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Agree or disagree, in order to succeed, you should be more like the others than be different from everyone else.







With the fierce competition in the job market in recently years, the government and the shools are encouraging the fresh graduates to start their own business with all aspects favored. And thus, a great number of the freshmen take their steps to pursuit(pursue) the success. This phenomenon force people to reconsider whether we should be more like the others or not. Meanwhile, those who strongly disagree with is cited that it could be a hardship over the course of achieving the goal without different patterns or unique trait.
工作越来越难找，增加竞争力，发展多样性人才。
Have you ever heard similar stories of different notables, including the tough they come across? 反问句强调，用的很好Of course not, as different backgrounds and races shapes various personality. When on the way of success, the impedance is inevitably. For mediocrity, many common points can be find. Whereas, at this point, each person will perform according his own approach. Though we may reckon that follow others’ trace, can the aim be achieved more easily and less risky. The yearn for the triumph blinds us. Without take all the vital factors into consideration, we simply quit our study as Bill Gates and start a plausible thriving company. Before making the decision to imitate, you get to know his mother is the director of IBM? Also, settled in the modern society, does the same way proved effective after the industry revolution? Without doubt, we should explore the new path to the success in a time of rapid of advance.
与众不同的背景经历，每人成功的方法不同，不盲从
Furthermore, in the “eyeball” era, attracting more attention increase the chance being succeed. Only the creative product can catch the eyes of customer full of curiosity. 分论点？Apple is a vivid example. After the failure in the Mac prior years, the company almost caught into the bankruptcy. It is the launch of the series of mythical iphone that save the whole company. In the next few years, all the product of even became the heated topic. All the apple fans stayed up waiting for the release of the latest product not merely the iphone.好棒的栗子…… The company not only takes the maximum market but also push the cellphone industry forward to an entirely new epoch. The same conclusion can be drawn in different fields. Follow others may be a good choice in other aspects, but in the way of being distinguished you may come across unexpected obstacle. That is the reason why you are eminent.

Last but not least, only imitate cannot work out surprising result.分论点 In other words, the success cannot be duplicate from one to the other. Taobao, one of the China’s pioneer B2C online mall, makes a hit in the retail industry. After the success, countless website try to perform the same pattern as they explored. Without adding something others does not have, the result is always disappointing.
成功不能被复制，想成功就不能模仿，从反面支持论证
The precondition of success contains chance, talent, fund, etc. Hence, the most important one is creatives, what we talked above all need are your inspiration, your courage and your sharp eyes which only belongs to you to picture your goal.



单词量望尘莫及……

这篇比之前那篇好很多哦……

我按照我的理解提出了你的分论点，不过第二点第三点我都找得到标志性句子，第一点木有找到啊，还是我没看出来？

末段是否需要更鲜明的在此重申下论点?

原谅我语法很差给不了你啥有用的建议……不过语序真的比前一篇好很多哦，怎么做到的……