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libertine

2月15号 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?


Government should focus its budget on young children's education rather than on universities'.


    As the development of modern society, education plays a more and more important role in our daily lives. Every year, a great number of financial supports have been utilized for it. However, the total budget for the education is limited, it is rather crucial to determine how it will be used. As far as I’m concerned, government has to balance its budget both on young children’s education and on universities instead of focusing on one of them.


    To begin with, as is known to us all. In the elementary school and middle school, what students learn is fundamental knowledge, which is about almost every aspect of the extant subjects. What’s more, if someone lacks the primary knowledge, it is impossible for him to learn some deep one. For example, if you don’t know the basic calculations in math, such as addition and subtraction, you will never be able to learn the more advanced calculations, such as multiplication, division even calculus. Consequently, young children’s education is of great importance, and it can not be ignored.


    In addition, in universities, most of the sciences taught are concentrated on a certain direction, such as physics, math, chemicals and so on. Students will study the more challenging and difficult knowledge about that field with the help of the professors and other classmates. In some sense, if he wants to make some progressive researches, it is necessary for him to learn that. For example, I was assigned to a project in the university, and I didn’t know many things about that, thus every day I would spent a lot of time studying that subject in the library as well as in the classroom to gain something I needed. Therefore, the education in universities is also of great importance.


    In conclusion, in order to keep up with the rapid development of the modern technologies, government should balance the budget on young children’s education and on universities, since both of them are pretty vital.

woshimind

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  As the development of modern society, we are under more and more pressure from almost every aspect in(建议of) our lives. There is a growing number of work to attend to(很少说照料工作吧？用do就可以） everyday. Some people like working only three days a week with long hours, while others like working five days with shorter hours. As far as I’m concerned, it’s more enjoyable to work for（with) shorter hours every day.

   To begin with,it is pretty easy for us to get tired and bored when handling the same thing for a long time. As a result, long working hours every day is(are) more likely to reduce our interests towards(in) the work which will make it(us feel) less enjoyable. For example,as a student, before the final examination, we have to spend a lot of time and energy preparing for it. As is often the case, every day a lot of time will be utilized to review the subjects we have learnt(learned) in every day life, which always makes(renders) us exhausted. And this process will make us hate these subjects in some sense, no matter how much we like them before. （放主句前no matter how much we like them before,this process will make us hate these subjects in some sense.）Consequently, I don’t favor（favor当名词比较多，比如do me a favor has...)用基础词汇like就行，嘿嘿) long working hours every day because it will be less enjoyable.

   In addition,if you only work three days a week and take four days off, you will possibly forget most of the work you have done because of the gap in the time(in a whole week). And it is sure for you to feel less enjoyable, since it means a waste of time. For example, I have played the violin for about ten years, in order to improve my skills,(.) I will spare about one hour to practice it every day. Sometimes there are too many chores for me to deal with, so I won’t play the violin that day. However, when practicing it the day after that day, it is more probable for me to lost some of the memory about the what I have practiced before, which is pretty annoying.( It is annoying for me to go on what i have learned before that day )

   In conclusion,it will be more enjoyable to work for(with) shorter hours every day, for the opposite may well(do) make us tired(weary), bored, annoyed and worried（distressed).

libertine

thank you anyway!~

libertine

2月16号 独立

Is there a good reasonto be impolite (rude) to another person?



     As the development ofmodern society, every day there will be a lot of people, who have almostcompletely different personality, for us to deal with. Consequently, the way thatwe treat others is of great importance. As far as I’m concerned, it isnecessary for us to be rude under certain circumstances for some reasons.

     To begin with, when yourmood is really bad, and you just want to find someone, especially your bestfriends, to vent your discontent or anger, you should do that. As is often thecast, as long as you apologize for what you have done before, the friends ofyours will not take them seriously. What’s more, the vent will make you feelbetter in some sense. For example, I did get a really bad grade in an examination,which made me very distracted. At the same time, because of some chores, I gotangry with my girlfriend and said some aggressive words to her. After that, I felta little better because I had vented my discontent. And then I said sorry toher about my rudeness and the reason why I did that. It seemed that sheunderstood my mood and forgave me, we still loved each other very much justlike nothing had happened.

     In addition, when youare pretty annoyed about someone, maybe being impolite to him or her is a verygood method to prevent him or her from vexing you again. For example, when I wasin elementary school, there was a naughty boy who liked drawing pictures onothers’ clothes. Sometimes, he painted on my clothes, my mother had to spent alot of time washing it, which was pretty unpleasant. I had talked with himabout this, but nothing changed. Thus, I was impolite to him, when he was doingthe same thing again. And after that he never drew pictures on my clothesagain.

