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libertine

1月30号作业    独立写作

Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement?
It is impossible to be completely honest withyour friends.

As far as I’m concerned, I don’t think it possible to be completely honest with my friends for the three major reasons.
To begin with,everybody has privacy, it means all of us more or less have something that we don’t want others, even our parents or our best friends, to know, because these things may make us embarrassed or other discomforting feelings. For example, ifyou are a boy but like sleeping with a little bear, it will be very awkward to tell others about it, so it will be very common for you to tell others that you sleep with nothing.
In addition, if I’m ill, as is often the case, I will tell my friends that I’m ok when they observe that there is something wrong with me. Because most of my friends are very warm-hearted, if you tell them the truth, all of them will be very worried about my conditions which in some sense will distract their attention on other things, such as their work, study or something else. And most of the illnesses that we get can be cured in few days,so I don’t think it necessary for my friends to know that I’m ill.
Last but not least, if one of my friends has got anillness which can never be cured by the present remedy, I won’t tell him or her the truth. Because it seems that whether he or her knows the truth or not, it will be only a few days left. So why don’t we cheat that he or she is healthy so, the following days will be happy and he or she will not worry about the worsening situation of the illness. As a result, I won’t tell the truth under this circumstance.




综合写作


The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, there are not enough merits of the certification even some drawbacks. However, yet none of them regard in the eye of the lecture.


First of all, the reading passage points out that American consumers are exposed to so much advertising to they will be numb to it. In contrast, the professor claims that American consumers don't treat all the advertisements equal, they can distinguish the advertisement by the company itself or the advertisement made by the agency, such as this international organization with high reputation. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.

Second, the passage demonstrates that ecocertified wood will be more expensive and American consumers are strongly motivated by price. In the lecture, the professor admits American consumers are motivated by price alone only when the price is much lower or higher thanthe others, they won't pay attention to a tiny difference, and nowadays they are caring about the environment more and more, so they tend to choose the wood with the certification.

Finally, the passage raises theissue that American wood companies sell most of their products in the USA, so it's meaningless to get the certification, the professor opposes to the writer's expectation. He asserts that if the foreign companies have got thecertification while American companies don't get one and consumers are interested in it, the American wood business will be dominated by the foreign companies, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.

xiaoshuo199183

1月30号作业    独立写作

Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement?
It is impossible to be completely honest withyour friends.

As far as I’m concerned, I don’t think（前面已经出现as far as I am concerned了，这里有点重复）
it possible to be completely honest with my friends for the three major reasons.
To begin with,everybody has privacy, it means all of us more or less have something that we don’t want others, even our parents or our best friends, to know（这句不错~）, because these things may make us embarrassed or other discomforting feelings. For example, ifyou are a boy but like sleeping with a little bear, it will be very awkward to tell others about it, so it will be very common for you to tell others that you sleep with nothing.
In addition, if I’m ill, as is often the case, I will tell my friends that I’m ok when they observe that there is something wrong with me. Because most of my friends are very warm
hearted.if you（换成第一人称会更好一些，跟你后面的my condition对应） tell them the truth, all of them will be very worried about my conditions which in some sense will distract their attention on other things, such as their work, study or something else. And most of the illnesses(不可数） that we get can be cured in few days,so I don’t think it necessary for my friends to know that I’m ill.
Last but not least, if one of my friends has got anillness which can never be cured by the present remedy, I won’t tell him or her the truth. Because it seems that whether he or her knows the truth or not, it will be only a few days left. So why don’t we cheat （加个like）that he or she is healthy so, the following days will be happy and he or she will not worry about the worsening situation of the illness. As a result, I won’t tell the truth under this circumstance.

观点挺鲜明的，但是有些句子感觉有些拖沓。而且内容有些少了，可以在多写一些观点充实一下。从句用的不错~


综合写作


The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, there are not enough merits of the certification even some drawbacks. However, yet none of them regard in the eye of the lecture.


First of all, the reading passage points out that American consumers are exposed to so much advertising to they will be numb to it. In contrast, the professor claims that American consumers don't treat all the advertisements equal, they can distinguish the advertisement by the company itself or the advertisement made by the agency, such as this international organization with high reputation. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.

