[写作小分队]crystal的作文贴，求建议，求进步

AnthonySummer

求獨立寫作！

AnthonySummer

11.5综合

The reading mainly introduces us about a new way called genetic modification to improve the trees. However, the professor holds the different opinion that though there are some benefits modified trees promise to bring to us, there are more problems and cost arising up.
First of all, the reading tells that modified trees are more likely to survive because of their harder characteristic.While, the professor says that even though they are harder(你這裡需要具體些，不管說harder）, it doesn't mean they have morepossibility to survive. The natural trees are very diverse, so some will be survive when some of them die due to big changes in the environment such as climate changes（還有insect，多點細節最好）. But the genetically modified tress are usually uniform（這個獎的不清楚，是講genetic unify，你這個有歧義）,all of them are more likely to die when facing big environmental changes. （有三處細節沒講到）
Secondly, the professor points out that there are many hidden costs of genetically modified trees which are contradicting with the author's expectation. On the one hand, the seeds of genetically modified trees are much more expensive. On the other hand, farmers have to pay the companies every time they want to grow.
Furthermore, genetically modified trees not only will not protect the natural trees, but also take over them, according to the professor, because the genetically modified trees rob the nutrition, water and sunlight from natural trees. Eventually they will take place of natural trees because they grow much more aggressively than the natural trees.
To sum up, when people pay （people 複數）attention to the benefits of genetically modified trees, （加個連接詞，moreover）people cannot ignore the disadvantagethey bring to us.

Crystal的秋天

Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? In the past, it was easier for people to identify what types ofcareer or job would lead to a secure, successful future?

Overpopulation and fierce competition makeit difficult for people to find a secure career or job. Many people have tochange their jobs from one to another. However, it is unsoundness to say thatit is more difficult to for people to identify what types of career or job willlead to a secure and successful future.
First of all, in the information explosionera, many kinds information related to careers are accessible for people moreeasily. When people in the old want to know inside information about a certainposition in a company, it cost them too much to get it. Cold visit is onechoice, however not all have the courage to do that. Beside it seems quite inconvenientfor a people in a rural area to do, because there are few companies. Instead,today internet is available all over the world, wherever you live. Open thelaptop and click your mouse, you can get all that you want. Even for the urbanpeople, it increases the efficiency and possibility of success when they searchmore information before they decide to make a cold visit, such as where yourdreaming company is, the schedule of the insiders, or how you can begin the conversationwith them. In a word, the more information you know before you do, the lagerthe probability you will be successful in the future.  
Secondly, thanks to the openness of modernpeople, they are more willing to share the experience with each other. Oneperson holds one apple and the other one holds one apple, they still own anapple when they share. But when they share the information with the other side,the case is totally different, they have tow now. For example, in the senioryear of college life, many students in our class need to pay attention to thejob information. But a person has limited energy and time to search it. There comesa good idea, our head teacher encourages us to share the information with eachother, reminding each other of the recruiting information and dateline they personallyknow. In this way, we benefit from this kind of behavior very much. All thestudents in the class find their interested internship this year. On the contrary,people in the past are not as open as today’s people and they usually regard thepersonal information as priority. This type of perspective cause disadvantageswhen they identify their future career.
Furthermore, just like the Newton said,standing on the shoulder of the previous people, you can see the farther scenery.Today, to find a successful idol is a very efficient way for us to make asuccess when we identify our future career. On the one hand, when you face thesame problem in the way just like him or her, you need not bother toconsidering solution. You can just imitate him or her. On the other hand, theidol is the best motivation for you when you encounter the setbacks, encourage youto go ahead. Then you will make fewer mistakes when you do a job. Eventually,you will never fear to be fired one day.
To sum up, complaining of modern peopleabout the difficulty of finding a secure job is usually the excuse for theirfailure. We are supposed to make use of what we own and never dare aboutproblems, and then we will make a success in the end.

Crystal的秋天

The reading passage argues that ethanol is not a good replacement for gasoline for several reasons. However, in the opinions of the professor, the three reasons are not convincing.

First of all, according to the reading passage, the increased use of ethanol fuel would add to the global warming, because of the carbon dioxide they release, trapping heat in the atmosphere. The professor refuses the author's idea because the growth period of the plants counteracts the release of carbon dioxide. They absorb it as part of nutrition when they grow, so it will not release that huge global warming as a result.

Second, as the professor claimed, the production of significant amounts of ethanol would not reduce the amounts of food for animals, which contradicts with what the author points out. The professor uses the same example provided by the author. However, the professor thinks that the scientist can get ethanol by using the parts of corn that are not animals feed on. So producing ethanol will not, as the author expected, cut down the available food for animals to eat.

Finally, though now the price of ethanol fuel is higher than its normal level, which needs the governments' subsidies to control its price just as the opinion that the reading tells us, the professor said that these subsidies are necessary in the short run. If the production of ethanol fuel increases by three times, the price of ethanol fuel will be reduced by 40%. Then in the long run, ethanol fuel is cheap enough to compete with gasoline.

To sum up, the professor still support the alternative way to gasoline in the future.

Crystal的秋天

The reading passage castslights on three possible reasons for the declining of yellow cedar. Theprofessor's lecture covers the same topic, however, with a totally oppositeattitude that all the three reasons in the reading passage is not convincing.Likewise, the professor also utilizes three distinctive points to justify hisperspective.

