onwhat our professor mentioned in the classes. The only thing I could do is justto repeat professors’ explanations from classes, which my friend has alreadyconsidered thousands times. Hence, I think my friend should ask help fromtutors rather than me.

Answering my friend question would put morepressure on my intense time schedule. What I suppose to do every day is wellarranged due to my high volume homework. But I could not accurately measure thetime spent on tutoring my friend. Therefore, I may not have enough time to makemy friend clear about his or her questions. However, the one of the most importantresponsibilities for tutors is to assist students in studying. Thus, tutorswould reserve a large amount of time for answering questions. In this way, myfriend not only could get the additional help almost in any time he or she wantsbut also could go deep into the knowledge they do not fully understand.Therefore, I would be really relieved if tutors fulfill their responsibility.

Considering our friendship, I think that teachingmy friend is not a good idea. I would be confused about how to deal with ourrelationship. For instance, when my friend distract from my tutoring, should Ibehave like a real teacher to warn him or her? As a friend, I should not be extremelystrict with them, since they have their own independent judgments. But if Ileave them distracted, what is the meaning of my tutoring? They would not learnanything from it. Hence, to avoid being caught on the horns of a dilemma, I thinkmy friend should turn tutors for help.

Owing to reasons I mentioned above, I thinkthis situation is not the thing that I should help because I have the abilitybut a more complex one. Therefore, I suggest that my friend should go to thetutor centers.

橙圆

0820 独立 （已经改过啦 最近好混乱 内啥 被抢了工作的同学不要难过 ）

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students would receive a better education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

These days nobody could have failed to notice the fact that some students are required to attend classes for 11 months of a year, hoping to receive a better education. Some people, including me, are against this idea and I believe that the key factor to better education are not time for attending class but good teachers and extracurricular activities.

Good teachers could improve the productivity of the classes, because they have great experience of teaching, thus knowing a lot about their students and the knowledge of their areas. Hence they can design a special plan for their student to study. The contents of this plan not only totally accord with the weak points of students but also include the appropriate time when students need to review their homework. By following this specific schedule, students always could make up their deficiency and acquire knowledge more quickly. Therefore, with good teachers, students could learn a lot of knowledge even though they only attend school 8 months of a year; in contrast, they will acquire limited knowledge if teachers are not extremely scholarly.

Better education also contains extracurricular activities. Students should learn many things from their daily life. For instance, students learned many characteristics of animals at natural science class. They may know what a duck looks like and how a duck passes winter. Yet only by observing ducks in the farm can students really be familiar with this creature. Attending classes cannot gain the precious experience similar to observing animals, which mainly comes from extracurricular activities. Thus studying 11 month of a year absolutely will decrease the time for extracurricular activities.

Even though I admit that students should spend enough time on their classes, 11 month of a year is so long that students might be tired of attending classes. Especial for primary children, their nature is to play. It is really difficult for them to focus on study in a long time. What is worse, forcing them to attend classes such a long time may result their resistance to studying and thus decrease their productivity. The same is true of high school students. Hence students should not be required to attend classes 11 month of a year.

Owing to the reasons as I mentioned above, I think that good teachers and varied and colorful extracurricular activities play vital roles in receiving better education.

今早起来一看发现这篇我写过 懒得重新写了 整整改改就贴啦（让你懒 pia飞~）
所以语言肯定很一般 （你想说你逻辑不错么 pia飞~）唔 中途发现哪里逻辑链断了也有可能 毕竟这是23分的橙子酱
Anyway 将就将就 啊哈哈哈哈

橙圆

0821 独立

As a result of pollution in cities, increasing amount of urban dwellers leave from cities to villages to pursuit more suitable residences. In fact, villages have a lot of merits: they usually are peaceful, close to nature, and, more importantly, spacious. Although there are many shortcomings for living in the cities, my family still has a lot of reason to do so.

All my family members will save time, if we live in the city. An important reason is that our daily activities happen around the city. My parents, for instance, are the common white collars. On weekdays, they drive to the downtown of our city at which their office buildings are located. Therefore, if our family live in village far away from their office, my parents have to get up extremely early in the morning, especially thinking of traffic congestion nowadays. As for me, living near the downtown area is also good news. I could go to the school just by bike and save a great amount of time to do my homework. Hence, to save the time consumed in traffic, city is a better place to take care of family.

