Libertine的作文本~ 3.2求拍砖

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As the rapid development of the modern economy, there are more and more salaries we can gain from our jobs. However, there are many methods to handle the money, different people have different opinions towards the issue. As far as I’m concerned, we have to find a balance between spending money on traveling and saving money for future use, because both of them are of great importance.


   To begin with, traveling(travelling) plays a rather important role in our daily lives. Sometimes, it is necessary for us to travel because we can relieve pressure of our work and study by taking a vacation. (这里与travel有点语意重复）For example, I, together with my parents, take a holiday twice a year. As is often the case, we will choose to go some places that we have never been to. During the vacation, we will talk a lot about what has happened recently and share our happiness as well as sorrows. This process is very relaxing and interesting, which makes it easy for us to forget the difficulties and chores we have to face in the work and study, （。）therefore it can relieve our pressure a lot by this way(不然这句话有2个主语）
   
   In addition, you don’t know exactly whether you will encounter a calamity or not in the future, such a severe sickness, an avalanche, an earthquake and so on, which is likely to cause a huge loss.（不管这里表达人死亡或者金钱损失方面的意思都用losses吧？) Consequently, it is vital to save some money for it to help you get through it. （也可以直接说help you out)For example, one of my best friends died about two years ago. His family wasn’t poor and there was certain amount of money he could use every week. Unfortunately, he caught a serious disease when he was fifteen years old, a lot of money were(was) needed to cure this disease. However, his parents always took him to travel and had very little savings. Although all of us had donated (large sums) to him, he died of(from) this sickness because of the lack of money to cure it.


   In conclusion, thanks to the equal value of spending money on travelling as well as saving money for future, it is pretty crucial for us to find a balance between them.