lmylacoste的作文贴，求狠该,今天机经写作一起开始！

AnthonySummer

11.10 独立



There is perhaps no issue more significant than this one about whether we human have the ability to address the serious problems threatening our society. A myriad of responses people may hold on the issue concerning the topic. Although the individual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost on my mind is that it is certain for us to deal with the problems.







First of all, on the top of the list of viewpoints is the point that the skyrocketing development of science and technology will cope with a sheer number of diseases and will reverse the trouble of lacking resources. From common sense and the experience of our daily lives, more and more diseases which have destroyed the society of our ancestors have been annihilated by the efforts of biologists and some kinds of lethal diseases like cancers have obviously and partly cured by the advanced technology. To make my demonstration more comprehensively, I would like to refer to the fact from （這裡讀不順，後面一句感覺用在這裡不恰當，像是強行插進來的，刪掉~） which my point can draw further strength. Thanks to the successful research conducted by some agricultural scientists（用主動方式將更好 thanks to agricultural scientists conducted some successful researches）, the yield of corn has been doubled and （and表示並列，不代表遞進，換個介詞）this success has saved hundreds and thousands of poor children in Africa and （同樣的錯誤，contribution指代不清楚，感覺gmat做多了吧，平時寫作文可不能那樣寫）the contribution will be more influential than we could expect. From these two cases, undoubtedly, （這樣用讓人感覺有模板的跡象）these problems will not exist anymore in the future.







In addition, another essential point worth being mentioned is that some problems about the society itself will be solved by the further understanding of the sociology, as the history of my country （句子結構讓人看不懂，我的猜測你的意思了）thousands of years have seen aptly illustrates. During the past eras, the country was dominated by the empires who did not care the difficulties of his people and would deprived them as possible as these kings could（感覺是爲了複雜而故意複雜，讓人讀了有些拗口，還不如兩句寫）; in the present, the population shares a bigger voice on the affairs of the country and has（前面單數了）their own rights. Not only （but also 呢） does this case verify my view, another point coming from the experience of America will also lend me a hand to strengthen my point. America is a country ruled by the whole citizens, but at first, the country like other countries is not as ideal as what it is today. With the fight for the independence and the desire for the freedom, the country becomes to be a paradise for everyone living there. These replies from the history may lead those people who have been told for so long by so many doubtful, cynical and fearful to put their hands on the arc of the credibility to bend it toward the ability of people to solve any herculean challenges.（這句我都到後面就不知所雲了~，太長了，那麼多從屬介詞，而且拗口）







Admittedly, it is necessary to cut short the relentless paces toward the conclusion before the opposition has been taken into consideration. There is no better illustration than this one. Human nature being what it is（這好像賓語從句用的太多了，這篇文章~）, some people will doubt that people will solve tough tasks by their own efforts; the nature disasters and the increasing sharpened conflicts between different classes are still remained dark enough for us to see the victory. But most problems which have been considered impossible to deal with have. In fact, been far away from us now. And these cases are occasional and negligible enough to be a sufficient support for the adverse side and for us to cast hope on them. After weighing the pro and con, the striking upshot is obvious that the problems will be extinct by us for sure. （我讀到這。你這篇文章的題目是什麽？Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government and corporation should share all their scientific discoveries with other countries in the world? Please use specific details and examples to support your opinion.

感覺和主題不切合）







In sum, although some people will still remain unconvinced about my statements, the reasons and factors including the advanced science and technology and the development of society and people their own, I have analyzed, will at least serve the purpose to propel opponents to notice the various dimensions of the issue and I hop more and more people will share the same idea with me. （求主題！）

lmylacoste

   There is perhaps no issue more controversial for us than this one with reference to whether professors should be teaching-centered or research-centered. A myriad of responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding what should the professor mainly focus on. Although the individual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost of my mind is that educating students should be the primary consideration.