Medical condition could be another important reason to prevent my family from living in the countryside. There is no doubt that hospitals equipped with good doctors and devices are all located at city. Because of distance between city and countryside, patients may miss the optimal opportunity for treatment. Take one of my uncles for example. After retired, he moved to countryside to live out his final years in peace. In a late evening, he suddenly felt headache and was sent to the nearest hospital in the countryside immediately. Unfortunately, even though the doctors of this hospital could not find any problems with him, he passed away only on the second day in the hospital. As far as I am concerned, inferior medical condition in rural hospital should be responsible for his death. Therefore, since my parents are at an advanced age, good medical condition is essential for my family.

Education adds more importance on living in the city. Unquestionably, city possesses superior education recourses. With the development of urbanization, good fundamental education firstly thrives on cities. Then, because these schools could afford high salaries, they attract many good teachers to leave their hometown and to look for jobs in the cities. The good teachers in turns have improved teaching quality further. Thus a beneficial cycle formed. Apart from classroom education, extracurricular activities are more various in cities due to advanced facilities, such as gyms, computer centers with high network speed and libraries. Therefore, my family inclines to live in the city in order to receive better education.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I find it hard to part with my house in the city. Therefore, I believe that city is more suitable for taking care of family.  
  
这作文写得 越来不走心了 （叹气~）

MrWaiting

0820 独立 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students would receive a better education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

MrWaiting

8.21独立 城市还是乡村更容易照顾家庭

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0820 独立修改

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students would receive a better education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

These days nobody could have failed to notice a wide discussion about whether   some students should be  required to attend classes for 11 months a year, hoping to receive a better education. Some people, including me, are against this idea and I believe that the key factor to better education is not the amount of time for class but good teachers and extracurricular activities.

Good teachers could improve the productivity of the classes, because they have much experience in teaching and thus know a lot about their students and the knowledge of their areas. Hence they can design a special plan for their students to study. The contents of this plan not only totally accord with the weak points of students but also include the appropriate time when students need to review their homework. By following this specific schedule step by step, students could always make up their deficiency and acquire knowledge more quickly. Therefore, with good teachers, students could learn a lot of knowledge even though they only attend school 8 months a year; in contrast, they will acquire limited knowledge if teachers are not extremely scholarly.

Better education also contains extracurricular activities. Students should learn many things from their daily life. For instance, students learned many characteristics of animals in natural science class. They may know what a duck looks like and how a duck passes the winter. Yet only by observing ducks in the farm can students really get familiar with this creature. Attending classes cannot gain the precious experience similar to observation, which mainly comes from extracurricular activities. Thus studying 11 month of a year will absolutely decrease the time for extracurricular activities.

Even though I admit that students should spend enough time on their classes, 11 month is so long that students might be tired of attending classes, especially for primary children, whose nature is to play. It is really difficult for them to focus on study for a long time. What is worse, forcing them to attend classes such a long time may result in their resistance to studying, thus decreasing their productivity. The same is true of high school students. Hence students should not be required to attend classes 11 month a year.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I think that good teachers and varied and colorful extracurricular activities play vital roles in receiving better education.

深深觉得这篇没救了

橙圆

写个总结贴~么么哒~

最近有几点问题：
1. 介词搭配 in on at of 好好想想
2. 副词位置 牢记修饰助动词滴副词放助动词后面呀~
3. 结果状语 修饰前面整句
4. 逻辑主语要注意
5. 名词单复数问题 可数名词一定不能裸奔
6. 定冠词 放在可数名词前面的一把好手~~~
7. 句型多样化要注意~


我们的目标是~消灭语法错误~~~

MrWaiting

橙圆 发表于 2014-8-23 12:37
写个总结贴~么么哒~

最近有几点问题：

加油吧

小蘑菇开始打怪

0819 revised by mushroom

If I happen to be good at my friend’s weaksubject, should I lend a hand to him or her? Some people might say “yes”, sinceas is so often pointed out, the rose is in her hand, the flavor in mind(送人玫瑰手有余香咩~好厉害）.However, other people are against this idea, and I would like to recommend myfriend to ask help from tutors.