Second, the passage demonstrates that ecocertified wood will be more expensive and American consumers are strongly motivated by price. In the lecture, the professor admits American consumers are motivated by price alone only when the price is much lower or higher thanthe others, they won't pay attention to a tiny difference, and nowadays they are caring about the environment more and more, so they tend to choose the wood with the certification.

Finally, the passage raises theissue that American wood companies sell most of their products in the USA, so it's meaningless to get the certification, the professor opposes to the writer's expectation. He asserts that if the foreign companies have got thecertification while American companies don't get one and consumers are interested in it, the American wood business will be dominated by the foreign companies, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.

-- by 会员 libertine (2013/1/30 21:56:22)

libertine

thank you very much~

但是刚才查了一下 illness  可数不可数貌似都可以， 然后貌似加不加like影响不大。。。

你觉得呢？

xiaoshuo199183

thank you very much~

但是刚才查了一下 illness  可数不可数貌似都可以， 然后貌似加不加like影响不大。。。

你觉得呢？

-- by 会员 libertine (2013/1/30 23:35:49)

嗯，关于illness我有查了下，确实有复数的形式。这点我改错了，主要是我习惯用单数形式了。关于like那点，我是把cheat看错成treat了，sorry啦。呵呵~

libertine

(^_^)

libertine

1月31日 综合写作

   The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, there are events that are not true in the memoir, however, yet none of them regard in the eye of the lecture.

   First of all, the reading passage points out that Chevalier may be very poor because he borrowed considerable money from a merchant to spend on parties and gambling. In contrast, the professor claims that in order to get money he has to sell his properties at first, and then he waits the money to be used up, so he has to borrow money when he run out of his fortune.

   Second, the passage demonstrates that Chevalier can not remember exact phrases from the conversations held many years earlier. In the lecture, the professor admits that after each conversation, Chevalier wrote down everything about it, and he can refer to the notes when writing the memoir, Voltaire also confirmed that when chevalier was writing it, he consulting the details with Voltaire.

   Finally, the passage raises the issue that it is more likely that the Chevaliers jailers were bribed to help Chevalier escape from the prison. The professor opposes to the writer’s expectation. She asserts that there are some people who have even more friends to offer a bribe than Chevalier and don’t escape from the prison, and the ceiling was then repaired after Chevalier left the prison, so it is very likely that he escaped there from the ceiling, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.

   In conclusion, the point made in the lecture contracts with what is presented in the reading material.



自己看的时候，发现听力有些地方没听清楚。。。







独立写作




Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement?
Your job has greater happiness than your social work.

    As far as I’m concerned, our social work has greater happiness than our job. I have three major reasons for this opinion as following.


    To begin with, there are limited people we can get in touch with during work, because the place where we work doesn’t change very often. Nevertheless, when we are doing the social work, there will be much more people we can meet and talk to, which is much more attractive when we are penned in a relatively little work place. So we can change our opinions with almost all kinds of people during social work, there must be someone we have an interest in.


    In addition, it seems that most of our work is the same or similar, which means that we have to do the same thing or similar thing for a very long time every day. It’s very easy to get tired or bored. And there is only a relatively short time for us to do the social work, so when doing it, we will have greater excitement and patience than doing our job which means it’s easy to take possession of happiness to replace the discomfort left by the boring job.


    Last but not least, it seems that most of us choose the job as the way to support the life of ourselves as well as our family members, so it’s very hard to change it or forgive it because the salary it can provide us with. Thus, when we are reproached because of work, we have to continue it however dolorous or angry we are, because there is nothing to supplant it. Nevertheless, the social work we choose to do is mostly based on the interests of ours, so when we get tired or condemned thanks to it, we can change the social work we do without hesitation, because we just do it for fun, as a result, it’ll be happier to do the social work.

libertine

2月1号   独立写作


Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?


It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the loss of old friends.


    As far as I’m concerned, moving to a new city or a new country will not lead to the loss of old friends, conversely, it will be rather beneficial. There are three major reasons for my opinion, as follows.