To begin with, the professorrefuses the idea in the reading passage that the cedar bark beetles cause thedecline of yellow cedar. On the contrary, he asserts that yellow cedars aremore resistant than other tress to the attack of insect parasites. To be specific,the professor's claim is grounded on a characteristic of yellow cedar, whichmeans that there is a kind of chemical which are poisonous to insects. Apparently,professor's idea is incompatible with that in the reading.

Moreover, as well defined as itsounds in the reading that the decline of yellow cedar population attributes tobrown bears, the professor's statement once again contradicts with the passage.The professor contends that bear cannot be the reason and provided with theevidence that no matter whether there are bears or not, the yellow cedarpopulations declined similarly in mainland and island.

Additionally, the professorpoints out that the changes of climate are also not to blame. Because, if thefreezing damages the population, then the yellow cedar should be damaged morein high cold area, however, it is not the fact. The lower and warmer area'spopulations are damaged more seriously. The professor doubts the correctness ofthe points made in the reading.

In conclusion, the professorprecisely discerns the drawbacks of the reading passage and convincinglyreveals that the fundamental argument in the passage should be reexamined withclose security.

庄小然

请crystal认真阅读大本营占座规则哦，只能占当天的座才可以分组哦！

Crystal的秋天

Nowadays, to be a university professor is the popular career of the intellectual, both respected and well-paid. When it comes to the criteria to judge a university professor, people’s views diverge. Someone argues that the main role of a university professor is to educate students rather than to do research. But others have opposite view on this. In my perspective, professors are supposed to give priority to doing research.

First of all, the research could have great importance in the real world and could one day lead to real breakthroughs, like discovering a new method to cure cancer. This research could make a difference our world. It, therefore, seems fair that a professor should spend more time doing research than giving lectures to students.

Moreover, if a professor’s research was successful it could benefit the university and the students in two ways. On the one hand, the university would be able to receive grants and funding to continue with further research. This money would help the university improve their research facilities, which would benefit the students who use these facilities. On the other hand, recognition of the research would improve the reputation and standing of the university, which is something that would also benefit the students who studied there by association.

Additionally, a professor who continues to do research is more likely to keep up with recent development and forefront of the field, making him or her more a knowledgeable teacher and more likely to be an enthusiastic teacher, willing to share new discoveries with students. To sum up, researches not only benefit the teachers themselves, but also bring much more advantages to students, university and even the whole world. It should, therefore, be given precedence over teaching, which does not mean that professors could neglect their duties to their student, but focus more on their researches.

To sum up, researches not only benefit the teachers themselves, but also bring much more advantages to students, university and even the whole world. It should, therefore, be given precedence over teaching, which does not mean that professors could neglect their duties to their student, but focus more on their researches.

Crystal的秋天

Nowadays, burden from work, study or livingalways creates too much pressure, and we need a chance to escape from thereality. Usually, some people would like to choose to take a vacation, going tosome places with beautiful sceneries to relax themselves, or some people liketo go some popular places to eat some delicious food. However, I prefer tospend my vocation with my good friends wherever we go.
To begin with, staying with our friendsduring vocation can enhance our friendship. Since in daily life, we are toobusy to spare a period of time to communicate our recent doubts and thoughts withour friends. Vacation is a good chance for us to make a close contact with ourfriends. For example, last summer vocation, a friend of mine from my hometowncame to Beijing, spending the whole vacation with me. Because that summer wastoo hot, we did not go to any tourist attractions, but only stayed near myschool. As students, we cannot afford to a lot of expensive food or hotels. Instead,she lived in my dorm. Every night, we talked about everything happened in ourlife after we came to university, just like five years ago. It seemed that thoughtime passed, our friendship had not change. After the vacation, she told me,this vacation was her most unforgettable one.
Furthermore, a vacation with friends canhelp us to build an unforgettable memory. I had trips to many places. However, Icannot remember most of those when I tripped alone, but I cannot forget anytrips I went with my friends. My memory is very clear about where we go, whatwe talk at which time and even how happy we were at that time. Those experiencesare our shared memory. It is those memories that constitute our happy life.
In addition, when we go to some unfamiliar placesfor vacation, we may encounter some emergencies, and at that time, a friendaside is very helpful. Once a time, I went camping in a small mountain.Unfortunately, we were caught with a snow for three days. Our planning wasdestroyed and even consumed all the food we took there. What was worse, wecould not make connect with our families. At that time, I was very frustrated.Thanks to my friend, Candy, she encouraged me all the time and we hugged togetherto warm each other and thought all the ways to protect ourselves. Luckily, thesnow stopped and we hold each other up and struggle down the mountain. Withoutmy friends, I may be freezing helplessly on the mountain.
To sum up, considering the safety, friendshipenhancement and unforgettable memory go vacationing with our friends can bringsto us, food or good vacation is negligible.

ningjie111

Crystal~~我是11.13要和你互改的人~~只是我今天太忙了。。还来不及写和看。。。所以我今天晚上帮你改完发上来！sorry啊！

Crystal的秋天

好的，没关系啦，怪不得见你还没有写~~