The tutors could provide my friend more specialexplanation than mine, because schools hire them only if(感觉这个连接词有点怪。。） they are qualified fortheir jobs. For instance, a tutor for universities often acquires doctordegree. He or she has ready learned the knowledge my friend and I now arestudying for many years. Therefore, there is no reason that I could be more familiarwith this knowledge than he or she is. More importantly, doctors should havedone further research in this area. Thus when my friend asks them a question,they could offer my friend many extra-specialized information, which mightthrow new light on my friend’s study. In contrast, my perspective is limited onwhat our professor mentioned in the classes. The only thing I could do is justto repeat professors’ explanations from classes, which my friend has alreadyconsidered thousands times. Hence, I think my friend should ask help fromtutors rather than me.

Answering my friend question would put morepressure on my intense time schedule. What I suppose to do every day is wellarranged due to my high volume homework. But I could not accurately measure thetime spent on tutoring my friend. Therefore, I may not have enough time to makemy friend clear about his or her questions. However, the one of the most importantresponsibilities for tutors is to assist students in studying. Thus, tutorswould reserve a large amount of time for answering questions. In this way, myfriend not only could get the additional help almost in any time he or she wantsbut also could go deep into the knowledge they do not fully understand.Therefore, I would be really relieved if tutors fulfill their responsibility.

Considering our friendship, I think that teachingmy friend is not a good idea. I would be confused about how to deal with ourrelationship. For instance, when my friend distract from my tutoring, should Ibehave like a real teacher to warn him or her? As a friend, I should not be extremelystrict with them, since they have their own independent judgments. But if Ileave them distracted, what is the meaning of my tutoring? They would not learnanything from it. Hence, to avoid being caught on the horns of a dilemma, I thinkmy friend should turn tutors for help.

Owing to reasons I mentioned above, I thinkthis situation is not the thing that I should help because I have the abilitybut a more complex one. Therefore, I suggest that my friend should go to thetutor centers.

总结：
每段的论点的都很清晰~写得蛮好的啦

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0824 独立

Parents should let children make and learn from their own mistakes.

As is so often pointed out, he who makes no mistakes makes nothing. Mistake, on one hand, costs children confidence; on the other hand, it perfects children in a variety of ways. As far as I am concerned, what parents should do is to familiarize their children with mistakes and guide their children to learn from their own mistakes.

Mistakes made by children weigh in favor of the process that parents get to know their children. Children, especially those who are under age six, could not precisely talk to their parents about what they have learned, but their behavior could tell parents the truth. Take myself as an example. When I was in childhood, my parents always encouraged me to repeat what I learned in the kindergarten. Actually, it was a hard task for a four-year-old child, and unavoidably my words were topsy-turvy. However, my parents could interpret a lot of information from my wrong answers. For instance, that I said one plus two equals four means that I had difficulty in subtraction. In this way, my parents could easily know my weakness.

The one of best ways to correct children’s behavior is let them learn from their own mistakes. For my perspective, nothing could impress a child greater than a mistake. For instance, the sentence “never forget your key” sounds familiar to almost all people. I was once one of the guys who never kept that sentence in mind and always lost keys at home. Unlike other parents who put the key into their children’s bags, my parents took a laissez-faire policy. But it worked. I stopped forgetting my key after I locked myself out five hours. Since then, the heave price I paid has reminded me to check my key every time before I go out. Therefore, parents should allow their children learn from mistakes.

Apart from real behaviors, mistakes help children to form a positive attitude towards failure. Only by knowing failure is commonplace could children overcome difficulties in the rest of their life. I often read the story that a successful businessman suddenly killed himself when facing a not serious financial problem. People did not understand the reason why he did so until found that this businessman went through his life too easy to rebound from a setback. Hence to prevent similar things from happening, parents should let children make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes at young age so that they could face failure with normal heart at older age.