   First of all, the top of the list of my viewpoints is that the more students professors instruct with their rich knowledge and profound perspectives, the more predessesors predecessors the country will have to sustain the research and the development. From common sense and the experience from our daily lives, only a country has enough excellent instructors, will it be promising and may undergo a prime period. To make my demonstration more comprehensively, I would like to refer to the experience of my own country from which my point can draw strength. The past several decades saw the skyrocketing development of science and technology, especially the advance achieved in the realms of engineering and infrastructures construction, in my motherland China.The progress was obtained by nothing but the contribution of the top scientists like QianXueshen, a famous and patriotic scientist in physics, who spared no efforts conveying the precious and most updated information and concepts to his students and propelled the development with them.

   In addition, another compelling point worth being mentioned is that learning is intrinsically tied with teaching, as my own experience aptly illustrates. Last year, I had a intern as a tutor to help a five-grade student to improve his studying. In the process, I found not only did I give him the knowledge, but his unlimited and creative thoughts also inspired me a lot as well. After more than ten-year study, the creativity and imaginary seems to be worn thin, but staying with children whose mind has not been tortured by the heavy burden of examinations provided me a chance to reconsider what have lost and been abandoned in my mind. This reply from the part-and parcel of my daily life may lead those who have been told for so long by so many, who are doubtful, fearful and cynical, to put their hands on the arc of their mind to bend it toward the side I am in favor of.

   Admittedly, it is necessary to cut short the relentless pace toward the assertion before the opposition has been taken into consideration. There is no better illustration than this one. Human nature being what it is, the people will consider that professors should pay most attention and energy on the research and in this way their values will be fulfilled. It is indispensible for professors to finish some important academic researches, but if they just concentrate on their own work and ignore the importance of education, the future of the country will be dim and not sunny despite the brillient brilliant contribution since the development would fail to be sustained. After weighing the pro and con, the striking upshot is obvious that professor should spend more time educating students.

   In sum, although some people will remain unconvinced about my argument, the factors and reasons----professors' instructions will enhance the ability of continuous progress of the country and will inspire and improve the quality and knowledge of their own----I have analyzed will at least propel those opponents to notice the various dimensions of the issue. And they may one day agree with my seamless statement I believe.

lizchang1990

There is perhaps no issue more controversial for us than this one with reference to whether professors should be teaching-centered or research-centered(呵呵,不错的词汇组合,我常用). A myriad (亮点)of responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding what should the professor mainly focus on. Although the individual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost of my mind is that educating students should be the primary consideration.

First of all, the top of the list of my viewpoints is that the more students (加个that) professors instruct with their rich knowledge and profound perspectives(其实后面这个profound perspectives建议直接去掉,感觉用词不妥), the more predessesors predecessors the country will have to sustain ( 这个词换conduct )the research and ( 用boost )the development.( 总体来说你这个句子吧~后面the more跟前面不搭调,后面应该说the more excellent scholars…  ) From common sense and the experience from our daily lives, only a country has enough excellent instructors, will it be promising and may undergo a prime period. To make my demonstration more comprehensively(这是个副词,换做adj哦~), I would like to refer to the experience of my own country from which my point can draw strength. The past several decades saw the skyrocketing(亮点) development of science and technology, especially the advance achieved in the realms of engineering and infrastructures construction, in my motherland China. The progress was obtained by nothing but the contribution of the top scientists like QianXueshen(呵呵,sen吧), a famous and patriotic scientist in physics, who spared no efforts conveying the precious and most updated information and concepts to his students and propelled the development with them.

In addition, another compelling point worth being mentioned is that learning is intrinsically tied with teaching, as my own experience aptly illustrates. Last year, I had a (an) intern as a tutor to help a five-grade student to improve his studying. (这句话看着有点别扭,你是实习生还是家教呀?这句不地道~) In the process, I found not only did I give him the knowledge(give knowledge这个很chinglish), but his unlimited and creative thoughts also inspired me a lot as well(你这个also& as well 怎么重复用呀). After more than ten-year study, the creativity and imaginary seems to be worn thin, (这个插入句很突然,话锋转的快,来点过渡句吧~) but staying with children whose mind has not been tortured by the heavy burden of examinations provided me a chance to reconsider what have lost and been abandoned in my mind. This reply from the part-and parcel of my daily life may lead those who have been told for so long by so many, who are doubtful, fearful and cynical, to put their hands on the arc of their mind to bend it toward the side I am in favor of. (这段句式复杂,观点不是很清晰~看着有点别扭.可能我们偏向有出入吧,我喜欢顺畅简洁句.O(∩_∩)O~)