     In conclusion, undercertain conditions, there are tenable reasons for us to be rude to others, becauseof the reason that we can benefit from it.

lihaolan

As the development of modern society, education plays a more and more important role in our daily lives. Every year, a great number of financial supports have been utilized for it. However, the total budget for the education is limited，两句没有连词要断句这里。 it is rather(可以换个强调词，这个我不确定是否正确很少用到。有点变扭) crucial to determine how it will be used. As far as I’m concerned, government has to balance its budget both on young children’s education and on universities instead of focusing on one of them.（选择观点最好不要选择中间观点一般，agree or disagree最好）


To begin with, as is known to us all. In the elementary school and middle school, what students learn is fundamental knowledge, which is about almost every aspect of the extant subjects. What’s more, if someone lacks the primary knowledge, it is impossible for him to learn some deep one. For example, if you don’t know the basic calculations in math, such as addition and subtraction, you will never be able to learn the more advanced calculations, such as multiplication, division even calculus. Consequently, young children’s education is of great importance, and it can not be ignored.


In addition, in universities, most of the sciences taught（没有见过这样表达的，science courses 比较适合点吧） are concentrated on a certain direction, such as physics, math, chemicals and so on. Students will study the more challenging and difficult knowledge about that field with the help of the professors and other classmates. In some sense, if he wants to make some progressive researches, it is necessary for him to learn that. For example, I was assigned to a project in the university, and I didn’t know many things about that, thus every day I would spent a lot of time studying that subject in the library as well as in the classroom to gain something I needed. Therefore, the education in universities is also of great importance.（例子和importance of education in university不是很紧密。）


In conclusion, in order to keep up with the rapid development of the modern technologies, government should balance the budget on young children’s education and on universities, since both of them are pretty vital.
1作者的基础很好，语法没什么问题。但是文章有点过分的平稳，平时多积累些亮点。像with the development 这种词语可能已经被套烂掉了。2观点最好不要中庸，最好一边倒。3多用连词段内，因果，递进，转折对比

libertine

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libertine

1.rather 的话  这里有用法，可以表示“很，相当”的意思  http://dict.youdao.com/search?le=eng&q=rather&keyfrom=dict.index
2.观点的话，OG上说的是，你是否赞同并不重要，重要是你在论述过程中需要具备的能力。
3.sciences taught，那个taught是后置定语，表示被教的.
4.例子的话。。其实我自己也觉得有点牵强~


thank you very much~

libertine

2月17号 作业  

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Spending money on traveling is better than saving money for future use.






    As the rapid development of the modern economy, there are more and more salaries we can gain from our jobs. However, there are many methods to handle the money, different people have different opinions towards the issue. As far as I’m concerned, we have to find a balance between spending money on traveling and saving money for future use, because both of them are of great importance.


    To begin with, traveling plays a rather important role in our daily lives. Sometimes, it is necessary for us to travel because we can relieve pressure of our work and study by taking a vacation. For example, I, together with my parents, take a holiday twice a year. As is often the case, we will choose to go some places that we have never been to. During the vacation, we will talk a lot about what has happened recently and share our happiness as well as sorrows. This process is very relaxing and interesting, which makes it easy for us to forget the difficulties and chores we have to face in the work and study, therefore relieve our pressure a lot.
    
    In addition, you don’t know exactly whether you will encounter a calamity or not in the future, such a severe sickness, an avalanche, an earthquake and so on, which is likely to cause a huge loss. Consequently, it is vital to save some money for it to help you get through it. For example, one of my best friends died about two years ago. His family wasn’t poor and there was certain amount of money he could use every week. Unfortunately, he caught a serious disease when he was fifteen years old, a lot of money were needed to cure this disease. However, his parents always took him to travel and had very little savings. Although all of us had donated to him, he died of this sickness because of the lack of money to cure it.


    In conclusion, thanks to the equal value of spending money on travelling as well as saving money for future, it is pretty crucial for us to find a balance between them.

woshimind

As the development of modern society, every day there will be a lot of people, who have almost completely different personality, for us to deal with. Consequently, the way that we treat others is of great importance. As far as I’m concerned, it is necessary for us to be rude under certain circumstances for some reasons.

     To begin with, when your mood is really bad(in a blue mood), and you just want to find someone, especially your best friends, to vent your discontent or anger, you should do that. As is often the cast(case), as long as you apologize for what you have done before, the friends of yours will not take them seriously. What’s more, the vent will make you feel better in some sense. For example, I did get a really bad grade in an examination,which made me very distracted. At the same time, because of some chores,(放主句后比较好吧） I got angry with my girlfriend and said some aggressive words to her. After that, I felt a little better because I had vented my discontent. And then I said sorry to her about my rudeness and the reason why I did that. It seemed that she understood my mood and forgave me, we still loved each other very much just like nothing had happened.

     In addition, when you are pretty annoyed about someone, maybe being impolite to him or her is a very good method to prevent him or her from vexing you again. For example, when I was in elementary school, there was a naughty boy who liked drawing pictures on others’ clothes. Sometimes, he painted on my clothes, my mother had to spent a lot of time washing it, which was pretty unpleasant. I had talked with him about this some times , but nothing changed. Thus, I was impolite to him, when he was doing the same thing again. And after that he never drew pictures on my clothes again.

     In conclusion, under certain conditions, there are tenable reasons for us to be rude to others, because of the reason that we can benefit from it.