以下是引用mooncake在2005-1-27 18:13:00的发言：
以你最近发表的一篇东西为例 Dear friend （这个没问题）
I appreciate the approach by which you expressed your points, which were divergent from mine.
这句话句式破损，包括一个用词不准确。
第二个which 修饰什么？points? 不像，因为前面有逗号，有逗号的定语从句知道怎么用吧？那是一般用来修饰前面一句话的，如果你用来修饰前面的一句话，我认为那不符合你的原创意图，也不应该跟着were；如果是修饰points(因为跟着were,这个更加符合你的创作意图），一句话中不应该出现两个which修饰不同的宾语，如果你能找到反证，我向你学习。
express your points用词不准确，你的原意应该是想说express your point of view（表述你的观点）, points本意没有观点的意思，去查字典。
I esteem you as a sensible man and a man of principle, the virtues that I am supposed to learn from you. Thank you.
这句话又是典型的句式破损, the virtue that...我猜你大概所指的是the fact that you are a sensible man and a man of principle,但是你不能这么直接加一个逗号，就把这个virtue杵上去。
One point that I insist to highlight is that argumentativeness shall not be consider (considered) synonym of quarrel.
argumentative的意思是爱争辩的，但是没有一个名词形式写作argumentativeness
Every CDer has and should have his or her own viewpoint and hence should be endowed the authority to voice whatever he or she wants to say (certainly, subjecting to one condition of not insulting or hurting the others).
again, you never say "subjecting to" but "subject to". "subject" is not a verb.
Please be advised that we all are men on the same road. Putting aside the disparity and endeavoring to achieve the parity is our philosophy.
下面还有很多类似的错误，这些错误看上去都不明显，或者是小问题，但是一个人的英语写作能力的高下，很大程度上是在这些地方分出来的，当然，我是指到达一定高度之后的写作能力，我给你的建议是，
1。尽量少使用复合句，因为你还没完全掌握使用的规则
2。力争用词准确，先把一些基本介词的用法如to, at, for, 搞清楚
3。少用生僻词和大词，你写的文章我给一个美国朋友看过，他看了之后的评语是，what the hell this guy wants to say? 如果连native speaker看了都不知道您想说什么，就可以基本否定是因为你的写作水平太高让大家看不懂了。
以上愚见，草草不恭，供切磋！
thank you mooncake. i think i indeed need time to make it better.
by the way, I didn't think that my english was too hard to be understood by native speakers.
native speakers might be falled into different categaries. those who was well-educated and those who was not.
anyway, i did appreciate your points and time. I will be seeing you there. | 
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发表于 2005-1-28 11:14:00