Admittedly, it is necessary to cut short the relentless pace toward the assertion before the opposition has been taken into consideration. There is no better illustration than this one. Human nature being what it is,(用分号;) the people will consider that professors should pay most attention and energy on the research and in this way their values will be fulfilled. It is indispensible for professors to finish some important academic researches, but if they just concentrate on their own work and ignore the importance of education, the future of the country will be dim and not sunny despite the brillient brilliant contribution since the development would fail to be sustained. After weighing the pro and con, the striking upshot is obvious that professor should spend more time educating students.

In sum, although some people will remain unconvinced about my argument, the factors and reasons----professors' instructions will enhance the ability of continuous progress of the country and will inspire and improve the quality and knowledge of their own----I have analyzed will at least propel those opponents to notice the various dimensions of the issue. And they may one day agree with my seamless statement I believe.

(呵呵,你应该用了模板的,我看着开头跟中段挺眼熟的. 不错哟~~~但有个问题先指出,你第三段模板话太多,展示不了你过多的观点,会很吃亏的!)
语言功底不错!继续~`~


抱歉的是我不知道怎样弄成红色字体>

AnthonySummer

等綜合~

lmylacoste

Perhaps no issue is more controversial l for people than this one that which will be the best partner for holiday. A myriad of responses people may have on the issue concerning the topic regarding the benefits the company will bring about. Although the individual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost of my mind is that good friends are the primary consideration in vacation.
To begin with, the top of the list of my viewpoints is that friends are indispensible in small parties. Both the common sense and our experience inform us that you can engage in group activities with friends without paying a huge expenditure. In these activities, like playing chess games or have a basketball competition, what you will obtain is more than happiness. Sports can improve your physical conditions; Chess games will be not only interesting but also a good way to kill time. To make my demonstration profoundly and comprehensively, I'd like to refer to my own experience from which my point can draw strength. During the summer vacation when I was in senior high school, my friends and I spent a whole day together playing the card game including the Monopoly. Along with the proceeding of games, we experienced unforgettable happiness not just from the games snarios scenarios but also from the conversation and interaction among us.
In addition, another equally compelling and essential point worth being mentions is that hiking and journeys are also good choices for vacation, especially with friends, as a example of myself aptly illustrates. I remembered that my friends and I had a trip to YanDang Mountain, a scenic spot not famous for its attitude but renowned for its cultural legacy. During this trip, not only did we visit well-known places, the exciting activities between destinations also made the trip interesting. Not just this journey verifies my point; another point coming from my recent experience further intensifies my perspective. In my last tour to Tibet, I was caught by headache caused by the special geologic conditions. If without my friends with me, it was impossible for me to get back to the camp safe and sound and the situation would be out of control.
Admittedly, it is necessary to cut short the relentless paces toward the assertion, until the opposition has been taken into consideration. There is no better illustration to the opposite view than this one. Human nature being what it is, for those who are very busy after working, delicious meals and comfortable beds will be more attractive. It is worthwhile for people to be aware of the various choices like food or location, but that kind of cases is so occasional and negligible because it meets the ephemrial ephemeral and superficial satisfaction of people that it fails to constitute a sufficient support for the adverse side. After carefully weighing the pro and con, the striking upshot for me is that friends are most vital for our holiday.
In conclusion, although some people may still be unconvinced, the reasons and factors I've analyzed----not only will friends bring us happiness in small activities, but they will also sweep out the boredom and bail out us when we meet with troubles---will at least serve the purpose to propel those opponents to notice diverse options in case they may ignore one or more better choices. And I hope more and more people will share the same idea with me.