    To begin with, nowadays, as the development of modern technology, there are tons of ways for us to get in touch with our friends even without delay. For example, it is pretty convenient to make a phone call to anyone else as long as the phone number exists. And there are also powerful tools which we can utilize to connect to our friends in the internet, such as MSN, e-mail and so on. On condition that one friend wants to meet us face to face, the plane is the best choice, because it can take us almost everywhere in the earth in a few hours. As a result, it is impossible to lose friends just because the distance between us.


    What’s more, when you arrive at a completely new place, the people around you are also completely new. Consequently, it is a wonderful opportunity to make friends. And because of the different backgrounds between you and them, there will be tons of interesting things you can share with each other which will make it much easier for you to become friends. As a consequence, moving to a new place will not only lead to the loss of old friends, but also increase the circle of friends that you take possession of.


    Last but not least, staying in the same place for a long time is very boring and tiring, and this is the reason why sometimes we take a vacation. Thus, moving to a new place can rejuvenate us, given that we will not have to face the same thing surrounding us for a long time, which becomes more and more annoying as well as disgusting day after day. And it will be excited and vigorous of us for the reason that everything around is completely different from the former, instead of the languor before.

perfectends

红色：错误；蓝色：建议；黄色：赞



As far as I’m concerned, our social work has greater happiness than our job. I have three major reasons for this opinion as following.开头可以再出彩一点的感觉


   To begin with, there are limited people we can get in touch with during work, because the place where we work doesn’t (does not 学术类写作避免缩写)change very often. Nevertheless, when we are doing the social work, there will be much more people we can meet and talk to, which is much more attractive when we are penned (哇，这词好精到，学习了） in a relatively little small work place. So we can change our opinions with almost all kinds of people during social work, there must be someone we have an interest in.可以增加点实例，比光说理服人


   In addition, it seems that most of our work is the same or similar, which means that we have to do the same thing or similar thing for a very long time every day. It’s very easy to get tired or bored. And there is only a relatively short time for us to do the social work, so when doing it, we will have greater excitement and patience than doing our job which means it’s easy to take possession of happiness to replace the discomfort left by the boring job.还是光说理，可以更丰满点


   Last but not least, it seems that most of us choose the job as the way to support the life of ourselves as well as our family members, so it’s very hard to change it or forgive it because 加of the salary it can provide us with. Thus, when we are reproached because of work, we have to continue it howeverno matter howdolorous or angry we are, because there is nothing to supplant it. Nevertheless, the social work we choose to do is mostly based on the interests of ours, so when we get tired or condemned thanks to it, we can change the social work we do without hesitation, because we just do it for fun, as a result, it’ll be happier to do the social work.



整体错误比较少，只是还需要进一步：

1. 加入实例丰满说理

2. 再丰富下彰显下句型

3. 缺少总结段——这个是文章结构必备的

perfectends

The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, there are events that are not true in the memoir, however, yet none of them regard in the eye of the lecture.

  First of all, the reading passage points out that Chevalier may be very poor because he borrowed considerable money from a merchant to spend on parties and gambling. In contrast, the professor claims that in order to get money he has to sell his properties at first, and then he waits the money to be used up, so he has to borrow money when he run out of his fortune.

  Second, the passage demonstrates that Chevalier can not remember exact phrases from the conversations held many years earlier. In the lecture, the professor admits that after each conversation, Chevalier wrote down everything about it, and he can refer to the notes when writing the memoir, Voltaire also confirmed that when chevalier was writing it, he consulting the details with Voltaire.   Consulting的对象听错了撒

  Finally, the passage raises the issue that it is more likely that the Chevaliers jailers were bribed to help Chevalier escape from the prison. The professor opposes to the writer’s expectation. She asserts that there are some people who have even more friends to offer a bribe than Chevalier and don’t escape from the prison, and the ceiling was then repaired这个我听的模糊没明白撒 after Chevalier left the prison, so it is very likely that he escaped there from the ceiling, content that explicitly contradicts that passage.

  In conclusion, the point made in the lecture contracts with what is presented in the reading material.---------兄弟综合有结尾段咋独立没有？困惑ing...



兄弟，没你说的那么差，总体还不错的啊，只有那个红色听错了致命伤。。。

libertine

thank you very much!