前两次都是25，要三战了，求高人指点，求突破啊！！！

yzwdan818

9.10综合

People have different opinion about the use of the great house in the American Southwest and have proposed three main theories to explain in, however, the professor casts serious doubt on these ideals, so the lecture disagrees with the passage.

Firstly, the professor points out the lack of enough fire place in these great houses for family's daily cooking, which should be the basic feature for a living place. One of the biggest great house can just find ten fire places which is opposite to the huge place that can lived by more than 100 families. That's why the professor disagrees with the first theory.

And secondly, the professor also tells us that the theory that the great house is a place for storing food is not convince too. There are few traces for the existence of maize and relevant container. Not enough maize and remains of container left on the floor. Thus the second theory is also dispute by the professor.

When talking about the third theory, other construction materials such as stone, sand and even tools are also used by the professor to contradict with the theory of ceremonial center. The broken pot may be left by the workers who built these great houses. So the evidence cannot suggest the place is used for ceremonies.

pengxudong

yzwdan818 发表于 2013-9-11 14:57
9.10综合

People have different opinion about the use of the great house in the American Southwest a ...

改完了，多写综合，提高会很快的哟

yzwdan818

pengxudong 发表于 2013-9-11 17:51
改完了，多写综合，提高会很快的哟

看了你的批改，我好像有点明白ETS给我作文写得评语了~多谢啊！其实你直接把修改的作文贴在我帖子里就行了，不用单独弄个word这么麻烦啊~
第二，三条批注我没有用that是因为我后面根本不是个句子，而是个比较长的名词短语，而我把which放后面的原因是避免看起来头重脚轻，你是刚考完GMAT咩？这两个问题是GMAT语法题里经常会出现的点。
再次感谢~受益良多啊！

yzwdan818

TPO6综合
The professor strongly refutes the author's statement that the communal online encyclopedias is less valuable for people for several reasons such as original inaccuracies, mistakes resulting by people's change and wrong focal points. He confutes the passage in three aspects.

Firstly, it's not the accuracy the professor thinks most important, because we can hardly find a book without any errors, not only in online books but also in printed books. What should we take into serious consideration is that whether the failures are easy to be corrected. Obviously, the one-line encyclopedias can easy be revised. However, the mistakes in printed encyclopedias usually remain decades. This directly contradicts the passage's point.

Secondly, the crucial parts of the on-line encyclopedias will not be changed as what the passage supposed. Two strategies have been carried out. People put the most significant part of the book in a special place so that nobody can change. And some people monitor changes in the book as their own job. This totally solves the problem in the reading.

Thirdly, the diversity of topics in on-line book is one of the most wonderful advantages. The printed encyclopedias have to make decision picking out the important topics due to their limited space. Nevertheless, their biases make it difficult for them to reflect people's real interest and demand. Oppositely, there are various kinds of topic including academic topics on the on-line encyclopedias, thus can meeting different people's appetites. The passage fails to be right again.

brittanyhxy

yzwdan818 发表于 2013-9-10 09:47
9.9独立   
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes,  are more importan ...

批改见附件啊

暴风雨小圆

看到了 修改Ing

暴风雨小圆

很厉害哦 大点基本上答到了 语法也正确。
第一次修改 请多多指教：）

yzwdan818

9.13号独立

是否同意： One can learn another person from books and movies the personlikes.

你同不同意下列观点：通过一个人读的书和看的电影，我们就可以了解那个人

Although we cannot get fully recognition ofpeople by books and movies they read and watch, books and movies, I think,still can reflect some aspects of the people in some extent. The appetite for booksand movies are inevitably associated with the age, education backgrounds andhobbies of people.

Obviously, we can tell people’s age byknowing their preference of books and movies. People under different ranges ofage are in favor of different kinds of books, because people with distinctiveage have different comments and altitudes upon the same piece of work. It’stheir ages that determine the genre of books and movies they tend toappreciate. While my ten-years-old sister is crazy about fairy tale books andCartoon movies, I strongly love novels and films depicting romantic story. Andmy parents, even older people, they prefer to historical books and war movies. Thuswe can figure out people’s mysterious age from what they read and watch.

Also, we are able to points out people’s educationbackground with the help of their loving books and movies. Occupying differentextent of education, people show particular interests in readings and films.High-educated people usually like to read serious books and movies. On thecontrary, low literate people prefer to funny works. Moreover, people withdifferent majors also express different passion for books and movies in variousareas. My teacher’s favorite books are masterpieces such as Meditations, but myuncle with litter knowledge likes the joke books most. I read economic booksmost frequently, yet my friend Lily majored in painting enjoys art books. Thisis why books and movies can tell people our education background.

Apart from above opinions, we also obtain theability to guess people’s hobbies by analyze what they read and watch. Nowadays,books become more and more specialized and movies contain more and moredifferent topics, thus they can meet most people’s unique demand. People withdifferent hobbies can choose their own hobby-related books and movies. Music-lovercan read musical score and watch The Legend of 1900. And sports members willchoose to see sports magazines and watch The Soccer Boy. So people will showtheir hobbies with their loving books and movies.

Taking all the reasons into consideration,I agree with the statement that we can learn other people from books they readand movies they watch. We can get familiar with other people by asking thebooks and movie they like and choose friends with same interest by knowingtheir preference on books and movies.

yzwdan818

sherlock1992 发表于 2013-9-10 17:51
童鞋，我的独立好了 http://forum.chasedream.com/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=836006&pid=18665493&page ...

sherlock, 13号的作文依旧是我帮你改，今天我生日，所以晚上和同学出去吃饭，晚上回来再给你改，可能会晚点，不好意思啊~

sherlock1992

yzwdan818 发表于 2013-9-14 17:56
sherlock, 13号的作文依旧是我帮你改，今天我生日，所以晚上和同学出去吃饭，晚上回来再给你改，可能会晚 ...

没关系，生日快乐哦！