The reading passage casts light on the reason that the ethanol can not replace gasoline well. The professor's lecture covers the same topic, yet with the totally opposite attitude. Likewise the professor utilizes three distinctive reasons to justify his perspective.

First of all, the professor refutes the idea in the reading passage that the ethanol fuel would not improve the environmental situation. On the contrary, he asserts that the use of ethanol will benefit the condition of atomsphere atmosphere, remove the carbon dioxide away from atomsphere atmosphere and refrain the effect of the global warming. To be specific, his claim is grounded on the fact that the plants like corn will counter the effect of carbon dioxide. That is to absorb the carbon dioxide, which is released in the process of the production of the ethanol, as the nutrition during the growth of the plants. Apparently, the point of the professor is incompatible with the reading.

In addition, as well-defined as it is, the professor's statement once again contradicts the reading passage. He contends that the great production of ethanol will not reduce the food for animal. To fortify his demonstration, he claimed that the ethanol is produced by the part of the plants, the cell wall, and animals will not eat that part. So the food to feed animals will not decline. Evidently having taken this evidence into consideration, the professor has sound doubts on the reading material.

What's more, the reading passage pinpoints that the ethanol fuel will not be a good candidate to defeat gasoline with its real price despite the fact that they have the same price now which is caused by the tax subsidies. The professor challenges the point by arguing that the ethanol fuel will be cheaper without the subsidies and the support by the government. Since if more people buy the ethanol fuel, the production will increase and the price of it will be declined because of more available products. And according to a search finding, if the production is 3 times bigger, the cost of the production of the ethanol will reduce by 40%. Clearly the credibility of the point made in the passage starts to shrink, if the fact has been taken into account.

In sum, the professor carefully discerns the drawbacks of the passage and takes one more step to reveal that the fallacious argument needs a closer scrutiny.

lmylacoste

There is perhaps no issue more controversial than this one whether or not the career will bring about more happiness than the social life. A myriad of responses people may hold on the topic concerning the issue regarding which place the happiness comes from. Although the individual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost of my mind is that the social life is the primary consideration.

First of all, the top of the list of my mind is that happiness is intrinsically tied with the freedom. That is to say, the free time, which will prevent you from stress caused by the heavy work, will be obtained in your social activities. From common sense and the experience from our daily life, it is not difficult to know that a person will get happy during all the periods but when they are forced to work. To make my demonstration more comprehensive, I would like to refer to the experience of my father from which my point can draw strength. My father is an optimistic person and he always carries big smiles on his face. But when the time he goes back to home after work, he will be easier to get angry although nothing is insatisfactory unsatisfactory. So obvious it is that the heavy work and lack of enough rest bar him far away from being rejoicing.

In addition, another compelling point worth being mentioned is that the social life will be more rich and colorful than your job, as my own experience aptly illustrates. Last year, I got an intern in a real estate company as an employee and my main job was to input the data on the paper into the computer. What a boring task it was and I had to work on the task continuously for eight hours. Although I came with hope and expectation that I would learn something useful and beneficial to my career, the fact disappointed me too much. Not only does this case verify my point, another point also coming from part-time job further intensify my view. I have acquired a job as an analyst in a company recently and the company has scheduled all your working time; you cannot be late and ask for leave early and the supervisor would ensure that every minute you are working hard. I have no chance to adjust my time at all. These replies from the part-and-parcel of my daily life may lead those who have been told for so long by so many, who are cynical, fearful and doubtful, to put their hands on the arc of the trust to bend it toward that you will be glad not in job, but in the social life.

Admittedly, it is necessary to cut short the relentless pace toward the assertion until the opposition has been taken into consideration. There is no better illustration than this one. Human nature being what it is, some ambitious and aggressive cannot help striving for the success and progress. They set good examples for us but that doesn't mean all of us will be satisfied by working. The share these people, aiming to be self-achieved, occupy is so negligible that the fact fails to constitute a sufficient support for the adverse side. After carefully weighing the pro and con, the striking upshot is obvious that social life is a permanent source of happiness.

