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purplekitty

嗬嗬，多谢前辈指教。看上去CEIBS老兄的长篇大论还是有一定气势的嘛，偶的确是没有仔细琢磨，也懒得仔细琢磨，嘿嘿

purplekitty

不过，恕在下才疏学浅，至少CEIBS老兄的勇气可嘉，在绝大多数的情况下坚持用非母语发言，这多少也会有一定的难度吧？

呵呵，我只是中立地发表一下个人观点哦

CEIBS_MBA2005

以下是引用sky_river在2005-1-27 13:49:00的发言：

感谢ceibs_mba2005给大家一个chinglish 的榜样

chinglish is better than nonglish, am i right?

CEIBS_MBA2005

以下是引用purplekitty在2005-1-27 14:36:00的发言：

不过，恕在下才疏学浅，至少CEIBS老兄的勇气可嘉，在绝大多数的情况下坚持用非母语发言，这多少也会有一定的难度吧？

呵呵，我只是中立地发表一下个人观点哦

Thank you, I will keep my tenacity in the face of frustrations.   

CEIBS_MBA2005

I will be on the business trip to Thailand and won’t return until next Friday. So you guys keep going and I will rejoin you soon.  

mooncake

以下是引用CEIBS_MBA2005在2005-1-27 13:36:00的发言：

Thank you for your kindly comments. I initiate this personal communication for further advices from you.

2: 用词不当（词汇量大了，不知所措了）

3。语法混乱

4。句式破损

As for the three sins aforesaid, could you be kindly and cordial to cite some samples from my writing with the view of helping me avoid the same mistakes in future? Thank you for your efforts and time.

以你最近发表的一篇东西为例

Dear friend （这个没问题）

I appreciate the approach by which you expressed your points, which were divergent from mine.

这句话句式破损，包括一个用词不准确。

第二个which 修饰什么？points? 不像，因为前面有逗号，有逗号的定语从句知道怎么用吧？那是一般用来修饰前面一句话的，如果你用来修饰前面的一句话，我认为那不符合你的原创意图，也不应该跟着were；如果是修饰points(因为跟着were,这个更加符合你的创作意图），一句话中不应该出现两个which修饰不同的宾语，如果你能找到反证，我向你学习。

express your points用词不准确，你的原意应该是想说express your point of view（表述你的观点）, points本意没有观点的意思，去查字典。

I esteem you as a sensible man and a man of principle, the virtues that I am supposed to learn from you. Thank you.

这句话又是典型的句式破损, the virtue that...我猜你大概所指的是the fact that you are a sensible man and a man of principle,但是你不能这么直接加一个逗号，就把这个virtue杵上去。

One point that I insist to highlight is that argumentativeness shall not be consider (considered) synonym of quarrel.

argumentative的意思是爱争辩的，但是没有一个名词形式写作argumentativeness

Every CDer has and should have his or her own viewpoint and hence should be endowed the authority to voice whatever he or she wants to say (certainly, subjecting to one condition of not insulting or hurting the others).

again, you never say "subjecting to" but "subject to". "subject" is not a verb.

Please be advised that we all are men on the same road. Putting aside the disparity and endeavoring to achieve the parity is our philosophy.

下面还有很多类似的错误，这些错误看上去都不明显，或者是小问题，但是一个人的英语写作能力的高下，很大程度上是在这些地方分出来的，当然，我是指到达一定高度之后的写作能力，我给你的建议是，

1。尽量少使用复合句，因为你还没完全掌握使用的规则

2。力争用词准确，先把一些基本介词的用法如to, at, for, 搞清楚

3。少用生僻词和大词，你写的文章我给一个美国朋友看过，他看了之后的评语是，what the hell this guy wants to say? 如果连native speaker看了都不知道您想说什么，就可以基本否定是因为你的写作水平太高让大家看不懂了。

以上愚见，草草不恭，供切磋！

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-1-27 18:56:02编辑过]

marshial

hehe

wang16

大哥以下是引用CEIBS_MBA2005在2005-1-27 12:30:00的发言：

Dear friend

I appreciate the approach by which you expressed your points, which were divergent from mine.  I esteem you as a sensible man and a man of principle, the virtues that I am supposed to learn from you. Thank you.

One point that I insist to highlight is that argumentativeness shall not be consider synonym of quarrel. Every CDer has and should have his or her own viewpoint and hence should be endowed the authority to voice whatever he or she wants to say (certainly, subjecting to one condition of not insulting or hurting the others). Please be advised that we all are men on the same road. Putting aside the disparity and endeavoring to achieve the parity is our philosophy. Ironically, some of us who are dreaming to pursue the MBA education abroad, particularly in the USA, a land of hope, a land of freedom, are still doing something to fetter the freedom of speech. As such, one particular individual could make such suggestion of requiring another guy to change his picture or word simply because the picture or the word is regarded as unfit by personal criteria. Or in another scenario, a girl claims she is reluctant to be my classmate as she is sick of my remarks and she is normally considered right. The reason being that is simple. People typically think the girls are more objective than boys. However, they are more feelers than thinkers.

Even though I am quarrelling, I do not think that is something to blame. In the jianghu world, we all know “you will never make an acquaintance without fighting”. Through quarrelling, I can figure out which group of people shares the similar point with me and I will definitely foster friendship with them.

Another thing I also want to clarify is nobody here can guarantee that what he or she said is absolute truth. Nevertheless, I am also convinced that nobody come here to fabricate absolute untruth. As for some hearsay, let me cite an old Chinese saying to make my point: wave will never occur spontaneously without wind.

谢谢夸奖

你的词汇征得很大。。。而且能够用到这等程度（抛开传统语法的禁锢）。。。佩服佩服！！！

wang16

是不是也去泰国出差了？？？

听说CEIBS_MBA2005去泰国出差了。。。哈哈

胡乱猜测。。。有待证实。。。是不是一个不在的时候，另外一个也不在呢？

有意思

amyyeshen

hehe