In sum, although some people will remain unconvinced about my argument, the reasons and factors--you will get rid of the restriction from the fixed jobs and enjoy the colorful and diverse time in social life--I have analyzed will at least serve the purpose to propel those opponents to notice the various dimensions of the issue and reconsider the parts they have neglected before. And I believe one day more people will endorse my persuasive argument.

The reading passage casts light on the benefits of planting genetic modified trees. The professor's lecture covers on the same topic, yet with the totally opposite attitude. Likewise, she utilizes three distinctive reasons to justify her perspective.

First of all, the professor refutes the idea in the reading passage that the genetic modified trees are more likely to survive than those normal trees since they are designed to be hardier. On the contrary, she asserts thethere is no garanteeguarantee that genetic modified trees have more chance to live than unmodified trees. To be specific, her claim is grounded on the fact that the unmodified trees have diverse genes so that there will always be a small part of trees alive despite the fact that most of the trees will be swiped out caused by the climate changes and the invade of insects and pests. However, the future of genetic modified trees will be dim and it is possible for they to die out because the uniform gene. Apparently, the professor's point is incompatible with the reading.

In addition, as well-defined as the points made in the reading passage, the professor's statement once again contradicts the reading material. She contends that planting genetic modified trees will not bring a sheer number of benefits, especially the economic advantages. To verify her point, she claims that a hidenhidden cost exists in the proceeding of planting this kind of trees. The company will charge more money for the seeds of the trees than other normal seeds. And the farmers will not collect the yield for free, since they have to pay the fee for the company every time they collect. Evidently having taken this fact into consideration, the professor has sound doubts on the reading.

What's more, the reading pinpoints that genetic modified trees will bring benefits to the wild trees. The professor challenges the view by arguing that these trees would not be beneficial to the wild trees and maybe even damage them. She defends her perspective by illustrating that the genetic modified trees are aggressive and live among in the wild trees. They will seize more sunshine, water and other vital nutrients from the wild trees and leave the wild trees little, threatening the survive survival of wild trees including those unique and rare species. Clearly, the credibility of the argument starts to shrink, after the evidence has been taken into consideration.

In sum, the professor carefully discerns the drawbacks of the passage and takes one more step to reveal that this fallacious argument need a more closer scrutiny.

First of all, the professor refutes the idea in the reading passage that the genetic modified trees are more likely to survive than those normal trees since they are designed to be hardier. On the contrary, she asserts thethere is no garanteeguarantee that genetic modified trees have more chance to live than unmodified trees. To be specific, her claim is grounded on the fact that the unmodified trees have diverse genes so that there will always be a small part of trees alive despite the fact that most of the trees will be swiped out caused by the climate changes and the invade of insects and pests. However, the future of genetic modified trees will be dim and it is possible for they to die out because the uniform gene. Apparently, the professor's point is incompatible with the reading.

In addition, as well-defined as the points made in the reading passage, the professor's statement once again contradicts the reading material. She contends that planting genetic modified trees will not bring a sheer number of benefits, especially the economic advantages. To verify her point, she claims that a hidenhidden cost exists in the proceeding of planting this kind of trees. The company will charge more money for the seeds of the trees than other normal seeds. And the farmers will not collect the yield for free, since they have to pay the fee for the company every time they collect. Evidently having taken this fact into consideration, the professor has sound doubts on the reading.

What's more, the reading pinpoints that genetic modified trees will bring benefits to the wild trees. The professor challenges the view by arguing that these trees would not be beneficial to the wild trees and maybe even damage them. She defends her perspective by illustrating that the genetic modified trees are aggressive and live among in the wild trees. They will seize more sunshine, water and other vital nutrients from the wild trees and leave the wild trees little, threatening the survive survival of wild trees including those unique and rare species. Clearly, the credibility of the argument starts to shrink, after the evidence has been taken into consideration.

In sum, the professor carefully discerns the drawbacks of the passage and takes one more step to reveal that this fallacious argument need a more closer scrutiny.

AnthonySummer

11.15 独立+综合

建議你分開貼獨立和綜合！方便修改的人~

There is perhaps no issue more controversial than this one whether or not the career will bring about more happiness than the social life. A myriad of responses people may hold on the topic concerning the issue regarding which place the happiness comes from. Although the individual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost of my mind is that the social life is the primary consideration.

















First of all, the top of the list（in在我腦海中）of my mind is that happiness is intrinsically tied with the freedom. That is to say, the free time, （which指代say，你當中的逗號是補充說明的意思）which will prevent you from stress caused by the heavy work, will be obtained in your social activities. From common sense and the experience from our daily life, it is not difficult to know that a person will get happy during all the periods,（逗號）but when they are forced to work. To make my demonstration more comprehensive, I would like to refer to the experience of my father from which my point can draw strength. My father is an optimistic person and he always carries big smiles on his face. But when the time he goes back to （come back home after work吧）home after work, he will be easier to get angry although nothing is unsatisfactory. So obvious it is that the heavy work and lack of enough rest bar （bar啥意思）him far away from being rejoicing.

















In addition, another compelling point worth being mentioned is that the social life will be more rich and colorful than your job, as my own experience aptly illustrates. Last year, I got an intern in a real estate company as an employee and （分兩句寫，你是兩個主語，第一個I，第二個my job，你這樣會產生歧義）my main job was to input the data on the paper into the computer（type paper date into computer，你這個比較啰嗦）. What a boring task it was and I had to work on the task continuously for eight hours. Although I came with hope and expectation （用一個expectation就行了）that I would learn something useful and beneficial to my career, the fact disappointed me too much. Not only does this case verify my point, another point also coming from part-time job further intensify my view.（前句和後句相比有邏輯錯誤）I have acquired a job as an analyst for a company recently and the company has scheduled all your working time; you cannot be late and ask for leave early and the supervisor would ensure that every minute you are working hard. I have no chance to adjust my time at all. These replies from the part-and-parcel of my daily life may lead those who have been told for so long by so many, who are cynical, fearful and doubtful, to put their hands on the arc of the trust to bend it toward that you will be glad not in job, but in the social life.

（你到現在還沒扯到主題，至少感覺不明顯，我對你期望很大的啊！）















Admittedly, it is necessary to cut short the relentless pace toward the assertion until the opposition has been taken into consideration. There is no better illustration than this one. Human nature being what it is, some ambitious and aggressive cannot help striving for the success and progress. They set good examples for us, but that doesn't mean all of us will be satisfied by working. The share these people, aiming to be self-achieved. Occupy is so negligible that the fact fails to constitute a sufficient support for the adverse side. After carefully weighing the pro and con, the striking upshot is obvious that social life is a permanent source of happiness. （說了一段的道理，感覺有些隱晦，最好打開天窗說亮話！！）

















In sum, although some people will remain unconvinced about my argument, the reasons and factors--you will get rid of the restriction from the fixed jobs and enjoy the colorful and diverse time in social life--I have analyzed will at least serve the purpose to propel those opponents to notice the various dimensions of the issue and reconsider the parts they have neglected before. And I believe one day more people will endorse my persuasive argument.



兄弟你內容寫的很好，語句金彩，但是全篇文章感覺有些隱晦，最好打開天窗說亮話！感覺寫的文章太學術化了，有時沒有很好地遞進，就是會突然蹦出來幾個意思，感覺思維有些跳躍。你的基礎很不錯，感覺如果用的語言更加樸實一些就更好了！

AnthonySummer

First of all, the professor refutes the idea in the reading passage that the ethanol fuel would not improve the environmental situation. On the contrary, he asserts that the use of ethanol will benefit the condition of atmosphere, remove the carbon dioxide away from atmosphere and refrain the effect of the global warming. To be specific, his claim is grounded on the fact that the plants （應該講some plants ，用定冠詞the，讀起來是這個plant看起來像corn）like corn will counter the effect of carbon（感覺有些chinglish） dioxide. That is to absorb the carbon dioxide, which is released in the process of the production of the ethanol, as the nutrition during the growth of the plants. （前面這個長句感覺讀起來拗口）Apparently, the point of the professor is incompatible with the reading.

















In addition, as well-defined as it is, the professor's statement once again contradicts the reading passage. He contends that the great production of ethanol will not reduce the food for the animal. To fortify his demonstration, he claimed that the ethanol is produced by （感覺用the ethaol use part of plants更地道）the part of the plants, the cell wall, and animals will not eat that part. So the food to feed animals will not decline. Evidently having taken this evidence into consideration, the professor has sound doubts on the reading material.（這句啥意思?)

















What's more, the reading passage pinpoints that the ethanol fuel will not be a good candidate to defeat gasoline with its real price despite the fact that they have the same price now which is caused by the tax subsidies(我的媽啊，那麼長的句子，一層包一層）. The professor challenges the point by arguing that the ethanol fuel will be cheaper without the subsidies and the support by the government. Since if （if就行了）more people buy the ethanol fuel, the production will（would） increase and the price of it （又是長句，it指誰？後面改用would，虛擬語氣）will be declined because （because又是指代不清）of more available products. And according to a search finding, if the production is 3 times bigger, the cost of the production （能不用of直接用ethanol production嗎？？）of the ethanol will reduce by 40%. Clearly the credibility of the point made in the passage starts to shrink, if the fact has been taken into account.















In sum, the professor carefully discerns the drawbacks of the passage and takes one more step to reveal that the fallacious argument needs a closer scrutiny.

lizchang1990

这是我的11.16作业连接,谢谢了~  http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-781814-3-1.html#last


我晚上10:30回来帮你修改哦~~~

lmylacoste

There is perhaps no issue more controversial than this one whether people need to tell their friends everything without any omittance or fakeness. A myriad of responses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding the degree of being honest. Although theindividual's taste does differ, the view ruling the roost in my mind is that honesty should be the primary consideration.

First of all, the top of the list of my mind is that the honesty is intrinsically tied with the friendship. From common sense and the experience from the daily life, it is not far away to know that only you are honest, other people will give you the trust which is the foundation of the comradeship. To make my demonstration more comprehensive, I would like to refer to inspiring experience of my own from which my point can draw strength. When I lived in a small neighbourhood neighborhood, most of children living there are known each. Once when I was playing football, a inadvertent shoot hit the window of a family. Undoubtedly, if the case was heard by my parents, they would punish me. However, I did not try to cover my fault, but on the contrary, I conceded to that family that the broken window was caused by my carelessness. Although I was scolded as having expected, the honest behavior earned me a good fame and a group companions.

In addition, another compelling point worth being mentioned is that honesty will enhance cooperation and the efficiency,as one of my friends aptly illustrates. He is a guy with many friends because of his honesty. And thanks to the good character, we will not hesitate to work together with him. He would tell nothing but the real opinions which sometimes are very precious and point out the current problems which is not easy for others, who are afraid to offend their friends, to propose, helping us to reveal the core of the factor impeding the proceeding. The reply from my part-and-parcel of life may lead those who have been told for so long by so many, who are cynical, fearful and doubtful, to put their hands on the arc of trust toward the point that honesty will bring about more than you can expect.

Admittedly, it is necessary for us to cut short the relentless paces toward the assertion until the opposition has been taken into consideration. Human nature being what it is, someone will argue that complete honesty is far from a character we should strive to have since the inproper improper honesty will hurt others. There is not better illustration than this one. My friend never told the lie and the consequence was that he had no intimate mates. Despite the staggering result, the reason was obvious that the honesty would sometimes contradict the self-image. And a people do not flatter others by acclaiming something untrue is not likely to get the others' favor. But the weakness of the human nature is so occasional when you are in such a developed and civilized world that it cannot constitute a sufficient support for the adverse side. After weighing the pro and con, the striking upshot is that being genuine is a vital key to treat friends.